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#3978650

Review of Nature and Nurture

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I was drawn to the concept and lyrical flow of the title and was curious about Wreathed Poetry. How intriguing!
I imagine it took some time to get the rhyme correctly placed. I had to go look at the form and it seems to me this is successful rendition.

I enjoyed reading the flow of words that created a vivid metaphor. I thought the idea of "nature" beeing the thread" and the 'tatoos" as the effect so the world on our being! The psychogical with the scientific elements are brilliantly conceived. I see more and more in my own development how much conditioning and mimicry have influenced my Being and your expression of this idea is so original to me. It is a relevant and menaingful theme that evokes pondering.

I liked the tone at the end as I felt it was sending a little blame to others for how the speaker is! I had to smile. You begin in a serious tone and philosophical explanation and then he it the reader with something like a punch line! My take on it anyway! I love it!

I pondered at "blood and bone is but a piece.." as they are two things.

Thanks for sharing this amazing crafting of this deep message. I don't think I would have the patience to fashion the form. I learn from you.

Keep on scribing, master poet!
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Review of Witches Brew

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Welcome to WDC Mistress of the West! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

This is such a fantastic creative creation. It is amazing how you had the words fit the image of a cauldron! The title fits the theme.

The opening line reperesenting streaks of steam is brilliant! You set the scene witht eh word "whispering" as it gives me the notion of secret place.
The vocabulary is well chosen for the theme and woven effectively to create vivid imagery and soundscape
Bits of alliteration add to the atmosphere as well. I liked the bit of rhyme and the end and the concept of waitng for thier brewed wishes to come true. I like that you allow the audience to ponder on what those might be! Stirs the imagination.

In the title "Witches" should be possessive form with apostrophe I think.

I enjoyed reading the dramatic poem aloud and could imagine the scene clearly. Well brewed weaving taking palce in the dark where they whisper in secret. Thanks for sharing your witchy craft.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#3978120

Review of stronger

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Welcome mew,mew to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Wow! This is a potent and personal expression that speaks of resiliency in overcoming trauma or crisis. I like the positive voice and strength of the tone and the determination in the last line.

The free style form suits the emotional content and theme. The repeated phrase is very emphatic and purposeful. The building of strength is well shown in the movement of the mind's reflections.

The use of periods also is emphatic and asks us to pause often. Not sure if grammatically correct in every case, but interesting for pace.

This poem is inspiring with its strong voice as it makes a demand of oneself to trust in one's inner strength and beauty!

Thanks for sharing your personal crafting! Keep shining!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#3978090

Review of Cookies and Animal Crackers

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Hello Zinka! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I couldn't resist the title which stirred my memory of animal crackers and the song "Animal crackers in my soup" as well!

I had to laugh at the scene you portray here and I can imagine it. I have been in kindergarten rooms at lunch time! LOL You really have the tone of voice down pat! This would be a great poem to illustrate.

I like the short phrases and questions which lend to the drama and frustration. The rhyme works too and might even be expanded to have a pattern. It is short poem but really gets your point across and could be seen as comical . You might even expand the poem to include more ideas expereinces of messy kids. Very relevant theme.

I noticed a typo in "were" whihc should be "where".

I thought maybe you could put your name and date on a separate line as it was confusing as part of the poem.

I was wondering if writing it as a poem format would enhance the power and presentation of the words. Instead of just a group of linear statements, something like: {if I may be so bold as to mess with your work}

"What a mess!
All over her dress!
Crunched on the floor!
Where is a broom?
where is a mop?
I wish the kids would just stop!

One cracker mess here
(One) cookie mess there!
What? Some in her hair.?
Cookies and animal crackers
here, there, everywhere!"

You can also get a feeling of it and see where you might want to tweak it when you see it in this form.
This is just my point of view--take what feels right for you and leave the rest.

In any case, I found this entertaining with a strong voice and had fun playing here.
Thanks sharing your craft!! Keep it coming.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#3978088

Review of Haiku Poems

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Hello c-gates! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! I so enjoy the haiku form and am learning more and more about how to write it well so I was interested to read your renderings of the form.

I Like the selection youhave on the page as they have a rather comical vibe and tribute to a bad day in them. I had to smile at some of the last lines of you haiku. The zoo, the sauce and the phone dieing really evoked a response. I can relate to the last one about the door too. LOL

Most of them I feel are more senryu, a cousin of haiku with the same syllables and line count but concerning people/personal themes as opposed to the natural themes in haiku. Still, often folks use the haiku name as it is more familiar.

The format is well accomplished and each one has a perceptible contrast line that evokes our perception in another direction.
I believe haiku do not have capital letters so they can be boundless.

I wondered about "teased with the animals" wouldn't it be just "teased the animals"?

I had lots of fun reading these entertaining expressions, no matter the name. Well conceived little dramas too.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#3977719

Review of A Dragon in search of Coffee.

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Hi Cerbios!, Thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest" ! Here are my brief comments on your unique entry

I had a good time reading this comical poem. I think the comparison of this dragon description and his raging to being without coffee is so original a response to the prompt.

The combo of the fantasy theme with everyday items like the bedpost, furnace, baby cry and delineating what features came form everyday animals is brilliant!

I liked the magic of the RING and "morning shifts" ! What a hoot. Quite a commentary! I had to laugh at the anem of the witch too! Just too funny. I see an alarm clock!

The poem form is free style as I didn't note any rhyme or rhythm pattern. The intermittent and inner rhyme works and It suits the theme and the constant description and movement. I could hear the dragon speak as he relates his excuse and his journey. The vocabulary and actions fit the theme of dragon lore and

The imagery is well conceived and coffee drinkers will certainly get the point!! Creativity galore!! There are so many evocative underlying notions if we keep reading! The form could likely be tweaked but I loved the piece!

Keep the quill scribing!
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#3977605

Review of The Quintessence of the Thing

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HI catdok! Welcome to WDC !

I was so drawn by your evocative title on the Newbie page so here I am to celebrate you with a review!

I had a lot of fun reading this wonderful rhyming expression with its fascinating words in bold! Your humourous view of writing and using big words is original and entertaining entry ot the Wrtier's Cramp. I like the sing song effect!

The poem flows quite well with a steady rhyme scheme. The rhythm is not perfect but it did no throw me off the read and message.
It was a bit tricky to read line 4 of verse 2 out loud though!

I had to re do! LOL

Great words ahd me running to a dictionary to make sure I had it right. LOL I wondered what the Cramp prompt was--you could add an author's nte at the bottom of your piece for interest. Maybe the bold words might have been a prompt?

This is so cool and fun that it is well worth tweaking at some point. Awesome creativity for the shortness of time the Cramp gives . Good for you!

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#3977603

Review of The Dove Above

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I was drawn to the rhyming title and the image of the dove is such a potent symbol. This free style poem emits the vibe of peace and conveys concept of unity that love can bring.

The first two lines flow cohesively.
Then you change from third person to "WE" in the third line and I in the last.
It feels like there is more that you want to say here to clarify. I see that in the last line the speaker is inspired to call on the dove when so involved in the chaotic "crowd". It makes sense. The middle line is confusing.

The word "giant" describing crowd made me think more of giants. I wonder if "huge" or somethng that specifies why the crowd would have you call upon the dove.

The concepts here are relevant and inspiring. I think it is worth tweaking to give the full voice to your meaning.

Thanks for sharing your wonderful crafting with WDC! Keep on scribing with your muse!

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#3977546

Review of The beast

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Rated: E

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HI Amber! Thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest" ! Here are my brief comments on your thrilling ballad.!

I enjoyed reading this tale about a woman going to save her man from the dragon. I like the concept of heroine here as it does suit the prompt picture. Cool idea!

The images are descriptive and it is easy to follow the story. I wonder if some punctuation might add potency and pause at key points.
I did not notice a patterned rhythm as you use a variety of line lengths. It flowed fairly well though a few places threw me out of the flow.
eg :"keen eyes ..glee", {maybe drop the word "keen" and the line " the sound of ...flaw" was rough. Maybe "Like ..flaw".
I wanted to drop "And" before "saw mylove by the wall" to have better flow.
I like the midpoint when they saw each other. that line got my attention.

Awseome rhyme scheme in this long poem!

Some typos: "to watched him" needs to be "to watch". I wonder if "knife-like claws" might flow better too.

It is interesting that you leave us hanging at the end as she leaves off with her battle cry! Evocative for us to imagine the rest whatever way we think it might go.

It is amazing how you created such a lengthy piece that kept me reading at a good pace. Well worth tweaking!
Thanks for sharing your craft!

Keep the quill scribing!
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#3977524

Review of No Love Lost

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HI Lavvone. I was drawn to the evocative title though usually haiku do not have them. I like the connection to no love lost and winter leaving . I am so ready for spring!!

I had the notion of an epitaph when I read this. !

The haiku form has a nature theme and you have the correct syllables and lines. I would leave off the captial letters except in the name as most haikus do not use them. I hitnk it is to keep the ideas hanging without boundaries so readers can come to interpretations or perspectives.

The first line draws me in as I wonder what could be over! I liked the flow of "ice cold, frozen" but doesn't "ice cold" and "frozen" mean the same thing? In such a short poem it is stronger not to repeat ideas. so maybe tweak this image a bit.

Thanks for sharing your expression in this difficult form. It has a strong vibe!

Keep on scribing!

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#3977509

Review of Open Spaces

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I love the freedom and expanse of open spaces and open skies on the horizons myself so the poem title appealed to me. I like westerns too so double the pleasure from the theme of a cowboy's evening on the range.

The descriptive first two lines drew me right into the scene and sets the place and time effectively. The sound and flow her is magnetic as well. I liked the " So here I sit"! To the point!

Your language portrays a vivid picture engaging the senses so I feel like I am there. Imagery suits the theme and setting: "crackling fire", "sagebrush", and "hard tack and beans on the boil"! Choice of words in that line really creates an appealing flow and sound too.

I felt that adverbs like " quickly", " only briefly" and even "interrupted" weren't as strongly descriptive. I like the idea in the 2nd verse. I'm not sure you even need the adverbs. I see a typo in "Is quickly"--needs to be "is".

I like the image of the horse's reaction with the inversion at the end I smiled at the last line! could be humourous or philosophical. I am sure cowboys often thought of how nice it would be to be somewhere warm at night or less lonesome! Of course, they had their horses! It let us enter into his evening revery like a dream so the italics are a nice touch here.

The lovely image on the page is well represented by your expression and it was a pleasure to read aloud and journey into that dream.
Thanks for sharing your evocative rendering!

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#3977179

Review of In Play With The Storm

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HI Stormborn Writer! Welcome to WDC Power Crew! I have Puddle Jumped to your port in our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Raid!

This title caught my eye as it's theme fits spring and I liked the idea of a bird's eye view! The combo of play and storm is intriguing and posoitve POV as well.

I enjoyed reading the rather free style rendering with its organized rhyme scheme and storm wind flow. I like the use of gerund "ing" forms. The language suits the theme and I could visualize the scene from your vivid descriptions. I really liked line 3 to 6!

The rhythm flowed fairly well though the third verse was shorter in line and flow.
I kept getting stuck with "its" as the "heavens" is plural.

I liked the variety in verse one esp. The rhyme of line three with six not using the gerunds. I was looking for a similar pattern verse 2 though the images you chose here are effective.

I felt the struggle of the little bird and the warmth of its home at the end. I enjoyed the sound image of "dancing and diving" and the verb "huddle" is so evocative.

You captured the image of the strom in the sky as observed by the flying bird in a clear manner. I wondered what kind of bird--I assume it was a small one as you say it has small wings. It is cool to leave it up to us to imagine it.

I had fun reading this poem which imitated a storm in its vibration and showed the storm having fun. It is really a well thought out poem for the Cramp!

Thanks for sharing your gift.

Keep the muse flying above the storm and write on!

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#3969637

Review of Staring Starward

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I was drawn to the evocative title of this piece as the idea of star gazing is appealing!

I liked the way it rolled off the tongue too.
It is interesting how it realtes to the end of this piece. The word "star" is evocative as it gives me the impression of a very intense looking--with intent and purpose rather than gazing and dreaming.

The story felt like an episode as it started after some greater event and regales the results of this war. The descriptions are vivid with words like "shuffling", "glassy eyed" that give a visual of traumatized people. I liked the rumour simile too! Well done!

Given that you had a small word count, this piece amazingly does create a sad and complete view of this aftermath.

Icould feel the heavy vibe from the heavy words, long sentences and description.

I think you might break up the second paragraph in to two sentences. I also wanted to drop the "and" before "Oh slowly" and begin a new line.

I wondered about who is speaking. You say "our camp" and and "their haunted faces" So I took that those with the camp were different from the refugees and were not "haunted". Just pondering!

It is evocative how you leave us with them staring at the stars as we ponder their intent. Hope? or wary?

This is so fascinating and I think you could make a longer story with more detail and the rest of the story! LOL

Thanks for sharing your gift in this sad yet entertaining episode. And in only 240 words!!

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Review of Sea Runner

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I was intrigued by the evocative title as it stirred my curiosity especially as your tagline said it was for a sea creature contest. I love imaginary worlds so here I am.

The style is narrative and read as factual account one might find in a book of sea creatures. Awesome choice of style.

I enjoyed reading about your creature and was quite enthralled to keep reading! I was fascinated by its unique features and what they can do. I had to laugh at the end even while thinking how wonderful it is that they could clean up polluted water. Wouldn't it be awesome today if it was so?
sensitive beings might make friends withit and help clean up the planet. At least for the children.

The descriptive elements made for vivid picture in my mind and the language flowed quite well. I enjoyed its weaving and longish sentence structures. The second line read rather long though it made perfect sense. I wanted to cut it in half just for breath after scales!

The word choice and concepts fit the theme and the nature of the writing---an article about a sea creature. Kids would love to read this.
I wondered what it's bizzarre sense of humour might be like. eg an example.

I liked the humour at the end and that it is a practical joker.

I noticed a typo: 'coverd" needs to be "covered".

I liked reading about this dynamic creature and your imaginative muse is so inventive. This was fun! You may have inspired my muse to give this theme a try!

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#3969150

Review of Teaching Wonderment

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HI Chris. Wow! This is truly remarkable expression with detail and sincerity of tone. It has the feel and length of a testamonial and I am impressed with the style and consistency of rhyme scheme with its variety that was not forced.

I appreciated images like "stellar nursery", aromas of glens". The way you exhort, present questions for us to ponder and encourage reader to reach for the sky as you weave your philosophy on learning and all it means to you and it's potential value for others is potent.

I enjoyed reading it aloud as didn't really trip over any of the lines as they flowed along.

The free style works with the theme and the non patterned lines did not detract from the read and meaning or the message.

I enjoyed the read several times. Varied pace and flow.

I did think some lines could be tightened up in places.
eg. drop one "and" in the first line of the last line and place a comma instead.
Drop the "and" in the last line as redundant with "so".

This was a bit confusing a first:" their unearthing breeding wonderment." I think it the using the "ing" words so close. I had to reread to get it.

In "the beginnings of our understanding" should it say "beginning"?

You used the word "exquisite" and then "exquisiteness" fairly close {2 verses}. I wonder about having variety and is there a more explicit descriptive word for the latter. That one is a mouthful.

Your expression here is truly a tribute to your mentors, past and even on into the future and as you express this you teach as well, for those who will hear.

I would put the author's note at the bottom to set off your masterpiece.

Thank you for hearing your poetic muse and composing and sharing this wisdom piece that will be relevant for all time.

Please keep writing.

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Review of Haiku - Singing Leaves

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Hi GeorgeWDeMuth! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! I love haiku and was happy to come across yours in the Poetry page.

This haiku really captures a vivid essence of spring in the image of green leaves, bluebird song and the reference to earth born. The latter is quite evocative. I think of dandelions for some reason.
I like the image of " leaves to waves" as it evokes the idea of the sound of water. I think of trees as well as grasses in fields! Brilliant.

I don't generally think of spring as "blissful" though if you mean it as light greens of early spring leaves it works. One's mind can interpret variety of spring moments.

The soundscape of line two is wonderful! It was pleasant to read the poem aloud.

Usually haiku do not have periods and only capitals on names. I think the idea to to allow the energy to be boundless for the reader to delve.

I appreciated the colourful and potent picture of this moment in time. thanks for sahring your gift.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Valentine Gift

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Hi Celeste.

I had to smile at this inventive little senryu! The amusing reference to Godiva is brilliant and I can imagine the chocolate and the Lady of the poem. The word "bliss" could mean many things to many people---their own favourite treat but I see chocolate!! Sensual like Godiva.

I enjoyed reading the language as it flowed and the vocabulary is precise and evocative for the theme of Valentines.

Impressive weaving! Thanks for the playful journey.

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Review of Poetry Terms and Devices

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HI Vivian. Cruising through the arts genre for raid items I came across this informative article.

The piece is written as if speaking to a student or as a part of a class course. The goal and intent is short and clear.

The list of poetic terms contain the major devices with conscise definitions and I found it so helpful to have actual poetic examples of each one. Thank you very much for that. It really clarifies and would be of assistance especially to beginning poets or those who review poems, or those reluctant to do so. It also reminded me more specifically the meanings of concept I heard but was foggy on exact application. eg. metonymy

The page is simply laid out with effective use of font colour for emphasis.
I also enjoyed the lovely bits of poetry. The quote from "A Common Woman" is brilliant.

This is a wonderful contribution to the study of poetry and I am so glad it is out in the public page! Thanks for your teaching.

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Review of Off the Cuff / My Other Journal

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WOW! HI Joy! I totally enjoyed this wonderful creative expression. I had to laugh when you said it wasn't the only thing you did without knowing. I can so relate to that!! Your intro was entertaining {lack teeth" and gave the essence of your intent and motivation. I like how you arranged the gentle pastel coloured images so they did not overwhelm the viewer.

I am so impressed with your writing and voice and enthusiasm that exudes from each entry. It has a poetic flair at times and an honest observational tone mingled with real reactions. I enjoyed the quotes of poetry that add flavour to your own comments.

You have a nice mix of personal, prompt driven and philosophical opinion pieces. I loved your prosaic entry to re live a moment and your script in "spend an hour with.." and it was interesing to read your ideas about reviewing and the arts and Food entry. Wow! I am in awe of the varity of things you know and have to say!

I didn't notice any glitches in the articles I read and was basically enthralled by the way you express and hold my attention! I want to go back and comment on some now!

I am fairly new to blogging thing and find it amazing how folks do them. I learned alot from reading yours. It feels like you are quite comfortable with your self and your Being! Thanks for sharing you in this unique and inspiring way!

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Review of Pull

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Rated: E

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Greetings Dorsidhion! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest" ! Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

You have created a strong image with your first haiku as you speak of the effects of moon on tides. Your first line is great start as it reveals that in general the moon has potency.
I like the idea of the moon calling from a distance. I see not only the tides but our own enchantment with the magic of the moon drawing our soul and inspiring the muse. Evocative last line ! It does reflect the first line and I think tries to give us the idea that the power does not only refer to tides.

The structure has the correct syllable and line count yet has the sense of a story sentence instead of phrasings and there is not much a contrast or break line that evokes me to a diffent persepective --which is the harder part of writing haiku. I struggle with it often.

I enjoyed reading and musing on your expression with its sense of romance and moon magic. Thanks for the journey. Keep on weaving with words and thanks for jumping into the Haiku world.

Good luck in the contest!

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#3962730

Review of February Moonlight

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Rated: E

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Greetings Sharkdaddy!! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest" ! Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

I was enchanted by the clear imagery of this haiku and could visualize quite vividly this night. The first line is creative and takes me away to a mountain scene in moonlight, or a wintry place! Combined with the last line, it could be a romantic setting as well--or even take me to the realm of fairies. Not sure there are fairies in haiku reality but I like when my mind goes off there. LOL

Using the word "luna" adds an ancient tone different from the mundane "moon". The word "halo" is descriptive as I imagine a circular misty orb so the verb with it in line two repeats the idea. Wonder what else is possible here.?

The format of the haiku was well done and the whole piece feels cohesive, where there needs to be bit of contrast. I also have difficulty here--getting that "cut line and "aha" moment where the reader can jump off and see the connection in contrasting perspective.
so we continue to strive!

I appreciated the energy vibe of the weaving and thank you for the journey evoked by your moon-ku! Keep on musing!

Good luck in the contest!

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#3962715

Review of Spirit Cloud

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Rated: E

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Hi sharkdaddy! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I was drawn to your evocative title on the poetry page and was pleased to find this appealing poem. You have a creative way of expressing using personification. I so appreciated the concepts you used. Brilliant!

The imagery is vivid as you use object and nature to portray the essence of a person's trials and emotions. I really liked the idea in the last line.
I enjoyed reading it aloud for its soundscape and consistent well chosen rhyme. It flowed quite easily though some lines were longer. I am not sure if this was on purpose or not. eg some 7-8-9 syllable lines. The read wasn't disrupted by this minor lack of consistency.

It was worth reading several times as your active, lively vocabulary and sound combos were awesome. I like the contrast of quick paced lines with slower ones, which added drama. "clawed...haze", "hourglass" "domino days"!

You begin with a simple statement that intrigues the reader and take us on a rather dark journey. I enjoyed the philosophical aura.

Thanks for sharing such a potent inventive expression!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#3961272

Review of Moon's Glance

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Greetings turtle moon! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest" ! Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

This haiku has a lovely vivid image that invites me into perceptions of the wonder of a winter night illuminated by the moon. I loved the first line as it sets the time and atmosphere in harmonious sound scape. The poem was pleasant to read aloud for its flow and sound.

The idea of a moons' glance " is ceative and new. I would not use it in the title as it gives away the potential potency for the reader discovering it through the read. Haiku needs to just hang there for us to delve into in the moment. Using titles in haiku is less common than in other forms.

I wondered about the word "blinks" with "glance"--it seems to throw me out of the poem a bit.

I could really enter into this scene amd imagine the moon rays though trees just like when I look out my bedroom window. Good show

Good luck in the contest! Keep musing on!

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Review of Moon Haiku

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Rated: E

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Greetings hunter's moon! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest" ! Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

This haiku has very clear and vivid imagery with an effective simile that gives us pause. Words like "ashen" and "glisten" are excellent choices in buildng the picture. The last line is evocative comment for us to ponder. I like the original and intriguing idea. I could spend time reflecting on this. Good show!

The form is well constructed and pleasant to read aloud. It compliments the picture perfectly too.

This moon ku opens the gateway for us to consider other dimensions of moon musing. Impressive expression.

Good luck in the contest!

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Review of Today I Used My English Degree When...

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Rated: 13+

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HI spidey! I had to bite into this one even though I do not have an English degree--try Ancient classical languages and history!!! So this did appeal becasue of the question what you do with...?

It is a brilliant and original idea to have a open in and out forum for folks to show how they use the knoweledge of the english language!

Your intro is short and to the point as to purpose and motivation. Good idea to add those who know grammar{whether degree or no) as well as it widens the draw of potential visitors!

The invitation to finish the prompt line...gives direction as to what you are looking for in responses. Good idea!
It has the potentilal to be educational and comedic at the same time. I did have to smile when you said "the rest of the population".

I hope this review gives it a little plug to get it started. It will be interesting to read. Thanks for coming up with this cool contribution to WDC repetoire so we can have even more fun and feel good!

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