Job well done! I found no typos or misspelled words, which it seems I never find those in your writings. Apparently you proof your writing before posting it.
This is true. Different people react to terror in many different ways.
This is a very good acrostic. However, the first letters (those done in orange) don't seem to stand out quite enough. I don't know if you bolded them or not. If not, you might want to try to do that.
You have some very interesting points in this piece.
Suggestion: Your title would look much better if you didn't type it in all caps. This seems to distract attention from the actual write. Someone brought this point to my attention when I first joined the site.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. However, the yellow and the light green with this yellow background is very hard to read. Maybe you could choose a couple darker colors to make it easier on the eyes.
This a very touching piece. I found no typos or misspelled words. You've given a good description of a loving, older sister. I'm glad you were able to be there for her to hold her hand.
This piece reads smoothly except for the following: An easy target for me up above; Betty never understood
me then; often gave me that 'older sister look.'
I saw no typos or misspelled words. You've given a wonderful description of your daughter.
My youngest child (John Boy Walton) just turned 30.
No, that's not a typo. I was married to a Walton for nearly 16 years, but death separated us. We had three children. When the last one was born, that movie Walton's Mountain was popular. We named our baby Jonathan, but the nurses nicknamed him John Boy. We still call him that.
Another good write. This is a subject I know all too well. The only thing, when my migraine is gone, I feel like rubber and am weak and confused; almost disoriented.
My heart goes out to anyone who suffers with such headaches as you've described.
This is a nice poem, but the lines and words are a little jerky; unlike most of your poetry I've read.
The fact that you have no typos or misspelled words is a plus for you. I don't think I've found anything like that in any of your writings. This shows that you take great pride in your work.
You've given a great description of winter weather with it's good and bad.
We don't have much snow where I live now, but I can remember having lots of it when I was a child. I shiver now, when I think of the many hours I spent trampling in the snow and making snowmen, and make believe igloos.
Wow! So many memories to share. You did a good job with this piece.
I didn't see any errors. You painted a beautiful picture of a place I've never been, but feel like I just visited there and saw all the beautiful gardens you described. That's what writing's all about; pulling your reader into it.
Wow! I'm glad you decided to finally get on with your dream. I enjoyed reading this piece.
I think you may have written it a bit faster than most of your writings since I found a few errors. Just a little editing and corrections, and you've got yourself a great write.
This is a very touching poem. It's scarey to think about not being able to communicate. I'm sure you wrote pretty much your mother's thoughts in this piece.
There were no typos that I could tell.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
You beat all I've ever seen. You're the only person I know of who can write a good short story in rhymes. lol
You did a good job with this, but you might need to edit and look for sentences that should either be broken down into two sentences or separated by a semicolon.
n I did daring back down drop<--OOPS! I think you forgot to put a period at the end of the sentence.
Ive<--You need an apostrophe here. Just a slight oversight, I'm sure, since you did it right in the next sentence.footprints on many lives; I hope that by leaving my unique tread-mark
I gave you a 5 for this piece because I saw no errors and don't know of anything you need to make it better.
This is a very touching poem. As I read it, my heart went out to you.
Have you thought about writing a short story about your brother? You could share some of your memories with us, tell about his illness and the surgery, and how you adjusted to the outcome. I know this might be painful for you, but it would probably help others who might be going through the same thing. This is just an idea. If not now, maybe later?
Wow! This is amazing. It seems to poorest of folks are usually the most hospitable.
You did a good job with this. It would look more attractive and be easier to read if you maybe broke it down into verses: 4 lines per verse. I counted them and it would be perfect.
I feel that writing about things like this that happen to us in our lives is wonderful therapy.
I do think it would read better in regular letter form than as poetry. Have you thought about writing a short story about your losses and your blessings(the babies you were able to have)? It would probably be a comfort to someone else who has gone through the same experience.
Keep up the good work and write on!
Grandma Penny
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Maybe you could choose a couple darker colors to make it easier on the eyes.
I was married to a Walton for nearly 16 years, but death separated us. We had three children. When the last one was born, that movie Walton's Mountain was popular. We named our baby Jonathan, but the nurses nicknamed him John Boy. We still call him that.