Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers and potential readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nicely structured tale that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to its speaker.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I read the Barnabas: Angelique Strikes Again story and this in reverse order so please excuse if I make any mistakes. I didn't realize it was two separate items.
I guess I should have read this first because it does make more sense out of the Angelique Strikes Again story.
Both are well worded and well written with a good format that makes it easy for the reader. Presented in a very professional manner.
Ghost stories can indeed be hard for a reader to keep up with so seems like a good idea to add this description for the reader to read first.
Princess Megan Rose 22 Years, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available for more readers and potential readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure could be easier for the reader. Consider larger font with line-spacing and blank lines between paragraphs. This will make it less intimidating to would be readers and easier for those of us with weak eyes.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line: --- I stand frozen trying to believe these things that seem impossible, and then I unlock my phone and hit call before I can believe in a happier future but also before I lose the hope in our eyes in the mirror.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well worded, well formatted mystery tale that takes the reader into the shoes of the author..
I don't really get the need for the diary style days left entries. I'm sure there's a reason I just missed it.
Good descriptions that make it easy for the reader to feel for the author.
BarbaricYawp, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider a good proof read and edit. Todays reader's seem to have a short attention span.
Hi again Ken HuntersMoon, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Irish Heaven" by HuntersMoon
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Although extremely short, I love this masterpiece. You and old Sean McGee have made me laugh. I hope you won the make me laugh prompt contest because this is good.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a leprechaun laying on a sunny beach having a drink.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I cannot find any problems at all with the spelling and grammar or mechanics of this masterpiece.
HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing your art.
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Hi again Dr M C Gupta, I just reviewed your poem on suicide and then this one come up, I assure you I am not a stalker. I came across this poem while random reviewing. I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
Hi Ken HuntersMoon, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "A Letter Home" by HuntersMoon
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Letter style poetry. A letter style poem that definitely reads as a true story.
Politics of our government is a touchy subject. I guess we are not meant to understand the why of modern day wars and skirmishes. Most of them make no sense to me. I suppose all we can do is vote, hope and pray.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soldier obeying the rules and preparing to come home.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can see no problem at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong work.
HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing your story.
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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well written strong and emotional story about Alzheimer's. When I was 18 years old I had the privilege of staying with my grandmother for a while, she had lost her husband a year before and suffered from Alzheimer's.
At least once a day she would come find me wherever I was and ask where is grandpa? I would have to tell her and it was like she was hearing that for the first time it was terrible .
She could remember things and tell stories from her childhood in such detail it was amazing . Her short term memory was pretty much gone. Alzheimer's is indeed a mysterious disease.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of heaven where everyone is happy and age does not exist.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this powerful story.
Purple Princess, Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written autobiographical type poem. Learning to hold your tongue is an art that most people never master. I like this well worded strong poem.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of 1 making sacrifices for the greater good. In so doing making their self stronger.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong poem.
Wandering Thoughts, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Hi Genipher, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "First Fire" by Genipher
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely written poem that shows humans have not changed much if any since primitive man in the natural order of things.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a caveman in a modern day house taking orders from his wife and trying to fulfill them the best of his ability.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar on mechanics of this delightful poem.
Genipher, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written positive story about how small insignificant things can make all the difference in the world sometimes. A good goal in life is to make an effort to make someone smile, everyday.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of Tommy and Sue meeting and going on to pursue a lifelong relationship living happily ever after.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nice structure that is easy for the reader.
My favorite line:--- It seemed their dream of exploring Mars might be eclipsed by interplanetary tensions.----
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nicely worded tale with good descriptions. This helps the reader to better get into the story. This story holds the readers attention well.
Kevster, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes this makes your work available to more readers and browsers
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure for the reader. Consider larger font with line spacing for those readers with weaker eyes.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue is specific to the speaker.
My favorite line:--- Must be nice I say to myself, to just stay home and do whatever the hell you want, and have a human to take care of all your needs while you just pretty much chill your whole life.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well worded diary style tale that describes the situation well. I bet every one goes through phases just like this. We have to teach ourself to look at tomorrow instead of dwelling on yesterday.
This is a very strongly written story where the emotions grab the reader. Maybe you can focus all that artistic talent toward happy writings. Or both I think most all writers like to vent through writing from time to time.
Ang1974, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts. Possibly some larger font for those of us with weak eyes.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written short poetic poem with a random rhyming pattern. Contradistinction, a great idea for this entertaining work.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a black sheep trying to fit in.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with grammar spelling on mechanics of this delightful poem.
dogwood212 thank you for sharing your work.
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Hi stricuckoo, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Princess" by stricuckoo
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely worded emotional poem with a random rhyming pattern. All working good together to give this poem it's strong poetic flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a chameleon setting in a mist, not sure what to change into next.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.
stricuckoo, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two, by listing 3 genres it will make your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nicely structured story that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes, the dialog does seem specific for its speaker.
My favorite line:--- Phil grumbled, "Sixty some years old, and studying mortuary sciences. This major attracts some creeps and he is at the top of my list. You watch, we will see him on the TV news a few years from now. Exposed as some sort of freak, experimenting on dead bodies or maybe even a serial killer."---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A great storyline, well written with good descriptions that help give this tale it's realistic flow.
Strong well described character's that comes to life in this entertaining mystery.
A nice twist at the end that catches the reader a little off guard. This story holds the readers attention well from start to finish. Well done.
Damon Nomad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely written deep poem filled with true advice.
The repeating line contributes to this poems over all honest true flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:For this reader, I see an ancient Greek philosopher trying to teach younger people how to act in relationships.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.
TheBusmanPost, thank you for sharing your strong poem.
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Clarity:The title describes the contents of this story well.
Writing style:Personal comedy drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?yes, this makes your work available to more readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nice structure and format that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem specific to its speaker.
My favorite line:---Sally's face turned beet red with embarrassment as she quickly grabbed the red rose and put it in her hair before quickly using her denim jacket to cover the hole in her skirt---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written and very entertaining tale.
Great descriptions that help the reader to picture the scene while getting into the story.
Kieran 1998, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written strong emotional poem. Relationships are tough, even more so when you are young. In time you learn how to better cope with situations.
A strong start to this poem that shows emotions. Well worded in a poetic nature that leads to this poems realistic flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the picture of young people in a relationship slowly getting to know each other. Trying to conclude what to expect from each other.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.
Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this tale quite well.
Writing style: Sci-Fi drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more Raiders or potential readers.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure and format that makes it easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialogue does seem to be specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line:--- “If I don’t get my way I stop what I am doing. And I refuse to continue until I get it.”---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining sci-fi tale.
Good descriptions to help the reader picture the scene's.
The story moves along at a nice pace that helps to give an overall good flow.
PureSciFi, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after some time.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written free verse true sports poem.
The referees and umpires indeed can make all the difference in the world. As the fans blood gets really hot during these games.
Even in small early age children's events it is amazing to watch and see how hot the parents get at the officials. They create quite a scene pretty much every game.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: For this reader my mind is taken back to memories of the sporting events with the parents creating quite a spectacle.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all but I see with the grammar spelling on mechanics of this sporting poem.
Tim Chiu, Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!
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