Hi again QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Suitcase" by QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon
Clarity:A good title for this entertaining work.
Writing style:Mystery fiction drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?An awesome structure, format and font size that makes it both easy and inviting for the reader or potential reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does indeed seem to be specific for its speaker.
My favorite line:--- Once the suitcase is unlocked, whatever is inside will be unleashed forever. A ‘Pandora’s box’ as it were.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A delightful tale that is well written with good descriptions that make it easy for the reader to relate to.
Short and to the point just the way today's modern reader likes things.
A wonderful structure that makes it appealing to browsers or would be readers.
QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions:Consider adding more to this awesome work.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful story emphasizing how easy it is for us to let society dictate our thoughts and emotions. In time history usually shows that society is totally wrong about most everything. It is mostly programmed in by the powers of the time and age.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a beautiful person nearly starving themself to try and fit in to what they perceive is desired from what society is dictating at a certain time.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining work.
Jane Doe, thank you for sharing your work.
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Hi QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, I came across this entertaining story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Banana Pancakes" by QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:This entertaining story certainly reads like a true story. This keeps it real while helping the reader get into the story-line. I really like the true story style of this work.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a happy family having a small reunion. Cooking and then feasting on the results. Being very happy and creating a lifelong memory for all involved.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful tale. This tale has given me the craving for pancakes, banana style.
QueenNormaJean CheerleaderSoon, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Hi Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Henry the 8th" by Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique idea and style for this entertaining work. I really like the last line, it caught this reader totally off guard.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see someone having a dream about the subject after reading about Henry the eighth.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work. I really like the font size style and layout.
Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format or somewhat easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialogue does seem to be specific for it's speaker.
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining tale written in script style. This unique style gets the readers attention.
A deep mystery begins to unravel leaving the reader wanting to know more and to turn the page.
riri, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider experimenting with breaking down some of the longer sentences into shorter ones.
Clarity:A great title for this strong inspirational work.
Writing style:Inspirational experience drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure and format that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialogue is specific to which it's.
My favorite line:---The only words that I remember – the words we sang every time the words “I can’t” were uttered in our household and the words I also sang to my own son – were, “I’ll never, ever say I can’t; I’ll always say, I’ll try.”---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written biography style story emphasizing the great family morals that you were raised with.
This inspirational story holds this reader's attention well from start to finish. Well done this story has reminded me many of our family values. Indeed I am inspired.
Kenzie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful poem. I really like the unique images at top and bottom of poem.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a picture of heaven with God sitting on his throne admiring all the beauty from the happy souls as well as the animals coexisting in peace.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with your grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining beautiful poem.
Kenzie, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Yes the structure is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes.
My favorite line:---I just had to split just one grape into two halves, side by side,---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A poetic sci-fi style work. Well worded, short and to the point the way the modern reader likes things.
Beaker, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A genuinely original work that is strong and deep. A nicely worded peace that adds to the original tune. Unsure if your notes were supposed to be included.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a math-magician practicing how to manipulate numbers.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problem with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong work with the exception of the notes.
beaker, thank you for sharing your entertaining work.
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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An awesome work. I really like the line ---"I stopped taking my meds because I didn't like the way they made me feel---
I did the same thing years back, the doctor had me on meds that made me fill low with no energy at all. After a while as circumstances had it I didn't get them filled in time and went about a week without, I felt great. I was honest with the doctor and told her that I wasn't going to take them anymore. That made her mad. That was 11 or 12 years ago and I still fill better with more energy. Everyone is wired a little different, they may work great for some people not so much for others. I say to each their own.
A great idea for this strong work I really like the references to -Encouraging soul and Failed poet -.
This reader can really relate to this awesome work .
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a fantasy world where the powers in charge try to make everyone the same however they cannot see succeed.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this very entertaining work.
Chico Mahalo, thank you for sharing this awesome work.
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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?An awesome structure that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line:--- Tushar knew, as he watched her, that she was beyond irritated. She was really angry. She wouldn't poke and prod herself like that unless she was really angry.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written entertaining story. This helps the reader to relate to the story.
A realistic tone that makes this story sound like a true story. This helps the reader to get into the story-line better.
Thankful Sonali Looks Ahead, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is fairly easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does indeed seem to be specific to its speaker.
My favorite line:--- “Then I shall set myself ablaze!” The King rose abruptly from his seat at the dining table in a dramatic uproar, his breakfast - the said pie - opened up in front of him.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written fairy tale style children's tale.
A short yet entertaining tale exactly like the modern reader likes things.
ShmrGray, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after letting sit idle for a time.
Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A fair structure that is somewhat easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line:---Patience might be patient, but her mother was nothing less than stubborn---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written tale in a mystery style fantasy writing.
Good descriptions that help the reader to picture the setting as well as the characters.
BlackAdder, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: A good proofread and it never hurts. Consider a larger font with a bit more line-spacing to make it easier on those of us with weak eyes.
Hi again Winchester Jones, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Cold Wind" by Winchester Jones
Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this work.
Writing style: Biographical family drama.
Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line:---“Fine,” said Shelly, sounding like it wasn’t really fine at all. “But hold on tight!”---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written tale. Short yet to the point just like the modern reader likes things.
I like the ending, leaving enough room for the reader to fill in with their imagination as they see fit.
Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider adding to or using parts to fill in on other works.
Hi Darkscape Entertainment, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Chapter 9" by Darkscape Entertainment
Clarity: The title could better describe the content of this chapter.
Writing style:Relationship mystery drama.
Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is easy for the reader. A larger font would not hurt for those with the weak eyes.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem to be specific for it's speaker.
My favorite line:--- Somewhere, they could appreciate the solitude and speak openly.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A deep and emotional writing that tries to grab the reader's attention and hold it.
A lot of serious dialogue to make the storyline more real for the reader.
Well formatted with good descriptions that help the reader to picture the setting.
Darkscape Entertainment, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider a title that better describes the content after a good edit and proofread. Maybe break into smaller chapters as today's reader seems to like things short and to the point.
Hi Josh Keiser, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Judgment of Man" by Josh Keiser
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A free verse work about human nature. ---The fear of repercussion is the only thing holding me back---fears like this are what keep us somewhat sane.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see a dark crowded St. with many unsavory characters lurking about trying to mind their own business.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this entertaining work.
Josh Keiser, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format are good making it easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line:---Through training and experience we had learned that a clean campsite needed to have all edibles removed, or “Bear-Bagged,” which is to be put into a pack or container strung high out of reach.---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Well written, reads like a true story. This helps to keep the readers attention.
I really like the awesome picture.
Great job with the descriptions. This helps keep the story real, keeping the readers attention better.
Bears are drawn to the smell of food. While camping people often leave behind food scraps that attract bears. This has made bears less afraid of humans only being concerned with the spoils left behind.
You never really know how you will react to a bear when you come that close to him looking them in the eye. Afterwards wonder how you go to sleep in a tent.
It is that time of year again, they say bear or most active in July and August. Ironically we just have had an encounter with a bear the other night after cooking out.
foxtale, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Maybe consider extending the story a bit with the author's thoughts while attempting to go to sleep.
Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.
Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.
Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Good dialog that is specific to it's speaker.
My favorite line:--- He reached out, rubbing her hair a little. "It's ok, you scared me aight this is the hood you can't just climb in people's windows like that. But we good."---
My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written tale with great descriptions that help the reader get into the story-line.
A mythological tale with modern setting and dialog that work well to give this work a realistic tone.
Realistic style for this entertaining tale.
Serenity Levine, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider adding to the title to describe the contents better.
Hi Dr MC Gupta, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "HEAVENLY CURSE" by Dr MC Gupta
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A very well written deep and emotional poem. The rule of war are no rules.
This strongly worded poem carries a realistic flow that captivates the reader.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the fowls of the air feasting only the spoils of war.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find in the spelling grammar on mechanics of this strong entertaining work.
Dr MC Gupta, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Hi again Chico Mahalo, I came across this work while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "my humbug" by Chico Mahalo
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A bit curious about the non use of capitals in the title.
An interesting and entertaining free verse work or personal draft.
Well worded with a lot of catchy opposite phrases.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a poet hit with a surge of creativity and trying to get it all on paper while it's fresh.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics so this entertaining work.
Chico Mahalo, thank you for sharing your work.
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