We have the whole summer to think about what we’re going to do, so letsThis should be let's...meaning let usjust enjoy it. I love you.
He fell asleep quickly Wwhile Anna stared at him with more disappointment and disgust she could handle at one time.
He wished he could kiss the pain off her face, but it looked too sore for him to try.
Franks<--Should be Frank' grip did not loosen
Franks<---Should be Frank's gun, and tumble over. She ignored the gun Frank still had pointed at her, and quickly moved and picked up Jacksons’<---Should be Jackson's gun.
With that said, he died, laying in the arms of his purpose in life.
This was very touching. Keep up the good work and continue writing
Grandma Penny
OK. I know what tv show you like. I know you love to read. I know you might have more information about yourself in your port, but I was wondering why you didn't tell if you are married; children; grandchildren; etc.
By the way, you are a fantastic writer.
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
First let me say, you did a fine job writing this piece. I found no typos or misspelled words. Not only did it read smoothly, but it held my interest all the way. That last point could have something to do with my interest in cemetaries. I often wonder about the story behind some of the graves I have visited.
I looked for typos and misspelled words but found absolutely no errors of any kind. This shows me that you took great pride in writing this piece.
It's a very cute story and it certainly held my interest from the beginning to the end.
While I was reading it and realized what the outcome would be, I was thinking what a wonderful place for this to happen. (Don't want to give away the story.)
I had to give this one a 5 rating. I found no typos or misspelled words. It reads smoothly. You've given fantastic description of...well, I won't give the secret away. If anyone would like to know what you've described, they'll just have to r/r/r your item, huh?
The words to this piece flow smoothly. I found no typos or misspelled words. However, it seems to be a bit too short. Your description of this piece says you wrote it while soul searching about 10 years ago. How did the soul searching turn out?
I give this a 5 rating because I just don't know how you could possible be any more thorough than this.
Most of the things you explained, I had already experimented on my own and figured them out. But I never thought to check out Images. I'll have to do that.
I know this piece will be very helpful to those who are not familiar with Google. Keep up the good work.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this but sure did smell, feel, see, hear and taste all those flavorable chocolates.
I don't know if it's the chocolate, sugar or anticipation that gives us such a high when we break into a box of chocolates. But to me, the empty box leaves me feeling guilty and sad, no matter how pretty the container.
You've given good description. Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
As I read this, I paid attention to the content and also tried looking for typos or misspelled words. I found no errors.
In just a few words, you've given a great lesson. I understand addiction is hard. It's sad that Donnie didn't meet you at the meeting and has dropped out of sight. I hope he will find his way back.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You've made some rather healthy resolutions. I don't see why you can't keep most of them; especially the cooking. But...you can cook those noodles in the microwave, can't you? Uh oh...did I mess you up?
My heart lurched, reason arguing with instinct. Who won? Reason or instinct?
Isn't it amazing how the imagination works? I honestly believe there are times in the still of the night that I could actually be watching a bush scrape against my window in the wind and still convince myself it was something or someone trying to break in.
Grandma Penny
I like the way you have your port categorized. However, I got a bit lost when I read one of your stories. I don't remember ever reading it before, but the little box came up that says I've already reviewed it. I checked out some of your titles and will try to come back later for another visit. I'm putting you on my favorites.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You've given a fair description of these two characters. I think you described Eddie a little more than you did Woody.
Once I got over the sight of Eddie drooling and such, I became a little curious about the rest of the story.
Are there more characters in other chapters?
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
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