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Review of Flight  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi hihohyena, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Flight" Open in new Window. by hihohyena

Clarity:A good title for this entertaining tale.

Writing style: Mythological adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem appropriate to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- His eyes trailed upwards, seeing fur slowly turn to feathers as two giant hawk's wings had erupted from the creature's shoulders, and the head of the beast was what looked like a dire wolf.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written tale full of adventure and mystery. This grabs the readers attention and holds it well.

Great descriptions that help the reader to picture the scene. This helps hold the reader's attention.

Great character descriptions that help the reader to picture the character and better relate to the story.

hihohyena, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Well structured and formatted however you might consider a larger font with a bit more line spacing to make it easier for those of us with weaker eyes.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Tim Chiu, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Sweetest Worship: The Greatest Gift" Open in new Window. by Tim Chiu

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong poem with a consistent rhyming pattern that contributes to the over-all flow of this positive inspirational poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see a soul setting on the river of time reflecting on historic events.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems with the spelling, grammar or mechanics that I can find.

Tim Chiu, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Assignment 3  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Assignment 3" Open in new Window. by Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th

Clarity: Interesting title for this tale.

Writing style: Modern romance drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- Butterflies took flight in her stomach, the fluttering making her breath ragged.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written delightful tale with a realistic tone. This helps the reader get into the story.

Great descriptions of both setting as well as characters. This story grabs the readers attention and holds it throughout the story.

Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a stronger title that describes this entertaining tale better.

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Review of For a Toss  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi again THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"For a Toss" Open in new Window. by THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24

Clarity:A great title for this awesome and entertaining tale.

Writing style:Family mythological drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---"There's no fun in destroying you, then."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great story that reads like a true story of a happy family playing a game. This helps the reader relate to the story.

Great characters that are described well making them real to the reader.

A very entertaining story with the bonus of a history lesson, awesome.

THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review of Comfort Zone  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Sindbad, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Comfort Zone" Open in new Window. by Sindbad

Clarity: A nice title for this inspirational tale.

Writing style:Folklore contest entry drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes, the dialog is specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line: --- Each time, he would return home with a dejected spirit. His wife would always comfort him and never for once, she was disappointed or resentful.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:This inspiring tale describes human nature as well as human determination. Well worded and told with a great ending that will inspire the reader.

Sindbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after letting an item set idle for a while.

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Review of Remember Today  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Lizzie, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Remember Today" Open in new Window. by Lizzie

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful poem that is both deep and emotional. A realistic tone adds to the great flow of words.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A entertaining work emphasizing that yesterday's gone and tomorrow is not promised to be.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful work.

Lizzie, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Crinkly Grass  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jacky, I came across this entertaining tale while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the story: "Crinkly Grass" Open in new Window. by Jacky

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A very entertaining story the reads much like a true story, mostly from the point of view of a mouse.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a fat mouse happy with the spoils from easter baskets.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful tale.

Jacky, thank you for sharing your work.
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Review of The Suitcase  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Suitcase" Open in new Window. by QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon

Clarity:A good title for this entertaining work.

Writing style:Mystery fiction drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?An awesome structure, format and font size that makes it both easy and inviting for the reader or potential reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does indeed seem to be specific for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- Once the suitcase is unlocked, whatever is inside will be unleashed forever. A ‘Pandora’s box’ as it were.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A delightful tale that is well written with good descriptions that make it easy for the reader to relate to.

Short and to the point just the way today's modern reader likes things.

A wonderful structure that makes it appealing to browsers or would be readers.

QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider adding more to this awesome work.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Jane Doe, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Did I cross the line?" Open in new Window. by Jane Doe

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful story emphasizing how easy it is for us to let society dictate our thoughts and emotions. In time history usually shows that society is totally wrong about most everything. It is mostly programmed in by the powers of the time and age.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a beautiful person nearly starving themself to try and fit in to what they perceive is desired from what society is dictating at a certain time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Jane Doe, thank you for sharing your work.
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Review of Banana Pancakes  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, I came across this entertaining story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Banana Pancakes" Open in new Window. by QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:This entertaining story certainly reads like a true story. This keeps it real while helping the reader get into the story-line. I really like the true story style of this work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a happy family having a small reunion. Cooking and then feasting on the results. Being very happy and creating a lifelong memory for all involved.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful tale. This tale has given me the craving for pancakes, banana style.

QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Henry the 8th  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Henry the 8th" Open in new Window. by Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique idea and style for this entertaining work. I really like the last line, it caught this reader totally off guard.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see someone having a dream about the subject after reading about Henry the eighth.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work. I really like the font size style and layout.

Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Sorrow  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi riri, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Sorrow" Open in new Window. by riri

Clarity:An interesting title for this work.

Writing style:Screenplay writing drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format or somewhat easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialogue does seem to be specific for it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- But then—he thought; 𝘞𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥 𝘪𝘵 𝘳𝘦𝘢𝘭𝘭𝘺 𝘮𝘢𝘬𝘦 𝘮𝘦 𝘭𝘦𝘴𝘴 𝘰𝘧 𝘢 𝘤𝘰𝘸𝘢𝘳𝘥 𝘪𝘧 𝘐 𝘥𝘰𝘯𝘵 𝘦𝘹𝘱𝘦𝘭 𝘮𝘺 𝘥𝘳𝘦𝘢𝘮𝘴 𝘢𝘯𝘥 𝘤𝘰𝘯𝘵𝘪𝘯𝘶𝘦 𝘵𝘰 𝘴𝘦𝘵𝘵𝘭𝘦 𝘪𝘯 𝘵𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘶𝘯𝘢𝘭𝘵𝘦𝘳𝘦𝘥 𝘤𝘪𝘳𝘤𝘶𝘮𝘴𝘵𝘢𝘯𝘤𝘦?---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining tale written in script style. This unique style gets the readers attention.

A deep mystery begins to unravel leaving the reader wanting to know more and to turn the page.



riri, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider experimenting with breaking down some of the longer sentences into shorter ones.

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Joseph
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Review of Forbidden Words  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Kenzie, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Forbidden Words" Open in new Window. by Kenzie

Clarity:A great title for this strong inspirational work.

Writing style:Inspirational experience drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure and format that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialogue is specific to which it's.

My favorite line:---The only words that I remember – the words we sang every time the words “I can’t” were uttered in our household and the words I also sang to my own son – were, “I’ll never, ever say I can’t; I’ll always say, I’ll try.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written biography style story emphasizing the great family morals that you were raised with.

This inspirational story holds this reader's attention well from start to finish. Well done this story has reminded me many of our family values. Indeed I am inspired.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

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Review of Heavenly Embrace  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi again Kenzie, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Heavenly Embrace" Open in new Window. by Kenzie

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful poem. I really like the unique images at top and bottom of poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a picture of heaven with God sitting on his throne admiring all the beauty from the happy souls as well as the animals coexisting in peace.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with your grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining beautiful poem.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi jaya, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Birthday Greetings" Open in new Window. by jaya

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded Birthday greeting emphasizing the positive traits of birthdays and birthday celebrations.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a children's birthday party packed with many happy children feasting on cake and cookies.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining work.

jaya, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Beaker, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"To shine Light with Love." Open in new Window. by Beaker

Clarity: An interesting title for this work.

Writing style: Philosophical sci-fi drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Yes the structure is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes.

My favorite line:---I just had to split just one grape into two halves, side by side,---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A poetic sci-fi style work. Well worded, short and to the point the way the modern reader likes things.

Beaker, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi beaker, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Take the date 8-27 and show light" Open in new Window. by beaker

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A genuinely original work that is strong and deep. A nicely worded peace that adds to the original tune. Unsure if your notes were supposed to be included.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a math-magician practicing how to manipulate numbers.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problem with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong work with the exception of the notes.

beaker, thank you for sharing your entertaining work.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Chico Mahalo, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "as vague as he is flawed" Open in new Window. by Chico Mahalo

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An awesome work. I really like the line ---"I stopped taking my meds because I didn't like the way they made me feel---

I did the same thing years back, the doctor had me on meds that made me fill low with no energy at all. After a while as circumstances had it I didn't get them filled in time and went about a week without, I felt great. I was honest with the doctor and told her that I wasn't going to take them anymore. That made her mad. That was 11 or 12 years ago and I still fill better with more energy. Everyone is wired a little different, they may work great for some people not so much for others. I say to each their own.

A great idea for this strong work I really like the references to -Encouraging soul and Failed poet -.

This reader can really relate to this awesome work .

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a fantasy world where the powers in charge try to make everyone the same however they cannot see succeed.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this very entertaining work.

Chico Mahalo, thank you for sharing this awesome work.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi again Thankful Sonali Looks Ahead, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Everybody Told Everybody So" Open in new Window. by Thankful Sonali Looks Ahead

Clarity: A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Parenting drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?An awesome structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- Tushar knew, as he watched her, that she was beyond irritated. She was really angry. She wouldn't poke and prod herself like that unless she was really angry.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written entertaining story. This helps the reader to relate to the story.

A realistic tone that makes this story sound like a true story. This helps the reader to get into the story-line better.

Thankful Sonali Looks Ahead, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi ShmrGray, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Sing a Song of Sixpence" Open in new Window. by ShmrGray

Clarity: Seems to be a good title for this tale.

Writing style: Children's fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does indeed seem to be specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:--- “Then I shall set myself ablaze!” The King rose abruptly from his seat at the dining table in a dramatic uproar, his breakfast - the said pie - opened up in front of him.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written fairy tale style children's tale.

A short yet entertaining tale exactly like the modern reader likes things.

ShmrGray, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after letting sit idle for a time.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review of The Last Waltz  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi BlackAdder, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Last Waltz" Open in new Window. by BlackAdder

Clarity:A intriguing title.

Writing style:Supernatural relationship drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure that is somewhat easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---Patience might be patient, but her mother was nothing less than stubborn---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written tale in a mystery style fantasy writing.

Good descriptions that help the reader to picture the setting as well as the characters.

BlackAdder, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and it never hurts. Consider a larger font with a bit more line-spacing to make it easier on those of us with weak eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi again Winchester Jones, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Cold Wind" Open in new Window. by Winchester Jones

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this work.

Writing style: Biographical family drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---“Fine,” said Shelly, sounding like it wasn’t really fine at all. “But hold on tight!”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written tale. Short yet to the point just like the modern reader likes things.

I like the ending, leaving enough room for the reader to fill in with their imagination as they see fit.

Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider adding to or using parts to fill in on other works.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Darkscape Entertainment, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Invalid Item" Open in new Window. by Darkscape Entertainment

Clarity: The title could better describe the content of this chapter.

Writing style:Relationship mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is easy for the reader. A larger font would not hurt for those with the weak eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem to be specific for it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- Somewhere, they could appreciate the solitude and speak openly.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A deep and emotional writing that tries to grab the reader's attention and hold it.

A lot of serious dialogue to make the storyline more real for the reader.

Well formatted with good descriptions that help the reader to picture the setting.

Darkscape Entertainment, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a title that better describes the content after a good edit and proofread. Maybe break into smaller chapters as today's reader seems to like things short and to the point.

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Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again HuntersMoon, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Sand Castle" Open in new Window. by HuntersMoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: As always a very well worded deep poem that grabs the readers attention and holds it till the end.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: For this reader I see the image of a ship in an ancient sea fighting a storm to try and stay afloat.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining work.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi Josh Keiser, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Judgment of Man" Open in new Window. by Josh Keiser

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse work about human nature. ---The fear of repercussion is the only thing holding me back---fears like this are what keep us somewhat sane.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a dark crowded St. with many unsavory characters lurking about trying to mind their own business.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Josh Keiser, thank you for sharing your poem.
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