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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Review of Thoughts on Memories

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A lot of great images. Don't leave them like that. Take one or two of these delightful objests and tie them into a story. I sense that there are many stories there just waiting to leap out.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
No real plot jus t descriptions of some some great setting. The man who narrates and his grandfather. You miss you grandfather. Make us miss him too. Write a story where he is the main character and place him in this delightful setting.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Don't stop now. Get at it. We need you to write that story that only you can write.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep Writing and enjoy your anniversary..


dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review of Having pirates for lunch

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Good little scenario about space pirate and the dngers that even they face. I liked the twist at he end.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The crew of the space freighter and the five monster pirates and the trap set for them by the crew of the freighter..

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your anniversary. .


dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of Beautiful Stranger

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting poem where the writer is calling out to a stranger he/she has yet to meet. It is a call for love and companionship.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more poetyr of this quality.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary..


dblameck
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Review of Family Matters  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Review of Family Matters

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I enjoyed this story. There is a lot of emotion and love that is revealed in the sub plots of this short story. there are so quite a bit of good descriptions in the narrative.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

You have captured some great characters and placed them in a carefully chosen setting as you weave your plot through the lives and loves of these characters. There is much compassion and love that pushes the charcters to react to one another.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more stories of this quality abd precision.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your anniversary.


dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Review of The Nut That Cracked the Universe

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A fictional story about the creation of the earth. It seems to be well written except for a few spelling mistakes.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Two Gods who doing thier things to create the earth,

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
In your firest line it should be the Eath eas barren and scarred.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Review of Summery, Gray-Mountainous and Green

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Not poety as I understand it. It seems to be entries is a diary or journal. It is disjointed and not always in good sentence structure. I found no pleasure in reading it.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

There does not seem to a recognizable plot or characters.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep working on your writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your anniversary.



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Review of The Moon Land  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Review of The Moon Land

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A fantasy story where a lot of things don't quite make sense.When you wrote that they were going to Cyprus I thought you meant the island in the Mediterraean.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I could not find a viable plot in this story. The two girls Amy and mia and this Queen and King of Moon Lane.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your annversary.


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Review of A Joy For All  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Review of A Joy for All

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A trip to disney land for a young girl. She is impatient to get there but once she is in she enjoys herself immensely.


PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Alice and her mother and their experince at the disney land park. The child is impatient but once inside the park enjoys all the facilities,.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write More.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your anniversary.


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Review of The Question  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of The Question

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short piece that seems to be a cross between poetry and short narrative. The layout makes it a little difficult to follow. There is a good amount of strong expression in this piece.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A woman and the man she loves who for some reason is being taken away from her. More detail is needed.

(c:green}SUGGESTIONS/EDITS/c}
Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary..


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of Sad Tears and Silence

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Whoever this is directed towards is getting the full brunt of anger from the author. The poem is quite direct in it's meaning and tone. It is a good poem and well written,

(c:green}SUGGESTIONS/EDITS
Increase the size of the font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep Writing and enjoy your anniversary.


dblameck
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Review of The Weary Mother  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Review of The Weary Mother

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Good story that is told in such a short amount of words. I am sure all mothers have shared thid moment of panic.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Too short for much of a plot but what is here is good.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Longer stories plase.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of The Importance of Leaving Traces

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your essay is calling for people to live their lives so that others notice. I enjoyed the variations of sentence and your dropping into questions well done.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
No real charcaters other than all of us.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep up the good work. I enjoy your writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of The Diner  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of The Diner

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A story with some interesting ideas. While not a love story it has the potenial. Great characterizations. i almost feel I know these two people.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Great descriptions and you pick up many of the things that others miss

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more. This is good stuff.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

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Review of Midnight Ravens  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Review of Midnight Ravens

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This type of poetry is interesting but not the type I would read because I find it very difficult to understand the symbolism which I presume fills all the underlining questions that it brings to my mind.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
I found it very hard to read aloud which is my indicator of what I feel good poetry is.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Silent Night  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Review of Silent Night

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I thought it was a murder story only to find it was another vampire story. The ending is confusing. I know this is a prologue but a little more clear direction would be beneficial to me as the reader.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
This is just the portion of a larger plot that is yet to be revealed.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write the rest of the story. I note you have written the first chapter.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
have a happy Anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of You Need a Woman!  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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Review of You need a woman

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A funny story if it weren't that poor Rachel was trying so hard to make a good impression. It is almost a farce of attemps.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
By the end of the story I feel like I know Rachel and Jack. your characterization is well done.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Horsewriting  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of Horsewriting

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Good story. There are some real great sections in this small story. I would like to read more of this type of story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Paddy and the horses. Two significantly different things and I enjoyed your portrayal of each.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more. Looking forward to reading.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

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Review of Kismet  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review of Kismet

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A good story of what the future might hold. I enjoyed the little "moo" twist at ehr end.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Survivors of a world holocust and their experience returning to the world from the saftey of their shelter.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Well written. You need to expand this piece.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing.


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Review of The Review Game  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of The Review Game

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Great story and those of us with friends or sigificant other who write are faced with this predictament. Trying to be helpful and yet not hurt the person you care for. Yet in this case the hunted has set a trap. It is well sprung in the end. I found myself with a smile on my face.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Mrs. Hendrick (we never get her first name) and her husband Mitch. They are not described but I feel like i know them. It is a great plot and every writer should read this story if they ever plan to review or be reviewed.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Give us more stories like this one.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing and have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Red Dragon  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of Red Dragon

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I don't know a lot about poetry. I just like to read it aloud and see what I enjoy. This poem I enjoyed. Not just because of the kyrical quality of the metre but also because simple story that it told so well.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Most poems do not have plot and characters. This does. Firstly we have the young boy in the role of brave knight. Then we have the red rose playing the dragon. a good performance. but I must not miss the cameo performance of the Queen mother.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing. This is good.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of Sunshine and Flowers

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A first hand account of a storm in the sunny state of Florida. Good descriptions of the increasing severity of the storm. A short storm and no great damage.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
One character sitting watching the storm gives a first hand account.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.


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Review of Guilty!  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Review of Guilty

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Great little story that is just perfect. We don't know who he murdered but i suspect it was his wife. We never even find out what the incident with the pen was about. This is good writing.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
One character and the plot is just what the character is telling us. A short concise story that rates a near perfect score.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep Writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Wolf  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review of Wolf

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
What seemed to a simple family story in the beginning turna our tb be a horror story in the final outcome. a costume that actually eats the person who puts it on. It was a much better story than the previous rating it was given.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Characters are realisitic and the plot has taken some forethought. Well done.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
You need to write more. We need you writing here.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Havea happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of How to Catch a Sunbeam

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A very short poem with a nice lyrical quality to it.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS
:Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Butterfly  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of Butterfly

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A poem where repressed love is compared to a buterfly in its cocoon. Very lyrical and other than the first stanza there is rhyming on each and every couplet.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
You should take the opportunity to write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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