Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:elizjohn, this is a beautiful poem with a great rhyming scheme.
Thank you for sharing this unique and original work of art. This reader has enjoyed reading it. Thank you.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:Jack the Knife is a strong character. An excellent job, writing a poem this size that makes since with the words flowing together so well. I know it is no easy task. You have an artistic voice.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Nice layout and structure for this unique work of art .
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nice form with the mirror that lets a few words say a lot. Short and to the point just the way today's readers like things .
Artistic Voice and Imagery:The equinoxes are signs of the changing seasons usually coming when we are ready for change .
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A nicely structured poem that really has a good flow, well done .
Prosperous Snow Valentine, thank you so much for sharing this unique and strong poem, I enjoyed reading it, thank you
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well worded St Patricks Day green poem. I agree with your poem and I to have some Irish in me and wear green on St Patrick's Day.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:This strong poem makes me see green. :)
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:JCosmos, thank you for sharing this green poem it is a joy to read .
Does the title describe the story? A great title for this article.
What is the style? Parenting advise.
Are there 3 genre listings? Parenting, Children's, Family
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does get my attention.
Is the structure good for the Reader?A good structure that makes it easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one Kathleen, thank you for sharing this educational article. I agree with you 100% and have enjoyed reading this article, thank you.
We were raised the same way if you get in trouble at school you get it again at home. Things are so much different now than then. Kids seem way different to.
Well written article with a good structure that is easy for the reader.
I think the title says it best.
If I had to make a suggestion:None.
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Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.
What is the style? Biographical.
Are there 3 genre listings? Other: By listing 3 genres your story can be found by more readers who are looking for that style genre.
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening.
Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured. Easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:MisticMoon, thanks for sharing this original story. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It does me good to know that there are good people like you in the world.
Well written and told story.
Good dialogue. Well described helping the reader to visualize the scene.
I agree that we should not judge anyone unless we have walked in their shoes.
If I had to make a suggestion: A good proofread and edit never hurts.
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Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.
What is the style? Personal drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Other: By listing at least three genres your work will be able to be found by more readers.
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does grab this Readers attention.
Is the structure good for the Reader?A nicely structured work. Easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Your friend Doug sounds a lot like some old friends I used to have.
A well written and well described story that held this reader's attention well.
That horn blowing lady I've seen before too.
Winchester thank you for sharing this entertaining Tale this reader has enjoyed.
If I had to make a suggestion:None
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Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.
What is the style? mythological fantasy drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure: By listing 3 genres your work will be found by more browsers that are looking for stories in that genre.
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that draws my attention fair.
Is the structure good for the Reader? Nicely structured making it very easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Troyizen hi, I came across this interesting tale while random reviewing. Thank you for sharing it it is a good read .
A bird taken a census count seems like a good idea .
Well written and well told making this a entertaining story .
Strong likable characters with good dialogue . This helps the reader to relate to the story .
Good narrative and well described helping the Reader to picture the scene .
A good ending, it could haven't been more a cliffhanger to make the reader want to turn the page.
If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a stronger opening and ending with a bit of a cliffhanger.
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Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story fairly.
What is the style? fantasy friendship drama
Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure
Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening that does grab my attention .
Is the structure good for the Reader?A great structure for this story very easy to read for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion: Troyizen, I came across this story while random reviewing . Thank you for sharing it. This is very entertaining and well written .
Strong characters with the great dialogue . This helps the reader to get into this story .
A nice professional structure that makes it very easy to read . This story maintains a consistent good flow.
Very good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.
Well done, this is an awesome story.
If I had to make a suggestion:None.
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Does the title describe the story? Good title, more of a diary title.
What is the style? Diary entry style.
Are there 3 genre listings? Experience, Adult, Other
Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however it could better draw my attention.
Is the structure good for the Reader? For my read the structure seems a bit out of whack.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Ameliorating A, thank you for sharing this unique work. I came across this while random reviewing. I have enjoyed it.
Well worded and told, does read more like a diary entry but that's OK.
I agree with you sometimes it is hard to figure out what is right.
If I had to make a suggestion: Perhaps double spacing format would help, the structure format is showing up wrong on my computer. The punctuation for periods seems to be in the wrong places not at the end of the sentence like usual.
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Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.
What is the style? Sci-fi adventure drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Sci-fi, Horror/Scary, Other
Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does catch my attention.
Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure that makes it easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Hey Mayo57, I came across this story while random reviewing. An Awesome story. I bet this took a while. I like the reference to Star Trek.
Well-written and told, holding the readers attention fair.
Great descriptions that make it easy to picture the scene. This holds the readers attention good.
This story maintains a realistic tone. This helps readers relate to the story.
Good dialog with plenty of action. A lot of sci-fi science for this reader to keep up with.
Mayon57 thank you for sharing this entertaining sci-fi adventure. This reader has enjoyed it. Awesome Work!
If I had to make a suggestion:Consider breaking down into chapters, A good job with the dialog, some could be edited to flow better.
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Clarity:A good title for this emotional poem. Style:Romance/Love, Nature, Other
My 2 cents is only one opinion: p.b.sandwixh, I came across this lovely work while random reviewing. A well worded strong and emotional poem. Thank you for sharing it this Reader has enjoyed reading it.
It reads sort of like 2 separate poems the second one being "that baby is what you do for me. "
Well written giving it a nice flow all the way through.
Thank you.
Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.
What is the style? Teen fantasy drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Adult, Entertainment, Environment
Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening could better grab my attention.
Is the structure good for the Reader?Needs formatting and breaks. It is intimidating for a possible reader when there is no space between the lines and appears like a long paragraph.
My two cents worth is only one opinion: Phoenix, thanks for sharing this entertaining story I have enjoyed it.
Well-written story-line with good descriptions and good characters.
A unique idea for this story, I can see there is a lot of potential.
If I had to make a suggestion: Consider breaking down the structure into short paragraphs, and double spacing. This will make it more appealing to a reader plus easier to read.. A good proofread and edit to catch any mistakes, typo's and sentences that are too long and rambling.
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