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Review of I've Been Bad  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Hazzard,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about a boy, age unknown, who is being punished by his mother – in the most sickening of ways. Why he was being punished is also unknown.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a house somewhere. First in the kitchen and then a bathroom. But where that house is at is unknown.


Your Main Character: Both the boy and his mother are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what dialogue there is looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I think you might need to re-read your story again. It looks liked you missed a word or two. You might have misspelled a word or two too.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Mr. Fuzzy  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello skye11,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about someone, I think a female, living, or trying to live, in the future. At least I think that’s what it’s about.


Where Your Location Is: The Earth is the setting for this story – right. It usually is. Personally, I try to give all of my stories at least one location. It depends on the Word Count Limitation as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Ava is the main, and only, character in this story. And I like that you gave her a name. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. I think it makes them feel more real if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any actual dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who still might. And there is at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Up until recently I thought that thoughts were supposed to be done with single Quotation Marks. But I was wrong. Now I know it’s supposed to be done with italics instead. That’s what I have started doing with all of my stories. And I will until I find out it’s changed again.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Always Forever  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Declan,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. At least I did what I could understand of it. But that wasn’t very much of it. It was a little bit confusing to me.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. What is this story about?


Where Your Location Is: This is another area of your story that I’m not sure about. What is the location for this story? Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into my locations. Sometimes it just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. And there’s at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have broken up these two paragraphs into several other paragraphs – especially the first one. But that’s just the way that I write my stories. I don’t think there is anything wrong with doing it like this grammar rule wise, but I do think it’s easier to read if you do it though.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of The Story of Us  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Cecilia,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about two best friends who first met while at summer camp in 2010. I think they are both males. But I’m not sure about that.


Where Your Location Is: The main location for this story is the summer camp where they met. But it’s not the only one.


Your Main Character: whoever is telling this story is the main character of this story. But whoever they met is also one too. Personally, I would have given them both names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just how I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t actually any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are a few reviewers who still might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: This looks more like a blog entry to me. It might even be an essay. It’s been so long since I did one of them I’m not sure about that. But it definitely doesn’t look like a Short Story.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Once Upon A Time  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Jessica,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a teenage princess. At least I think she is a teenager. After all, her problem at the moment is acne.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is somewhere call Chamolime. Where this location is at is unknown. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into my locations. Sometimes it’s just the location itself – like this one. But usually it’s a little more, if not a lot more, than that.


Your Main Character: Of course, the princess is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated my paragraphs by a Space. I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule. But even if it isn’t I think it’s easier to read a story if it is.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Renewed  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Isabelle Wrighte,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a man named Nolan. Who is a detective in the Los Angeles Police Department. At least he is in part of the story. But I’m not sure if it stayed that way until the end of it. It doesn’t sound like it did.


Where Your Location Is: At least one location is at the Los Angeles Police Department. But it read like there were others – a lot of others.


Your Main Character: Nolan is the main character in this story. And I like that you gave him a name. Personally, I like to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. I think it makes them feel more real they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: It kind of sounded to me like this was some kind of a life after death storyline. Maybe it’s a Witness Protection Program type of story. But I don’t think it’s that because of being a detective. It sex change or something kinkier story. So which is it?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello DivaB9908,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story and I liked it a lot. But I am curious about one thing though. Why was categorized as a Short Story. It looks like it’s the first chapter, or a prologue, of a Novel.


The Story: This is the story about a female named Rosetta. Who was on her way home after a long day at work. She was walking when she had to sit down for a rest. That’s when the driver of a carriage stopped by to help her.


Where Your Location Is: The location of this story are streets somewhere. But where they are at is unknown. Personally, I try to give all of my stories at least one location. It depends on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Rosetta is the main character in this story. But the driver is also a big part of this story too. Personally, I would have given the driver a name too. I try to do that will all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated the paragraphs by a Space. I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s easier to read if you do. Also you might want to re-read this again. A sentence or two didn’t make any sense to me.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Something Awry  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Preston Orrick,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about a farmer by the name of Darren. Who was working on his farm one day when he saw an oddity. before he went to check it out completely he was called in for lunch.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a farm of course. I like that you gave it a location. Personally, I try to have at least one location with all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Darren is the main character, really the only character, in this story. I like that you gave him a name. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated the paragraph with a space between them. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s easier to read if it is. Also I noticed that your story just suddenly ended. I understand there is a Word Count Limit when it comes to stories like this. But most Judges won’t like it if it just ends like this one did.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review by PureSciFi
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Dominique Derval,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a young, barely out of High School, girl by the name of Maeve. Who has gotten an interview with a big fashion design company. But it didn’t go too good. She told it all to her bartender, James, she met at the airport bar before and after the interview.


Where Your Location Is: The main location for this story was the bar at the airport. But the office at the design company is also a location for this story too.


Your Main Character: Maeve is the main character in this story. But Mr. Sanchez and James are also main characters too. I like that you gave them all names. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name.


How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot a of dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated this story into parts. The first part was the interview. Then the flashback. And then back to the interview. Finally, at the bar again. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review by PureSciFi
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Charlie & Cinn,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a male named Max and a female named Ann. And how they meet at a bench in a park.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location for this story is at. I know it’s a park somewhere, but I’m not sure where exactly
where this park is at. Where it’s at is unknown. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Max and Ann are both the main, and only, characters in this story. I like that you gave them a name. Personally, I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story story. But there was some. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you started several sentences off with the same word. Personally, I don’t do that with either my sentences for my paragraphs. There has to be at least two other words before I will use that word again. But that’s just how I write my stories.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Only a Dream  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Mahlyenki Dyavol,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a performer. Her name is Meeca Gray. And she is about to perform a song to her awaiting fans. But not all is what it appears to be.


Where Your Location Is: Most of this story takes place in front of a crowd on stage. Where that stage is at isn’t really explained. Personally, I try to give at least one location for all of my stories. It depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Meeca is the main, and pretty much the only, character in this story. I like that you gave her a name. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story, unless you count the song too, but what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I liked the way you included the song she sang to the crowd into the story. What I liked the most was how you ended it.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of Escape or die  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Sca,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us too. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a soldier named Jack. Who is on the run from the Japanese during a War. Which war it was isn’t known.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a Wooded Area. At least that’s where most of this story takes place. A Concentration Camp was also mentioned too.


Your Main Character: Jack is the main, and only, character in this story. I like that you gave you’re a name. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I think you made a few mistakes with your paragraphs. Some of them change in mid-sentence. The double or triple spacing between them is also a distraction too I think.



I liked your story. Keep on writing.



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Review of Highwayman  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Lothmorwel,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a Highwayman. At least I think that’s what this story is about.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location for this story takes place. But it sounds like it in the wilderness someplace because of there being a horse in the story. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on the Word Count Limitation as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main, and only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given this person a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real I think if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I don’t like to do one sentence paragraphs. It’s needs to be at least two sentences. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.



I liked your story. Keep on writing.



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Review of Emerald Eyes  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello baddestboy32,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This was a story about a romance between two people. At least that’s what I think it about.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure what the location is for this story. But from the sound of it it’s a bedroom somewhere. Am I right about that? Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how to much detail I go into with that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character. But so is their love-mate too. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to do that will all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: I think you made a slight mistake with your one line of dialogue in this story. You should have put the Question Mark before the Quotation Mark.


Any Last Thoughts: This story seemed to just end. I have done that with several of my stories. Usually it’s because of Word Count Limitations. Is that what it was with this story?



I liked your story. Keep on writing.



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Hello dragon,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This was a story about a former cop turned private detective and his teen assistant. Who take on a case of a missing diamond.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where this story takes place. No location was actually given. Since it involved Royalty it might be set in England or some other Royalty. Personally, I try to give at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Mr. George and Alex are the main characters in this story. Clara is also a big part of this story too.


How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a good job with the dialogue in this story. At least it looked good to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I’m not sure, but I think you made a few mistakes when it came to spelling, grammar and punctuation. You might want to check that out.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of The Rope  
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Hello wimsey,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. But it reads like it’s a story about two guys who find, then follow a rope they find in a Wooded Area.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a Wooded Area. Where exactly this wooded area is at is unknown. Personally, I try to give all of my stories at least one location. It depends on my Word Count Limitation as to how much detail I go into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself – like this one. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Both guys camping out, who discover a mysterious rope, are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was only one or two lines of dialogue in this story. But what little there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I’m a little confused by the ending of this story. It seemed like a rush ending. I have done that on a few of my stories too. Usually because of a Word Count Limit. Is that what happened with this story?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Fate,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a man from England in 1650 who realized he was wrong. What he was wrong about isn’t exactly clear. But it sounds like it’s about the Earth being flat or not. Whatever it is it will probably come out in future chapters of this Novel.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure what the location is for this first chapter of a Novel is. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: The man and the newcomer are both the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated all the paragraphs by a space. Also I was wondering why you categorized this as a Short Story when it’s the beginning of a Novel. You even said it was the beginning of a Novel. Has it progressed any further?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Ed,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a male named Andrew who in the first part is a baby. And in the unofficial second part he’s fifteen. He’s destine for greatness. But that isn’t really talked about in this story – yet.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this takes place. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. Depending on my Word Count Limitation as to how much detail I give those locations. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Andrew is the main character in this story. But his mum is also a big part of this story too. Personally, I would have given mum a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. Butt that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this Short story. But there was some. And what dialogue there is looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Why was this categorized as a Short Story. It looks like it’s the first part of a Novel. In fact, the title indicates it’s the beginning of a Novel. Is it? Has it advance further.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Jack Micdevit,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about a robot invasion. But by the sound of it these are off-world robots.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location for this story takes place. It appears to be a city somewhere. But I’m not sure where that city, town etc. is at. Personally, I try to give all of my stories at least one location. Depending on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Al is the only name mentioned in this story. But he’s not the main one. The main one doesn’t have a name. Personally, I would have given them a name too. I try to give a name to all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they do. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was a little bit a dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I think I found a few mistakes that you made in your story. The first one was rate instead of right. Another one was the word ‘was’ that shouldn’t be there. You might want to check into them – and one or two others I might have missed.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello C Young,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. But it sounds like it’s about a future where a world, or at least part of one, that is a religious cult. Am I right?


Where Your Location Is: It sounds like the location for this story is a compound of some kind. One with a fence around it. The exact location is unknown. So is what the location is exactly. Personally, I like to have at least one location in my stories. Depending on my Word Count Limitation as to how much detail I give to that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: David is the main character is this story. I’m glad that you gave him a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they do. But that’s just how I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this Short Story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. Have you expanded on it? Do you have any other stories like it?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Dave,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a male and his friend who grew up, controlling the hood, when they were younger. Now one is still getting into the trouble with the law. And the other one is a Judge. Guess who is about to meet his old buddy again – the hard way.


Where Your Location Is I’m not sure where most of this story takes place. But the last location is the courtroom.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character. But his old friend Binky is also part of it too. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to do that will all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I liked the ending to your story. Most writers would have let him go with a minimum sentence, if that, but you didn’t do that.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Griot,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a boy name Nick who had a tree in the forest near his house. But this wasn’t just any old tree it’s a Thunder Tree.


Where Your Location Is The location for this story takes place mostly in the forest. But a little bit of it takes place at Nick’s house.


Your Main Character: Nick is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given names to at least some of his friends. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I think you have a good start to a much longer Short Story – maybe even a Novel. Have you expanded on this story?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello retstlessfingas,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. But it didn’t really make any sense to me.


The Story: I’m not sure what this story way about. But it sounds like it’s about a male who believes he can tell what month of the year it is by what’s going on around him. Only he’s wrong about it being March still.


Where Your Location Is It sounds like the location for this story is a kitchen. But where this kitchen is at is unknown to me.


Your Main Character: Whoever this man is he’s the one telling this story. You mentioned Jane’s name. But not his. Is there a reason for that? Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I’m a little confused about how it ended. What does a woman with a white smile have to do with the table giving way?



I liked your story. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello wookieefrog,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about a girl who accepted a dare. And what happened to her after she did. It’s also a story about what happened ten years later to another girl.


Where Your Location Is What laid behind the wall is the location for this story. But even after the gates are opened we still didn’t really see what was behind that wall.


Your Main Character: Whoever the girls, ages unknown, were are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just how I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this short story. But what there is looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have put a Space between paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it makes a story a lot easier to read if it is.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Hello littlemiss,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about two boys, age eleven, named Dave and Marc. They were on their way to meet the new kid in town named Chris when they stumbled across a mansion. It’s a good thing they did too. That’s where there missing friend was at.


Where Your Location Is: The mansion is the main location for this story. But there are a few others too. Like the house Chris supposedly lived in.


Your Main Character: Dave and Marc are the main characters in this story. But Chris is close behind them. I’m curious about one thing though. Is Chris male or female. At age eleven it’s probably male. But nowadays it could be female too.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: The only problems I might have found is with you punctuation – especially with you ‘periods’ and ‘commas.’ Also it looked like you are missing some words here and there too. You might want to check into that too.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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