Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse poem with emotion screaming to get free. A strong poem that possibly was written when the author was a little depressed, or not.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:For this reader, I see a soul setting on a cold pile of grass that once healed them, seeking another healing.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this poem.
Cloelia, thank you for sharing your story.
Write On!
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog is specific for the speaker.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written deep and emotional tale.
A great idea for this strong story. I like that it was all dialogue on a phone call.
Dreamward Bound, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure and format.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written and very informative how to article. A lot of great advice and tips. I am quite sure I have done most of these suggestions although I'm not sure if it was at the same time. I guess I never really gave makeup a try.
Rafia, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Fair.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I have a question, in this article it said you could renew gift points for membership however I have found no way to do that. The path was not mapped out in this article neither. I intend to take another look after writing this review. Perhaps I didn't go deep enough.
A very well written and informative article I am glad I come across it.
StoryMistress, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong emotional free verse poem about addiction. Indeed in this day and time all of us see addictions of all kinds. A weakness for some humans that other humans have always taken advantage of. The addiction for some is the money they can make from another's weakness.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:This reader sees a dark demon in the midst of a metropolis feeding from the weakness of his victims.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar on mechanics of this deep work.
Happy to write, thank you for sharing this strong poem.
Write On!
Clarity:A good title that does describe the contents of this work.
Writing style: Family history drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Of course.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format is good and easy for the reader.
My favorite line:--- Our lives were so much simpler than those of the children today.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well told historical reflection of generation gap.
Indeed all did seem so much simpler back then. Well when we think about it today it does. As I recall it didn't seem that simple back then. I guess hindsight is always more clear to us than foresight.
It does seem like the kids of today do not get the enjoyment out of the great outdoors that we did back then. They can do it at home on electronic devices, or so they seem to think. Maybe they can. It does seem a shame for them not to experience the peacefulness of the great outdoors. The joy of those old time family get togethers as well as the taste of that good old timey food.
Kenzie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Clarity:A good title that fairly describes the content of this work.
Writing style:Biographical teen drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes. This makes your work available to more browsers or potential readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure and format that is somewhat easy for the reader.
My favorite line:--- I can't run from life, so I've settled on walking.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well laid out and told biography. Through life I always seemed to fall back to writing during those slow job hunting times. Next thing you know you're too busy so it is easy to put writing on the back burner. I feel like there are many of us that can relate to that.
A well written story with a nice honest flow. Camp out when you get a chance there is nothing like the night stars to inspire your writing. It will also give you a good peaceful feeling and usually you can catch up on your thoughts to come back more relaxed as well as focused.
Not_A_City_Boy, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider breaking down the longer paragraphs and even double spacing. This makes your work look less intimidating to potential readers while being easier to read for those of us with weak eyes.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written philosophical poem. Well structured to help with this poem's consistent flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see a group of people figuring the best way to cross a roaring river, then dividing to build a bridge from each side, meeting in the middle.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this poem.
Tim Chiu, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!
Clarity:A good title that somewhat describes the content of this tale.
Writing style:Fantasy sci-fi drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure and format that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems appropriate for its speaker.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written and entertaining sci-fi tale.
I like Brenda, she is a strong character. A good idea and storyline.
ULVdrgn1,thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:A good proof read and edit never hurts. In the start of paragraph 2 consider deleting -and was around 500-, it's not needed. The last sentence in paragraph 2 could be shorter and/or rearranged.
Consider having your computer read out loud you're finished work, this helps almost like having a neutral person read it to you.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse type work about a thorny flower. Nicely worded to give an overall nice flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: For this reader, I see a mythological being transformed into a plant that unfortunately can bear no flowers only thorns
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the spelling or mechanics, however double spacing with a blank line between longer paragraphs would make it easier for this reader.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is specific for its speaker.
My favorite line:--- “Lost are you? Lost are you?”---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:I hope you won the contest. This is a awesome classic work. I love it.
An author in the woods getting buried in leave words. What a great idea for a tale. This readers attention was held start to finish both times.
Short, to the point without a dull moment. Kudos!
Definitely one of the most entertaining stories any reader will come across. Descriptions so real they will take the reader in and bury with leave words.
Sumojo, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure appears cluttered and intimidating, that is not easy for the reader.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A lost love type rant. I suppose a rant like this might help get the bad feeling out of your system. Move on, hold your head high. Time will quickly heal this loss.
Try to write a positive story while your emotions are running high. This might help to write a better story by having your senses tuned in high.
Petunia Black, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider a good edit using line-spacing, short paragraphs with a beginning, middle and end.
Clarity:A good title that describes the content well.
Writing style:Folklore animal religious.
Are all 3 genres listed?Great, this makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is good for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue seems to be specific to its speaker.
My favorite line:---One who imitates good actions, even outwardly, gets a chance to smell the alluring fragrance of goodness, whereas, one who even hypocritically imitates evil, contacts the odor of the polecat of evil.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Interesting tale starting with a greedy hunter that transforms into a Saint.
A good idea for this story, it seems like it got stretched out for a word count. This is only one opinion.
This story begins well then starts to loose my attention when it just seems too preachy.
Sinbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider breaking down some of the longer sentences. Maybe edit to shorten the tale, todays reader seems to prefer short, straight to the point tales.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautifully worded nature poem. I love poems about nature, seasons, rain...
Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a young mother nature setting on a bridge with her bare-feet dangling over a stream while a mist of rain cools everything off, is what this reader sees.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:All looks good.
Rhyssa, thank you for sharing your delightful poem.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong emotion filled free verse poem. Life has its ups and downs, it is funny how when we're down it feels hopeless yet in what seems like no time then we're back up. It's then we can look back and appreciate the experience. Acknowledging lessons we learned and realizing those lessons made us a stronger person
Artistic Voice and Imagery: For this reader I can see the portrait of slaves working on a cotton plantation a couple hundred years ago.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Not sure why there is no use of capitol letters.
vluxyr, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!
Clarity:A good title, however it could better describe the contents of this story.
Writing style:Fantasy teen drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Good job. This makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nice structure that is fairly easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to its speaker.
My favorite line:---Basketball season just started and you've ruined 3 sets of clothes already."---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and well described folk tale. Strong character with realistic dialog. This entertaining story carries a realistic flow.
JT Baker, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider double spacing and maybe larger font. This will make it easier for those of us with weak eyes.
Hi Minnie, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Colorblind" by Minnie
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written free verse poem that is both strong and emotional. So true, when there is the death of someone close I always feel like the world has gotten smaller. I suspose that you are right, it does indeed loose some color.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:For this reader the portrait of a child attending their first funeral is seen.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see nothing at all wrong with this spelling grammar or mechanics of this poem.
Minnie, thank you for sharing your powerful poem.
Write On!
Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this chapter.
Writing style:Family thriller drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Good job, this makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure is fair for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems to be appropriate for its individual speaker.
My favorite line: ---“Just Kai.” Nail emphasizes. “And what he stole.”---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written drama with good descriptions that help the reader picture the scenes while trying to get into the story.
Strong characters with good individual dialogs.
Mabey just me but seemed to have too much drama. Kept loosing my attention. That's just one opinion.
aracrae, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider a good edit and proof read and possibly shortening or breaking down to several chapters. This will make it less intimidating for a reader. Today's readers seem to like short and to the point.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is not good for this reader.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Sometimes life is just a beach. Modern society and human nature can get us all down at certain times in life.
Well told opinion article that expresses your thoughts well. Seems to be written more in a fast rant. A good edit to the format and this could be a top article revealing signs of the time.
In life everyone goes through times when it seems everything is against us. Hang in there, it gets better.
This article reveals a great talent for expressing your thoughts. Use that talent to try and fix things. Time is on your side.
Chaotic Evil, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider a good proof read and edit to make the format less intimidating and easier to read.
Hi HuntersMoon, I came across this delightful psalm while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Sunset Melody" by HuntersMoon.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A great tune to this 42 line melody. This is the sunset's melody. A great idea for this awesome lullaby. No doubt a prize winner. A catchy rhyme scheme that stays with the reader. Well done.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the portrait of a composure drifting through time while composing this classic lullaby.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this piece of art.
HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing this beautiful song. Write On!
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