I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good job.
The Story: This story is about two young teens about thirteen or fourteen who got scared because two classmates scared them out of going ‘trick or treating.’ Why Chad and Nick did that only they can answer that.
Where Your Location Is: The exact location of this story is unknown. It could be a small town or a big one.
Your Main Character: You gave Chad and Nick names. But you didn’t for the two main characters. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a names – especially the main characters. I think they feel more real if they have names. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling instead of showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have split this one paragraph into several paragraphs. I don’t know if it’s a grammar rule or not. But even if it isn’t I think it’s easier to read a story if it’s separated into several paragraphs. But that just the way I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in reading it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I was finished. Good job.
The Story: This story is about a woman named Bertha. Who wanted her Pear tree back again. So she went to a local magic store to get a spell. And the spell did work – but at a very high price: her life.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was Salem. And because it involves witches and black magic it sounds to me like it old Salem.
Your Main Character: Bertha is your main character is this story. I like that you gave her a name. It makes a character feel more real if they have a name. True, it would have been nice if the Magic Store clerk had a name. But there’s nothing wrong with her not having one. It’s just the way I like to write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some reviewers that might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this story telling and not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I think you should have spaced between paragraphs. I don’t know if it’s a grammar rule or not about spacing between paragraphs, but I think it easier to read a story if it is.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like what I could understand of it. But I had a lot of trouble reading it. I’m not a big fan of the gothic genre. Maybe that’s why this is so confusing to me.
The Story: I’m not sure what this story is about. But if I read it correctly I think it’s about magic. And the four runes. Which I’m not familiar with.
Where Your Location Is: When it comes to the gothic genre I have no idea where this location is at. It if I am reading this story correctly it sounds like it set in medieval times or netherworld times – I think that’s what fantasy fiction call it. But it might also be set between the afterlife below and the living on Earth.
Your Main Character: You have a main character. But I’m not sure who it is. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main character. It makes the character(s) feel more real to me if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there are other Reviewers who might. And at least one who considers this telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you have made a few mistakes with this story when it comes to capitalization, spacing between sentences and spacing between paragraphs. I’m not sure if spacing between paragraphs is a grammar no-no. But I’m pretty sure the first two are. You might want to check into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a ghost. And how they feel, or don’t feel any more, now that they are a ghost.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a little confusing to me. But it sounds like the ghost is in limbo between Earth and beyond. According to this story there is no beyond. I think there is. In fact, I am a strong believer in reincarnation.
Your Main Character: Of course, the ghost is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given this ghost a name – because I disagree with this story that says ghosts don’t remember their names or their lives. I try to give all of my character’s names – especially my main characters. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one that considers this story telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I think you should space between paragraphs. I think it makes the story easier to read. But that’s just me. It’s not against the grammar rule I don’t think.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I w finished with it. Good Job.
The Story: This is a story about two boys who have been friends all through high school. They did everything together. Not quite everything. One of them has a secret.
Where Your Location Is: The exact location of this story I can’t say. But it looked to me like it’s a city. Big or small I unknown.
Your Main Character: Joey and Tony were the main characters in this story. Maybe Joey was in it a little bit more than Tony because he’s the one with a secret. But not by much. I liked that you gave your characters a name. It makes them feel real, I think, when they have a name.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one who considers your story telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a good job with this story. Good job.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story is about a baseball game that is about to be over – one way or another. It sounds, to me, like it’s an announcer doing a play by play of this games.
Where Your Location Is: If it is an announcer doing a play by play of this game then the game must be at a baseball field. Where this ball field is at is unknown.
Your Main Character: The Announcer, if there is one, is the main character in this story. But if there is no Announcer then the main character is the Batter. It would have been nice to give these people a name – especially if it’s an Announce giving a play by play. Wouldn’t they name the Batter, maybe his number, when it came up to bat?
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there are some Reviewers that might. And at least one who considers this story telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I noticed what I think are a few mistakes when it comes to spelling – and grammar. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished. Good Job.
The Story: This was a story about a boy, I think, who gets hit my a ball. They are rushed to the hospital, and Operated on, but it did no good. He could never play ball again.
Where Your Location Is: It sounds like this story takes place at a ball field. Where that ball field was at is unknown. But it also takes place at a hospital too. Maybe even wherever they had the pizza.
Your Main Character: The main character is the kid who got hit by the ball. But there were a lot of others too. Personally, I would have given this character, and the others, too a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main character(s). It makes the characters feel more real to me if they have names. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one who would consider this story telling and no showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you made a lot of mistakes, at least I think you did, when it comes to spelling – and grammar. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me reading from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a kid, probably a little girl, who noticed someone was following them, or they thought was following them, home. It’s a story about what that child did to get home.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was a series of backyards a kid was using to get home. And a busy street too.
Your Main Character: Of course, the kid was the main character of this story. But they didn’t have a name. And their gender wasn’t specified. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main character(s). I feel it makes them more real if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one who consider this story telling and not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories where just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: How old was this person? From the sound of it I would guess a kid. Probably a preteen, or is it tween now, or a young teen since it’s night – and since they are walking home.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. An I liked it very much. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop reading until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about Billy, his father, and the Billy’s friends who are playing baseball. When the Billy gets hit in the eye.
Where Your Location Is: The location of this friendly ballgame is unknown. But it sounds like it’s probably being played in Billy’s backyard since it’s his father playing with them. But it could be one of the friends back yard or a nearby park. It could even be an empty lot.
Your Main Character: I like that you gave all of your characters names. Personally, I think it makes a character feel more real if they have a name. Good Job.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one who considers this story telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories where just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Was this story part of a Word Count Limit story? It looks like it is.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. But it was a bit confusing to me. I didn’t really understand what you were trying to say to me in this story.
The Story: What was this story about? I don’t know.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this short story was an old school. From the sound of it the old school had a bad reputation.
Your Main Character: Four teens, ages unknown – but it sounds like they might be mid to late teens, are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them all names. I think it makes them feel more real if they do. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one who would consider this telling and not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think this review is longer than your short story. Was this story a Word Count Limit story? Is that why it’s so short.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It was a simple story. But it kept my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job
The Story: This story was about a boy dreading a test on Monday. But we didn’t know about the test until the end. Up until then it was just his observations on his way to school – and then history class.
Where Your Location Is: The location isn’t exactly mentioned – except that it’s a school. But it sounds like it’s either a Junior High, Middle, school or a High school.
Your Main Character: I would say that the boy is the main character in this story. But there are other characters too – including his History teacher. Personally, I would have given the boy a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main characters). It makes them feel more real if they have a name. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was only one piece of dialogue in this story. And it looked good. At least it did to me.
Any Last Thoughts: The only mistake, I think, you may have made is with the title of this story. Is it supposed to be Scool, like you have it, or should it be School?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me reading from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about Jack. Who was in an underwater quest to find treasure when he encountered an octopus.
Where Your Location Is: It looked like the location for this story was underwater mostly. And in a submarine at the beginning of it. But at the end the location turned out to be a bathtub and bathroom.
Your Main Character: The main character for this story, of course, is Jack – and the octopus. But at the end we find out that’s not the only character in this story. His mother, mum, was also in this story too. Personally, I would have given you mother a name too. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue. But what there was looked good to me. I think you did make one mistake though. Shouldn’t it be ‘out of the bath’ instead of ‘out the bath.’
Any Last Thoughts: I like the way you ended your story. With it being part of bath time adventure.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a grisly death. And from part two of this story it looks like Melissa is the one who died.
Where Your Location Is: The location of your story isn’t exactly clear – except for it happening in a small town. But it sounded like the body was found outside somewhere. Personally, I try to give a description of where the story is taking place. It depends on my Word Count Limit as to how much detail I put into my stories. But that’s just how I write.
Your Main Character: Detective Shorn and the Police Officer he is talking to are your main characters – especially Detective Shorn. But I think Melissa is really the main character. After all, she is the one who is dead. Isn’t she?
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a good job with your dialogue in this story. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: The only mistake, I think, you made was with misspelling. You wrote bocy, but I think you meant body.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a lot. It was a simple story. But it kept my interest from getting to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about a ship graveyard. Duh, of course it was a ship graveyard. You said that right in the title.
Where Your Location Is: The location of the graveyard of ships is unknown. That's the problem with short stories like this one. Personally, I try to give some kind of a location, at least one, for all my stories. It depend on what my Word Count limit is as to how long those location descriptions are. But that's just how I write.
Your Main Character: I can't comment on the main character because there wasn't one. At least there wasn't a living one. The ships themselves could be you character. And you also mentioned ghost(s) too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that.
Any Last Thoughts: Was this Short Story limited Word Count Contest? The reason why I ask is because it is so short.
I saw your story on The Dialogue 500 Contest. And since you are my competition on The Dialogue 500 Contest I thought I would give your story a read.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I got started I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story is about two ghost. At least it looks like it's about two ghost. But only one knows they are a ghost. I really liked the ending to this story.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a room. But where this room was is unknown. It sounds like they are in some kind of a limbo between life and death though. I know it's hard to describe a location with a dialogue only Contest like this one. But it's not impossible.
Your Main Character: There are two main characters in this story. And they are both ghost.
How They Spoke to Me: This is pure dialogue. There is nothing else but dialogue. What I read looked good to me though. Personally, I would have put Quotation Marks around my dialogue. There is at least one Contest host out there that says Quotation Marks doesn't matter. It's the story that counts.
Any Last Thoughts: I don't like it but I think you have a very good chance to win this Contest. Good luck with this Contest.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your forth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished your story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a lone man on a Space Station. At least I think it's a Space Station. It's kind of hard to read.
Where Your Location Is: Like I just said I think, if I am reading this story correctly, that the location for this story is a Space Station. Is it a Space Station? Or is it something else?
Your Main Character: Tyler was the main character in this story. There was another male at the end of this story. But all in all Tyler was the only character in this story. But his name wasn't mention until almost the end.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Like I said above, and below, I liked this story very much. But the reason I gave it such a low Star Rating is because of spacing. Personally, I think you should have broken this up into several paragraphs. I don't know if it's a grammar Rule or not, but I think it's easier to read if it's more than one big paragraph. But that's just how I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested from beginning you end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: I'm not sure what this story is about. It sound to me like there was a riot, protest, strike with a mining company. And that some of the workers were machines or part machines. But you also mentioned a creature too.
Where Your Location Is: It wasn't specified but the main location was a mining company on another planet. Whether the human were from Earth wasn't said. But I'm sure they were. After all, we are the humans in the whole Universe - right?
Your Main Character: Paul was obviously the main character. But Trish also had a big part in this story too.
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a good job with the dialogue in this story. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have gone into a little bit more detail about what planet they were on and what planet the Humans were from. I understand you limitations. That's because I have been entering the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge for about four weeks now. So I know your limitations. But I try to give some detail to my stories. It isn't much bacause of the limitations - but is more than just 'The ferocity of this world did not favor the timid.'
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eight year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished ready your Short Story. And I liked the concept of it. But other than that, I'm sorry, but I didn't like it.
The Story: This story is about a ten year old boy who babysits for four boys. They are a big problem. But an even bigger problem is what the mother didn't tell him - about the ghost.
Where Your Location Is: The location for the babysitting job was the Smith house. But the ten year old boy lived somewhere else. Probably nearby or in the neighborhood or the neighbor. But it wasn't specified.
Your Main Character: Of course, the main character is the ten year old boy. But the four brats he was babysitting are also characters in this story too. And you gave them names - but not your main character. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name - especially my main character. But that's just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me. It was the only part of this story that did look good.
Any Last Thoughts: I know I'm not supposed to give negative comments. But I am going to do it this time. The two main problems you had, I think, was the lack of 'periods' - in the first paragraphs. And your contractions - wasn't and didn't. Also you said arrons. But it should have been errands.
I liked your story concept. But not your story. Keep on writing.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about an expedition. They found a stone statue - that was burning hot. And that was just the first mystery that confounded them.
Where Your Location Is: It looks like they are in a jungle someplace. But where this jungle is at wasn't specified.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story was Dr. Weir and Trent. At least they were the only ones with names. But it looked like there were a few others there too.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: The reasons why I didn't give you more than a three star rating is because of your title and your ending. Personally I think you should have just stuck with the title "Stone Statue." And I think you should have just ended your story. At least I wouldn't have said I didn't have an ending because of Word Count limitations. I have been writing Short Stories for the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge for about four weeks now. So I know about limitations. And it is very hard to do.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your thirteenth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started I couldn't stop reading until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about an Email from the future that warned of a disaster to come in the year 2020 if something isn't done in year 2006. It wasn't explained why it needed to be done. But the ending stated that what the Email said was true.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was Regina, aka Re, and Cindi's place they share together. I'm not sure if it's an apartment. But from the way Regina talked it was.
Your Main Character: Regina was the main character in this story. But I think Cindi is also the main character. In fact, Cindi might be the main, main character. After all, she is the one who is about to be married to Roger.
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a very good job with the dialogue. At least it looks good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: You did a very good job with this story. I especially liked how you ended it - with the Email coming true.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eleveth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I loved it very much. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about a Pro from England, or another country that uses Pounds as currency, who meets a stranger for sex. All they do is kiss. But that's enough in this story.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not exactly sure what the location is for this story. But it sounds like it's a hotel or motel room somewhere - probably in England.
Your Main Character: Brittany is the main character in this story. But I think the stranger is an even bigger one because of the outcome of this story.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't much in the way of dialogue in this story. In fact, there was only one thought. But there was some dialogue in this story. Some Reviewers might not consider this enough for a story. And at least one Reviewer still might consider this story telling instead of showing. But I'm not one of them.
Any Last Thoughts: According to the Title this is only part one of this story. Does that mean there are more parts to this story? You categorized it as a Short Story. But it looks more like the beginning of a Novel. Is this a series of Short Stories? Or is the beginning of a Novel. Maybe you haven't decided on that yet?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very, very much. It keep me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a day in the life of a girl. First she was a skeleton. Then she was a girl. And after having her day she returned to being a skeleton.
Where Your Location Is: You did a great job in describing you location in this story. At least I think that you did.
Your Main Character: The girl is not only the main character of this story - she is the only character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name. I am a strong believer that a name makes they feel real.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on it. But there are some Reviewers who might. Some of them consider no dialogue a no-no. And at least one Reviewer that says no dialogue is telling not showing. But I'm not one of those Reviewers. In Fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories are just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a great job with this story. The only reason why the this isn't a five Stars Rating is because you didn't space between paragraphs. And personally I think you should have. I don't know if it's against the grammar rules or not, but even if it isn't I think it makes a story easier to read.
I liked your story very, very much. Keep on writing.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your proposal for future Short Stories. And I did like what I read too. But it's not a Short Story. You categorized it as a Short Story - but it look more like a proposal to me. I'm just not sure if it's for your Short Stories, like mentioned in the introduction above, or if it's for a Novel, Novels, or both.
The Story: This story isn't really a story. It's a bunch of questions with no answers.
Where Your Location Is: What locations? There aren't any locations - except that these stories are about the Earth.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story, that isn't a story, is you. You are the one asking the questions. And you are the one who is questioning if there is life out there.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. In fact, there wasn't any story here.
Any Last Thoughts: what is this? A proposal for short stories. Or a proposal for a novel or novels?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your forth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. And I liked it a lot. It keep my interest from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about someone who put out a contract out on someone else. At least that's what it sounded like to me.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure where the location for this story is. I have read it several times. And there isn't one. Personally, I try to describe at least one location in my stories. It depends on what Contest I am entering as how much detail I put into those descriptions.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story is the author of this story since it's written in First Person. At least I think it's First Person. I think First Person is when you use 'I' instead of 'he' or 'she.' But I could be wrong. My grammar isn't very good.
How They Spoke to Me: It looks like this is one long, big, speech, minus the Quotation Marks, to me. Personally, I would put Quotation Marks in the dialogue.
Any Last Thoughts: I'm a little bit confused by this story. At first I thought the speech was about hiring a killer or killers. But then in the second paragraph it sounds like the speech had something to do with painkillers. Are painkillers some kind of personal identification for the killer or killers you hired? Or is it some kind of a medication?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your thirteenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
Now for the good stuff: The Review.
Overall Impression: I just finished writing this story. And I liked it a lot. It keep me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. I really liked how you ended it.
The Story: This is a story about a woman who had demons within her - literally. But you don't show that until the end of your story.
Where Your Location Is: I'm not sure what the location is for this story. I don't think one was ever given. Personally, I try to give at least one location for my stories. It depends on the Word Count limitations as to how detailed they are. But that just how I write.
Your Main Character: The Woman is, of course, the main character. But her three 'friends' are also characters in this story. Personally, I would have given this woman a name. I am a strong believer that a name make a character feel more real. But that's just me.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. Some, if not most or all other, Reviewers think that no dialogue in a story is a no-no. And there is at least one Reviewer who thinks no dialogue means telling not showing. But I'm not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories are just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a good job with that story. Personally, I would have broken up the first paragraph into several different paragraphs. But once again that's just how I write my stories.
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