I just finished reading this Short Story. And I liked it very much - especially the parts about use being the animals of the world and cats, probably dogs etc. too, are the dominate species.
What can I say bad about your story - nothing. At least I didn't when it come to grammar. That's because I couldn't find anything wrong with you grammar.
Like I said above I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story for the 10/01 Flash Fiction Contest. And I liked it.
What can I say bad about this story - nothing. At least I didn't when it comes to grammar. That's because I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar.
Like I said above I liked your story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot - especially how you see yourself vs the Earth.
What can I say bad about your Short Story - nothing. At least I can't when it comes to grammar. That's because I didn't see anything wrong with your grammar.
There might be one thing wrong with your story though. I'm not sure, and I am probably wrong, but you mentioned Earth several times without capitalizing it. I think you are suppose to capitalize words like Earth. But I could be wrong about that.
Like I said above I liked your sorry a lot. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much.
What can I say bad about your Short Story - nothing. At least I didn't when it comes to your grammar. That's because I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar.
The only problem that you might have with grammar is with your dialogue. You ended a lot of your dialogue with either a period or a question mark - but you started the next one with a capital letter. According to one Reviewer your not suppose to do that -especially if the next word is 'said'
Like I said I liked this story very much. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot.
What can I say bad about your Short Story - nothing. At least I can't when it come to grammar. That's because I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar.
The only thing that might be wrong with your story is that you don't indent your paragraphs. But I don't think you have to with a Short Story. I'm not sure what the rules are when it comes to indenting - especially with Short Stories. I wouldn't worry about it. Very few, if anyone else, indents their stories. In fact, I might be the only one who does.
Like I said above I liked your story a lot. Keep On writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much.
What can I say bad about your Short Story - not much. At least not when it came to your grammar. But I noticed that you did mix your Tenses. Most of the time you used the Past Tense - but a few times you used the Present Tense. One sentence in particular was really bad. You wrote 'get' but it should have been 'got.'
Other than that I didn't see anything wrong with your grammar or your story. And like I said above I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I did like it. But it was very hard for me to read it though. That's because there are, I think, a lot of problems with it.
The first think I noticed was there was no Line Spacing. And the second thing I noticed was there were only three paragraphs. You should space between paragraphs - that includes the title and the ending title too. They are considered paragraphs too.
As for the only three paragraphs. You should break them up into several paragraphs each - especially when it comes to dialogue. There can be a little non-dialogue around it but the dialogue should be in individual paragraphs. At least that's what I think. And I could be wrong about all of this. I have a problem with grammar.
Probably your biggest mistake, I think, was your sentence structure. You had a lot of run-on sentences - I think that is what they are called. And a lot of sentences that didn't make any sense because of words missing or in the wrong spot.
Other than that I didn't find anything wrong, if any of this is wrong, with your story. You have a good story here. I just think you have to re-write it a bit.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it.
What can I say bad about your Short Story - nothing. At least I can't when it comes to grammar. That is because I didn't find anything wrong with your story.
There was a couple of this that might be wrong with your story though - indenting and spacing. You indented on most of your story. But not all of them.
As for the Spacing you did space once or twice between Sections, what I call Parts, but you did space between paragraphs within those Sections -Parts. I'm not sure if it's a mistake or not. But spacing makes it easier to read a story.
Like I said above I liked your story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. An I like it.
What can I say bad about this Short Story - nothing. At least I can't when it comes to grammar. That's because I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar.
The only thing that might be a problem is your Line Spacing. You spaced once or twice between Sections, what I call Parts, but you didn't between paragraphs within the Sections - Parts. I'm not sure if it's a mistake or not. But it is easier to read a story if you include Spacing.
Like I said above I liked your story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your one paragraph Short Story. And I liked it. But there were a few problems, I think, that I have found wrong with your story.
The first thing I noticed was that it's only one paragraph. I knows it's a very, very, very Short Story. But that paragraph still needs to be broken up into several paragraph. Each one of the dialogue sentences need a paragraph of there own. They can have some drama around that dialogue. But they should have separate sentences. Not only does it look better, more profession, but it's easier to read.
Another problem I think is a problem is the word 'BECCAS' Shouldn't it be BECCA'S.'
Your story could of been a little bit longer too. First of all you should have had her punch Johnny down there. Then she should have taken his cell phone and smashed in the street, tree, curb etc. And instead of going into her house and crying she should have went over to Kimmy's house - and stuffing the earring down her cheating throat. What happens to Kimmy after that is up to her.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. But I don't really understand it. It didn't make any sense to me. To me it looked a lot of words mixed into sentences.
What can I say bad about your story other than what I just said - nothing. At least when it comes to grammar. I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar.
Like I said above I liked your story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. Romanace/Love and Relationships aren't really my type of story. But I have written a Romanace/Love or two before. One of them just recently for the Genre Times Four Contest.
There was one mistakes I think you made with your story. You wrote 'he said as to walked to his car.' I think you meant to write 'he said as we walked to his car.' Or something like that.
Other than that I didn't see anything else that might be wrong with you story. At least not grammar wise.
Like I said above I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. But I had a little trouble getting though it. It's not you or your story. I'm sure it's me. I like War stories. But I like the Action/Adventure type of War stories.
There was a couple of problems, I think, with your story. One of them is 'At sudden' What does that mean?
Another problem is I think you meant to write 'long' instead of 'lond.'
Other than that I couldn't find anything else wrong with your story. And like I said above I liked your story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot.
The only problem you might have with your story, I think, is with the length of your paragraphs. Your story had only three paragraphs. And I think they should have been broken up into several different paragraphs - especially the first and third one. The third one in particular.
Like I said above I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. and I liked it a lot.
There was a few problems that I think I found in your story. But I could be wrong. and I probably am.
The first thing I think is a problem is spacing. I don't know if it's a rule or not. But I think you are suppose to space between paragraphs. And even if it isn't a grammar rule it does make it easier to read a story.
Another mistake I think you made was you wrote 'to avoid to him.' Shouldn't it be 'to avoid him.'?
I also think I saw once or twice that you didn't space between sentences. It's probably a Writing.com thing. But I think you need to be more careful.
Other than that I couldn't find anything wrong with your grammar. And like I said above I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story for the 9/29 Flash Fiction Contest. And I liked it a lot. Why did you include the Rules and Prompts this time though? I don't understand why you did that this time. But I don't think it's going to hurt your chances of winning this Contest today.
As for your grammar I didn't see anything wrong with grammar. But I'm not very good at grammar. So I could be wrong about that.
Like I said above I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your entry to the 9/29 Flash Fiction Contest. And I liked it very much. At first I didn't think that I would. But the ending I loved. My only concern, which isn't a mistake, was that they were part of the Mafia. They can't be ex-Mafia. Once your in the Mafia your in it for life. There is only one way out of the Mafia - death. Maybe it's not the ex who sent them a bomb?
Like I just said I liked this story very much. You will probably win for today. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. In fact I am going to give you a 'like' when I get done with this Review. This isn't really my type of story but since you are the competition in this Contest I decided to give it a read.
The only problem that I think you might have, and it's not the grammar - because I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar, is with the paragraph will a conversation between several people. Shouldn't it be broken up into separate paragraphs? I could be wrong, and I probably am, but isn't that what is suppose to happen with dialogue.
Like I said above I liked your story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your poem for the Try Something New Contest. And I liked it a lot. In fact I am going to give you a 'like' when I get done with this Review. I don't really like poems but since you are the competition in this Contest I decided to read it.
What can I say bad about this poem - nothing. That's because I don't know too much about poem. All I know is that poem used to rhyme, but they don't have to - especially nowadays, and you did that.
Like I said above I liked your poem a lot. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short story. And I liked it very, very much. It's the best one I have Reviewed so far - and I have reviewed them all now.
But that isn't the real reason why I am Reviewing this story. It's because I didn't realize until a few hours ago that this is an Anniversary Review. In fact you are one day behind me.
What can I say bad about this story - nothing. At least not when it comes to grammar. That's because I didn't find anything wrong with this story.
Like I said above I liked this story very, very much. Actually I loved this story. Keep on writing.
I just finished reading your Short Story. and I liked it a lot. But I am a little confused by it. Is it a Short Story? Or the first very short Chapters to a Novel? It looks like Short Story but because of the 'Chapter 2' it sounds like a Novel.
What can I say bad about your grammar - nothing. I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar.
Like I said above I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.
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