My impressions of the poem:{item: #2311392} by Hunters Moon
Clarity:A fair title for this poem. Style:Poetry
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Nice rhyming pattern.
My favorite stanza: I kneel beside the empty spot;
I supplicate in prayer.
“Please Lord”, I ask, “forbid all thought
and feelings that I care.”
A well worded and written poem with a good flow.
Thanks for sharing this powerful poem, I have enjoyed reading it.
Clarity, does the title describe this story?:The title works well for this poem.
Style: Shakespearean Sonnet.
Genres, are 3 listed?Family, Emotional, Inspirational
My two cents is only one opinion: A well worded and written emotional poem.
A nice touch thanking the Mother in the second stanza. Advice for the child in the third stanza.
Thank you for sharing your work this reader has enjoyed it.
Characters:
Structured easy for the reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.
Clarity:A nice title for this poem. Style:Free verse poetry
My 2 cents is only one opinion: A well written poem that takes me back to my childhood and Easter egg hunting.
The second poem seems as though it was written more recent. It also is well written and worded, with a unique rhyming pattern.
Thanks for sharing these poems, this reader has enjoyed them both.
clarity: The title could better describe the contents of this.
style: romance drama, poetic
originality: an original idea for this unique piece.
Joe's 2 cents is only one opinion: short and straight to the point which is good for today's reader.
A strong and emotional work.
Thanks for sharing this work, it is a good read.
Clarity, does the title describe this story?:The title works for this story.
Style: Fantasy adventure drama.
Genres, are 3 listed? Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Drama
Plot:The watch try to find Oliva, who had disappeared into the woods.
An action-packed adventure with good dialogue, great descriptions and several characters.
Good story-line.
Characters:Sir Grey Arm, Ger, Queen Marisa, Dera
Structured easy for the reader? The structure could be easier on the reader with more spacing or double spacing at least between paragraphs.
Any suggestions? Consider a good proofread and edit to correct typos punctuation and capitalization errors.
Thank you for sharing this story, it is a good read.
Does the title describe story? A good title for this story.
What style? Fantasy, mystery.
Are there three genre listings? Horror/Scary, Supernatural
This is only one opinion: Well told story with a realistic tone.
Short and to the point, the way todays reader likes it.
Structured well making it easy for the reader.
A nice ending with a touch of mystery leaving the reader wanting to know more.
My impressions of: Nuclear Winter (part one) by Sweet thistle
Does the title describe story? The title describes this story well.
What style? Sci-fi drama
Are there three genre listings? Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Paranormal
My favorite line: -- Something that shouldn’t exist, Something to give the laws of nature a huge middle-finger to the face, something given life by the death and enslavement of the human spirits found deep within itself, and something behind all still shrouding itself from scrutiny.--
This is only one opinion: A well written story with good descriptions strong characters and good dialog.
A unique structure, using different fonts for the dialogs of characters. This reader likes it.
An action-packed story that held this readers attention well from start to finish.
Strong opening that pulls the reader in.
A good ending leaving the reader wanting to know more.
Sweet thistle, thank you for sharing this work it is a joy to read.
If I had to make the suggestion: Consider shortening the long sentences. A good proofread and edit to find and correct any typos never hurts.
Does the title describe story? A good title for this story.
What style? Friendship drama
Are there three genre listings? Family, Friendship, Relationship
This is only one opinion: A well written story with strong characters great descriptions and good dialogue.
Indeed cancer is a sad thing. You have taken some of that out with this good entertaining story.
Thank you for sharing this story it was a joy to read.
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My impressions of the poem:Anger by LightinMind
Clarity:The title well describes this poem. Style: Four line stanzas poetry
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Well worded and structured with a nice rhyming pattern.
The first stanza is my favorite.
This is a strong poem with emotion that can be felt.
Thank you for sharing this strong poem, I have enjoyed reading it.
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My impressions of the poem: Whose Authority?
Clarity:A good title for this poem. Style:Free verse poetry.
My 2 cents is only one opinion: A strong emotional poem. Well written and worded. A nice structure, easy to read.
Indeed this poem is so true, a reflection on todays society.
Thanks for sharing this poem, it is a good read.
My impressions of: Eclipse's Change Part One: It Begins
by RBM5
Clarity, does the title describe this story?: Seems to be a good title for this story.
Style: Fanfiction, sci-fi
Genres, are 3 listed?Fanfiction, Entertainment, Fantasy
Plot:
A strong storyline with great potential for a longer work.
Eclipse transforms to a female and mother figure that his race needed to survive.
Characters:Eclipse
Structured easy for the reader?Structured with long paragraphs and long sentences, both are intimidating for potential readers.
Any suggestions? Consider breaking the paragraphs down to shorter versions as well as some of the long sentences . This will make it less intimidating for the browser looking for something to read.
Clarity, does the title describe this story?: A good title but it doesn't really describe what the story is about so good.
Style: Folklore thriller
Genres, are 3 listed?Thriller/Suspense Listing three genres helps more browsers to find your story.
Plot: Jim is a long time employee of the dollar store. He is so use to his routine that he don't even notice for a while that the store has been robbed and is littered with bodies.
A well written and described story with action and suspense. Strong characters, well written dialog.
The story flows well and held this reader's attention good from start to end.
Thanks for sharing this strong story, this reader has enjoyed it.
Characters:Jim, the dollar store employee.
The old man with mud under his fingernails. A regular customer.
The thief that robs the store and kills the customer. Turns out to be a girl wearing black leather and a motorcycle helmet with the visor down.
Structured easy for the reader?The story is structured well, easy to read.
Any suggestions?A good proof read to correct typos(I seen at least a couple).
Good descriptions, a few could be edited without hurting the story. This would make it a bit shorter which is how most of today's readers like it.
My impressions of: Black Cats by Princess Megan Rose.
Hey Megan, this newsletter came up while random reviewing. I have enjoyed reading this greatly detailed newsletter. Thanks for all you do for the WDC community. Always professional, entertaining top shelf writing.
Clarity, does the title describe this story?:The title describes this story great.
Style: Newsletter.
Genres, are 3 listed?Animal, Holiday, Supernatural. Good genre's to list.
Plot:I love history, it was a joy to see some cat history. A lot of people are still suppositious of Black Cats ( Krazzzeeey ).
Nice idea listing some famous cats.
Your descriptions of Bella are so good I can see her.
Hey Angel. Maxi, Molly and Goldie sound like great companions. Well told story about them and Roger.
I hope none had to be arrested and sent to Doom Town.
I think any cat owner will relate to this. We have three cats, Mutton is black with a white belly and feet. TomTom is tortoise shell, she is the same age as Mutton. (7years). JoJo is Siamese, we have her 17 years. All three are spoiled, JoJo is the hunter. She loves to show-off her kills, leaving a mess of blood and guts.
Thank you both for this awesome read> :)
Structured easy for the reader?A good structure, easy to read. Nice use of colors.
Awesome image's that anyone would have to like.
Are there three genre listings? Mystery, Young Adult, Drama
My favorite line: -- Us against the world.--
This is only one opinion: Nicely written and very unique summary. Peace, a great start.
Indeed it does seem like its us against the world at times.
Trying to make a difference. Trying to be us. Both strong phrases that you have used well in this work.
A powerful page to make me start philosophizing. Thank you for sharing this work, it is a joy to read.
Often most of us do get in such a hurry that we miss and overlook many things. Next thing you know its all in the past, as we look back it becomes clear that we learn from our mistakes. Molding us into the person we become. Then we seem to make sense out of it.
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My impressions of the poem:Advice for an electrician
Clarity:Great title for this poem. Style:Romance, free verse
My 2 cents is only one opinion:I like this poem, well being an electrician
I would have to like it. I never thought about comparing electrical work to romance, a good idea.
I do know about the static hair-do, for me that's when you get a good jolt. The sun burst's glare I have seen.
A well written poem, worded good with a bit of humor.
Thanks for sharing this good read.
Does the title describe story? A good title for this story.
What style? Flash fiction.
Are there three genre listings? Contest entry
My favorite line: --He floated through the passageway, and now he knew it was him in the dream, not the revolution.--
This is only one opinion: A well written contest entry story. Good opening with a bit of mystery.
A good plot with strong characters. Good descriptions' I like that Terrano decided to let the woman go.
A nice ending with the passageway and light, just enough to make the reader want to know more.
Thanks for sharing this work, it is a good read.
Does the title describe story? The title works for this chapter.
What style? Action/adventure, sci-fi
Are there three genre listings? Action/Adventure, Detective, Sci-fi
My Favorite line: --The quiet hung like a fly in a spider’s web,--
This is only one opinion: A good story-line full of action and mystery.
Good descriptions with a lot of dialog. A lot of the descriptions detail could be edited without taking away from the story. Todays reader's have a short attention span.
Still in rough draft form with some typo's and grammar mistakes. Also some repeated phrases which takes away from the flow a bit.
I like this story and see a lot of potential. It appears that you may have rushed it a little. In need of a proofread and edit.
If I had to make the suggestion: Consider keeping the dialog between 3 characters.
Richard, do you have the work read out loud to you? Most writers do this to catch a lot of mistakes easily missed from being so into the work. I know that I have too.
Consider formatting with more spacing to make it easier for the reader.
Does the title describe story? The title describes this story well.
What style? Sci-fi adventure.
Are there three genre listings? Action/Adventure, Detective, Sci-fi
My favorite line: --“I cannot see where it has gone? They jumped the controlling manifold,” Jason said as he had his hands dance across the keyboard. He looked up, “Lost it.”--
This is only one opinion: Richard, I like this action packed story. Well done. Thanks for sharing it, this reader enjoyed it.
A well written sci-fi adventure tale with good description's and strong characters. A good narrative for a longer work or novel.
I like the teleporting theory, this mystery holds the readers attention. Leaving him wanting to know more and turn the page.
If I had to make the suggestion: A good proof read and edit to catch any typos or repeated words is always a good idea.
Does the title describe story? Great title for this letter.
What style? Letter, memories, sci-fi.
Are there three genre listings? Contest Entry, Sci-fi, Biographical
My favorite line: -- But only time will tell if I do.--
This is only one opinion: Nicely written, well structured letter, PureSciFi.
I was thinking about entering the dear me contest, after reading this I think you got it won already.
Good childhood memories, in particular the sci-fi visits when you were 16.
It sounds like an awesome screenplay you are working on. Also sounds like you are really busy and using your time wisely and efficiently.
Thank you for sharing this awesome work, it is a joy to read.
Does the title describe story? A good title for this work.
What style? Religious, prophesy, preaching
Are there three genre listings? Religious, Community, Spiritual
This is only one opinion: A well written religious interpretation, with prayers.
Informational and educational article with many bible quotes in no certain order.
The Bible is a powerful book, the only book that can be read by everyone and each person can have a separate and different interpretation, without being wrong.
The makings of a good sermon.
Thanks for sharing this article with your interpretations.
If I had to make the suggestion: Todays readers in this fast paced society have a short attention span, liking articles short and to the point. A good edit never hurts.
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My impressions of the poem:Caribbean Silk
Clarity: A good title for this poem. Style:Free verse poetry
My 2 cents is only one opinion: Well written poem. I think fishing, maybe with a camera.
This poem takes me to a dream state, where I am fishing but catching everything but fish.
Nicely worded and structured poem. Thank you for sharing this strong poem, I haven't been fishing in a while. My favorite line: Seahorse salutes
my return to whence I came.
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