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#4179259

Review of The Creation

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Rated: 13+

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello LaMay Bollig,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a girl, age unknown – but she sounds like a teenager maybe, who somehow travels back in time. She goes back there to become her lookalike. Then she returns to the present.

Where Your Location Is: The 1800s is the big location for this story. She lived on a farm. At least it sounds like a farm because of the barn. And of course her present day location too.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character. Personally, I would have given them all names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just how I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good to me. The only thing that might be a problem with is that some Reviewers and Contest Judges might consider it wrong because they don’t have their own paragraph.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have put a space in between the paragraphs - and I would have separated the dialogue into separate paragraphs too. I don’t know if it’s a grammar rule or not. But even if it isn’t it’s a lot easier to read, I think, if it is. There might be a problem with some of your spelling too. I think I saw several of them. You might want to check into that.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4179258

Review of Moment Before Death

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello May_W_Chan,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about an old man. Who has lost the love of his life and has been abandoned by his two children. He’s gotten to the top. But he lost his family because of it.

Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this story takes place. It sounds like it might be a hospital of some kind. But it might be a laboratory too. Personally, I like to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into my stories. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit more than that.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character. But there are several others – including his family. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just how I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There isn’t much dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me. I think you did make one mistake though. Either you need a Quotation Mark at the beginning of the last paragraph/sentence or you need to remove the one from the end of it.

Any Last Thoughts: I’m kind of confused by the last line of the story. What exactly does that mean?

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4179254

Review of Into The Battle

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Rated: ASR

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Sailor M,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a battle that is about to take place. It’s between Aliens and Earthling, but from the POV of the Aliens. Which we don’t know about, but it’s hinted throughout the story, until almost the end.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story takes place on board a spaceship. That is headed for the planet of Sataurous.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them all names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you had several Short Story. Would you might if I reviewed them too – if I get the chance to. The reason why I ask is because a couple of months ago I reviewed one member a lot, probably too much, and at one time he thought I was stalking him. That’s why I ask ahead of time before I review anyone more than once now.

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4179251

Review of TEMPORARILY TRAPPED

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello AngieM,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a young girl, name unknown, who lives on top of an island. She didn’t know what was below the cloud of mist. But she was about to.

Where Your Location Is: The location in this story was an island. Where this island was at is unknown. A little bit more about this island would have been nice.

Your Main Character: A young girl is the main, and only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have indented each paragraph. And separated the paragraphs with a space between them. But that’s just the way that I write.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4179102

Review of False Logic

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Rated: 13+

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Accepting Daniel Raven,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a man, name unknown, who is having the greatest day of his life. Why it’s the greatest day is unknown though.

Where Your Location Is: It sounds like he is on a street somewhere because you wrote about cars passing him. Where that street is on is unknown. Personally, I try to have at least one location for all of my stories. It depends on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit more than that.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider it telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: I’m a little confused about the Genres you chose for this Short Story. Where is the Science Fiction, Horror/Scary and Technology in this story.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4179100

Review of UNREADABLE

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Horacio Lobos Luna,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your very short, Short Story. And I liked it. There wasn’t much there to read. But what I did read I liked. I think you have a good synopsis here for a longer Short Story – maybe even a novel.

The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. But if I read it right it’s about the birth of humankind.

Where Your Location Is: Like The Story I’m not sure where the location for this story is at. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. Depending on what the Word Count Limitation was is the amount of detail I put into that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit more than that.

Your Main Character: Whoever he is they are the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given him a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: Did you write this story as part a Word Count Limitation Contest? Have you developed it further?

I liked your story. Keep on writing.

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#4179099

Review of Matilda's Eyes Ch. 2

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello writerone,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a community named Eden. And the people who dwell within it. It looks like it’s what’s left of the Earth population who is in danger. I’m not sure if Earth was invaded – again. Or if we did it to ourselves – again.

Where Your Location Is: The location for the part of your novel is the large building in the community of Eden. I think you did a pretty good job with the description of this location.

Your Main Character: Barnaby and Matilda are the main characters in this story. But they aren’t the only ones though.

How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what there is looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Is this the second Chapter for a Novel. It sure does look like it is – especially since this Short Story started with Ch. 2. If it is a Chapter then I am curious as to why you categorized this as a Short Story.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4179096

Review of Encountering A Sky-Man

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello The warlock,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: At first I wasn’t sure what this story was about. But that last paragraph explained it all – I think. It’s about a human that lands on an alien planet as seen through the eyes of the aliens. That’s a nice twist on the usual that I like.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is an alien planet. But we don’t know that until the end of the story. I like that too.

Your Main Character: Whoever is writing this story is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given this character a name. I understand why you might have done it though – it would have given away the ending. But it wouldn’t have. There are a lot of human worlds out there with alien names. Contest Judges make that mistake with me all the time. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There isn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there is some. And what there is looks pretty good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have mixed your Tenses in this story. It looks like most of it is done in Present Tense, but Past Tense popped up every so often. You might want to check into that.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4179095

Review of An Unexpected Visitor

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Leon,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it – what I understood of it. It’s a little bit confusing to me. Maybe it’s just a little bit too sophisticated for me.

The Story: I’m not sure what this story is about. It sounds like it’s a story about traveling to and from another dimension. Am I right?

Where Your Location Is: Like the story I’m not sure where the location is for this story. If I read it correctly it could be some kind of a lab or scientific research center of some kind.

Your Main Character: It looks like there are two characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There isn’t any dialogue in this story. At least not in the traditional way. I think there is dialogue. It’s just it’s traditional to put double Quotation Marks around dialogue and single ones surrounding thoughts. It looks like you did it without doubles – and used italics in some of it.

Any Last Thoughts: I have never seen a story written like this before. Why did you do it? Was it a gimmick of some kind? Something you wanted to try? Or is that the way you write where you are from?

I liked your story. But it’s a little sophisticated to me. Keep on writing.

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#4179092

Review of Built (1st Place) (Editor Pk May-13 NL)

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello BScholl,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about Shelley and Warren. Who have a relationship going on – when Thom, also interested in Shelley, gets involved.

Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this story takes place. It’s not mentioned. Personally, I try to mention at least one location in all of my stories. Depending on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I go into my locations. Sometimes it’s just the location. But usually it’s a lot more.

Your Main Character: Shelley and Warren are the two main characters in this story. But Thom is also a big part of this story. In fact, some would say he’s actually the main one because of his investigation. Personally, it doesn’t matter to me if they are old or young. It depends on who is in the story the most to me. I’m glad that you gave them names too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just how I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There isn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you have several other Short Stories. Would you be offended it I reviewed some more of them – if I have the chance. The reason why I asked is because a couple of months ago I reviewed someone a lot. And at first he thought I was stalking him.

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4179091

Review of Researcher and Researched

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Complexity,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is the story about the discover of Aliens watching us on Earth. Personally, I didn’t like the way it ended. I know that the Aliens observing us wouldn’t destroy us to keep their secret. If so we would have been destroyed centuries ago.

Where Your Location Is: The Observatory is the main location in this story. But the Earth is also a big part of this story.

Your Main Character: Jordan and Jim are both the main characters in this story. I like that you gave them there. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: This story had a lot of dialogue in it. In fact, it was all dialogue except for the descriptions before or after it – until the last two lines.

Any Last Thoughts: I noticed you have written several other stories. Would you be offended if I reviewed them too – if I get the chance. The reason why I ask is because I reviewed someone a couple of months ago a lot, probably too many, and at one time he thought I was stalking him.

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4179090

Review of The Light of Day

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello TJ,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading this very short, Short Story. And I liked it. But I was a little bit confused by it too.

The Story: I’m not sure what this story is about. Because it’s catagoriezed as Science Fiction it looks like it’s about an insect, like a grasshopper, or a bug – probably a bug from the sound of it. Maybe it’s about a bird too.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story takes place around a tree. Where this tree is at is unknown.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character. Personally, I would have given this character a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just how I write my stories.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was a little. And what there is looked good to me. One mistake you might have made was in the first paragraph when you wrote ‘What was I, two?’ at the end. It looks like it might have been a thought. If so then it should have single Quotation Marks around it according to at least one Contest Judge.

Any Last Thoughts: Was this story part of a Contest? It looks like it is.

I liked your story. Keep on writing.

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#4177933

Review of Flutter

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Nightbreeze terribly busy,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your thirteenth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is the story about a bunch of Fireflies. At first I thought that it was about an alien planet or maybe a fantasy Earth. Which in a way it is. But as I read on I realized the Creatures were us.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is Earth – as seen through the eyes of a Firefly or in this story several FireFlies. But the main location for this story is the big field near where they lived.

Your Main Character: Whoever is the one telling this story is the main character in this story. You gave their friends names. But not them or their parents. With that many characters I can understand that – especially if there’s a Word Count Limitation. Personally, I would have given them a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially my main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There was only that one line of dialogue. And it looked good. At least it did to me.

Any Last Thoughts: I think I found a word or two that was misspelled. You might want to check into that with a re-read.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4177932

Review of sweet dreams and a dead reality part one

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Rated: 13+

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Thexsvplan,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your story. But I’m sorry but I didn’t like it very much. It was very hard to read it. I liked the story concept, even though I’m not a big fan of Zombie stories, but how it was written is why I said sorry above.

The Story: This is the story about a man, name unknown, who is on the run from Zombies. It started where he lived in New York City in the year 2142. And it ended in an Electronics Store.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is New York City. But it’s not the NYC that we know – and hopefully never will be.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given this man a name. I try to give all my character a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There was only that two word line of dialogue in this story. And I don’t think that’s enough for most, if not all, Reviewers. There is also at least one Reviewer who would consider this story telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: Capitalization, there wasn’t any, and punctuation is your main problem with this story. You might want to check that out – and do a re-write.

I liked your story concept. Keep on writing.

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#4177931

Review of Bluebell the Flower Fairy

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello PCP,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is the story a Flower Fairy named Bluebelle. Who is a Tooth Fairy because of a curse. But she wants to be a Flower Fairy like the rest of her family – even if that means she has to go to other planets to do it.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is Fairy Town. Where exactly Fairy Town is at is unknown.

Your Main Character: Bluebell is the main character in this story. There are a few more like pixies and giants. But they are only mentioned. They aren’t really part of this story.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have made a mistake or two with spelling. You might want to check that out with a re-read. Also it looks like you did a double word by mistake. You wrote ‘and’ twice. And the second one wasn’t needed.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4177930

Review of Jack

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Rated: 13+

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Athibodeau,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is the story about a man named Adam. Who had a dream about the future. Or was it about the future. That’s what Adam wanted to know. End the end he found out the truth – it was neither.

Where Your Location Is: The location is the desert in this story. Which desert it is - is unknown.

Your Main Character: Adam is the main character of this story. He’s in it from beginning to end. But his two buddies, Mark and Nick, are also an important part of this story too.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story until toward the end of it. And what dialogue there is in this story looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: I think I found a couple of mistakes in spelling. You might want to check that out with a re-read. Also I don’t understand the title of your story. I understand he worked at Jack-in-the-box. But that was only mentioned in the first paragraph – and nowhere else.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4177929

Review of Lord Mother

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Simon Trust,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in in from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about what happened to the Earth when we get completely out of control – and destroy ourselves. It’s also a story about how we bounce back – sort of. We don’t actually do it ourselves.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is the Earth of the future. Hopefully the distance future. Which it might be considering how it ended.

Your Main Character: Lord Mother is the main, and only, character in this story. Most writers wouldn’t consider this a character because of who it turned out to be. But I do.
To me it doesn’t matter who they are, or how old they are, it depends on who is in it the most to me.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some reviewers who might. And at least one who considers this telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have put a space between the paragraphs. I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule. But even if it isn’t I think it makes a story easier to read if it is.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4177928

Review of The Spanish Mantis

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Rated: 13+

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Silent Envy,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourteenth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a male named Sam. Who was at a bar trying to get a Spanish woman to have sex with him. Someone, race wise, he had never done before.

Where Your Location Is: The bar, where unknown, is the location for this story. At first I wasn’t sure where it took place. I thought it might have been his bedroom while watching a movie. But once the dialogue started I realized it was a bar.

Your Main Character: Sam was the main character in this story. But the mysterious Spanish woman was also a very big part of this story. Personally, I would have given her a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a very good job with your dialogue. At least it looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I wouldn’t have begun two, or more, sentences in a row with the same word. There has to be at least two other words, both sentences and paragraphs, before I use a word again. But that’s just how I write my stories. Also I would have spaced between paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar error. But even if it isn’t I think it easier to read a story if it is.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4177927

Review of Galactaball

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Johnny,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your first year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a baseball game in the future. It involved the Giants and the Ladybugs.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this baseball game was On Nova Terra. It was being played at Verizon Park there.

Your Main Character: Ace is the main character in this story. But he’s not the only one. Both teams are well represent in this story.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good to me. I think I did find one mistake you made with your dialogue though. You mentioned thinking. But you didn’t put what you thought in single Quotation Marks. I think that’s an error. No pun intented.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have placed a space between paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule. But even if it isn’t I think it makes a story easier to read if it is. But that’s just how I write my stories. Also I think I found a couple of mistakes with two words together – a space is missing between them. And a letter missing from the end of one word. You might want to check into that with a re-read.

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4177926

Review of Witch Won?

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello finishflag,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about two eight year olds named Chevy and Dodge Dealer. And the Witch who has grabbed them – because she’s more than a witch. She’s a Modern Day Witch.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is the old Widow Wilson house. I liked that you gave some details because just the location. Personally, I try to give all my stories at least one location. Depending on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I give to it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit more, if not a lot more, than just that. That’s just the way that I write though.

Your Main Character: Chevy and Dodge Dealer are the main characters in this story. But so is Old Widow Wilson too.

How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I wouldn’t have done any one line paragraphs. I don’t like to do that. Sometimes I have to with Contest like Dialogue 500. But even with Contest like that one there are ways around it. It’s just like starting two, or either other, paragraphs in a row with the same word: There has to be at least two paragraphs before I will re-use a word to begin it. But that’s just the way that I write.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4177924

Review of Search Within

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Carmen Bell,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked what I could understand of it. But it’s a little too sophisticated for me.

The Story: This is a story about a group of archaeologists. And what they have found. At least I think that’s what this story is about.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is an archaeological site. My knowledge of Earth is very limited – especially in other countries. You mentioned Gaza. But I’m not sure exactly where that is at.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main one. It makes them feel for real, I think, if they have a name.

How They Spoke to Me: There was only one line of dialogue. And it really wasn’t dialogue. It was a thought. I think thoughts are dialogue. But some, probably most, might not. I think you did make a mistake with this one line. According to at least one Contest Judge you should be using single Quotation Marks with thoughts instead of doubles.

Any Last Thoughts: I’m a little confused about the Genres you chose for this story. I can understand the Adventure part of this a little. But not the fantasy or the Science Fiction.

I liked your story – what I understand of it. Keep on writing.

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#4176570

Review of Life's Affairs

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello kitt,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading you Fiction story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is the story about a female named Yanki. Who has just broken up with her childhood friend, Lotay, of six years. And the man she was about to marry – after two months.

Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a ‘Chopstick’ restaurant. A little bit more detail would have been nice. But I understand why you didn’t – especially if this was a Word Count Limitation story.

Your Main Character: Yanki is the main character in this story. But the man she is about to meet is also a big part of this story. Even Lotay is too. Personally, I would have given this man a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There was only the one line of dialogue in this story. But it looked good to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Is this story part of a flash fiction contest like the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge? It sure does look like it is.

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4176567

Review of Escape To Infinity

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Ed Singer,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until if finished it.

The Story: The is the story about an abused female named Allie. And her escape from an abusive relation with Kevin – thanks to a door-to-door saleman.

Where Your Location Is: The house where the abuse took place is the main location for this story. But the street just beyond that house is also a location too.

Your Main Character: Allie is the main character in this story. She finally had to the courage to run away from her abuser. But Kevin is also a big part of this story too. And even the salesman is too.

How They Spoke to Me: The dialogue in this story looked pretty good. At least it does to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Is this story part of a flash fiction contest like the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge? It sure does look like it is.

I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.

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#4176564

Review of Stranded

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Sarahnaye,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.

The Story: This is a story about a night out with the girls – that goes from bad to worse. At least they thought a night out was what they needed to get over a breakup. But they were wrong.

Where Your Location Is: One of the locations for this story sounds like a male strip club. But there was a mention of the dark alley too.

Your Main Character: Amy is the main character in this story because she’s the one that thought a girls night out was a good idea. But Cassie is also a major character too – because she was the one dumped by Grant. I like that you gave them names. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name.

How They Spoke to Me: The dialogue in this story looked good. At least it did to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Is this the story as part of a flash fiction contest like the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge. It sure looks like it is – especially with the Word Count at the end of it.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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#4176562

Review of Basketball Intro

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Rated: E

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Hello Dr. Kenneth Noisewater,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. Happy Anniversary

Now for the good stuff: The Review.

Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I like it a lot. But I am a little confused about it. The first paragraph doesn’t really connect that well with the other two.

The Story: This is the story about a basketball game. But the first paragraph doesn’t have anything to do with a basketball game.

Where Your Location Is: One location is the basketball game. But it sounds like a house is also a location in this story too.

Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given him, I’m not even sure he is a he, a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. but that’s just how I write.

How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.

Any Last Thoughts: According to you title, which I probably would have been a little bit more creative about, this is the beginning of a longer story – maybe even a Novel. Has this progressed into a Short Story or an Outline and Novel.

I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.

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