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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Enter Darkness Exit Light 2012,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your poem, The Confederacy Never Died.

APPEAL: WOW! What a powerful poem. This poem could stir up a lot of emotions.


NAMES: Your titlle title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me wonder about what I would find.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. The blue and centering this poem adds to the eye appeal.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: This poem is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Ice Crystals  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tadpole1,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Ice Crystals.

APPEAL: WOW! Your wee tale brought tears to my eyes. What a powerful piece on lost love.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me it. It made me wonder what kind of tale I would find. In fact at first I thought this might be a poem.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Haunted  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi melzgr8,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Haunted.

APPEAL: This tale will appeal to those who like sinister tales. It sent a tiny shiver down my spine.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me wonder what kind of haunting tale I would find.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: The back of her heel caught on one of the branches her father had cut down and she stumbled backward, crying out as her he reached for her arm, the blade of the axe glinting in the light as it fell to the ground. -- Take the word her out between as and he.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job stay in Annie’s point of view.

FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of HAUNTED MANSION  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dr M C Gupta,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, HAUNTED MANSION.

APPEAL: This wee poem has a nice rhythm to it that’s soothing on the senses.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: This poem is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Black Zodiac  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi si-cotik ,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your

APPEAL: Anyone who reads dark and scary stories will find this appealing. I like the way it is written.

NAMES: The title of this tale caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. The extra large font made it quite easy on my old peepers.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Itchy Water,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your contest page, A Poem A Day Contest.

I love the pen and A Poem A Day picture at the top of the page. Plus Read The Rules. Both are quite dramatic and grabs the reader’s attention.
The rules are easy to read and understand. The different color umbrellas are a nice touch to the rules.
Word count and the deadline are stated.
The contest tells the reader how to post her entry.
The use of color on this page gave it some flare. The colors caught the reader’s eye and make things easier to find.
I like the way you set up the prompt part of this page. It’s easy to find.

Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Pain  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Lightbringer,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Pain. What an intense little story.

APPEAL: This is a well written tale. Your words create a need in me to want to help this poor soul someone tried to murder and burn alive. It also made me angry that, that poor soul was viciously attack.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me wonder what kind of tale I would find.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job staying in the victim’s point of view. I could feel his fear and pain.

FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of When I play  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi The Celloian,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, When I play.

APPEAL: This wee piece gives me a sense of wonder.

NAMES: Your title piqued my interest and drew me in. Would this be about children playing or a musician?

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: This piece is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi CeruleanSon,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Villanelle #1: Three Sisters.

Thanks for explaining what a Villanelle poem is.

APPEAL: The rhythm of this poem appeals to the senses. It has a nice beat to it.

NAMES: The simplicity of the title caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: The poem is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Dragonbone  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sir Paendrag,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Dragonbone.

APPEAL: This poem appeals to those who love a good battle and who love adventure.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Over Dragon's tooth canyon's most honored Tableaux -- Is tooth and canyon part of the name? If so, both should be capitalized.

Now will was a young man and happy they say, -- If Will is the young man’s name, it should be capitalized.

And all of the Kingdoms Will,s ruled since that day -- I don’t understand Will,s.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

FLOW: The poem is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

When I saw the title for this signature, I just had to take a peek. Ladybug is the nickname my mom gave me as a kid and I use it here as my handle.

1. The image matches the title quite well.
2. The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
3. The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
4. The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
5. You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Sailor M,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I realize that I keep stopping by your port, yet there are so many things that pique my interest in there. So I must return to read something again.

I just read your flash fiction, The Robin's Egg Witch.

APPEAL: What a whimsical wee tale you have woven. It appeals to my curiosity. Why does eating a raw robin’s egg make someone a witch?

NAMES: The title caught my attention and drew me in. I just had to see what kind of tale this title held.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Mike has been my best friend from the age of 9 on. -- I don‘t think you need on at the end of this sentence.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job staying in the main character’s point of view.

FLOW: The story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Poison Emeralds  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Feather Duster,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

Nice handle.
I just read your wee poem, Poison Emeralds.

APPEAL: The red is very eye catching and draws the reader in.

NAMES: Your title made me curious so that I had to see just what this tale was all about.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: The poem moves in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Witch Trials  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi spidey,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Witch Trials.

APPEAL: What an interesting idea, putting quotes throughout this wee tale. I found this a bit of an interruption of the story.

NAMES: The title caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: The story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of The Shadow Speaks  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Marco,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, The Shadow Speaks.

APPEAL: This is a unique tale of how our world was created and religion came to be. I found it an interesting read.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job of staying in The Shadow’s point of view.

FLOW: The story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Grave robber  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Zoubang,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your poem, Grave robber.

APPEAL: This shall appeal to those who like creepy tales and poetry. This has a twist to it.

NAMES: The title caught my attention and drew me.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. I like that you centered this poem. To me that makes it eye catching and appealing.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Your closer to me now, -- Your should be you’re.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug
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Review of Room 315  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi ,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Room 315.

APPEAL: This tale appeals to the amateur sleuth in me. Why does the hotel manager kill women?

NAMES: The title of this tale caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious as to what kind of story this would be.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: He placed the lifeless body of the young woman on some plastic tarpaulin that he had let folded perfectly in the corner of the room… -- Let should be left.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job of staying in the character’s point of view.


FLOW: The story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug
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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Christina,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, The Cat.

APPEAL: This will appeal to cat lovers and those who love reading supernatural tales.

NAMES: The title caught my attention and drew me in. I love cats and write some supernatural tales.

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: while she sat opposite him in her pink cushion. -- Wouldn’t “on” instead of in be a better choice here?

Lenore held her adorable cat around her skinny arms and looked at him in shock, as if he was trying to give her “child” away for adoption. -- I think around should be replaced with “in”.

Rudolph finally gave up, wondering that the cat would run away or die one day. -- I think “that” should be replaced with “if“.

Out! Get out, you fur ball, you damned cat. That’s my only good suit. This was the one I wore for Lenore's burial! Out! Go! -- Since Rudolph is talking to the cat, there should be a quotation mark in front of Out1 and a quotation mark after Go!

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

POINT OF VIEW: You did an excellent job of staying in Rudolph’s point of view.

FLOW: The story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug
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Review of Vanity  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Purple T-cicle,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your signature, Vanity.

What I liked:
1. The image matches the title quite well.
2. The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
3. The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
4. The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is. A lady on a balcony admiring herself in a mirror.
5. You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Autumn Rose,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, The key of course.

APPEAL: Yor poem has a nice rhythm to it and gave my heart a lift in spirit.

NAMES: Your title piqued my curiosity, yet doesn’t seem to fit the poem. Or did I miss something?

FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: The poem is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of The Garret  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon - RIP Sticktalker ,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, The Garret.

APPEAL: Bravo! I love the twist at the end of this tale. The old evil witch got what she deserved. That twist made me chuckle.

NAMES: The title of this tale caught my attention and drew it in.

FORMAT: This tale was easy to read and understand. The larger print size made it easy on my old eyes.

SETTING: Your words painted a vivid picture for the reader to see.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue tags.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job staying in Sean’s point of view.

FLOW: The story developed in a logical manner as it moved along. It began and slowly added details letting the reader know what was happening.

{c/:indigo}I like the way you explained what a garret was and what Reid meant.

Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Angela,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, The Last Tea Party.

APPEAL: What a creepy wee tale. It made my skin crawl.

NAMES: The title of your tale caught my attention and drew me in. From the title, I never suspected that this was a scary tale.

FORMAT: This was easy to read and understand.

SETTING: Your words paint a vivid picture for the reader to see.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: He acquiesced to her request for a tea party. -- I’m not familiar with the acquiesced. What does it mean?

James and Melanie had huddled together, helpless in the wake of that tragedy. -- Who is Melanie -- I thought the sister’s name is Beverly.

She held the severed hand out in front of her, and he and shook his head. -- The second “and” need to be removed. And he shook his head.

DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural and I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue tags.

POINT OF VIEW: You did a good job staying in James’s point of view.

FLOW: The story is told in a logical manner from beginning to end.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of The Girl  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lightbringer,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee piece, The Girl.

This is a good piece about finding the courage to ask someone out. That’s a scary idea by itself. Will the person say yes or tell you to go away.

NAMES: Your title made me wonder just what this was about so I took a peek.

FORMAT: This was easy to read and understand.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: This piece moves along in a logical manner from beginning to end.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Porn Vs Erotica  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi MidnightStalker,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your piece called Prom vs. Erotica.

This is a hard piece of writing for me to review.{size}

NAMES: The title of this piece made me curious to see what you had in mind.

FORMAT: This was easy to read and understand.

LENGTH: If the piece is overly long, then I am more reluctant to read it, but if it's intriguing, I still might.

FLOW: This piece develops in a logical manner from beginning to end.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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Review of Mountain Crystal  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fred,

I just read your wee poem, Mountain Crystal.

APPEAL: Your poem brought a smile and up lifted my spirit. It added a bright spot to my grey and gloomy morning.

NAMES: Your title caught my attention and drew me in.

FORMAT: The extra spacing between the lines made this quite easy to read and understand. My old tired eyes appreciate that.

SETTING: Your words paint a nice picture for the reader to see.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor and don’t know all the rules, I won’t comment on this area.

FLOW: This poem flows smoothly from line to line. The rhyme adds a bit of flare to it.

{c/:indigo}Great job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak

Ladybug

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