I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about a boy named Tim. Who found his best friend Bobby pouring some fizz into the local swimming pool where their father's worked as life guards. After talking Bobby out of it they went swimming before the pool opened.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was the local swimming pool that Tim and Bobby's fathers worked at. It was the only location in this story.
Your Main Character: Bobby I think is the main character in this story. Tim is in from beginning to end. And normally I would say he was the main character in this story. But it was Bobby that needed talked out putting fizz into the pool. That's why I think Bobby is the main one.
How They Spoke to Me: There was some dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I'm not sure but I think you made a few mistakes when it came to punctuation and grammar. You might want to check into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a boy named Billy. His age was unknown. But the way he talked I would guess preteen, or is it tween now, and his sister Kelly was a year or two younger. I think that because of them not being able to go to the swimming pool. They needed money - so they opened up a lemonaide stand.
Where Your Location Is: Most of this story took place in the front yard of the family house. But it also took place within the family house too.
Your Main Character: Billy was the main character in this story. But Kelly was a close second. Even their mother had a big part in this story.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. At least not physically. But I think there was. It just wasn't done correctly.
Any Last Thoughts: I think I found some mistakes you made when it comes to punctuation and grammar. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop reading it until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story is about two boys - John and Justin. Who had only a few minutes left until the school year was over. as soon as it was they headed for the local swimming pool. Where a tragedy happened.
Where Your Location Is: The location of this story was a High School. At least I think it was a High School. But I'm not sure - especially when it comes to the swimming pool. It might have been the local pool.
Your Main Character: John and Justin are the two main characters. But it was mostly Justin because John was afraid of the water. A fear that ended in tragedy.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn't any dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this story telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: I think I found a few mistakes in this story when it comes to punctuation and grammar. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading this Short Story. And I did like it. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about two friends - Josh and Mason. And the morning they spent at school. Which included a bet and a visit to the school swimming pool.
Where Your Location Is: The location of this story was the school Josh and Mason attended. It was never mentioned, but it looked like it was a high school. It could have been a Junior High, Middle, School. But I've never seen a school other than High School and above with a swimming pool within it - but there could be some in the lower grades too. Probably along the coastline if there are any.
Your Main Character: Josh and Mason, misspelled once, were the main characters in this story. They were both in it from beginning to end. I liked that you gave them names. If a character has a name, I think, it makes them feel more real. At least they do to me.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this story telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have made a few mistakes with punctuation and grammar. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I'm sorry but I didn't like it very much. Yes, I liked the concept of this story. But it was a little hard to read.
The Story: This story is about a boy named John. Who goes swimming with his friend Bob. There is also mention of a sister and a contest too.
Where Your Location Is: Most of this story takes place at a swimming pool. But some of it involved John's house too.
Your Main Character: John is the main character in this story. He was in it from beginning to end. But Bob was a big part of this story. So was John's sister too a little.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers stories like this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: This story was a little confusing to me - especially with all the 'buts' being used. I also think you have a problem with punctuation and grammar too. You might want to check into that. Personally, I would have also broken it up into several paragraphs. It makes a story, I think, easier to read. But that's just how I write.
I'm sorry I have been so hard on your story. Keep on writing.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth years with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about a boy named Bob. Who is a Catcher. A Catcher that has a few problems getting started as a Catcher. One of them puts him in General Hospital.
Where Your Location Is: The main location for this story is the baseball field. But the hospital, maybe even Bob's house, is also a location too.
Your Main Character: Bob is the main character in this story. He was in it from beginning to end. I liked that you gave your character a name. If they have a name, I think, they feel more real to me.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a little bit of dialogue in this story. But I don't think you wrote it correctly in your story.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you made a few mistakes when it comes to punctuation and grammar. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a father and son, I think, watching a Cleveland Indians baseball game together. But most of the story is about that game.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is wherever the father and (son) was watching the game at. It was probably the living room. But it was never specified.
Your Main Character: Both the father and his child are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given these characters a name. I try to do that with all of my characters - especially my main characters. It makes, I think, the characters feel more real if they have a name. But that's just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can't comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who still might. And a least one Reviewer who considers stories like this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have made a few mistakes when it comes to spelling. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eight year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished reading it. Good Job.
The Story: This is a story about Uriah and Jim. Who are eight grade friends - who decide to go to a local swimming pool. But not to swim. They were troublemakers.
Where Your Location Is: You would think that the swimming pool would be the location for this story. And it is. But most of the story doesn't really have a location. It's about Uriah and Jim.
Your Main Character: Uriah and Jim are both the main characters in this story. They are both in it from the beginning to the end. I really liked that you gave them names.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can't comment about your dialogue. But there are some Reviewers that might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this story telling instead of showing. Which is a no-no.
Any Last Thoughts: I think I noticed a few mistakes you made in spelling. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn't stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a male who saved a female - with the help of his wings. They both tipped off a cliff. And it didn't look too good for either one of them. Then all of a sudden he had wings.
Where Your Location Is: A Cliff was the location for this story. So was the ground they were about to crash into too.
Your Main Character: It sounded to me that a young girl, maybe a little girl, was the main character. But most people would say it's the guy because he's an adult. It doesn't matter to me what age they are. Whoever is in the story the most that's the main character. Personally, I would have given them names too. I try to do that with all of my characters - especially the main ones. It makes the character feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that is just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was only one line in this story. But it looked good. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Knowing the age of the little girl, if it is a girl, would have been nice. Personally, I don't do it when my adult characters as much as I do. But I try to when it comes to the children. Once again that's just how I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a lot. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a man named John. Who found out that he had HIV thanks to a note left by his dead wife, Sara, after her suicide. He also learned about her affair. Bill also had HIV too – just like Sara and John.
Where Your Location Is: At first I thought the first paragraph or two placed John at the morgue. Even it does, and I’m not sure that it does anymore, most of the story takes place in John and Sara’s house.
Your Main Character: The main character of this story, of course, is John. But Sara and Bill are a big part of it too. I like that you gave all of your character a name. If they have a name, I think, they feel more real. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main character. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. What I liked best about it was the two notes left first by Sara then by John.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a male, no name given, who was checking out an old house. Why he was checking out that house is still a mystery – no pun intended.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is the house. But where that location is unknown.
Your Main Character: He, whoever he is, is the main character. In fact, he’s the only character in this story. Personally, I would have given this person a name. If they have a name, I think, they feel more real. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main characters. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked good. At least it did to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I wouldn’t start a paragraph, or a sentence, with the same word over and over again. There has to be at least two paragraphs, or sentences, before I use a word again. But that’s just how I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I did like what I read. But I couldn’t understand it. It didn’t make any sense to me.
The Story: I’m not sure what this story is about. It’s very confusing to me. What is this story about?
Where Your Location Is: It sounds to me that this story takes place outside - all over the planet basically. But you also mention living in the tower too.
Your Main Character: The main character in this story is the narrator. At least I think that’s who it is. If it is I think there should be Quotation Marks around your paragraphs. But that’s just how I write. I’m not sure if it’s a grammar rule or not – but I think it is. Personally, either way I would have given this person a name. I think it makes a character more real if they have a name. But that’s just how I write too. It would help break up all the ‘I’s’ too.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling not show. I’m not like that. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories was just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I like to space between paragraphs. I think it makes the story easier to read. Also I noticed you used a lot of ‘I’s’ in your story too. Most of them starting a sentence, or paragraph, one after other. I don’t write like that. There has to be at least two other words before I use a word again. That goes for both sentences and paragraphs. But that’s just the way I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a sixteen year old boy named Sam - correctly capitalize. Who had a problem daydreaming. And it got him in trouble more than once. First with his eighteen-year-old sister Sarah. Then at school.
Where Your Location Is: Part of this story takes place at Sam’s house. But most of this story take place at school.
Your Main Character: Sam is the main character, of course, in this story. But his friends are also in this story too. Even Sara and his teacher are too. I liked that you gave all of your characters a name. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names.
How They Spoke to Me: The dialogue in this story looked good. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you made a few mistakes with this story. The biggest one was capitalization. I capitalized Sam the first time, I think, and Sarah. But not anyone else – including Sam. Punctuation is a problem too I think. So is some spelling too. You might want to check it out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This is a story about a woman named Irisa who received a bunch of flowers. And her co-worker Anita who wanted to know who they were from. She figured Irisa sent them to herself. But she didn’t – or did she?
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was an office. What type of office it was is unknown.
Your Main Character: You had two main characters in this story. Irisa, who got the flowers, and Anita, who wanted to know who sent them. I like it you gave your character names. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a great job with this story. At least I think you did. Once again – Good Job.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you a Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started I couldn’t stop until I finished reading it. Good Job.
The Story: At first I thought this was a story about a woman who gave up her child for adoption. And that each day she would be there when they got out of pre-school – even if it meant driving like a crazy woman.
Where Your Location Is: Most the this story took place on the streets of a town. That town was unknown. But there were also a couple of houses in this story too.
Your Main Character: The crazy driver was, of course, the main character in this story. But there was the mother and child too. Even the helpful neighbor was too. Personally, I would have given them all names. I try to do that with all my characters – especially my main character. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: I liked that there was dialogue in this story to comment on. Most writers nowadays want to write in the narrative. And that is fine with me. But there are some Reviewers that it isn’t. And at least one Reviewer that would think it’s telling not showing if there is no dialogue. It would have been easier to read, I think, if you had separated the dialogue into separate paragraph. But that’s just how I write.
Any Last Thoughts: You did a very good job with this story. At least I think you did.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This was a story about betrayal. He, no name given, knew one of the three Aides was the Traitor. And he knew which one that was.
Where Your Location Is: It was a conference room of some kind? At least I think it was a conference room. That was the main location. But there a couple of more – Tony’s and Robert’s houses. In a way also Dan’s house too.
Your Main Character: He, whoever he was, was the main character. You gave your three Aides names. But your main character didn’t. Was there a reason for that? Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main character. I do like that you gave some of your character a name. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just how I like to write.
How They Spoke to Me: I liked the dialogue in this short story. Most writers are going to the narrative approach. And that’s fine with me. But to some Reviewers it isn’t. And at least one Reviewer thinks this is telling and not showing.
Any Last Thoughts: At first I thought h’ was the, an, editor for the TruthNews Bugle. But by the end of it I realized he was an executive – with a lot of clout. As an editor he might have been able to get a Court Order – but I don’t think he could get an eviction notice. Unless he owned Dan’s residence. If he doesn’t it take clout to get something like that done.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it – what I could understand of it. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story was about someone, it sounded like they were from another planet at first, on a train trip. It sounded like it was a train trip in, or near, France – because Paris was mentioned.
Where Your Location Is: Near, or in, Paris is where this story takes place. At least I think it does. Several other towns were mentioned though.
Your Main Character: I’m not exactly sure who the main character is in this story. It does sound like it’s the someone who may or may not be from another planet. Personally, I would have given this person, all involved, a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. If a person has a name, I think, they feel more real. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who thinks that this story is telling instead of showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have split this one long paragraph into several paragraphs. I had a lot of trouble reading this story. Separating it into separate paragraph probably would have made it easier to read.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I got started I couldn’t stop reading it until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This was a story about what sounds like a young boy, or is it a girl, who watches a Halloween marathon with their father and brother Steve. The scariest moment was when Steve tried to scare them the next day. But it turned out not to be scary after all.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is wherever the television was at – probably the living room. Where the house is at is unknown too.
Your Main Character: Who is the main character in this story? Most would say it’s the father because he’s the adult. But I’m not one of them. It doesn’t matter to me how old someone is it’s who is in the story the most. Personally, I would have given all of them names - instead of just Steve. I try to give all of my characters a name. It makes them more real to me if they have a name. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling instead of showing. Which is a no-no. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: How old was your main character? What was their gender? The reason why I asks these questions is because I think you made some mistakes when it comes to punctuation, spacing between sentences and spelling. You might want to check into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interest in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about two young girls named Rosy and Kim. Who wanted to skate like their idol Uriah Mitchell. But instead of four wheelers they had roller skates.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where the roller skating took place. But it sounded like it was a park - maybe a street.
Your Main Character: I liked that you gave your three main characters names. Personally, I think giving someone a name makes them feel more real. That how I write my stories. I try to give all of my character names.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling not showing. Which is a no-no. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I’m not sure, but I think you made some mistakes in your story with capitalization and spelling. You might want to check that out.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested it in from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I was finished.
The Story: This was a story about a boy named Shawn. Who after working all day in the yard decided to go swimming at the local swimming pool. But when it got there he discovered the pool was being cleaned.
Where Your Location Is: The first location was Shawn’s yard. Then it was the High School swimming pool. Both of them in Euclid Ohio.
Your Main Character: Of course, the main character in this story is the main character. But the one cleaning the pool is also a big part of this story too. Personally, I would have given the pool cleaner a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name. It makes them feel more real to me. But that’s just how I write my stories.
How They Spoke to Me: There’s no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling instead of showing. Which is a no-no. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories where just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you made a few mistakes when it comes to your spelling. You might want to check into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was a cop, or a fed – maybe even a civilian, who went undercover. And it was war related. But exactly what she was undercover about isn’t known. Whatever it was it ended up getting her killed.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is an ancient city. But which ancient city wasn’t mentioned.
Your Main Character: Whoever this woman is was the man character in this story. Personally, I would have given this person a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main character(s). It makes them feel more real to me. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling and not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories where just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. At least it looks good to me.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good job.
The Story: This story is about two young teens about thirteen or fourteen who got scared because two classmates scared them out of going ‘trick or treating.’ Why Chad and Nick did that only they can answer that.
Where Your Location Is: The exact location of this story is unknown. It could be a small town or a big one.
Your Main Character: You gave Chad and Nick names. But you didn’t for the two main characters. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a names – especially the main characters. I think they feel more real if they have names. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling instead of showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have split this one paragraph into several paragraphs. I don’t know if it’s a grammar rule or not. But even if it isn’t I think it’s easier to read a story if it’s separated into several paragraphs. But that just the way I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in reading it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I was finished. Good job.
The Story: This story is about a woman named Bertha. Who wanted her Pear tree back again. So she went to a local magic store to get a spell. And the spell did work – but at a very high price: her life.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was Salem. And because it involves witches and black magic it sounds to me like it old Salem.
Your Main Character: Bertha is your main character is this story. I like that you gave her a name. It makes a character feel more real if they have a name. True, it would have been nice if the Magic Store clerk had a name. But there’s nothing wrong with her not having one. It’s just the way I like to write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some reviewers that might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this story telling and not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I think you should have spaced between paragraphs. I don’t know if it’s a grammar rule or not about spacing between paragraphs, but I think it easier to read a story if it is.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
Now for the good stuff: The Review.
Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like what I could understand of it. But I had a lot of trouble reading it. I’m not a big fan of the gothic genre. Maybe that’s why this is so confusing to me.
The Story: I’m not sure what this story is about. But if I read it correctly I think it’s about magic. And the four runes. Which I’m not familiar with.
Where Your Location Is: When it comes to the gothic genre I have no idea where this location is at. It if I am reading this story correctly it sounds like it set in medieval times or netherworld times – I think that’s what fantasy fiction call it. But it might also be set between the afterlife below and the living on Earth.
Your Main Character: You have a main character. But I’m not sure who it is. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main character. It makes the character(s) feel more real to me if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there are other Reviewers who might. And at least one who considers this telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you have made a few mistakes with this story when it comes to capitalization, spacing between sentences and spacing between paragraphs. I’m not sure if spacing between paragraphs is a grammar no-no. But I’m pretty sure the first two are. You might want to check into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. Happy Anniversary
Now for the good stuff: The Review.
Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. Good Job.
The Story: This story was about a ghost. And how they feel, or don’t feel any more, now that they are a ghost.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a little confusing to me. But it sounds like the ghost is in limbo between Earth and beyond. According to this story there is no beyond. I think there is. In fact, I am a strong believer in reincarnation.
Your Main Character: Of course, the ghost is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given this ghost a name – because I disagree with this story that says ghosts don’t remember their names or their lives. I try to give all of my character’s names – especially my main characters. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one that considers this story telling not showing. I’m not one of them. In fact, up until recently most, if not all, of my stories were just like this one.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I think you should space between paragraphs. I think it makes the story easier to read. But that’s just me. It’s not against the grammar rule I don’t think.
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