Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.
What is the style? Short story
Are there 3 genre listings? LGBTQ+, Romance/Love, Experience
Does the opening line grab my attention? a good opening to this story but it could better grab my attention.
Is the structure good for the reader? a nicely structured story that is easy for the reader.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:GERVIC this is a very well written story. Great descriptions that help the reader picture the scene.
Strong characters with good dialogue. Very realistic descriptions.
I did not know that they still had places that didn't allow drinking.
The pandemic was a trying time; it seems to have been over a long time ago when it actually wasn't.
If I had to make a suggestion:.None
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Does the title describe the story? The title describes this story well.
What is the style? biographical friendship.
Are there 3 genre listings? Friendship, Writing.Com, Contest Entry.
Does the opening line grab my attention? a good opening line.
Is the structure good for the reader? a nice structure, making it easy for the reader.
My favorite line: --Her presence on Writing.Com is undeniable.--
My two cents worth is only one opinion:Jeff, as always, this is a well-worded and well-written article.
Brooklyn sounds like a great person and friend.
It is hard to find someone who will truly listen to your problems when you're having a bad day.
A nice ending line, well done.
If I had to make a suggestion:None.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Does the title describe the story? a nice title for this story.
What style? personal drama.
Are there three genre listings? Contest Entry: Other. By listing at least 3 genre's, you make your work accessible to more readers looking for this type of story and genre.
My favorite line: --Determined not to open my eyes until I figured it out I lay there listening, dozing a bit too.--
This is only one opinion: Jacky, this is a great, well-written, and humorous story.
A nice structure that makes it easy for the reader.
Does the title describe story? the title fairly describes this poem.
What style? Relationship poetry.
Are there three genre listings? Erotica, Emotional, Romance/Love
This is only one opinion: A nicely written and structured poem.
Relationships are tough and can be quite strenuous on our enter soul.
Ayobami, I like this poem thank you for sharing it.
Clarity: The title could better describe this story.
Style:health drama.
Genera listing: Experience, Medical, Health
My 2 cents is only One opinion: well written and worded story.
Reads like a true story. Nicely structured this makes it easy on the reader.
Cancer is a scary demon that I would not wish on anyone.
MJones thanks for sharing this work, it is a good read.
Suggestions:
Write on! Keep Writing! God bless you! Joseph
Does the title describe story? The title describes this story well.
What style? Fantasy drama.
Are there three genre listings? Fantasy, Drama, Contest Entry
My favorite line: --Banned from his own land, He fled his home and created his own home, Castle Addlebrain.--
This is only one opinion: A great idea for this awesome tale. Well written with great detailed descriptions. Making it easy for the reader to picture the setting.
The opening got my attention then the tale held it.
Marty is a strong likable character. Rosco and JoJo are good dragons.
Nice structure, easy for the reader.
A good touch with the farming.
A good ending.
tj thanks for sharing this tale it is a joy to read.
Clarity:A great title for this poem. Style:Poetry, Thirty-eight lines from prompt.
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Well written and structured poem with a nice rhyming scheme. Well done should have satisfied the prompts well. Flannel umbrella day.
Thank you for sharing this great poem it is a joy to read.
My impressions of the poem:"COLORS OF FALL" by Prosperous Snow Valentine
Clarity:Nice title for this poem. Style: Poetry
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Nicely written poem, good descriptions help the reader to picture the scene.
This poem takes me back to my childhood memories of my grandparents and the colors of the leaves on their trees.
Thank you for sharing this poem, this reader enjoyed it.
my favorite lines:--“I don’t know,” Bernard tilted his sunglasses down and watched a couple of ladies saunter down the beach in bikinis, “I think I could get used to it.” Mitzy swatted him.--
My 2 cents is only One opinion:
Hi BScholl, nicely written short story. Short and to the point just the way today's readers likes things.
Thank you for sharing this work it is a good read.
Suggestions: no suggestions.
Write on! Keep Writing! God bless you! Joseph
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Hi JCosmos, this is an awesome poem. Thank you for sharing your work. This well written and simple poem has got this readers head spinning.
A strong deep poem written with a few words. The last verse is my favorite, well said.
Does the title describe story? The title describes the story well.
What style? Fantasy fiction.
Are there three genre listings? Other is the only listing. By listing 3 genres your work will be available to more readers looking for that genre.
This is only one opinion: Hi Angelica, this is an interesting story. Well written and pretty much straight to the point just the way today's reader likes things.
Good characters with good dialogue.
Good descriptions helping the reader to visualize the setting.
Structured nicely making it easy for the reader.
Thank you for sharing this work I have enjoyed reading it.
If I had to make the suggestion: Consider a good proof read I think I seen at least a couple typos.
Does the title describe story? The title could better describe this particular chapter.
What style? sci-fi drama.
Are there three genre listings? Sci-fi, Crime/Gangster: By having three genres listed more readers searching for this type of genre will be able to find it.
My favorite line: --Friend or foe, if one of the soldiers detected weakness, they wouldn't hesitate to cut her career short–ruining what she had started today in Marcon's organization. --
This is only one opinion: Hi Joto-Kai, Thanks for sharing this work it is a joy to read. Nicely structured and organized easy for the reader to follow.
Good descriptions helping the reader to picture the scene. Strong likeable characters with well written dialog. Easy for the reader while holding their attention well.
A consistent steady tone that carries a good flow.
How easily did you get into the scene? The scene was fairly easy to get into.
Did the first paragraph grab you? The first paragraph was good but could have grabbed me better.
What impression did you get of Melihra? A strong character wrestling with whether to follow traditions or make new ones.
What impression did you get of Scarlett? A strong and likable character proud and strong minded.
What is an Eradis? Warrior robots.
What is an Indur? A slave owning faction.
If I had to make the suggestion: Consider a stronger ending with a bit more mystery to make the reader want to turn the page.
Does the title describe story? The title works for this outline.
What style? Sci-fi outline.
Are there three genre listings? Sci-fi, Action/Adventure, Relationship
This is only one opinion: Hi Scarypotato, this is a great outline hopefully the book will be as good. I look forward to reading it.
Well written and structured. A good structure makes it easier on the reader and less intimidating for the potential reader.
This detailed outline should be a great help for keeping your story-line in order. Oftentimes a story or novel seems to take off in a unplanned direction without a good outline.
Does the title describe story? The title is a good description for this work.
What style? biographical opinion.
Are there three genre listings? Writing.Com, Writing, Internet/Web
My favorite lines: -- The more people who wonder into Writing.Com, the better the chance that someone will discover my writings and want to talk with me about writing for them.--
-- Why should I help promote Writing.Com? Ralph Waldo Emerson said it best, "It is one of the most beautiful compensations of life, that no man can sincerely try to help another without helping himself."--
This is only one opinion: Kenzie I am honored to be reading this great classic from 2002.
This is a great inspirational masterpiece. I agree with everything you said and wow look at WDC now.
2002 wasn't that long ago...yet it was.
I'm glad your poem about 9/11 was picked up and I'm sure it got plenty of attention.
Thanks so much for sharing your work, I am honored to be reading it. This has inspired me. :)
Clarity: Great title for this poem. Style: poetry relationship.
My 2 cents is only one opinion:Kevster this is a great poem. I think most all of us can relate to this poem because we have all lost furniture that was close to us.
A great idea explained in a entertaining way.
Well worded and carries a great flow. I bet you do miss that chair. :)
Thank you for sharing this work it is a good read.
Hey Olliemy, Welcome to WDC where you will find friendly and helpful writers that will give you encouragement and feedback about your writing while helping you with your writing journey.
My Impressions of: Scars by Olliemy
clarity: The title could better describe the contents of this story.
style: Biographical folklore.
originality: Unique storyline reads like a true story.
My favorite line:--About the age of 9, he practically poisoned the family's drinking water, with hope to murder all his siblings, so he could have just enough to eat.--
Joe's 2 cents is only one opinion:Well structured story making it easy for the reader. Good descriptions helping the reader to visualize the story.
Consider adding more about how the mother saved the guys life.
Consider adding more detail about --after practically poisoning the family's drinking water--. Curious about those results. How did it not work and get found out?
A good idea to point out that the father's children never abandoned him even after being abused.
Nice idea ending the story with questions, helping to make the Reader feel more involved.
Clarity: A good title for this poem. Style:Spiritual Poetry
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Hey intuey, this is a beautiful poem.
Well worded with a great rhyming scheme. A nice easy to read structure.
This poem carries a great flow.
Thank you for sharing, your work has been inspirational.
Write on! Keep on writing! Joseph
My favorite line:--When its radical approach to love and acceptance and relationships truly stands out from what the rest of the world is doing and gives people the hope for a better way of living. --
My 2 cents is only One opinion:Jeff this is an awesome testimonial, thanks for sharing this uplifting collection of words that are powerful and inspiring.
Packed with valuable information for the reader in a short to the point style.
Structured great as is all your work that I've seen. You are a word master.
Honest realistic flow for this powerful writing. The emotion can be felt.
Suggestions: None
Write on! Keep Writing! God bless you!
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