Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique rhyming scheme with the 1st 2 stanzas and none for the last one. This works well for this poem and gives it a nice flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:A love poem in dream form.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Structure looks good I can see no problem with the grammar or mechanics .
Gevic, thanks for sharing this delightful love poem, it is a good read. I sure did enjoy it.
Hi dogpack:saving 4 premium:DWG! After reading "Heaven And Hell" , I offer you these comments:
My impressions of: "Heaven And Hell" by dogpack:saving 4 premium:DWG
Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this inspirational story .
Style: personal spiritual view.
Genres, are 3 listed? Inspirational, Educational, Personal
My two cents: dogpack, thank you for sharing this well written and informative testament. I have enjoyed reading it and in agreement with pretty much everything you said.
My favorite line:---God does not want puppets therefore we have bee given the gift of free will.---
A strong inspirational work. Well chosen words that give this work a powerful flow.
Structured easy for the reader? a well constructed article however a little more line spacing would help us readers with weak eyes.
Any suggestions?Consider a stronger opening to better ground the readers attention . Perhaps double spacing with the extra line between some of the longer paragraphs would make it easier to read and less intimidating for a potential reader or browser.
Does the title describe the story? A good title however does not really describe this chapter.
What is the style? History, folklore.
Are there 3 genre listings? Folklore, Supernatural, History
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. Could be stronger to grab the readers attention.
Is the structure good for the reader? A nicely laid out story. It would be easier and less intimidating for the reader if it had line spacing.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:CBH thank you for sharing this informative story. I have enjoyed hearing some history from a different country therefore all new for me.
A well written story, very informative on some Moroccan history.
In school most of us learn mostly history from our country and know little about the rest of the world's history, therefore this is all new to me and I really enjoyed it.
Well-worded story, I especially like the way that you did the ending.
If I had to make a suggestion:Consider line spacing or even double spacing to make it easier on us older readers, who's eyes are getting weaker. Perhaps break the long paragraphs down into shorter ones this looks less intimidating to a browser or potential reader.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Does the title describe the story? A good title that somewhat describes the contents of the story.
What is the style? biographical true story.
Are there 3 genre listings? Other, Biographical, Activity
Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however could be stronger to grab the reader's attention.
Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure. More linespacing would make it a bit easier for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Nicely written and very informative article.
I have heard of the death that ended her career. This is the first account of the aerobics story that I have heard.
Captbike, thank you for this informative article. I enjoyed this knowledge.
If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening to better grab the readers attention. A bit of line-spacing would make it easier and more appealing to a reader.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Hi Anna I came across this article while random reviewing. I'm gonna say I'm pretty much in complete agreement with everything you said.
Politics indeed is a sore subject that personally I try to just stay away from because everybody has their own view and there's no changing it that I can do. Well that's my mind set, it might be wrong but indeed it is a sore subject.
It seems that you can take any good person with good intentions elect them to office and in no time flat there a politician and forget all that brought them to office.
In this well written article you hit many good points that are absolutely true.
Anna, thank you for Sharing this strong article it has got my mind to spinning.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Great work, this collection of poetry is awesome.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: my name , it is nobody .... I like this poem the best I think.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: naturally no problems at all with the mechanics . JCosmos, thank you for sharing this strong work of poetry this Reader has thoroughly enjoyed it .
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A short para normal story about a dark mysterious place, a nursery in an abandoned old farmhouse.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: Well described, this story paints a picture for me of a baby bed in a haunted room filled with evil spirits. In a few words this short story says a whole lot.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Well done, this unique story sets its own boundaries.
Elisibeth thank you for sharing this powerful story. It has got my head to spinning.
Write On!
Does the title describe the story? A good title for this work.
What is the style? personal philoposhy
Are there 3 genre listings? Spiritual, Self Help, Adult
Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening line does get my attention.
Is the structure good for the reader?The structure would be easier for the reader if it was double spaced and maybe a extra line at the end long paragraphs.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Gman, thanks for sharing this deep philosophy I have found it a joy to read.
In life we all get fed up at different times, I feel that most people can relate to your words I know I can.
This is a strong and deep work. Well laid out and well worded.
If I had to make a suggestion:Consider line spacing and perhaps double space, this will make it easier for the reader.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Hi happy to write, I came across this beautiful poem while random reviewing. Thank you for sharing this work this reader has thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
My impressions of the poem:"I am Beautiful!" By Happy to write.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: This unique poem is very strong the emotion can be felt while reading it.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: "I am beautiful because" A great idea for this strong work.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: This poem moves in a nice timely fashion giving it a unique flow.
It is funny how our weaknesses do make us stronger.
Well-worded with a realistic learning tone. Humans learn from trial and error, always have all through history.
Does the title describe the story? A good title for this adventure story.
What is the style? mythological fantasy drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Political
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening line however it could grab my attention better.
Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure however a little more lines-spacing would help the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:KC thank you for Sharing this is awesome adventure tale this reader has enjoyed it.
Well written story with strong character and good dialogue.
Good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the scene.
Seems like a good introduction for an on going adventure book.
If I had to make a suggestion: Consider experimenting with a stronger opening line and more of a cliffhanger ending to make the reader want to turn the page. Double spacing with an extra line break between some longer paragraphs would make it easier for the reader and more appealing for the browser.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Does the title describe the story? A good title for this work.
What is the style? Philosophic personal drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Nature, Experience, Philosophy
Does the opening line grab my attention?A nice opening line.
Is the structure good for the Reader?A nice structure. This makes it easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Ameliorating, Thank you for sharing this unique celestial story. This reader has enjoyed it.
This well-written story reads much like a free verse poem. From this story a nice poem could be written.
A lot of good philosophy and descriptions here however it could confuse most of today's readers with their short attention span. They don't like going back to reread to see if they missed anything.
I went back and reread and to me it's still reads more like free verse poetry. I like poetry but was expecting a story. I know from personal experience the river does inspire creativity.
If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening that's not quite as wordy. A good proofread and edit never hurts. Personally I feel this story could be shortened without losing any of the message. It seems to crowded with descriptions. That is just one opinion.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
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