*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/cuzzinjoe/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/6
Review Requests: ON
1,278 Public Reviews Given
1,278 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
Previous ... 2 3 4 5 -6- 7 8 9 10 11 ... Next
126
126
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
An image for the Summer raid!

Hi again Princess Megan Rose 22 Years, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Barnabas: Angelique Strikes Again"  by Princess Megan Rose 22 Years

Clarity: A good title that describes thje content of this chapter well.

Writing style: mythological fan fiction drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Of course they are.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure and format that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does indeed seem specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---"Oh, my Dear sweet sister. I have a better scheme and more deceptions then you do. You are the worst witch!" Nicholas laughed.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well worded and well written ghostly tale presented in a very professional format.

Great descriptions that take the reader into the story
right beside Angelique. A great idea for this entertaining story.

The Read this first made it a bit confusing for me, I didn't realize I was supposed to click it.

Princess Megan Rose 22 Years, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
~Click here to join a fun reviewing group~ Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
127
127
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
An image for the Summer raid!

Hi Princess Megan Rose 22 Years, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"My World Of Hopes, Dreams, Fantasies"  by Princess Megan Rose 22 Years

Clarity: A good title for this work.

Writing style: Mythological fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers and potential readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nicely structured tale that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to its speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I read the Barnabas: Angelique Strikes Again story and this in reverse order so please excuse if I make any mistakes. I didn't realize it was two separate items.

I guess I should have read this first because it does make more sense out of the Angelique Strikes Again story.

Both are well worded and well written with a good format that makes it easy for the reader. Presented in a very professional manner.

Ghost stories can indeed be hard for a reader to keep up with so seems like a good idea to add this description for the reader to read first.

Princess Megan Rose 22 Years, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
~Click here to join a fun reviewing group~ Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
128
128
Review of Not My Body  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
An image for the Summer raid!

Hi BarbaricYawp, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Not My Body"  by BarbaricYawp

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Biographical personal drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available for more readers and potential readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure could be easier for the reader. Consider larger font with line-spacing and blank lines between paragraphs. This will make it less intimidating to would be readers and easier for those of us with weak eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line: --- I stand frozen trying to believe these things that seem impossible, and then I unlock my phone and hit call before I can believe in a happier future but also before I lose the hope in our eyes in the mirror.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well worded, well formatted mystery tale that takes the reader into the shoes of the author..

I don't really get the need for the diary style days left entries. I'm sure there's a reason I just missed it.

Good descriptions that make it easy for the reader to feel for the author.

BarbaricYawp, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good proof read and edit. Todays reader's seem to have a short attention span.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
~Click here to join a fun reviewing group~ Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
129
129
Review of Irish Heaven  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An image for the Summer raid!


Hi again Ken HuntersMoon, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Irish Heaven"  by HuntersMoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Although extremely short, I love this masterpiece. You and old Sean McGee have made me laugh. I hope you won the make me laugh prompt contest because this is good.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a leprechaun laying on a sunny beach having a drink.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I cannot find any problems at all with the spelling and grammar or mechanics of this masterpiece.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing your art.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2194836 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
130
130
Review of Want or Will  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
An image for the Summer raid!


Hi cheshire, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Want or Will"  by cheshire

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well written poem emphasizing our questions about life. When you get the answers please let me know.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a young soul being confused by all life's questions.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problem at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining poem.

cheshire, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2194836 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
131
131
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
An image for the Summer raid!


Hi again Dr M C Gupta, I just reviewed your poem on suicide and then this one come up, I assure you I am not a stalker. I came across this poem while random reviewing. I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "LET US BE GUIDED BY THE HEART"  by Dr M C Gupta

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Another well written poem. This poem is a bit short but says a whole lot with a few words. Well done.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a young couple in love trying to figure out how to make their relationship work through time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Dr M C Gupta, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2194836 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
132
132
Review of A Letter Home  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
An image for the Summer raid!


Hi Ken HuntersMoon, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A Letter Home"  by HuntersMoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Letter style poetry. A letter style poem that definitely reads as a true story.
Politics of our government is a touchy subject. I guess we are not meant to understand the why of modern day wars and skirmishes. Most of them make no sense to me. I suppose all we can do is vote, hope and pray.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soldier obeying the rules and preparing to come home.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can see no problem at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong work.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing your story.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2194836 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
133
133
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
An image for the Summer raid!


Hi Purple Princess, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "It's just another lie"  by Purple Princess

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well written strong and emotional story about Alzheimer's. When I was 18 years old I had the privilege of staying with my grandmother for a while, she had lost her husband a year before and suffered from Alzheimer's.

At least once a day she would come find me wherever I was and ask where is grandpa? I would have to tell her and it was like she was hearing that for the first time it was terrible .
She could remember things and tell stories from her childhood in such detail it was amazing . Her short term memory was pretty much gone. Alzheimer's is indeed a mysterious disease.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of heaven where everyone is happy and age does not exist.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this powerful story.

Purple Princess, Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2194836 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
134
134
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Wandering Thoughts, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "My Life Goes on Like This"  by Wandering Thoughts

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written autobiographical type poem. Learning to hold your tongue is an art that most people never master. I like this well worded strong poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of 1 making sacrifices for the greater good. In so doing making their self stronger.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong poem.

Wandering Thoughts, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2194836 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
135
135
Review of First Fire  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Genipher, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "First Fire"  by Genipher

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely written poem that shows humans have not changed much if any since primitive man in the natural order of things.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a caveman in a modern day house taking orders from his wife and trying to fulfill them the best of his ability.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar on mechanics of this delightful poem.

Genipher, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
136
136
Review of Chapter 13  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi again Ang1974, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Chapter 13"  by Ang1974

Clarity: A good title, however it could describe the content of this chapter.

Writing style:Personal diary drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure that is somewhat easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:--- I can't believe it is October
already, time just seems to be going faster and faster.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well described diary style article. This work carries a honest realistic flow.

I never understood why people wash dishes to put them in the dishwasher either.

Ang1974, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider larger font with line spacing. This will make it easier for the reader and inviting to a browser.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
137
137
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Hi THANKFUL SONALI Now What? I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "You Knew It's a Stew"  by THANKFUL SONALI Now What?

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A entertaining poem written a simplistic style that really works for this poem.

This is a very refreshing poem. Most of us at times get so carried away shooting for perfect, then we never succeed. That takes all the fun out of it.

This simple great little poem has inspired me, I think I will try simple and try to have some fun at it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see an artist having fun and yet taking pride and their craft.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problem at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

THANKFUL SONALI Now What? ,thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
138
138
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Hi Linn Ann Book writer, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: {item:# }Waiting on the Shore by Linn
Ann Book writer

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Another beautifully written poem. Says a lot in a few well picked words.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see a soul setting on the beach of time watching as a lost soul mate approaches from a far.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problem at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Linn Ann thank you for sharing another lovely poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
139
139
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi jackiemuse, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A Bad Day Turns on a Rose... WC 292"  by jackiemuse

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written positive story about how small insignificant things can make all the difference in the world sometimes. A good goal in life is to make an effort to make someone smile, everyday.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of Tommy and Sue meeting and going on to pursue a lifelong relationship living happily ever after.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
140
140
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kevster, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Chronicles of Willowdale- Book 2"  by Kevster

Clarity: A good title for this sci-fi tale.

Writing style:Childrens sci-fi drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Good job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nice structure that is easy for the reader.


My favorite line:--- It seemed their dream of exploring Mars might be eclipsed by interplanetary tensions.----

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nicely worded tale with good descriptions. This helps the reader to better get into the story. This story holds the readers attention well.

Kevster, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
141
141
Review of Chapter 1  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Ang1974, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Chapter 1"  by Ang1974

Clarity: A nice title for thiis tale.

Writing style: Biographical personal drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes this makes your work available to more readers and browsers

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure for the reader. Consider larger font with line spacing for those readers with weaker eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue is specific to the speaker.

My favorite line:--- Must be nice I say to myself, to just stay home and do whatever the hell you want, and have a human to take care of all your needs while you just pretty much chill your whole life.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well worded diary style tale that describes the situation well. I bet every one goes through phases just like this. We have to teach ourself to look at tomorrow instead of dwelling on yesterday.

This is a very strongly written story where the emotions grab the reader. Maybe you can focus all that artistic talent toward happy writings. Or both I think most all writers like to vent through writing from time to time.

Ang1974, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts. Possibly some larger font for those of us with weak eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
142
142
Review of Contradistinction  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi dogwood212, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Contradistinction"  by dogwood212

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written short poetic poem with a random rhyming pattern. Contradistinction, a great idea for this entertaining work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a black sheep trying to fit in.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with grammar spelling on mechanics of this delightful poem.

dogwood212 thank you for sharing your work.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
143
143
Review of Princess  
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi stricuckoo, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Princess"  by stricuckoo

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely worded emotional poem with a random rhyming pattern. All working good together to give this poem it's strong poetic flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a chameleon setting in a mist, not sure what to change into next.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

stricuckoo, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
144
144
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Damon Nomad, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"A Quiet Little Man"  by Damon Nomad

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Teenage mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only two, by listing 3 genres it will make your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nicely structured story that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes, the dialog does seem specific for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- Phil grumbled, "Sixty some years old, and studying mortuary sciences. This major attracts some creeps and he is at the top of my list. You watch, we will see him on the TV news a few years from now. Exposed as some sort of freak, experimenting on dead bodies or maybe even a serial killer."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A great storyline, well written with good descriptions that help give this tale it's realistic flow.

Strong well described character's that comes to life in this entertaining mystery.

A nice twist at the end that catches the reader a little off guard. This story holds the readers attention well from start to finish. Well done.



Damon Nomad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
145
145
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi TheBusmanPost, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Just Be Yourself "  by TheBusmanPost

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely written deep poem filled with true advice.
The repeating line contributes to this poems over all honest true flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:For this reader, I see an ancient Greek philosopher trying to teach younger people how to act in relationships.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

TheBusmanPost, thank you for sharing your strong poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
146
146
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kieran 1998, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Sally's Skirt Struggles!"  by Kieran 1998

Clarity:The title describes the contents of this story well.

Writing style:Personal comedy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nice structure and format that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---Sally's face turned beet red with embarrassment as she quickly grabbed the red rose and put it in her hair before quickly using her denim jacket to cover the hole in her skirt---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written and very entertaining tale.
Great descriptions that help the reader to picture the scene while getting into the story.

Kieran 1998, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
147
147
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi Paul, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "and you...and love"  by Paul

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written strong emotional poem. Relationships are tough, even more so when you are young. In time you learn how to better cope with situations.

A strong start to this poem that shows emotions. Well worded in a poetic nature that leads to this poems realistic flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the picture of young people in a relationship slowly getting to know each other. Trying to conclude what to expect from each other.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Paul, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
148
148
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi PureSciFi, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Strengths and Weaknesses"  by PureSciFi

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this tale quite well.

Writing style: Sci-Fi drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more Raiders or potential readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure and format that makes it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialogue does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- “If I don’t get my way I stop what I am doing. And I refuse to continue until I get it.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining sci-fi tale.
Good descriptions to help the reader picture the scene's.
The story moves along at a nice pace that helps to give an overall good flow.


PureSciFi, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after some time.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
149
149
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Tim Chiu, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Curse of Living: A Grueling Contempt"  by Tim Chiu

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written free verse true sports poem.
The referees and umpires indeed can make all the difference in the world. As the fans blood gets really hot during these games.

Even in small early age children's events it is amazing to watch and see how hot the parents get at the officials. They create quite a scene pretty much every game.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: For this reader my mind is taken back to memories of the sporting events with the parents creating quite a spectacle.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all but I see with the grammar spelling on mechanics of this sporting poem.

Tim Chiu, Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

Joseph Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.
Image #2290295 over display limit. -?- "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
150
150
Review by Joseph
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi N.A Miller, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Return to Narnia "  by N.A Miller

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Fantasy childrens folktale.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good format that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialog is specific to it's speaker.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written fantasy with good descriptions that help the reader picture the scenes.

A classic childrens story that you have combined with for this adventure folktale. This should help bring more readers to this tale.

There seems to be plenty of well described time portal style changes however not a whole lot of new action to keep the reader's peak attention.

Well narrated and structured like a work ready for print.

N.A Miller, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider adding some new action to better keep the readers attention peeked.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
"disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" 
WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  [E]
Join the fun! We inspire reviewers through kindness and learning! Winner of eight Quills!
by Maryann
Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
848 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 34 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/cuzzinjoe/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/6