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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Confessions of Calus" Open in new Window. by kc

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this adventure story.

What is the style? mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Political

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening line however it could grab my attention better.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure however a little more lines-spacing would help the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:KC thank you for Sharing this is awesome adventure tale this reader has enjoyed it.

Well written story with strong character and good dialogue.

Good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the scene.

Seems like a good introduction for an on going adventure book.


If I had to make a suggestion: Consider experimenting with a stronger opening line and more of a cliffhanger ending to make the reader want to turn the page. Double spacing with an extra line break between some longer paragraphs would make it easier for the reader and more appealing for the browser.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review of The Bank of Ganga  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "The Bank of Ganga" Open in new Window. by Ameliorating

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this work.

What is the style? Philosophic personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Nature, Experience, Philosophy

Does the opening line grab my attention?A nice opening line.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A nice structure. This makes it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Ameliorating, Thank you for sharing this unique celestial story. This reader has enjoyed it.

This well-written story reads much like a free verse poem. From this story a nice poem could be written.

A lot of good philosophy and descriptions here however it could confuse most of today's readers with their short attention span. They don't like going back to reread to see if they missed anything.

I went back and reread and to me it's still reads more like free verse poetry. I like poetry but was expecting a story. I know from personal experience the river does inspire creativity.


If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening that's not quite as wordy. A good proofread and edit never hurts. Personally I feel this story could be shortened without losing any of the message. It seems to crowded with descriptions. That is just one opinion.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "Pan-G Britain Cups And Domestic Football" Open in new Window. by Wrexgor

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this article.

What is the style? Sports opinion article.

Are there 3 genre listings? Sports, Other: By listing three genres your work will be found by more people who are looking for that genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening line.

Is the structure good for the Reader?The structure would be easier to read with line spacing.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Wrexgor, I came across this article while random reviewing. Thank you for sharing it it is a good read.

A well written article and I would agree with most all of it.

If I had to make a suggestion: consider double spacing and maybe making the font bigger. This will make it easier for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi elisabeth, I came across this artistic poem while random reviewing.
I hope you find my impressions helpful.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:"I want to be loved by an artist" Open in new Window. by elisabeth.

A nice artistic flow from this free verse poem.
Well structured, this helps the reader get into the poem.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:" the fingers that entwine perfectly with their own." this is my favorite line.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Well-worded giving this work that unique artistic flow.

Elisabeth, thank you so much for sharing this beautiful poem it has been a joy to read.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
My impressions of the poem:"Opherin--a ballad" Open in new Window. by Ryyssa

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well-worded with a nice unique rhyming pattern. Nicely constructed with a musical tone.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A mythological theme that works great in this poem.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Nicely constructed especially considering 80 lines, well done.

Rhyssa, thanks for sharing this entertaining poem, it has been a joy to read.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of the poem:"Tell Me About Your Heart, Please." Open in new Window. by p.b.sandwixh

Clarity: A good title for this poem.
Style: Relationship poetry.

My 2 cents is only one opinion: p.b. sandwixh, thank you for sharing this unique poem. I have enjoyed reading it.

Well-written poem that is both emotional and humorous,
those two are hard to combine. Well done.


Write on! Keep on writing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "The Boogiecat!" Open in new Window. by My Sox Are Green Don't pinch

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this story.

What is the style? fantasy pet folklore

Are there 3 genre listings? Pets, Supernatural, Folklore

Does the opening line grab my attention? The title does grab my attention pretty good.

Is the structure good for the Reader? A fair structure for this short story.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: My Socks are Green Don't pinch, thank you for sharing this unique fantasy tale, this reader has enjoyed it.

I don't want to see the wrath of the boogiecat.
A unique idea for this tale.

Never bark at a cat without wagging your tail first, good advice.

If I had to make a suggestion: Even though this is a short work, consider breaking it up into shorter paragraphs to make it easier for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem: "Springtime Blizzard Memories " Open in new Window. by JCosmos

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Nicely written poem. A good use of the bold words. It seems like I read another of your poems about Sam Adams.

JCosmos, thank you for sharing this unique work, it has been a joy to read it. Thank you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This poem lets me picture Sam Adams meeting his wife. Well done.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Nicely done as always.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem: "Of Pirates & Villains, Mothers & Sons" Open in new Window. by elizjohn

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:elizjohn, this is a beautiful poem with a great rhyming scheme.
Thank you for sharing this unique and original work of art. This reader has enjoyed reading it. Thank you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Jack the Knife is a strong character. An excellent job, writing a poem this size that makes since with the words flowing together so well. I know it is no easy task. You have an artistic voice.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Nice layout and structure for this unique work of art .

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
My impressions of the poem: "Easter/Spring Sonnet" Open in new Window. by D.B.


Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:D. B. Thank you for Sharon this artistic work I have enjoyed reading it, thank you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A unique rhyming scheme for this beautiful poem. Well-worded and well-written giving a unique flow to this poem.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Nicely structured and easy for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem:"Manna" Open in new Window. by Dave.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Dave, Thank you for sharing this strong poem, I have enjoyed reading it. It has given me some idea's.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Nice job for this sapphic verse poem. The poem reminds me of spring .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A beautifully structured work with a unique flow

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impresions of the poem:"Sunshine On The Vernal Equinox" Open in new Window. by Prosperous Snow Valentine.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nice form with the mirror that lets a few words say a lot. Short and to the point just the way today's readers like things .

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The equinoxes are signs of the changing seasons usually coming when we are ready for change .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A nicely structured poem that really has a good flow, well done .

Prosperous Snow Valentine, thank you so much for sharing this unique and strong poem, I enjoyed reading it, thank you

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem: "wearing green for St Patrick's Day" Open in new Window. by JCosmos

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well worded St Patricks Day green poem. I agree with your poem and I to have some Irish in me and wear green on St Patrick's Day.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:This strong poem makes me see green. :)

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:JCosmos, thank you for sharing this green poem it is a joy to read .

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of:"Let’s Pretend We Won The Lottery " Open in new Window. by Wrexgor

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy how to drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Satire, Entertainment: By listing 3 genres your work will be found by mare readers looking for that genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening that does grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? A good structure for this article.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Wrexgor, thank you for sharing this unique work it was a joy to read. If you win the lottery let's split it. :)

well written with all good ideas. Well done.

If I had to make a suggestion: Nice structure, consider experimenting with a bit more spacing and larger font.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:"Tiny Dancers" Open in new Window. by HuntersMoon

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A great title for this green poem about nature.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Well written. Well worded with a ryming scheme that has a artistic flow. Simple is what makes this poem beautiful.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing this inspirational poem. It has inspired me to want to write. WellDone!

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Random Spontaneous Donation" Open in new Window. by ~MisticMoon~aka SilverMoon

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Biographical.

Are there 3 genre listings? Other: By listing 3 genres your story can be found by more readers who are looking for that style genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:MisticMoon, thanks for sharing this original story. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It does me good to know that there are good people like you in the world.

Well written and told story.

Good dialogue. Well described helping the reader to visualize the scene.

I agree that we should not judge anyone unless we have walked in their shoes.

If I had to make a suggestion: A good proofread and edit never hurts.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "The Tale of Peter Piglet" Open in new Window. by Dave Ryan

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy childrens story.

Are there 3 genre listings? Contest Entry, Children's, Nonsense

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Well structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Dave Ryan, thank you for sharing this entertaining tale. This reader has enjoyed it.

A unique structure for this tale.

Well written and narrated with good, likable characters.

Good descriptions that help the reader to get into the story.


If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Sophomoric Juveniles" Open in new Window. by WinchesterJones

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Other: By listing at least three genres your work will be able to be found by more readers.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does grab this Readers attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A nicely structured work. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Your friend Doug sounds a lot like some old friends I used to have.

A well written and well described story that held this reader's attention well.
That horn blowing lady I've seen before too.
Winchester thank you for sharing this entertaining Tale this reader has enjoyed.


If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Seamus’ Leprechaun" Open in new Window. by Words Whirling 'Round

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy folklore drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Folklore, Young Adult, Comedy

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening however it could be stronger to grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Words Whirling 'Round, thanks for sharing this entertaining story, this reader has enjoyed it.

Well written story with a strong character. I like Seamus.

Good dialog with an Irish accent.

Good descriptions that help the reader visualize the story.

A nice folklore style narrative.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening.

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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Sam Adams and the leprechauns" Open in new Window. by JCosmos

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this story.

What is the style? Fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Travel, Contest Entry

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. It could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:JCosmos, thank you for sharing this entrtaining short story, I have enjoyed reading it.

Well written short story with a bit of humer.

Nice twist for the ending. Well done.

If I had to make a suggestion:A stronger opening line.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

My impressions of: "McCarthy Forever!" Open in new Window. by Kare Enga in Udon Thani

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Family personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Family, Dark, Death

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening, however it could grab my attention better.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Structured nicely making it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:
well written and entertaining story.

A nice job using the footnotes.

What a day to be Irish.

Kare Enga in Udon Thani ,Thank you for sharing this unique story it is a good read.

If I had to make a suggestion:.

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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "15th March" Open in new Window. by Ameliorating

Does the title describe the story? Good title, more of a diary title.

What is the style? Diary entry style.

Are there 3 genre listings? Experience, Adult, Other

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however it could better draw my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? For my read the structure seems a bit out of whack.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Ameliorating A, thank you for sharing this unique work. I came across this while random reviewing. I have enjoyed it.

Well worded and told, does read more like a diary entry but that's OK.

I agree with you sometimes it is hard to figure out what is right.

If I had to make a suggestion: Perhaps double spacing format would help, the structure format is showing up wrong on my computer. The punctuation for periods seems to be in the wrong places not at the end of the sentence like usual.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of FIRE & LIGHT  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "FIRE & LIGHT" Open in new Window. by Mayon57

Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.

What is the style? Sci-fi adventure drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Sci-fi, Horror/Scary, Other

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does catch my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure that makes it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Hey Mayo57, I came across this story while random reviewing. An Awesome story. I bet this took a while. I like the reference to Star Trek.

Well-written and told, holding the readers attention fair.

Great descriptions that make it easy to picture the scene. This holds the readers attention good.

This story maintains a realistic tone. This helps readers relate to the story.

Good dialog with plenty of action. A lot of sci-fi science for this reader to keep up with.

Mayon57 thank you for sharing this entertaining sci-fi adventure. This reader has enjoyed it.
Awesome Work!


If I had to make a suggestion:Consider breaking down into chapters, A good job with the dialog, some could be edited to flow better.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Little Girls in Parks" Open in new Window. by Winchester Jones

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? A realistic drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Contest Entry, Other: By listing all three genres your work will be found by more readers.

Does the opening line grab my attention? The opening could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Hey Winchester, I like this story, well done. Especially considering it was done in 24 hours.

Well-written story with good characters and descriptions. Good dialog with a nice flow.

I like the twist at the end.

Thank you for sharing this entertaining story.

If I had to make a suggestion:None

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)

My impressions of the poem:"I Never liked Wednesdays" Open in new Window. by p.b.sandwixh

Clarity: A good title for this emotional poem.
Style: Romance/Love, Nature, Other

My 2 cents is only one opinion: p.b.sandwixh, I came across this lovely work while random reviewing. A well worded strong and emotional poem. Thank you for sharing it this Reader has enjoyed reading it.

It reads sort of like 2 separate poems the second one being "that baby is what you do for me. "

Well written giving it a nice flow all the way through.
Thank you.


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