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The picture painted of this little bird is so clear from the detail of its habits, and description. I like the personal viewpoint as you observe in a natural setting in time and space. I can imagine sitting watching with you. Great descriptions like "fueled their famished bellies" and "unstarcehd finery" are evocative.
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The free form poem has vivid images and a joyous tone. I like the images evoked with idea of "peeks", "swirls", "nips at noses" and "white webs of frost". Wow!
I I enjyed readign the flow aloud with its alliterative quality. The first verse flowed at an easier pace than the second likely in imitaion of the leaves having fun in the wind. 
In verse1 I assume you mean leaves when you say "They fall" though you never give a subject directly unless you mean the "colours" fall? You could more clearly just say "leaves fall" rather than a pronoun. It is stronger too.
The essence of the autumn is alive in this short weaving and the wonder of the season comes across in potent way. Thanks for sharing your tribute to Fall in a pleasant way. I wish I had such a "paintbrush"! 
Hi there. With this little piece I feel like you are puting your toes in the water of writing at WDC! 
I wouldn't start a story with "well"--though I know we do that when we are talking. LOL
Remember to put periods after each complete thought. it is easy to forget if you are used to texting! 
I didn't see a story though. 
It is hard to rate this as it seems incomplete--yet I feel the desire to connect with other authors and the intent you have.
Number two you leave it open for me to play with what the fluttering is 
I loved the idea of fairy dust as you stomp! LOL I am not sure it is haikuish but I love the magical element. "clapping their wings" is a wonderful visual.
Hi whiskerface! Thanks for entering in the "
This poem is delightful and I had to laugh at the mouse's persistence and then how the speaker makes the best of the situation: the ultimate threat! LOL I am dealing with mice at presetn and one bold one comes right up on my computer desk in daytime and looks at me. I have been trying to catch him.! 
NO idea where he disappears so fast. I miss my cat.
I liked the speaker's tone and his reaction to what he overheard. That others were laughing too made me wonder if they heard it too.
The poem was fun to read with its consistent rhyme and easy flow. A few places were off kilter in rhythm but did not detract for the entertainment value of the read. You used a number of "and" and two in the last verse.
Wow! An impressive poem in the style of Poe's Annabelle Lee. The rhyme and rhythm really mimicked the original and was such a pleasure to read aloud. I compared the version and this really rocks!
The title sets the tone and stage for this poem and the idea is original so I had to smile as I considered what a paper clip might complain about. It stirred curiosity. I had to laugh at the reason for the coming demise of its usefulness and while funny, I felt quite sad for it. You created that mood vibrantly.
I really had to laugh at this self assessment and it is awesome how you kept that twist from view until the end! LOL 
I burst out laughing at the end of your poem! Good show!
This poem was delightful to read and the voice and point of view of the frog, who wished he still had a tail, was potent. I could hear his total dismay and sorrow at his fate and the joy at his having the best of both words at one time. 
Some lines could perhaps be tightened up a bit to fit a more even flow but the story was moving and amusing.
The freestyle, without rhyme or rhyhm pattern really suits the theme in which the body is totally contorted. It was reminiscent of an old song "my knee bone connected to.." thought your connection are almost impossible but get your point across. I have to laugh considering the contortions to which end they lead. After all that nonsensical writing we would have to agree with the conclusion.
I liked how the last verse seemed to be a faster pace and the comparison to the police siren is potent. That is loud!
I have been reading some cool flash fiction pieces of late and found this contest mentioned. It is quite an undertaking to run a contest daily. Wow! 
