*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/cuzzinjoe/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/11
Review Requests: ON
1,292 Public Reviews Given
1,292 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
Previous ... 7 8 9 10 -11- 12 13 14 15 16 ... Next
251
251
Review of Today's Child  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Kenzie I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Today's Child" 
by Kenzie

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Beautifully written poem. Well worded short stanzas that make their point well. I like the large colored fonts, this is easy to read plus it make this poem stand out.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This cyber age is full of mystery especially for some of us dinosaurs. We always tried to avoid chat rooms and social media groups, then suddenly we're told we're behind if we are not a member of this and that and got XXXX number of followers.

Well obviously this is a very strong poem, it has caused the philosopher to show up. Well done.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: There are no problems with the mechanics that this reader sees.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing this inspirational poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
** Image ID #2290295 Unavailable ** "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
252
252
Review of The Journey  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi MJones, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Journey" 
by MJones

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong free verse poem, in a few words you have said a lot. Indeed it is about the journey not the destination.

I really like express it in 8, when I first heard of it I thought that was not enough lines now it seems to be just about right.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This Reader see's the portrait of a soul on life's pathway.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see.

MJones, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
** Image ID #2290295 Unavailable ** "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
253
253
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jackiesmuse, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Rachel Howard Live WC 296"  by Jackiesmuse

Clarity:The title works well for this apocalyptic drama.

Writing style:Modern fantasy drama.

My favorite line:---I snorted. I’m admitting live, on the air, that I snort when I’m scared---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this story. I like it.

A well written strong storyline in a few words, you got your point across good.

A very realistic story. I can picture this happening on several of the news show's. Well written with strong characters that are very realistic.I Feel that most people will be able to relate to this story.

Nicely structured this makes it easy for the reader.

I like the way you added humor to this otherwise serious story, well done.


Jackiesmuse, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
254
254
Review of Hide and go seek  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ritzy Vampi, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Hide and go seek"  by Ritzy Vampi

Clarity: Good title for this tale.

Writing style:Adventure drama.

My favorite line:--- She explained how to bark a squirrel off a tree limb with only a slingshot and then confessed she hadn’t been able to kill more than one---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written story with a good structure. This makes it easy for the reader while inviting for a browser.

Good characters with good dialog. A good narrative.

Great descriptions that help the reader visualize the setting.

A sudden ending that leaves the reader wanting to know more.

Ritzy Vampi, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider working on the ending to give the reader closure or a hint to another chapter.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
255
255
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Max Griffin, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"A Twist in Time--Chapter 1"  by Max Griffin

Clarity:Great title for this time travel tale.

Writing style:Sci-fi drama.

My favorite line:--- The more important question is when we are.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written sci-fi mystery adventure. This story is written with a very realistic tone that it carries through out.

Good characters with realistic dialog. Great descriptions that take the reader into the story right beside Justin.

A good job with the action, this keeps the reader toward the edge of his seat.

The story holds a realistic flow. A good ending that leaves the reader wanting to turn the page.

Max, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
256
256
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sumojo, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Be careful what you wish for. "  by Sumjo

Clarity:A good title for this story.

Writing style: Pet relationship drama.

My favorite line:---“But...” He tried to explain how much it would mean to him, but Fiona shook her head.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written biographical style story about Harry finally getting a dog.

A good narrative with a strong likable character. This helps draw the reader into the story.

Good descriptions that take the reader into the story.

A good ending that highlights the title.

Sumojo, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
257
257
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sinbad, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpowers May raid.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Transformation of Divine Dragon"  by Sinbad

Clarity:A good title that describes the content of the story well.

Writing style: Mythological folktale drama.

My favorite line:---I shall transcend the estate of ordinary fish and achieve a place among the order of sacred dragons.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written entertaining tale. Nicely structured story that is easy for the reader. A good story-line.



Sinbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
258
258
Review of First drum set  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again Kare Enga, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"First drum set"  by Kare Enga in Montana

Clarity:Nice title for this poem.

Writing style:Children poetry.

My favorite line:

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and very descriptive poem.
The way you structured this poem brings out the point. Well done.

Kare Enga in Montana, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
259
259
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi dogpack:saving4 premium:DWG, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"We three: God, Bella, and Me"  by dogpack:saving4 premium:DWG

Clarity:A good title for this poem.

Writing style: Pet spiritual poetry.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A random rhyming pattern aids to this poem's deep flow. They say Dogs are man's best friend, suppose that is pretty much true. I know my dog sure acts like my best friend.

A well worded poem with a nice structure.

dogpack:saving4 premium:DWG, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
260
260
Review of Haunting Memories  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again Dave, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Haunting Memories"  by Dave

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style: Family relationship poetry

My favorite line:--- After he passed, your faith surpassed
the darkness trying to invade
your spirit world, as life unfurled
beyond the ever-growing shade
in loving memories. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: tThis is a strong deep poem, the emotions can be felt. Good random rhyming pattern adds to the unique flow.

A portrait of one in mourning is painted for this reader



Dave, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
261
261
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mary Ann, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Come With Me Beneath The Sea."  by Mary Ann MCPhedran

Clarity: A good title for this poem.

Writing style: Nature poetry

My favorite line:--- No fishing hook can reel them in.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A lovely poem with a unique rhyming pattern that gives this poem a nice flow. A land of beauty beneath the sea, a nice image.

Mary Ann MCPhedran, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
262
262
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Big Bad Wolf is Hopping, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Planet Animalus Info and Book Sums"  by Big Bad Wolf is Hopping

Clarity: Interesting title.

Writing style:Animal descriptions.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nice introduction piece to describe the animals in your book.

-No one wants the wild beast after them.- This seems like very good advice.

Big Bad Wolf is Hopping, thank you for sharing this unique work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
263
263
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi The Grum of Grums, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Big Boys Don't Cry"  by The Grum of Grums

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this story well.

Writing style:Pet drama.

My favorite line:--- Perhaps that’s ‘cos she’s a girl and girls are allowed to cry---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Indeed it is sad to loose a pet. With their shorter life span it prepares us for loss in our lifetime.

A nicely written story for this touchy subject. Nicely worded with good spacing between lines.



The Grum of Grums, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider breaking the story down into shorter paragraphs with a blank space between paragraphs to make it appear more inviting for a potential reader. As is, it appears to be 1 long paragraph.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
264
264
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Nixie, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Dr. Zhivago and the Cheesecake"  by Nixie

Clarity: A great title for this entertaining tale.

Writing style:Family childrens drama.

My favorite line:--- A fourteen-year-old trying to be invisible in the chaos of Dad's fortieth birthday celebration preparations.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written story with strong characters. A good job with the dialog. A good easy to read structure.

Nixie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
265
265
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"The Majestic Animals"  by Maryann

Clarity:A great title for this entertaining poem.

Writing style:Animal poetry.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A beautifully written and structured poem about animals. Nicely done.

Peacocks are indeed beautiful birds. My aunt used to raise them so I had several experiences with them. A word of advice do not grab one by the feet when it's in its roost, they are some big powerful birds.

Maryann, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
266
266
Review of Nature's Grace  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again Dave, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Nature's Grace"  by Dave

Clarity:A good title for this delightful poem.

Writing style:Structured poetry.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nice rhyming pattern that gives this unique work it's refreshing flow.
Natures grace, no artist can encase. Well said this is so true wouldn't it be amazing to be able to write something as beautiful as nature's grace.

Dave, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
267
267
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi April Desiree, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Get Out of My Mind"  by April Desiree-I'm back!

Clarity: A good title for this poem.

Writing style:Poetry.

My favorite line:--- I occupy the battle cry of warrior women scorned
and forge in fire
your funeral pyre,
our union seldom mourned---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written poem with a nice rhyming pattern that that gives a good flow to this poem.

A nicely structured poem. I like the big font, it makes it easier on my weak eyes.

April Desiree, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
268
268
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi HollyMerry, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Rosie westie at the park"  by HollyMerry

Clarity:A good title for this poem.

Writing style:Nature pet poetry.

My favorite line:--- Her coal-black eyes glisten for an adventure---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written poem with a nice structure. This makes it easier for the reader.

A delightful easy going relaxing flow to this poem.




HollyMerry, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
269
269
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Nanapockets, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"MY MOM IS THE WORST COOK IN THE WORLD!"  by Nanapockets

Clarity: A great title that describes the contents of the story well.

Writing style: Family children's drama.

My favorite line:---Mom has a habit of trying to fool us into eating whatever it is she cooks.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written entertaining story. Nice structure for this story. This makes it easier for the reader.

I can't help but to feel like you're exaggerating a bit however I have heard of people that could burn water, so I suppose I believe it.

Nanapockets, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
270
270
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Dave, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"The Puppy's Portrait"  by Dave

Clarity:A good title for this pet poem.

Writing style: Pet poetry.


My favorite lines: ---When artist paints the doggy's face
and pigments color empty space,
arranged in glowing graphic style
to show her Mona Lisa smile,
emotions flow at rapid pace.---



My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great rhyming pattern that contributes to the unique flow of this lovely poem.

Well done, this poem is very entertaining.

Dave, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
271
271
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"Sylvester Is A Smart Cat"  by Mary Ann MCPhedran

Clarity:A great title for this poem.

Writing style:Pet poetry.

My favorite line:--- Jumps on to the sink
'I need a drink.'---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A lovely poem. Short, sweet and to the point, with a few words you have said a lot about Sylvester the black cat.

Mary Ann MCPhedran, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
272
272
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi intuey, I came across this story while random reviewing.
image for double theme raid

My impressions of:"A Fisherman's Tale"  by intuey

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style:Animal, environment poetry.

My favorite line:--- Jonah would know this intense feeling.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: --We watched the stars starting to wake up from their sleep.-- I love that line.

A well written poem that is strongly worded which gives this work its realistic flow.



Intuey, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
273
273
Review of Bobby [162]  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kare Enga, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Bobby [162]"  by Kare Enga in Montana

Clarity:Seems like an appropriate title for this tale.

Writing style:Friendship drama.

My favorite line:---Boys will be boys... if they only knew.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great start for this story. I love the part about the treehouse. Eleven is a good age, growing from a child to a young adult.

A well told story, the emotion scream's out to the reader. This 385 word story is two or four thousand words worth, factoring in the emotion, the mystery. This draws the reader deep into the work, leaving him wanting to know more, wanting to turn the page.

Nicely structured making it easy for the reader while inviting to a potential reader.

A great use of the prompt words.
Kudos.



Kare Enga, thank you for sharing this wonderful work, it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:No suggestions.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
274
274
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi MoonChilde, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"An Observation of Homelessness"  by MoonChilde

Clarity:A good title for this informative article.

Writing style:Educational research article


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Very well written is this extremely informative article. A lot of what seems to be well researched information.

Your hometown sounds like a good one. Unfortunately around here where I live I guess someone homeless would starve pretty quick.

Good luck I agree with you there's a lot in our system that needs fixing homeless no doubt should be up on top.

MoonChilde, thank you for sharing this informative story, it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A nice structure however you might consider a blank space between paragraphs or some of the longer ones. This might make the article appear more inviting to a browser or potential reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
GROUP
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  (E)
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
#1300305 by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
275
275
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Cr1tkalZer0, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Crying in the Midwest "  by Cr1tkalZer0

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Sounds like a great place to be. This is an awesome poem, Midwest living sounds a lot like country living where I come from.

This is a well written poem that describes well enough to take the reader there to Camelot camping out under the stars.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I think we all have that happy place we remember yet can't find.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:A great poem, no problems with the mechanics.

Cr1tkalZer0, thank you for sharing this awesome poem that has transported this reader to that happy place .
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
854 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 35 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/cuzzinjoe/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/11