I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. But it was a bit confusing to me. I didn’t really understand what you were trying to say to me in this story.
The Story: What was this story about? I don’t know.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this short story was an old school. From the sound of it the old school had a bad reputation.
Your Main Character: Four teens, ages unknown – but it sounds like they might be mid to late teens, are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them all names. I think it makes them feel more real if they do. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one who would consider this telling and not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think this review is longer than your short story. Was this story a Word Count Limit story? Is that why it’s so short.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It was a simple story. But it kept my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job
The Story: This story was about a boy dreading a test on Monday. But we didn’t know about the test until the end. Up until then it was just his observations on his way to school – and then history class.
Where Your Location Is: The location isn’t exactly mentioned – except that it’s a school. But it sounds like it’s either a Junior High, Middle, school or a High school.
Your Main Character: I would say that the boy is the main character in this story. But there are other characters too – including his History teacher. Personally, I would have given the boy a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main characters). It makes them feel more real if they have a name. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was only one piece of dialogue in this story. And it looked good. At least it did to me.
Any Last Thoughts: The only mistake, I think, you may have made is with the title of this story. Is it supposed to be Scool, like you have it, or should it be School?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me reading from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about Jack. Who was in an underwater quest to find treasure when he encountered an octopus.
Where Your Location Is: It looked like the location for this story was underwater mostly. And in a submarine at the beginning of it. But at the end the location turned out to be a bathtub and bathroom.
Your Main Character: The main character for this story, of course, is Jack – and the octopus. But at the end we find out that’s not the only character in this story. His mother, mum, was also in this story too. Personally, I would have given you mother a name too. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue. But what there was looked good to me. I think you did make one mistake though. Shouldn’t it be ‘out of the bath’ instead of ‘out the bath.’
Any Last Thoughts: I like the way you ended your story. With it being part of bath time adventure.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a grisly death. And from part two of this story it looks like Melissa is the one who died.
Where Your Location Is: The location of your story isn’t exactly clear – except for it happening in a small town. But it sounded like the body was found outside somewhere. Personally, I try to give a description of where the story is taking place. It depends on my Word Count Limit as to how much detail I put into my stories. But that’s just how I write.
Your Main Character: Detective Shorn and the Police Officer he is talking to are your main characters – especially Detective Shorn. But I think Melissa is really the main character. After all, she is the one who is dead. Isn’t she?
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a good job with your dialogue in this story. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: The only mistake, I think, you made was with misspelling. You wrote bocy, but I think you meant body.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a lot. It was a simple story. But it kept my interest from getting to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about a ship graveyard. Duh, of course it was a ship graveyard. You said that right in the title.
Where Your Location Is: The location of the graveyard of ships is unknown. That's the problem with short stories like this one. Personally, I try to give some kind of a location, at least one, for all my stories. It depend on what my Word Count limit is as to how long those location descriptions are. But that's just how I write.
Your Main Character: I can't comment on the main character because there wasn't one. At least there wasn't a living one. The ships themselves could be you character. And you also mentioned ghost(s) too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that.
Any Last Thoughts: Was this Short Story limited Word Count Contest? The reason why I ask is because it is so short.
I saw your story on The Dialogue 500 Contest. And since you are my competition on The Dialogue 500 Contest I thought I would give your story a read.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I got started I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story is about two ghost. At least it looks like it's about two ghost. But only one knows they are a ghost. I really liked the ending to this story.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a room. But where this room was is unknown. It sounds like they are in some kind of a limbo between life and death though. I know it's hard to describe a location with a dialogue only Contest like this one. But it's not impossible.
Your Main Character: There are two main characters in this story. And they are both ghost.
How They Spoke to Me: This is pure dialogue. There is nothing else but dialogue. What I read looked good to me though. Personally, I would have put Quotation Marks around my dialogue. There is at least one Contest host out there that says Quotation Marks doesn't matter. It's the story that counts.
Any Last Thoughts: I don't like it but I think you have a very good chance to win this Contest. Good luck with this Contest.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your forth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished your story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a lone man on a Space Station. At least I think it's a Space Station. It's kind of hard to read.
Where Your Location Is: Like I just said I think, if I am reading this story correctly, that the location for this story is a Space Station. Is it a Space Station? Or is it something else?
Your Main Character: Tyler was the main character in this story. There was another male at the end of this story. But all in all Tyler was the only character in this story. But his name wasn't mention until almost the end.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Like I said above, and below, I liked this story very much. But the reason I gave it such a low Star Rating is because of spacing. Personally, I think you should have broken this up into several paragraphs. I don't know if it's a grammar Rule or not, but I think it's easier to read if it's more than one big paragraph. But that's just how I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested from beginning you end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: I'm not sure what this story is about. It sound to me like there was a riot, protest, strike with a mining company. And that some of the workers were machines or part machines. But you also mentioned a creature too.
Where Your Location Is: It wasn't specified but the main location was a mining company on another planet. Whether the human were from Earth wasn't said. But I'm sure they were. After all, we are the humans in the whole Universe - right?
Your Main Character: Paul was obviously the main character. But Trish also had a big part in this story too.
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a good job with the dialogue in this story. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have gone into a little bit more detail about what planet they were on and what planet the Humans were from. I understand you limitations. That's because I have been entering the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge for about four weeks now. So I know your limitations. But I try to give some detail to my stories. It isn't much bacause of the limitations - but is more than just 'The ferocity of this world did not favor the timid.'
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eight year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished ready your Short Story. And I liked the concept of it. But other than that, I'm sorry, but I didn't like it.
The Story: This story is about a ten year old boy who babysits for four boys. They are a big problem. But an even bigger problem is what the mother didn't tell him - about the ghost.
Where Your Location Is: The location for the babysitting job was the Smith house. But the ten year old boy lived somewhere else. Probably nearby or in the neighborhood or the neighbor. But it wasn't specified.
Your Main Character: Of course, the main character is the ten year old boy. But the four brats he was babysitting are also characters in this story too. And you gave them names - but not your main character. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name - especially my main character. But that's just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me. It was the only part of this story that did look good.
Any Last Thoughts: I know I'm not supposed to give negative comments. But I am going to do it this time. The two main problems you had, I think, was the lack of 'periods' - in the first paragraphs. And your contractions - wasn't and didn't. Also you said arrons. But it should have been errands.
I liked your story concept. But not your story. Keep on writing.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about an expedition. They found a stone statue - that was burning hot. And that was just the first mystery that confounded them.
Where Your Location Is: It looks like they are in a jungle someplace. But where this jungle is at wasn't specified.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story was Dr. Weir and Trent. At least they were the only ones with names. But it looked like there were a few others there too.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: The reasons why I didn't give you more than a three star rating is because of your title and your ending. Personally I think you should have just stuck with the title "Stone Statue." And I think you should have just ended your story. At least I wouldn't have said I didn't have an ending because of Word Count limitations. I have been writing Short Stories for the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge for about four weeks now. So I know about limitations. And it is very hard to do.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your thirteenth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started I couldn't stop reading until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about an Email from the future that warned of a disaster to come in the year 2020 if something isn't done in year 2006. It wasn't explained why it needed to be done. But the ending stated that what the Email said was true.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was Regina, aka Re, and Cindi's place they share together. I'm not sure if it's an apartment. But from the way Regina talked it was.
Your Main Character: Regina was the main character in this story. But I think Cindi is also the main character. In fact, Cindi might be the main, main character. After all, she is the one who is about to be married to Roger.
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a very good job with the dialogue. At least it looks good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: You did a very good job with this story. I especially liked how you ended it - with the Email coming true.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eleveth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I loved it very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about a Pro from England, or another country that uses Pounds as currency, who meets a stranger for sex. All they do is kiss. But that's enough in this story.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not exactly sure what the location is for this story. But it sounds like it's a hotel or motel room somewhere - probably in England.
Your Main Character: Brittany is the main character in this story. But I think the stranger is an even bigger one because of the outcome of this story.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't much in the way of dialogue in this story. In fact, there was only one thought. But there was some dialogue in this story. Some Reviewers might not consider this enough for a story. And at least one Reviewer still might consider this story telling instead of showing. But I'm not one of them.
Any Last Thoughts: According to the Title this is only part one of this story. Does that mean there are more parts to this story? You categorized it as a Short Story. But it looks more like the beginning of a Novel. Is this a series of Short Stories? Or is the beginning of a Novel. Maybe you haven't decided on that yet?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very, very much. It keep me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a day in the life of a girl. First she was a skeleton. Then she was a girl. And after having her day she returned to being a skeleton.
Where Your Location Is: You did a great job in describing you location in this story. At least I think that you did.
Your Main Character: The girl is not only the main character of this story - she is the only character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name. I am a strong believer that a name makes they feel real.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on it. But there are some Reviewers who might. Some of them consider no dialogue a no-no. And at least one Reviewer that says no dialogue is telling not showing. But I'm not one of those Reviewers. In Fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories are just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a great job with this story. The only reason why the this isn't a five Stars Rating is because you didn't space between paragraphs. And personally I think you should have. I don't know if it's against the grammar rules or not, but even if it isn't I think it makes a story easier to read.
I liked your story very, very much. Keep on writing.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your proposal for future Short Stories. And I did like what I read too. But it's not a Short Story. You categorized it as a Short Story - but it look more like a proposal to me. I'm just not sure if it's for your Short Stories, like mentioned in the introduction above, or if it's for a Novel, Novels, or both.
The Story: This story isn't really a story. It's a bunch of questions with no answers.
Where Your Location Is: What locations? There aren't any locations - except that these stories are about the Earth.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story, that isn't a story, is you. You are the one asking the questions. And you are the one who is questioning if there is life out there.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. In fact, there wasn't any story here.
Any Last Thoughts: what is this? A proposal for short stories. Or a proposal for a novel or novels?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your forth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about someone who put out a contract out on someone else. At least that's what it sounded like to me.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure where the location for this story is. I have read it several times. And there isn't one. Personally, I try to describe at least one location in my stories. It depends on what Contest I am entering as how much detail I put into those descriptions.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story is the author of this story since it's written in First Person. At least I think it's First Person. I think First Person is when you use 'I' instead of 'he' or 'she.' But I could be wrong. My grammar isn't very good.
How They Spoke to Me: It looks like this is one long, big, speech, minus the Quotation Marks, to me. Personally, I would put Quotation Marks in the dialogue.
Any Last Thoughts: I'm a little bit confused by this story. At first I thought the speech was about hiring a killer or killers. But then in the second paragraph it sounds like the speech had something to do with painkillers. Are painkillers some kind of personal identification for the killer or killers you hired? Or is it some kind of a medication?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your thirteenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished writing this story. And I liked it a lot. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. I really liked how you ended it.
The Story: This is a story about a woman who had demons within her - literally. But you don't show that until the end of your story.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure what the location is for this story. I don't think one was ever given. Personally, I try to give at least one location for my stories. It depends on the Word Count limitations as to how detailed they are. But that just how I write.
Your Main Character: The Woman is, of course, the main character. But her three 'friends' are also characters in this story. Personally, I would have given this woman a name. I am a strong believer that a name make a character feel more real. But that's just me.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. Some, if not most or all other, Reviewers think that no dialogue in a story is a no-no. And there is at least one Reviewer who thinks no dialogue means telling not showing. But I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories are just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a good job with that story. Personally, I would have broken up the first paragraph into several different paragraphs. But once again that's just how I write my stories.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading this story. And I liked it a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a circuit board inside a computer. A circuit board that was about to become obsolete.
Where Your Location Is: Your location isn't a place this time. It's a thing - it's a computer.
Your Main Character: There really isn't any main character in this story. At least not a physical one. The circuit board is the name character in this story.
How They Spoke to Me: This is one big thought. It isn't really dialogue. It's one big thought - without any Quotation Marks. Personally, I prefer to use Quotation Marks around my dialogue. But that's just me. There's at least one Contest Host who doesn't judge Contests based on Quotation Marks.
Any Last Thoughts: Don't get me wrong. I did liked this story a lot. I'm just not a very good Reviewer. What I say, and what I want to say, aren't usually the same.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eighth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I liked this story a lot. It was simple story. But it keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop reading it until I was done.
The Story: This is story about three kids and one stepfather who watch a scary movie together. The Movie was about a couple who get a Dummy as a marriage present.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story isn't specified in this story. But from the sound of it it's probably in a living room.
Your Main Character: You, Diamond, Tri and 'stepfather June' are all the main characters of this story. June I thought was a female name. But I guess it could be a male name too.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. Some of them think no dialogue is a no-no. And at least one consider it telling and not showing. But I'm not one of those Reviewers. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories are just like this one
Any Last Thoughts: Did you write this story for a one hundred or less Contest? The reason why I ask that is because I think this this Review is longer than your story.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I was a little confused by this Short Story. It didn't really make much sense to me. This story seemed more like a dream to me.
The Story: This story was about a 'Cocktail Party.' But it wasn't a normal party. At first I thought this story was about Vampires or Zombies - but the it turned out to be more of a Swingers party gone bad.
Where Your Location Is: The location of this party was unknown. Personally, I always try to give my stories at least one location. It depends on the length limit of my story as to how much detail I have I my stories.
Your Main Character: Who is the main character in this story? That's a good question. The answer must be: It has to be the author.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. so I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who would. Some of them will say that no dialogue in a story is no-no. And at least one Reviewer says it tell and not show. But I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Don't get me wrong. It might sound like I didn't like this story. But I did. It's just not my type of story. I like it a little scary. But I'm not really a big fan of vampire and zombie stories.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: What can I say about this story - except that I liked it. I like this whole Serial. I have only read the third and four parts in this Serial. But I think I like this one the best.
The Story: Someone just gave birth to a girl. And they named her Sarah. Almost the second Sarah is born she is taken away from them because she is an illegal birth. The rest of the family is put under 'house arrest.'
Where Your Location Is: The location is a house. Where that house is unknown to me. If it is mention I either missed it. Or it's on one of the other parts to this story.
Your Main Character: It's hard to tell who the main character is. I say it's the whole family. Not only are they in it from the beginning but they are all represented pretty equally among each other.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what I see it looked good to me. Personally, I would have separated the dialogue into individual paragraphs. But that's just how I write.
Any Last Thoughts: What I don't understand is why you put in that part about Cher in the first paragraph. It wasn't needed for the rest of the story - or did I miss something.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about two Confederate Soldiers on patrol on the planet of Mar Sara. They are on a normal patrol when they hit a Zergling. At least they think they hit a Zergling. But looks can be deceiving.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this is the planet of Mar Sara. When they hit the Zergling they are in the Wastelands.
Your Main Character: Lester is the main character. But The Sarge, no given name, is also a main character too. James is also a big part of this story. Personally, I would have given The Sarge a name. But since this was based on a Video Game you might not have had any choice.
How They Spoke to Me: What can I say about your dialogue - nothing. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I liked that you explained that this was based on a Video Game. It was the first time I have ever done that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: Once again you did a good job with this story. I liked your story a lot.
The Story: This story is about Eli - who is pregnant. But she can't be pregnant according to Aden because she is made of clay.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure where the location is for this story. I have re-read it a couple of times. And I don't see any. Did I miss something? Personally, I try to describe at least one location in my stories. It depends which Contest I am writing for. If it's a Flash Fiction Contest then the description is going to be a brief. But it's for a longer story, like one thousand to two thousand plus words it's usually more detailed.
Your Main Character: Eli is the main character. But Aden, Raven and even Seth are also part of this story.
How They Spoke to Me: The Dialogue in this story is very well written. At least it looked that way to me. Good job.
Any Last Thoughts: I still don't understand the title for this story. True, you mentioned Christmas and Christmas lights. But that was it. Also I used 150% with this Review. Can you still see it?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I did like this Short Story a lot. But it's not really my type of story. Yes, I do believe in God, and Satan, but I'm not really very religious. At first I thought this was a story about God and Satan. And it is in a lot of ways. But it's much more than that.
The Story: This is a story about Satan, aka The Devil, and about how he's going to use a new invention to rule the world again. At least that's the way it sounded to me.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is an auditorium. And The Devil, Satan, is talking to the press about the new invention.
Your Main Character: Satan, The Devil, is the main character in this story. But the Reporters there for the Press Conference are also part of this story too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there is looked good to me. Personally, I would have separated that dialogue into separate paragraphs. But that's just me.
Any Last Thoughts: I magnify the stories I read to 175% to make it easier to read. But I de-magnify them to 100% - like I did with your last review. This time I used 125%. Can you read this Review at the magnification?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I liked your story very, very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: At first I didn't know how this story was considered a Science Fiction story. It was about halfway through it when I found that this was another invasion from Outer Space against the Earth story.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure exactly where the location of this story is at - except that it's outdoors. But the way it sounds it's a celebration for Anna. She is being honored for her fight again the invaders.
Your Main Character: Anna was the main character, of course, in this story is. She wasn't the only one being honored I'm sure. But she was the only one mentioned.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of thought in this story. But not too much dialogue. Personally, I would have put Quotation Marks around what Anna was thinking. You choice to use itailize instead. And as far as I know there is nothing wrong with that. But that's just the way I write.
Any Last Thoughts: The first half of the story was about Anna's past. And the second half was about the Invasion of Earth - again. Personally, I'm not a big fan of Aliens Attacking Earth stories. I love to read, and watch them. But I don't write them. I write Pure Science Fiction.
I liked your story I very, very good. Keep on writing.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
Now for the good stuff: The Review.
Overall Impression: I liked this story too. You did a very good job with this Short Story. At least I think you did. Good job.
The Story: At first I thought it was a Short Story about Angels. Then you mentioned 'Starbucks." And then I thought it was about Angels who have returned to Earth. I guess I was right about that.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this Short Story was 'Starbucks." We don't know where on Earth that 'Starbucks' is at. And we don't know if it's the present, near past or the future. But we do know it's a 'Starbucks.'
Your Main Character: Vertigo is the main character in this Short Story. But there are several other Angels in this one too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And it looks good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I'm trying this new template. And I would really like to know how it looks to you. I would also like to know if this turned out right. Can you read my Review without using the Slide Ruler below - or a pop-up window?
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