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Review of Hey,  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Review of Hey

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
a lot of questions. Some best left unanswered or best answered with a kiss and a hug.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary,

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

Review of Templars Revenge

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Revenge is not a term I would associate with those who state that they follow Christ. I know some of the turbulent history of The Templar Knights and the Catholic Church. I guess this story follows in that ike. The story is well written.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Seems to have a good plot and the spectators are the identified characters are realistic.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
I saw no grammatical or spelling errors.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing.

dblameck
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1153
Review of Make A Sound  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review of Make a Sound
First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
In other words. Let's hear from you. A good poem to prompt the silent majority to step up and let their voices be heard.

PLOT & LYRICS:
A much needed boost to get people involved.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Good poem It might even cause some action.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing.

dblameck
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1154
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Review of the Anniversary Gift

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. I haven't read anything of yours lately and I have always enjoyed your erotic stories. I saw your name in the nano listing so I just thought I'd have a peek in your portfolio and see if there something to read and review.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short and concise stry that has that great twist at the end. I enjoyed reading this story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Howard and Etta are characters that can be etched on the screen. I almost feel like I know them in these few simple paragraphs.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
I know you are busy but I hope you continue to grace us with your stories. And just for you

dblameck
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1155
Review of A small sad tale  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of A Small Sad Tale

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
The poem holds promise. A promise that is as yet to revealed.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more. This has some character but needs to be drawn out more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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1156
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of Daddy why do you Hurt me so

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A plea for a father to stop doing the things that is destroying his family

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A poem about the damage a father can do to a young family.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
A good poem that I enjoyed reading.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary

dblameck
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1157
Review of When I'm Thirsty  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Review of when I'm thirsty

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A story told from the aspect of the wild european rabbit. Pretty good and very descriptive.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
The rabbit and its quest for water.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Love Found a Way  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Love Found a Way

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I would like to write a good review of this story. I cannot. I spent most of my time weeping as I read this story again and again. so without going back to lock at structure and development I will share a few thoughts. I have served in several theatres as a peacekeeper standing between two waring groups. The men and women I served with were brave but their bravery is nothing compared to the bravery of Stephen.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A family supporting a dieing young man.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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1159
Review of Blindfolded  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of Blindfolded

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Interesting concept. What if you pick the wrong guy

LYRICAL:
The poem flow well and has good balance. I enjoyed reading it aloud.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep Writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Coral dreams  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of
First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A good story and a very descriptive passage on the mother. Did you write the rest of the story? If not there is still time.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Two good characters. It would be a shame to waste them.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
minuets - minutes

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing and have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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1161
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Review of Anger can lead to Sudden Death

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
While the information you are sharing is very correct and critical you need to work on your presentation of the material. Plural words like researches should more correctly be research. Work on your sentence structure. The best way to do this is for you to read your essay aloud. The grammatical errors will become apparent.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Essay style so no characters just a premise which is well researched.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
An important idea and statement that you are making should also have the support of good writing. Rework it. Repost it and help us to curb our anger for our own mental and physical health.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Review of Black White and Red

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A traumatic experience has been burned of the mind of the main character. She has witnessed her father's murder. she is trying to shut the memory out.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A good plot and the story is well told. Andie the only character is a very positive character,

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more things of thie quality.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of Life and Death in the Sand

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
More that a poem, this is a vision of life in general. It is very deep thinking. It sparks many other venues or thoughts to write about.

LYRICAL:
Reflective rather that lyrical.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing. This was interesting.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Ice cream night  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

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Review of Ice Cream Night

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A story that I suppose many mothers and fathers can relate to. We had two and that was enough. How many times had I said never again only to find later that these kids had really become nice people. I enjoyed your story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A family of five with three daughters go for ice cream and do battle.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing..

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of The Paperboy  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Review of The Paperboy

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Just open the box. Good story and we will never know what was in the box.. Good comical suspense.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
the man and his paperboy. Having been a paperboy eons ago I know we get blamed for lots of things.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
said he'd wait with me until his mother game. So we waited. should be came

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing and have a happy anniversary.


dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review of Seasons Come and Seasons Go

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Having to deal with a snow storm which flashes through on a summer day..

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Something that doesn't happen that often but it seems to disturb the main character here.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
There is almost too mucg description in this story as it distracts from reading it.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep writing.


dblameck
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Review of The boat  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of The Boat

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Interesting that you tell the story from the viewpoint of the boat. I actually enjoyed the story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Al those who sailed in her became special for the boat. I could never call a boat a he. Well told story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Shadow Detective  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Review of Shadow Detective

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Possible scary something in the house. she searches and never finds anything but the fear is still there.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Just our heroine and the unknown. Every paragraph brings us closer to something. we don't know what but we can feel it.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more. There were no grammatical or spelling errors in this story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
I enjoyed this story.

dblameck
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Review of So Far Gone  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Review of So Far Gone


First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Working through the doctors advice and fighting to lose weight. in order to maintain our health. The story does seem to jump about and not have a firm resolution.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
There does not seem to be a plot rather just a list of events. There needs to be more planning before writing.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
None. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Keep Writing.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of Silent night the the tree that wasn't

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I don't know if it was a true story of not. It brought both tears and chuckles from me. It is a well writen story and I am glad I chose it from your portfolio.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Will the real Santa Claus please stand up. delightful representation. Good strong character definition.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more stories of this quality.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Review of A Tea Party with God

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Good thesis. i am not sure I agree with the final thots but I agree God has many words spoken in many ways. The problem is don't take the time to listen.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Having that heart to heart chat with God. Something we all need to do.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Hope you enjoyed your anniversary

dblameck
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Review of Mommy, I'm Home  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Review of Mommy I'm Home

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Creepy, disturbing, I read it and am almost sorry I did. But for all that it is well written.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
a mother and her young daugther who has been dead for two months. The child returns from hell to kill her mother.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Take two asprin and hope that these kinds of thoughts never fill your head again.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
I hope you enjoyed your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

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Review of In my Memory

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This is a hard piece for me to read and review because it brought memories to my mind and tears to my eyes. I had the opportunity to work as a chaplin for the Salvation Army at the site in November of 2001. My job was to support the workers and firemen who were still recovering parts of people and their possessions from the wreckage. I saw many personal item like the briefcase you mentioned carefully recovered.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
You have made a great memory. It is well written and I almost feel that I knew this young lady without ever knowing her name.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Continue to write pieces of this quality.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
God bless and have a happy anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Brainstormers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of a Journey in the Wood

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Great poem that is just filled with wonderful images. Each stanza could be developed into a longer poem. So many thought in such a short piece. I enjoyed it,

LYRICAL:
In order for me to grasp the significance of a poem I have to read it aloud (I believe poetry is meant to be read aloud). Your poem has an almost mystic quality that causes the reader, speaker to be like a guidepost to beauty.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Enjoy your anniversary!

dblameck
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Review of Illicit Love  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of Illicit Love

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your right it is that bad. Overdoing the metaphors and using the same descriptive words again and again.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
I realize it is meant to be bad but does this not set a tone for our writing?

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
???

FINAL THOUGHTS:
Have a good Anniversary.

dblameck
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