Overall impressions: Well written with a great narrative voice.
Great descriptions that helps the reader to get into the story.
A bit of mystery in the story as to whether Sam was and animal trapped in a human body or there was some kind of spell on the coat. I had to reread the story and still am not sure.
Shika/Noah, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider a little more detail to solve the mysteries that this reader found.
Hi Kristi, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Bitter Tears" by Kristi
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Kristi, thank you for sharing this poem,
and teaching me about constanza. I like new challenges and gonna have to try this.
Well written, a good job with the rhyming pattern, as well as the overall poem.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: Your artistic voice can be heard in this beautiful yet sad poem.
I know it had to be challenging.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can see with the grammar spelling or mechanics.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Nicely written poem in a unique style with repeating lines come together in this poem for a great unique flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:--- pretending just a little bit--- just enough to get the kick of it.---
These catchy lines work well and add to this poems tone.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A great job no problems at all that I see.
Bex. thank you for sharing your work, it is a joy to read.
Write On!
{{c:black}My impressions of:"Mama Bear" by Temperance Stone
Clarity: The title works well for this delightful story.
Style:Personal experience drama.
Genera listing: Animal: by listing all three genres your work will be able to be found by readers looking for that genre. Giving your story more views.
My 2 cents is only One opinion:A well written and well described nature tale.
I like how you describe the mama bears thoughts.
Well-worded and told story with a calm easy going tone.
Do you really see this bear every Sunday?
Bears in the woods usually do not pay much attention to a humans, at least the few times that I have seen one in the mountains.
Temperance Stone, thank you for sharing this delightful story. It has brought back memories for me I have enjoyed reading it.
Does the title describe the story? The title does describe the story well.
What is the style? Legends of pirate treasures, children.
Are there 3 genre listings? Children's, Action/Adventure, Other
Does the opening line grab my attention?Yes the opening line does get my attention.
Is the structure good for the reader?Yes this is a good structure for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:
Detective, thank you for this delightful pirate tale.
Very entertaining, a good read.
Captain Six Pens sounds like an honorable pirate.
Well written story. A nice job with the descriptions they seem very kid friendly. Black skull Island and Red Roost trading Company both are good settings for a pirate adventure.
A great ending, this is probably a true story.
If I had to make a suggestion:None
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Hi Jaeff, I came across this story while random reviewing.
My impressions of:"At Folsom Prison" by Jaeff KBtW of the Free Folk
Clarity:A good title for this review.
Writing style:Reviewing music personal.
Overall impressions:A well written and informative review of At Folsom Prison and Folson California. :)
I enjoyed hearing about Folsom California. I grew up near Mayberry so I can relate to your reference of out-of-towners and how they can get such a kick out of the town.
I never was a big fan when I was younger. Johnny Cash's music as his voice just grows on you through the years. He was a gifted musician with a distinct style.
A great job writing this informative work about Johnny Cash.
Jaeff, thank you for sharing this work I have truly enjoyed reading it.
My favorite line:--- "Every seventeenth year," he said, "on the night of the first full moon after the spring equinox, the Hammawihiyo falls upon those stones, there to replenish its storehouse of wisdom ---
Overall impressions: A well written and described tale that reads like folklore or a classic fairytale. Entertaining while holding the readers attention well.
A great job describing the settings this helps get the reader into the story.
Well structured making it easy for the reader and appealing for a browser or potential Reader.
Strong characters with individual sounding dialog.
Well done tale especially considering it starts from a prompt.
Seuzz, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Hi Prosperous Snow, I came across this story while random reviewing. I am glad that I did this story has inspired me to set my goals.
My impressions of:"Dear Me" by Prosperous Snow celebrating
Clarity:A great title for this inspirational story.
Writing style: personal inspirational diary
My favorite lines:--- When your inner critic says, “It can’t be done!” Prove your inner critic wrong. ---
Overall impressions:I love the way you start this letter, telling yourself to focus on the future instead of crying about the past. I thought I was the only one that did that.
I like the way you start the paragraphs with the dates and news of the time.
A great reference to your Grandfather Newland and his strong will and determination.
Your strong writing has inspired me. Well done.
Prospherous Snow, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Writing style: Inspirational and descriptive fantasy drama.
My favorite line:--- This was the Mirror dimension, where time ran backward and logic took a holiday.---
Overall impressions:This is a beautifully described story. A picture is painted well for the reader.
Well chosen words in this deep tale are what grabs this readers attention, holding it throughout the story.
A great job. Scarlett comes to life then guides the reader with her through time, learning together that life is not already written in stone but a canvas yearning to be painted.
GERVIC, thank you for sharing this magical story that has taken this reader's mind in a positive direction.
A great work of art! This story has had a strong effect on this reader.
GERVIC, thank you for sharing this powerful work. It is a joy to read it.
Writing style: Humorous tales about children, and human nature.
My favorite lines:---As referenced earlier, children playing in Jumporee Playhouse follow no rules but their own. This results in some behavior that is very abnormal to adult eyes.---
Overall impressions: This is a well written story in a very humorous way, I am still laughing.
Well defined scenarios that are so true, yet funny. Human nature has it share of quirks.
Marcus and Cynthia do sound like typical siblings, your descriptions has done a great job painting their picture.
Scarypotato-Gullible, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well written deep and emotional story expressed artistically in these few strong words.
The unexpected lost of a loved one can cut very deep.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: With these few well chosen words you have expressed pages of emotion.
---I am none the wiser.--- A great ending for the strong work.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problem with the spelling grammar or mechanics.
Mirage, thank you for sharing this deep and emotional poem, this Reader has enjoyed it. Write On!
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