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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Review of What do you write

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

It is a simple question but the results did show what writers prefer to use as their medium..


FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep thinking, writing and being a part of WDC..Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of The Business of Space

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Interesting concept behind this story but you fail to mention how materials both raw and finished would get to these factories in space. Also many heavy industries need a large labour force. But this is a story aimed at making us think. Well done for that.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The investor and the man making the pitch. The two factors in most economic ideas. Spacing would help. I think in any negotiation of this kind you would find figures and dollars would be more prominent.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

There are no carbon copies on legal documents any longer. You sign multiple copies. A copy for each party involved. You might user a larger font for better readability.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

A good effort. Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of Emergency Call Revised

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting take on the goldilcoks and three bears story. While it didn't cause me to laugh it did cause the corners of my mouth to raise into a semblance of a smile. It is well thought out and the detail was just enough.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Only two characters. The mother bear who is reporting the breakin and the 911 dispatcher who receives the call. You could have given a little more detail to the manner of the voices and possibily even given some actions at least for the bear.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I think more could be done with this story yet. Why not try it again.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Uncle Jim's Magic  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of Uncle Jim's Magic

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A heart throb of a tale that is very well written. You delve into the memories of a boy who experienced a family member, in this case an uncle who made a positive influence on his early life particularly in tough financial times.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Uncle Jim is the focus of the story and the others are just opening in which to view the main character. The direction causes Uncle Jim to have the magic of living in the eyes of a child ten. When Uncle Jim dies the is now gone.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I didn't see any flaws or things to improve.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary

dblameck
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Review of GAMBLING  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


Review of Gambling

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Addiction in all it's types is life destroying. Gambling while becoming more and more common is however causing extreme harm for people and out economies. I believe we should limit gambling rather than creating more ways to gamble.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A story from a person that knows the damage that gambling can do to a life.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font and better spacing to make your essay more readable.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Don't Gamble. Keep writing. Keep attending meetings.

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of Disconnected fromYou

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Being apart is never a happy thing and when it happens more and more it becomes even more stressful. Your poem shares the pain that comes with that disconnection. I enjoyed it.

RHYTHM & FLOW:

There is not a regular rhythm or rhyming scheme but it has a distinctive tone when it is read aloud.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Extend your story and share more of the pain you write about.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review of Navy  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I have read about the scandals that have rocked the Royal Australian Navy in the recent past. I understand your concerns. I was a senior NCO in the Canadian Navy when Canada started moving female personnel to positions on ships..

We also had problems. There were a lot of people who were opposed to this. There were also a culture of macho men who thought this would be like a personal harem. An area that we were surprised with was the wives of Canadian sailors who were opposed to this.

We started with posting female sailors to small coastal vessels which did not stay out overnight and therefore limited the amount of time for possible problems.Using reserve personnel who were more used to working in situations with the other sex made a good example for the regular force. Our first ships that were male/female crewed were all reserve personnel. As regular force male sailors began working with female sailors they found them equals in their ability to do the job.

Did we have problems? Yes we did. However there was a strong leadership which would not allow anything going forward. I was assigned as a sexual harassment counsellor at that time. My mandate from the Admiralty was very clear to be fair and work out the problems or get rid of the personnel causing them..


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)


Review of All of You Abandoned Me

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is a rant. The dictionary says "to talk loudly and in a way that shows anger : to complain in a way that is unreasonable." I don't know if this rant is unreasonable but it seems that the woman that is expressing this does seem to raise some valid arguments. Sentences need to be broken into complete thoughts.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

There is one character a 32 year old woman but she makes many references to her family. It does get confusing and hard to figure out her complaints.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Increase the size of the font used. Work on creating better spacing to lay the arguments forward so they can be read. your sentences seem to run on. I know that is a part of how a rant is expressed but in this case it affects readability.at one point you end a sentence with both an exclamation and question mark.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

There is power in your writing. Please continue.

dblameck
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Review of Loaded On Wrong  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of Loaded on Wrong

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Graphic expression of a man wishing to commit suicide by blowing his head off. He places a loaded pistol under his chin and expresses his thoughts about squeezing the trigger. A very disturbing poem. I found it very complete in the nature of the feelings the person was expressing.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A man (I think it is a man because a gun is usually a man's way while women choose drugs or poison), contemplating suicide, A lonely task and a very lonely man.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

You wrote."If not by my own hand Than by a dozen others" I wondered if the word should be then.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I don't have to encourage you to keep writing. But do so because people do read your poems.

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Review of Floridian Evil  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Isn't it too bad that all those tourists come flooding into the state and bring all those hard earned dollars which they spend on so many things. I note from your second last line you are aware of that and how it affects things. If it weren't for them I think Florida would be left to mosquitos and alligators.

However I did like the effort you made with the poem.


Keep up the good work and keep us thinking.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Review of Who Needs Punctuation

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Wow, I am impressed. I am forever fighting with people who are debating if a colon or a semi-colon is appropriate. A comma after this of is not necessary. Any review on WDC has someone telling another writer that they missed a comma or some other reference to punctuation. This is like freeing the slaves.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Share this with more people. Perhaps we could champion a punctuation revolt. I didn't see any missed commas in your essay.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

By all means make it easier as long as it is still readable.

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Review of The Tube  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)


Review of The Tube

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A woman travelling on the Underground notices a young man staring a her There is no one else in the coach. He approaches her and pulls out his cock. There is then a very detailed blowjob.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This is a he/she story (no names). The description of ht characters is fairly well done and does produce a good visualization. The story end when a a guard yells "ticket please" When the man who had just had a great blow job reached for his wallet he finds it is gone and the girl is now on the platform with his money and credit cards.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I don't have any sugestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep up the good work and write and post more.

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Review of Neigh  
Review by dblameck (David)
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)


Review of Neigh


First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I had a little trouble following what exactly was going on in this story. I am familiar with pony girls and pony boys but I found it hard to decipher if this is what you were suggesting.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I think Bristol is a pony boy. Angus is an actual horse and the unnamed girl is wanting to train the pony boy.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Spacing would help and organizing thoughts and not leaving things to be guessed and not known directly.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing. Let's hear more.

dblameck
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Review of Making the Call  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


Review of Making the Call

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story where a police officer has to apprehend a criminal with a hostage from within a trailer. It is a good story and for flash fiction it is done well,

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Patrol Robin Calia is putting herself in risk to rescue a woman who has been beaten.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Always use a larger font to make the stories easier to read.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing. We at WDC want to read more of your stories.

dblameck
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Review of The mystery  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

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Review of The Mystery

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Ever wish to something else. See what happens when a small boy makes that wish. Good story and I found it very entertaining.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The woman finds a pile of child's clothes torn apart near an abandoned bike and fears the worst and calls police. The answer is the wish.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Since you only had 300 words I cauldn't ask for anything else.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for writing this. Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review of Halifax Explosion  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Review of Halifax Explosion

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Your story about what may have happened when SS Mont Blanc and SS Imo collided in the narrows of Halifax Harbour during the first World War. The Mont blanc was entering the harbour from New York. The disaster where over 2000 people were killed was the largest loss of life from a man made explosive materials up until that time. Your story is well done piece of fiction set against a real incident.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jamie his mother and his friend Pauly are the only characters in the story and are just a human element for the disaster. They are well presented and make the story interesting.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I am unsure how warmth goes with a maritime day. Perhaps you meant a winter maratime day.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


Review of Miss McCaffery - Part One

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good background story that sets up the teacher student affair. The situation where the teacher is the developing an opportunity to seduce her student is well planned.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The character are adequately defined, This is an area that could have used a little more work.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I'll have to see where part two goes before I make any rash statements but I feel there is a good chance this will be a good story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I will move to part two.

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

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Review of The Supermarket Stalker

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I enjoyed your story not only because of the humour in it but also because of the truth in it. I am one of those retired guys who need to shop for food. No one else to do it for me. I fit my shopping in during opening in my volunteer work and cards with friends. This means it could be a morning or an afternoon. At that time of day it is generally me and women shopping. Very few men. There is invariably times when I follow the same woman down aisle after aisle. It makes me smile now thinking that perhaps one of them sees me as a stalker.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Well told and yes I guess all women like to be thought of as beint 'hot'.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more is all that I have to offer.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck
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Review of Reflection  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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a woman running for her life is trying to escape something dire. We are not really advised what it is other that the pursuer is male. She attempts to find escape thru a boor only to be in a carnival fun which is filled with mirrors. Good story. Please enjoy your anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of What Ever Happened to Kindness

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I read your story with a little smile. You see I don't see that much of a problem here. I live in Canada and even in the busy city there seems to be tendancy to smile at each other and say thank you for the simple that happen throughout the day, However you do make a very valid point. That feeling and action does begin at home.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The character are us and the people around us. They will react depending on how we act. You want your neighbours to treat you with kindness; then be kind to them. You want the people you work with to care for one another? Then you must start the action by caring for them. We live in this world together.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

The real aspect is get people to see those around them as family. In the military I learned everyone was important to keeping me alive just as I was important to keep them alive.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review of A deaths dream  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Review of A Deaths Dream

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I felt like I was in a James Bond story when I started reading the story. Perhaps that was the type of impression you were going for . The story feels like it is pulled out of a longer or larger work. That always makes the loose ends hard to follow.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The man in the gray bowler hat is well defined and I found him quite interesting. The fact that we only allowed a portion of the plot made the story interesting but limited its appeal.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Complete the story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review of Blind Date  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)

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Review of Blind Date

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good story which seems sto have just a little too much matching up of the characters. This becomes what the whold story is about. If this story line was carried forward then it would not be so noticable.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

While you seemed to be concentrating on the height of the characters it really did not help the story. Hair colour and what they were dressed in might also help. Obviously you used up your allotment of words and had not yet begun to tell the story. Make it a longer story or cut out a lot of the extra words.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font. It will make the story more readable. The story is cut off at the last line. For flash fiction plan your words and use them sparingly.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep up the good work and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Review of Silver in the Moonlight

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An unusual staory which should be in the horror genre.It is well written and I think you should explore building on to creat something more substantial.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Two unnamed characters. e stalks and entices her and eventually lures her to his room, his bed where he ties her down and cuts her up with a knife. She is just background.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Spacing and font both could be better used. Present the story well and you will get more readers.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Kepp writing and enjoy your anniversary.


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Review of Writer's Lament  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of Writer's Lament
First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I know you are trying to portray a person with writer's cramp. Being a person for who writer's cramp is very different I cannot identify with your character, I find it is better to write the wrong word and wait forever for a specific word. While he can go for weeks looking for one word i would fill a binder or file with words and sort them out later.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Great detail is desccribing the person and the setting. it is well done.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

liter should be litter Other than that I saw no distinctive errors.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

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Review by dblameck (David)
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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[size:3.5}Review of Much Ado About Something or Other

I found it to be an interesting story but I agree with you. The story is much too involved for a 1000 word limit. You need to limit the details and decide which story you really want to tell.

You seem to be good with details since this story is filled with little aspects that add new thoughts. So you have to choose either to miniminize your story or get out there and write a4000 word short story.

Whatever you choose it needs to be given birth from this story, So good luck. Keep writing and enjoy your anniversary.

dblameck


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