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Review of Without them  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
{size:}Hi L.I.S.,

This review is from: What would you tell your parents now?

I just read your wee tale, Without them.
It's easy to read and understand.
It moves smoothly from beginning to end.
It made me feel are warm and fuzzy inside.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.
I know this doesn't have any helpful tips, yet I don't see anything wrong with this. I'm sure someone on WDC might have a different opinion.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi dogpack,

This review is from: Power Reviewers Special Writing Contest .

I just reading your wee tale, I thought It Was Thanks Giving.

I love the way you used different color to seperate the time differences.
The larger print made it easier to read.
It moves along nicely from beginning to end.

I did find a few mishaps. Simple typos that can be easily fixed.
These were my thoughts as i headed toward the barn where we housed the turkey and other animals. -- I should be capitalized.

I was very young then and vividly remember this day. -- This should be that.

Right now all I knew was this definitely was not this turkeys day it was this turkeys day to become our food. An apostrophe is needed in both turkeys.

I gradually realized that the heroes of this wonderful even t were -- take the space out between even and the "t".

I had no idea who there people were or how they would accept me barging in on their festivities. -- there should be these.

It seemed that i had to walk a very, very long way. -- capitalize "i".

And And what better way to make new friends. -- Remove one of the Ands.

I was trying to think of what i would say next, -- capitalize "i'.

"relax we are very, very glad to have you here. -- Capitalize relax.

"why don't you come over here near the head of the table?" -- capitalize why.

It looked like they had gone to a hung amount of trouble to prepare everything. -- I believe hung should be huge.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1,

This review is from: Power Reviewers Special Writing Contest

I just read your wee poem, First Thanksgiving.
THe title tells the reader what it's about.
It's easy to read and understand.
Using colors and centering gives it eye appeal.
Nice image of the Native American sharing a meal with the white folks.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Princess Megan,

This review is from: The Power Review Shop

I just read your wee tale, Believe In Me: The Mermaid 2. It's a nice little story.
The title piqued my interest and drew me in.
It's easy to read and understand.
It seems more told than shown.

This is suppose to be a 1,000 words, yet that seems impossible to me to write a 1,000 words from such a short piece. I know there's a review out there who probably can write a 1,000 words.

This is a cute wee tale and I enjoyed reading it.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of The Last Shots  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Aiden,

I just read your wee poem, THe last shots.
Usually all the words in a title are capitalized.
The rhyme of this poem moves it smoothly from line to line.
To me centering it give it eye catching appeal.
Your words paint a picture of surprise and shock. The person beginning shot can't quite believe it's happening.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
{size:}Hi StephB,

I was poking around in your port. WOW! What a great place to find something to read.

I chose your Review Signature #17 today, yet made a note of your novels that I'll take a peek on Friday and SAturday for a Review Raid.

This is a cool signature and quite inspiring. It looks like a secret garden tuck away somewhere nice. I love weeping willow trees.
The colors draw the eye and are quite appealing.
I like the way the words frame the image so the picture is clear and easy to see.
The words on the image are quite easy to read. I can't quite make out what the word on the right side of the sig is.

Whoever created this did a beautiful job.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Legacy  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi SoCalScribe,

I just read your wee tale, Legacy. To be honest when I first started reading it I wasn't sure if I would like it. I did however read it all the way through and discovered it's a quite well written tale indeed.

The title piqued my interest and drew me in.
It's easy to read and understand. It moves smoothly from beginning to end and builds to a satisfying conclusion.
Your descriptive words paint a somewhat vivid picture of the outer realm.
This tale is told not ready shown, yet seems to work this way.

The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Grandpa, Tell Me  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi novel back on track....,

I just read your wee tale, Grandpa, Tell Me. What a clever idea using song titles to write a tale.

This brought a tear to my eye when Grandpa told his granddaughter he loved listening to his granddad tell him stories.

By using blue for the song titles it made it easy to see which ones were used.

This is easy to read and follow. I didn't spot any mishaps in grammar or spelling.

Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Joe,

I just read your wee tale, Dawn of the Panda. It wasn't what I expected. The first sentence at the top says: Dedicated to the loving memory of Panda. My childhood teddy bear. I was expecting something quite different than the tale here.

I spotted these minor mishaps:
1. The cocktail of experimental reproduction chemicals and illegal growth hormones that woo had administered to stop their imminent demise seemed to have driven them all to into insane rage. Woo knew he was to blame. -- Woo needs to be capitalized.

2. The beast lunged at Woo, its gigantic jaws swallowing the scientists head and tearing it from his body in one violent movement. -- scientist's needs an apostrophe.

You told your tale instead of showing it happening.

It would be easy to read if there were spaces between each paragraph.

Your tale moves along at a good pace and builds from beginning to end.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi to the last cicada,

What a beautfiul and touching reason for your handle. Your wee tale brought a few tears to my eyes and it touched my heart.

The cicada image at the top lets the reader see exactly what a cicada is. The light blue accented with the purple gives this tale eye appeal.

Grammar and spelling look fine.

Why are you the last to be named Sim by your grandmother?

This is well written. Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Ms N.O.R.T.  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi D. J.,

I just read the beginning of your novel Ms N.O.R.T. I think it's great for elementry school aged children. You set up a nice story plot. The children have a new teacher after their favorite one died, and they're out to get her without even knowing her. I can see the little darling plotting away.

I did spot a couple minor mishaps in grammar:
1. "You haven't even seen her." I told her. -- I believe the period should be a comma.

2. and an I kid you not bow tie! -- take out the an.

3. Oh, no, I knew what she was going to say next. "Good Morning, Tanisha, this is a new student" (no kidding) "He has just moved here from New Orleans." (good timing, coming to Michigan in February)
"Would you please make sure he doesn't get lost?" (That I could do, but keeping him from a butt-kicking? I wasn't so sure) -- a period is needed after sure). A space would be nice between these two paragraphs.

4. I went to my own seat at the back of the first row, nearest the windows. I put my chin in my hand and turned to look outside. This was starting out to be a crappy day and I had a feeling it was about to get a lot worse.
Author Notes This is a chapter book for higher elementary or middle school children. -- needs a space between these two paragraphs.

This is well written. Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Betrayal  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Mysterious Wolf,

Love the handle. I just read your wee poem, Betrayal.

What I liked:
1. The title grabbed my attention and drew me in.
2. It's easy to read and understand.
3. It has a nice pace and moves smoothly along.
4. From your desciptive words I can see someone with a broken heart trying to understand what went wrong.
5. As I read your poem it gave me an odd feeling, yet I'm not sure exactly what.

This is well written. Good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of La' Guillotine  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Demolition-Writing,

I just read your wee poem, La' Guillotine.

What I liked:
1. The title tells me this is about someone's death.
2. It's easy to read and understand.
3. The rhyme makes it flow line to line.
4. Your words create a picture for the reader to see.
5. It gave me a bit of a chill as I read this poem. What a horrible way to die.

Grammar and spelling seem fine.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi S R,

I just read Tara & The Pussycats Investigate: .

What I liked:
1. The title caught my interest I drew me.
2. This is easy to read and follow.
3. I love the way you descibed Animalia. Good description.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: At the southern part of the plant was a cave with stalagmites and stalactites, interpreted as the planets teeth. -- I believe you want the word planet not plant.

They picked that particular area to avoid unwanted press coverage as the Falcon express airway could get them their without any hindrance, -- I believe you wanted there not their.

You have a good beginning for a longer tale with interesting characters.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Joy,

I just read your wee article, Fiction: Writing the Synopsis and found it very helpful.

What I liked:
1. It's well written and easy to read and understand.
2. It's short and to the point.
3. You have explained what a synopsis is and what to include in one.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of The Photos  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi H G,

I just read your wee tale, THe Photos. What an unusual wee tale.

What I liked:
1. The title caught my attention and drew me in.
2. It's easy to read and understand.
3. It moves along at a good pace.

Where did the lady come from? Why did she tell him the things she said? Was the guy dreaming? This could be turned into a mystery.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.

Great job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi iKïyå§ama,

I just read Death at Rosewood Mansion.

What I liked:
1. The piqued my interest and drew me in by suggesting this was a tale of mystery.
2. It's easy to read and understand. I'm glad you put spaces between the paragraph.
3. You give enough details that I can see the party going on.

What I wish was included:
1. Answers to the questions popping in my head.
a. Who killed Milton and why?
b. Was the killer known to Milton?
c. Was the killer a friend or foe?

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: Since I’m not an expert editor I won’t comment on this.

I felt a bit disappointed that you start off with a murder and just end the tale there. You have the beginning of a murder mystery. Do you plan on writing a longer tale?

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi SpookyB,

I just read your wee tale, The Lighthouse Keeper. WOW! What a somewhat creepy tale. You have the beginning of a novel.

What I liked:
1. The title piqued my interest I drew me in.
2. You words painted a picture for me to see.
3. The plot moves along nicely.
4. This is easy to read with the spacing between the paragraphs.

Grammar and spelling seem fine to me.

WIll there be more of this tale?

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi dreamybanana,

I just read Detina Park // Prologue Rewrite. What a creepy and unnerving dream. Or is it a dream?

Without reading what this ptologue goes to i'm not sure if the title fits the tale.

What I liked:
1. You used enough details to paint a pciture in my mind's eye. I can see the girl on the bluff.
2. You have set up an interesting tale.

Grammar and spelling seem fine.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

Ladybug

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Review of Wiccan Queen  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi W.D.,

Even your poetry has a creepy edge to it. I just read your wee poen, WIccan Queen and it gave me shutter.

1. The title piques interest and draws the reader in.
2. The brief description telss us what it is.
3. The black type fits beautifully with such a creepy tale.
4. I can the witch as she moves through the night.
5. It has a nice pace and moves smoothly line to line.
6. To me centering the poem is more pleasing to the eye.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi oneofmany,

I just read your wee tale, A morsel for the gods.

What I liked:
1. The title suggests a tale of mythology.
2. The brief description suggest something bad might happen.
3. Your words paint a vivid picture for the reader to see.
4. THe story moves at a nice pace and is easy to follow.

WHat I wish was included:
1.Spacing between all the paragraph making it easier to read.

I spotted only one mishaps: The professor and his attractive grad student Fiona followed on in my wake... -- I think you need a comma between student and Fiona.

You did a good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

Ladybug

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Review of Deceptive Image  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Nicole,

I just read your wee poem, Deceptive Image. Very nice.

Grammar and spelling seem fine.

What I liked:
1. The title pisques interest and draws the reader in.
2. It's easy to read and understand.
3. I love the way you centered. To me this is more eye catching and appealing.
4. It moves nicely from line to line.

You did a good job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

Ladybug

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Review of Red Paint?  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Buckley,

I just read your wee tale, Red Paint?

What I liked:
1. The title pigues interest and makes the reader wondering what this tale is about.
2. THe spacing made it easy to read.
3. It has a nice pace and is easy to follow.
4. It made me wonder just what Ma did with the red paint and blankets to the truck.
5. I also wonder what kind of feud is going on bewteen brother and sister.

Grammar and spelling look okay.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

Ladybug

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Review of redhat hotmama  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi iLove2write,

Oh how cute. I love your signature, redhat hotmama.

What I liked:
1. The title matches the signature.
2. The red and purple accent each other.
3. The red used for Hot Mama draws the eye in.
4. I can see that these ladies are best friends.

Whoever created this signature did a fantastic job.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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Review of Ldy Review Sig  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi LdyPhoenix,

WOW! What a cool signature. A royal Asian Princess to behold.

What I liked:
1. The title tells me what I shall find.
2. The colors used create an eye pleasing image.
3. The Ldy Phoenix in gold accents the signature.
4. I love the green gown because all the wee drawing on it are inspiring.
5. Credit is given to the creater of the signature.

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes!

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