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Review of A poem by Apollo  Open in new Window.
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Hi Ju-Ju I came across this poem while random reviewing for WDC Superpowers 2025 summer raid.
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My impressions of the poem: "A poem by Apollo" Open in new Window. by Ju-Ju

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A charming romance style poem. A nice rhyming pattern that adds to the delightful flow of this entertaining poem.



Artistic Voice and Imagery:The image of soulmates in the early stage of a lasting relationship, is pictured in this readers mind.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with the mechanics of this strong poem.
*Smile*

Ju-Ju thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Lonewolf I came across this poem while random reviewing for WDC Superpowers Raid.
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My impressions of the poem: "Noah and Titus at the Zoo" Open in new Window. by Lonewolf

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written delightful poem that carries a nice tone. Seems to do an excellent job meeting the prompt requirements.

A cheerful picture of Noah and Titus has been engraved in my mind. They certainly did have a time.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of two boys on a zoological adventure. There they admire many of nature's finest including lions, monkeys, elephants and Penguins.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see.

Lonewolf thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi zehn I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Veilborn: Fracture of the Nine Realms" Open in new Window. by zehn

Clarity: Consider a title that better describes the contents of this specific piece.

Writing style: Ancient mythological drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? *Smile* Nicely structured making it easy for the reader.

My favorite line:---A silence so heavy it drowned the world. Fires refused to burn. Winds froze midflight. Even the gods turned their eyes away.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good strong opening that catches the reader's attention, making them want to know more.

Indeed this outline sounds as if it could lead to a great mythological world. Consider experimenting with making this even stronger to catch the full attention of browsers and persuade them to want to the page.

Zehn thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.


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Review of Illusions  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Fyn I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Illusions" Open in new Window. by Fyn

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A deep and emotional free verse form poem where the author questions past choices made in child rearing. This work carries a consistent realistic tone throughout. I feel most people will be able to relate with this poem.

Human nature is a mysterious thing. Indeed there are people that it would seem you just cannot help, the more you try only seems to make it worse. We really never know what's going on in another person's mind without walking in their shoes.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a parent questioning their past decisions concerning raising a child. Finally accepting what has been done is done. Concluding it is time to leave the past behind us and move on to the future.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this deep work that has got this reader's mind spinning.

Fyn thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Layers of Poetry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Layers of Poetry" Open in new Window. by Mary Ann MCPhedran

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique and original lady is portrayed from this short yet well described to work.
Great descriptions I am quite sure I have met Kate several times.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an elderly lady in a white raincoat who appears very poor yet sleeps on a mattress packed full of wealth.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work. However I would consider experimenting with no punctuation for this deep poetic work.

Mary Ann MCPhedran thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi JCosmos I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "}July 4th Memories Writers’ Cramp" Open in new Window. by JCosmos

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I know for a fact that writer's cramp contest with a 24 hour time limit can most often turn into a race with time. The deadline is getting close and even though we're not happy with our work we quickly try to meet the requirements and send it, so we can call it finished. Sounds so easy yet time catches up too quick.

This seems like one of the more complicated prompts although I think you met the prompt words well. It appears that the time started catching up causing a bit of a rush to finish making the finished product look a bit more like a rough draft. Personally I have quite a collection of these unsubmitted works that time caught up and I was not happy. Therefore going into file 13 where I'll finish when I get time [probably never] yet work and ideas that will be subconsciously possibly used in the future.



Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a modern writer trying to cram the contents of a unfinished masterpiece into the last hour of a contest deadline.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problem at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

JCosmos thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of In An Instant  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Noisy Wren I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "In An Instant" Open in new Window. by Noisy Wren

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A unique form with repeating lines that focuses on the deep meaning of being. A random rhyming pattern that adds to the poetic tone.
The unique flow although a bit repetitive still leaves the reader much to dive into, leaving his mind working on the deep meaning of being.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of the ancient land of Greece where a young philosopher begins their quest by questioning the meaning of being and drafting it on paper.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep work.

Noisy Wren thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Netty I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: ""Stood on the Sand"" Open in new Window. by Netty

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong spiritual poem written in free verse form focusing on the wonders of God's creations. Being blessed with the ability to praise God for allowing us this privilege is certainly something all of us should take advantage of at all times.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a young profit admiring the beauties of creation while acknowledging the blessings they're receiving from a higher power.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this powerful and delightful work.*Ha*

Netty thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Prem Junior I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "May a Word Someday " Open in new Window. by Prem Junior

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An interesting romance poem focusing on the positive inspirational outlook.
Written in the style of a romance poem to the one that got away.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a relationship ended by uncontrollable circumstances. One writes a desperate attempt to rekindle that flame.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Prem Junior thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of A Love Supreme  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi ridinghood-p.boutilier I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "A Love Supreme" Open in new Window. by ridinghood-p.boutilier

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong spiritual poem. Short sweet and straight to the point, in a few words this poem says a whole lot. Well done.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an ancient prophet praying to the God almighty. They began with what can I say you know it all already Lord God almighty.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

ridinghood-p.boutilier thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again JCosmos I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Imprisoned for a Typo" Open in new Window. by JCosmos

Clarity:A great title for this historical tale.

Writing style: Historical political drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes *Smile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? *Smile* An awesome structure that does indeed make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *Smile* The dialog is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- His lawyer tried to explain the circumstances. .

“it was a simple typo. These things happen particularly on breaking news stories.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A great well written historical article.
The opening could be stronger to grab the reader's attention better.

A wonderful structure with good historical elements that make this a great read.

JCosmos thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Cool* *Smile*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ju-Ju I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"First chapter of Secrets of the Sirens" Open in new Window. by Ju-Ju

Clarity: Seems like a good book title, however a title for the chapter would be preferred.

Writing style: Mythological war drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?No, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good format however a bit more line spacing as well as breaking down the longer paragraph into shorter ones would make it easier on the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---That was until I was knocked out. Then, my life depended on the gods being in my favor.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good informational opening. Stronger opening lines would better grab the readers attention. Possibly the second paragraph that starts out "Let the men fight, Misery!" would seem like a stronger opening.

Great descriptions of both characters and settings, this helps to pull the reader into the story.
I love ancient mythology and this does seem like a great start for a wonderful no novel.

A good mysterious ending that makes the reader want to turn the page and read more.

Ju-Ju thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider breaking down the longer paragraphs with a blank line between them. This makes it appear more inviting as well as easier for the reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Shezi I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Echoes at My Funeral" Open in new Window. by Shezi

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong poetic article describing a funeral from the view of the deceased. Many good questions that indeed could be asked from the deceased. A lot of comments that are typical at a funeral.

In my opinion this seems like a rough draft of a soon to be work of art.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A young artist in the process of finding their skills begins carving and chiseling on a block of stone. Positive that there is a masterpiece inside the stone yet no idea what it looks like. Determined they keep chiseling away at the stone to eventually uncover the hidden treasure.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Consider saving this work and editing from time to time. Chiseling away at that stone to eventually find the final poetic form that will showcase the hidden treasure. Experiment with trying to have no sentences that start with 'and' or 'but'.

Shezi thank you for sharing your work. This is only one humble opinion.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Xelor/Daoud I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Veil of Eternal Spirit" Open in new Window. by Xelor/Daoud

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:'The human mind, a mirror of fractured time' Indeed even in today's technological modern advanced times the mysteries of the human mind are yet to be solved.

A charming and well worded poem with a nice rhyming scheme that adds to the overall deep flow of this work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a world ancient that has not yet come where a wise philosopher is engaged in his lifelong work of trying to decipher the human mind.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this psychedelic poem.
*RainbowL* *Cool* *Pumpkin* *ButtonP* *Smirk2* *Smirk* *Crown1* *StarfishP* *Care*
Xelor/Daoud thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Carly: poems & novel I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Family Traditions Strike A Blow " Open in new Window. by Carly: poems & novel

Clarity:A good catchy title that activates my curiosity.

Writing style: Contest entry, family drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile* Nicely structured making it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile* The dialogue does indeed seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---I shook my head again, "Generations. On my dad's side of the family."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: The writer's cramp is a great contest that challenges the author to do the work in 24 hours. I know for a fact it is much harder than it sounds. Well done.

I like the opening, there's nothing like the family tradition. Looks like you nailed the prompt which was kind of a difficult one it appears to me.

A creative storyline, well laid out with good descriptions and seems like a great job with the dialogue which gives this tale a realistic tone.

Carly: poems & novel thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
*Smile* *Smile*
Suggestions:*Star* *Cool* *Fireworks5* *BigSmile*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Hi again Max Griffin I came across this article while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the article: "How to do reviews tab" Open in new Window. by Max Griffin

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A very informational article with great suggestions. A great use of colored fonts to highlight the specific items that you want to stand out.

Nicely done with a professional looking format and structure that makes this article appealing to a reader or browser.

Personally I am not familiar with the roundtable however this still seems like awesome advice.



Max Griffin thank you for sharing your article.
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Review of Night self  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi sona I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Invalid Item" Open in new Window. by sona

Clarity: I like the title, it makes me curious about the content.

Writing style: Psychological opinion melodrama.

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Are all 3 genres listed? Only 1 is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Even though this is a short work it appears crowded and could benefit from some line spacing with a bank line between longer paragraphs. This does make it easier for the reader and more inviting to a browser or would be reader.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An interesting article that does make some good points and ask good question. Indeed the human mind seems to find a lot of mystery after the midnight hour.

Reads much like a rough draft, a bit of line spacing and possibly a larger font would make it more appealing. Also the correct use of capital letters would make it appear much more professional. What's up with the future date?
sona thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.


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Joseph
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Review of Sum Total  Open in new Window.
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Hi again JACE I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Sum Total" Open in new Window. by JACE

Clarity:A good title however I don't get it.

Writing style:Contest entry fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Smile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile*


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good opening that piques my curiosity however I get confused and lost after about four paragraphs.

Looks like a good use of the prompt words for the contest.*Smile*

JACEthank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider using these drafts for three separate stories.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Hi again Xakkenna Lang I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Tourturous Insanity" Open in new Window. by Xakkenna Lang

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep philosophical work emphasizing on human nature and it's faults.
This well worded poem has a catchy flow and has got this reader's mind to working.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see an ancient world at war with itself. Experimenting on prisoners of war to gain information. They conclude from their experiments that the results would be more accurate if they use the same technique on themselves.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep entertaining work.
Consider experimenting with taking out two of the repeating lines at the end. They are not needed.

Xakkenna Lang*Smile* *Smile* *Smile* thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again Lonewolf I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Dinner Disaster" Open in new Window. by Lonewolf

Clarity:A good title for this Dinner tale.

Writing style:Contest entry family drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed? *Smile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Smile*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Smile*

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Writers Cramp contest is much harder than anybody realizes, at least for me. You have 24 hours but usually by the time I see the prompt then decide to try. There's about 10 hours left and it's bedtime. A great contest though it teaches you to get it out there instead of tweaking it over and over looking for that elusive perfection.

Looks like you've done a great job here. A good opening however it could be stronger to grab my attention better. A good realistic storyline. Fantastic structure with great descriptions. I can almost taste those steaks.*ForkSpoon*
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Lonewolf thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.


WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Hi Jessica Morgan I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "A Decade is a long time" Open in new Window. by Jessica Morgan

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A decade is a long time and no time at all. The blink of an eye.

A well worded and nicely structured poem that has a realistic easy flow. 'Tied the knot, got hitched, it was legal.'
*Mindblown* *BalloonBl* *Smirk* A entertaining work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a happy modern couple celebrating their 50th golden wedding anniversary.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this charming work.

Jessica Morgan thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Love Letter  Open in new Window.
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Hi Just Jae I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Love Letter" Open in new Window. by Just Jae

Clarity: Seems like a good title for this lost love letter tale.

Writing style: Romance emotional drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes*BigSmile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Yes *BigSmile* Nicely structured making it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes *BigSmile* The dialog is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Yet, she just seen a letter dated fifteen years after the fact. She had to process her mother's death before she could delve further into what she just read.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good idea for this entertaining contest entry letter. A fair opening that is interesting yet it could be a bit stronger to grab the reader's attention from the start better.

I like that Jerry had a daughter named Geri.

Just Jae thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: *Smirk2*

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Joseph
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Review of Crown Of Ashes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Dark fiction and dark humor I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Crown Of Ashes" Open in new Window. by Dark fiction and dark humor

Clarity: A intriguing title.

Writing style:Screenplay fiction drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes*Smile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Yes *Smile* a good structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes *Smile* the dialogue does seem appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Somehow, Mark gathers strength. He grabs his keys, adrenaline kicking in, runs to his car, and slams the engine on before flying out of there like a bat outta hell. He looks back, but where's the devil dude?---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: 'Shiver me Timbers' a good opening that drags the reader into the story.

The play like format helps to give this work a realistic tone that keeps it real for the reader. An interesting storyline that keeps the reader on his toes trying to decipher the puzzle.

Dark fiction and dark humor thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider adding more descriptions of the setting and or the characters. The constant dialogue gets a bit repetitive and seems to need something to break it up.

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Joseph
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Review of 3 Letters  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Tarinan Reanice I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "3 Letters" Open in new Window. by Tarinan Reanice

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A most delightful three letters poem written in an original unique format still yet it carries a entertaining realistic tone.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: There are just some people out there that seem to be blind to what is obvious right in front of their face. It's like they have blinders on. What is so obvious to the majority of others they just can't see. Instead they go after the exact opposite, almost like they're trying to get hurt.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this unique work.

Tarinan Reanice thank you for sharing your poem. *Lightning2* *Lightning2* *Sun* *BigSmile*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Lonewolf I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Tooth Fairy's Gift" Open in new Window. by Lonewolf

Clarity: A great title for this delightful children's tale.

Writing style: Children's fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes *Smile* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Indeed. *Smile* A beautiful structure that does make it so easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes *Smile* the dialogue is appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Noah grinned as he read the note, his little fingers tracing the elegant, swirling letters.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A good opening for this delightful tale that brings back fond memories. A most entertaining storyline that I'm sure any child would be happy to read or hear.

An awesome happy ending to this tooth Fairy classic.*FairyR*

Lonewolf thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: *HappyCry* *Ha* *BigSmile* *BigSmile*

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