I'm not sure what this means exactly, but as I read it, my mind went to certain graffiti that I've seen. Sometimes I think young folks are trying to speak out in a way of leaving their marks on walls.
Other times, they show their rebellion in doing this; yet, still speaking out.
I understand what you're saying about our soldiers fighting.
I saw a couple words that weren't spelled the way I think they should be spelled, yet I realize sometimes our writers are not using our English spelling. Ex:aeons
I think you've done a wonderful job writing this piece. You've given good detail and description. I could feel myself looking out the bus window at the dried up environment. As you mentioned the drops of rain, I began to feel relieved. This certainly has a happy ending.
I found one error, but it's probably just an oversight.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. However, the yellow and the light green with this yellow background is very hard to read. Maybe you could choose a couple darker colors to make it easier on the eyes.
This a very touching piece. I found no typos or misspelled words. You've given a good description of a loving, older sister. I'm glad you were able to be there for her to hold her hand.
This piece reads smoothly except for the following: An easy target for me up above; Betty never understood
me then; often gave me that 'older sister look.'
Another good write. This is a subject I know all too well. The only thing, when my migraine is gone, I feel like rubber and am weak and confused; almost disoriented.
My heart goes out to anyone who suffers with such headaches as you've described.
This is a nice poem, but the lines and words are a little jerky; unlike most of your poetry I've read.
The fact that you have no typos or misspelled words is a plus for you. I don't think I've found anything like that in any of your writings. This shows that you take great pride in your work.
Wow! I'm glad you decided to finally get on with your dream. I enjoyed reading this piece.
I think you may have written it a bit faster than most of your writings since I found a few errors. Just a little editing and corrections, and you've got yourself a great write.
I gave you a 5 for this piece because I saw no errors and don't know of anything you need to make it better.
This is a very touching poem. As I read it, my heart went out to you.
Have you thought about writing a short story about your brother? You could share some of your memories with us, tell about his illness and the surgery, and how you adjusted to the outcome. I know this might be painful for you, but it would probably help others who might be going through the same thing. This is just an idea. If not now, maybe later?
This is great! I've always been afraid to write on the walls, but before frost-free freezers came about, I use to scribble in the frost in my mother's freezer. I remember I would write I love Mickey. Now, if I could just remember who in tarnation Mickey is.
I love this idea. Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
This is a beautiful poem. Reading it makes the reader feel an inner peace. I found no typos or misspelled words. The words and verses flow smoothly, making it easy to read.
It's perfect for the Inspirational Newsletter.
Keep up the good work and continue to write.
Grandma Penny
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Maybe you could choose a couple darker colors to make it easier on the eyes.