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Review of Twas the Night Before Christmas

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"Twas the Night Before Christmas"

Alexia Wynd

Often times it goes unsaid what happens before the story as we know it. We know well the story of the night before, however this takes a deeper look at the moments before that. A creative tale that held some interesting bits to reflect on. I found this to be interesting in the way that it gives a different perspective into the life of an icon.

~Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but or and, creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. This can be changed by adding a comma and joining the sentence with the previous one, since they are of the same subject. That, or drop the conjunction and open strong for the next sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have found that the younger the audience, the more the use of conjunctions starting sentences.

I think the part I liked best about this piece is that the characteristics of Santa are maintained within a few choice phrases...Oh givings' grace, or For givings sake.

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Review of The Rainbow Bird

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"The Rainbow Bird"

Ollie Burton

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by me. For this contest, I wanted a poem or short story to color my world. I started the explanation of the prompt with a snid-bit on the skies being gray, and then asked you to COLOR MY WORLD, and this was your response.

I see this as a dream sequence. A tropical bird seen before, has resurfaced in the dreams to visit. The metaphoric implications are hidden, though perhaps it is just a re-creation of a happy experience or event from the wakeful world.

A short piece that can be metaphoric for winter creeping in and overtaking the fall season.

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Review of Color My World

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"Color My World"

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" by me. For this contest, I wanted a poem or short story to color my world. I started the explanation of the prompt with a snid-bit on the skies being gray, and then asked you to COLOR MY WORLD, and this was your response.

I liked the approach of this creative poem. It illustrates the gray sense of despair in the air as the clouds hang dreary and continually on the horizon. The spark or thought of a rainbow to brighten the day shows hope is still alive.

The lesson in poetry given at the end is a nice addition to the poem. It helps those who are uneducated in poetry formats to better understand the poem.

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Review of Color My World

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"Color My World"

DL Bach

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by me. For this contest, I wanted a poem or short story to color my world. I started the explanation of the prompt with a snid-bit on the skies being gray, and then asked you to COLOR MY WORLD, and this was your response.

Upon reading this entry, I was not only moved by the message of love and appreciation for the fellow man, but also felt my world was a bit brighter from your wish.

Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. With the contrasting colors and the alternate rhyming pattern, I feel this would be better showcased with a centering format. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings, and in no way think the setup the way it is detracts from the poem.

Overall I found this to be a winner. I liked the alternate rhyming scheme. The voice of the poem spoke volumes as it cascaded down the page. As each color was mentioned I found a vibrancy in the the air that held color and meaning.

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Review of White Case Memorial

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A commendable project this has turned out to be. Passed from one author to the next, in order to house it for a permanent status, this wonderful memorial is a symbol of love and adoration for friends that have had to leave us for another place upon their end of existence as we know it.

The fluttering doves give this an ethereal feel that sometimes makes you glance to the side to see if the one you are reading about is sitting beside you. The doves and their peaceful fluttering have that angelic feel as if the presence of all our friends mentioned here are sitting here at the fireside awaiting us to come and review their works of art.

The fact that this forum exists is great. The added sentiments to each introduction is like a eulogy of its own. Thank you for taking the time to keep this active and updated.

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#3434236

Review of The Road Finally Traveled

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Have you ever stopped to ponder the decisions made and the consequences resulting? Is it destiny or fate which takes our hand and guides us through life? If either of those exist, can we have free will? This is a thought provoking free-style poem of choice and resulting life occurrences. A wonderful poem of discovery and adventure with thoughts to the future for children.

What I liked about this piece:
I liked how the emotions of the piece stand out. You can see the hope and despair, the light and the dark, as well as the rainbow at the end of the tunnel. This is creative, yet a true realistic part of life. I enjoyed reading this and look forward to more poetry of such magnitude.

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Review of The Best Ghoul Ever

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"The Best Ghoul Ever"

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A short story that could serve as the rough outline for a longer novel, this contest entry has twists and turns that will have you seeing ghosts

Although he was dubious, he felt a proud she was making an attempt.
~the grammatical structure of this sentence is unsound and doesn't quite follow through with one thought.

I find it odd that parents of an abducted child would move, especially so often in such a short period of time, before some semblance of resolution had been found. There is nothing in my mind that would make this even conceivable, not t say it couldn't or doesn't happen. I think some order of explanation as to why they would move so soon after would benefit this short story.

If the loss of the child had affected the marriage to the degree that Brad thought he had practically lost a wife as well as a child, then the comment about "baby boomer central" seems out of place, at least so soon after the previous statements.

Overall, I felt this was too large of a subject to fit within the constraints of this short story. There was too much information taken for granted and not elaborated on which would have made an okay story a wonderful story. This could be do to word count constraints on the contest entry. Personally I think this is a great premise for a novel, though a similar story has already been done, and also turned into a movie.

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Review of Christmas at Maison du Renard Rouge

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"Christmas at Maison du Renard Rouge"

J. A. Buxton

Walker, always the one to lend a hand, has once again welcomed a stranger into his home. Yet, how can anyone who comes to this great place ever be called a stranger. From the moment each arrives the feeling of familiarity and ease comes over all that witness the first moments of a newcomers visit. Each person seems to play a vital role in the making of this great family of friends.

~towards~ represents directional movement or action of time. In speech many people like to take the action words and give them an added syllable "s" to help propel them forward. Already being a word of action, this effort is unnecessary and leads to creating a slang term. This terminology then transfers into our writing. Now, if the piece of writing already contains slang terminology throughout the piece, then this would be acceptable, if not, then I would alter the word to the proper form, as I suggest with this instance. This also happens with forward, afterward, inward, downward, backward, outward, beside, to name a few.

I think this is a wonderful excerpt from the book. I believe, this is a book that I must revisit, and I am thankful for coming across this reminder.

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Review of Winter Solstice

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"Winter Solstice"

Arakun the Twisted Raccoon

Though short and sweet, this rhyming masterpiece comprised of two rhyming couplets captures the essence of the season.

I could find not grammar, spelling or punctuation errors with this poem. The verse is one that captures a moment in time for all to experience at their leisure.

Overall I felt this was well written. I could find no error with the poem. I did wonder what the feel of the poem would be if the conjunction "and"were to be dropped or replaced. Other than that, perfection.

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Review of What Color Are Your Eyes?

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"What Color Are Your Eyes?"

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In your last review, I inadvertently left part of the message from a previous review. The message should have been that these reviews are coming from you due to a request by NOVAcatmando

I apologize for the mistake.

A simple little poll on the color of eyes. I found the results interesting. When I was younger, my eyes were brown, as I have aged they are more hazel. So which color should I have chosen? I did choose the hazel in this case, for the wording is clear, "What color are your eyes". Since it doesn't ask what my original eye color is, hazel was the answer.

There wasn't too much in your port to review. I reviewed the two items I felt were done by you, leaving pictures and sigs, as well as a forum which looks to have been created for you, by friends. From that I learned you were in Montana, and I found myself wondering what part of that state you were in, for two years ago I moved form there, having been there 9 some years.

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Review of Man's Guide To Buying Furniture

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"Man's Guide To Buying Furniture"

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Parting with the old, bringing in the new can sometimes be a daunting task. This comic tale is a short story with humor and wit. I found this to be a refreshing scent to this new day dawning.

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I liked the referencing to a television show which influences others. Television can be more than just a time filler. The shows we watch often leave a residue of information, though often times useless, which can come into play down the line to boost our situation, or benefit us in some way. Information is a tool. Whether we get it through research, or pick up snid-bits through the media or sitcom shows, it is information all the same. I like how this humorous story depicts just that concept.

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Review of Could Be Serious

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Prosperous Snow celebrating

Questions about poetry and why the drive for poems is so strong, this free-style piece brings to the table questions of thought which lead to moments of pondering. Could it be an obsession that has us captured so that we are unable to finish or complete anything else?

Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. I can not pinpoint why, perhaps it is the randomness of not knowing what the poetic pull is, but I felt that centering this poem would be most complimentary to its form. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

Overall I feel this is well written. I am not sure if this was originally for a contest, since a line count was included, but thought this might be the case. This is a poem that gives us something to think about and thinking sparks creativity.

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Review of Facebook Photos

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"Facebook Photos"

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This is the tale of what can happen when using social networking sites. Many are unaware, or think that they are invincilbe, and nothing like this could happen to them, however, they are dead wrong.

More and more employers are referring back to facebook and myspace, for employees to later learn that their actions and comments being posted online are soon becoming issues in the job place. This short piece illustrates this point quite well.

I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall, this is a well written piece with great insightful advice through this short stort about the pitfalls of social networking.

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Review of Don't Stop Believing In Me

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"Don't Stop Believing In Me"

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A rhythmic piece of poetry written in rhyming couplets to deliver a message of faith.
This shows the rebirth of a faith and how it can turn life around.

I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors. I wasn't convinced that faith is vital for happiness as the subtext for the title declares. I saw this as more a personal piece were faith was restored and that lead to happiness.

Overall a good piece of poetry. The couplets flowed smoothly down the page with ease of read. The message of faith and happiness comes across, just not to the degree of faith being vital for happiness to exist.

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Review of Journey To Hell

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The title is catchy, and with the subtext below, I was captured and lured within the compound. Here inside I found a refuge of peace and tranquility as only one coming from a large family would know. The events which are described give a tale of growth and maturity beyond years.

No grammar, spelling or punctuation errors were noted. I would have liked to see at least one incident or event which stands out, to be brought forward as a personal note. Do not just tell us of conflict, show us the brutality of living with so many woman under one roof, and then deliver us the family out of the feud. In other words, give us a personal example, and then show us the incident when the girls have all bonded together once more to make things right.

By giving an example, you are making the writing more of a personal experience for the reader.

Overall a good writing, I simply felt a more intimate accounting was necessary in order to deliver a mastered piece.

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Review of More About Me

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"More About Me"

SHERRI GIBSON

Just when you think you have read it all, go back, for there is bound to be something you have missed. I sure did. Tonight, or rather, this morning, I found two items in my dear friend's port that I had not yet reviewed.

Per request of others we are given more of an insight into you the person, the author and friend. Mere words, though we are writer's , sometimes fails to grasp the full picture of what we are describing.

This writing is from the heart. It paints a picture of a woman with low tolerance for games, and a huge heart for helping those around her.

Well written and to the point, this sends out a message to all, and a special thank you to those who persuaded you to follow another path... great job on the published works. You lead by example, and we all love you for it!

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Review of JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM TEMP CLOSED

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SHERRI GIBSON

Wow, I simply can not believe I have never stopped in and did a review on this group before. This is a wonderful group that offers a service to the WDC community. Review packages of varying styles and prices are put on display. For a fee, the service can be requested, gifted, given to a recipient of choice.

This group also strives to help within the community in great ways. Through emails group members are notified of upcoming events. Through reviewing, members are given a review credit when affiliating reviews.

Through auction and raffle donations this group is continuously striving to help raise gps and recognition for other groups as well.

A forum is set up for the group for others to request packages, and for group members to communicate so that package fulfillment is not duplicated.

This group is run by a very wonderful person who has a big heart. Her dedication to helping others shows through her many activities around this community.

Overall, I can say that I feel I am a better person having known the author. Through this group, she offers a chance for us to help others, as well as meeting new people. Now you may say, well this was a book report, tell me something that as the author I didn't know, but I say this in response, now everyone reading the public reviews page will know what I know about this wonderful group.

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Review of 10:45

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Beaureguard Schmeltzer

With an upscale beat and an alternate rhyme, the rhythm of this poem dances to the tune of love, down the page, where it slows up with the breaking of the heart. A great visual this creates of true life and the hardships that we sometimes must face.

TO CONSIDER:
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion.

~Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

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Review of Black Hole

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"Black Hole"

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Full of emotion and pain, this free-style poem tumbles down the page giving us a tapestry of emptiness, but not despair.

ALIGNMENT
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. I feel this poem, with the emotional turmoil, would best benefit from a centered format. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

PUNCTUATION
~Some will tell you that punctuation is needed in poetry. Others will argue that it is not needed and makes no difference. Still, there will be those who say it is up to the particular poet and the poem itself. Personally I feel that the way the verses flow down the page, that punctuation is necessary for this piece. Though without it, the message is still there, it just isn't as strong.

For me, I use to write poetry without any punctuation. Somewhere down the line someone gave me sound advice and it made sense to me. The punctuation, or lack thereof in a poem, is the direction of the writer, guiding the reader. The punctuation is where the author wishes the reader to take a breath; to contemplate; to pause for dramatic effect. The lack of punctuation says the same thing, "Read in one breath, whether slow, or fast, down the page". To me, punctuation is direction from the author to the reader. Use it, or don't , to your heart's desire and don't let anyone persuade you otherwise. However, if using it, be consistent throughout the piece. My personal opinion, this poem would benefit from punctuation.

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Review of lead

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"lead "

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An interesting little poem. The premise of the poem as self described is women allowing men to be the man. I am not sure I was able to follow that throughout the poem. Nothing here, in my eyes, showcased that we were talking of men and women. This is however a piece on partnership. A requisition to be as equals, walking hand in hand together. (what I got of this)

~then mine should be than mine.

~ Always capitalize I. You are important. The one exception is if you are trying to show lack of self esteem or self respect through visuals with your poetry.

~run spell-check

~Leanshould be capitalized to start out the next to last line.

~ALIGNMENT
Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

Overall an poem of partners who have traveled the road together, one leading the other, and now, the one following is requesting the leader to stop and open their eyes to what has been happening, and suggesting a change in course.

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Review of Brothers

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"Brothers"

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Written from the heart, this short paragraph is a dedication to a friend who is so close that the term "Brother from another mother", is fit and appropriate. This piece details the brotherhood shared between two friends.

~Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but or and, creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. This can be changed by adding a comma and joining the sentence with the previous one, since they are of the same subject. That, or drop the conjunction and open strong for the next sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have found that the younger the audience, the more the use of conjunctions starting sentences.

Overall the great sentiment and emotions pour fourth with good detail and demonstration.

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Review of Help?

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"Help?"

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Requesting help in the title was a very good way to grab a reader's attention. Right away I read the subtext of the title and new I could help find some reviewers who would gladly add their input.

Upon opening this to read, I found a rough draft for a storyline. The outline with a background of basic events is given, with very poor spelling. The request is made to help start out the story, given the background information. Here is my solution:

Start the story out with her seeing Zak off to school. She is already packed herself and heading out in about an hour, for she has a few last minute details to wrap up... she gets a phone call from her doctor. She had gone in for a quick check up and the dr's office calls to tell her she is pregnant....
You take it from here... fill in the details... is her tuition paid for, can she get a refund? Will a year off be long enough? Who will help watch her son?

~My first suggestion is to always use spell-check. Reading an item full of spelling errors is often distracting and a major turn-off for readers. Even though this is in it's early stages, take the time to do the basic, capitalize when needed, use proper punctuation, and use spell-check. Without doing the above, a reviewer feels they are becoming your editor and that fully detracts from the story.

~Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but or and, creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. This can be changed by adding a comma and joining the sentence with the previous one, since they are of the same subject. That, or drop the conjunction and open strong for the next sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have found that the younger the audience, the more the use of conjunctions starting sentences.

I hope some of these suggestions help you along the way. I would gladly return to re-rate and re-review this item upon completion.

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Review of The Last Snowflake

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"The Last Snowflake"

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A great tapestry of color is created as we witness the life cycle of the last snowflake. This creative piece breaths life into some of Nature's Beauties, and gives us a full circle piece.

I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to note upon. I did feel that the centering of this item best reflects and compliments the life cycle, and here is why:

Sometimes something as simple as where an item is placed upon the page can help to determine how it is interpreted. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all of the lines are askew, based upon character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal opinion, I am but a novice when it comes to poetry and its teachings.

Overall a great poem. I could find nothing to add to further advance the piece, it is well written and creatively displayed.

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Review of The Streak

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"The Streak"

JACE

I sit here awake reading, still no sleep in sight. I could not resist another look through your port. Each stop I make, I get distracted with another link or two, and I end up another hour or three. It is now half past seven in the morning. I have been here and there through your port and spent the better part of the evening.

I have grinned, I have smiled, and now after reading this, the dogs are jumping about looking to find what the ruckus is all about, for I am hysterical with laughter as I picture the final critique with the bare soul in enemy territory.

I wonder what your thoughts are on an alternate last line, not the whole sentence, just part of it to read something like "and they left a bare man behind enemy lines in an exposed position."

NO CONJUNCTION NOTES

This was one amazing little tale. I find myself asking, fact or fiction, yet the subheading category for items/genres is EXPERIENCE. My only other thought would be that I hope the one left behind was not you. Though as an afterthought, if it were you left behind, I would think another fun tale will follow.

Sorry this review is so short. I again applaud the use of the contest link as well as a notation on the awarded placing of this item. GREAT JOB!

SHHHH I AM STILL LAUGHING

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Review of Dear Me: A Court Action

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Brief Summary:
In continuing my search for that elusive item hiding in your port, I happened upon another title that caught my attention, so I had to stop and investigate just what this court action was all about.

I must admit, I have never really stopped to read many of the other entries, when entering contests myself. As I can see now, this has been my loss. A mistake I won't make again.

This is a contest entry for one of the official site contests. It was an entry for the "Dear Me: Official WDC Contest"

[E], a contest on personal goals for the year. I must say, I see this as a winning entry. This took a whole new approach to what I was expecting to see. In fact, I do think this is an original approach to something so literal. A humorous answer to a contest query.

Editing Comments:
As for the grammar, spelling and punctuation, I noticed no errors to point out. For content and subject matter, I feel everything is in order with nothing amiss. So therefore, there is nothing I may add to help with the editing of this piece.

Suggestions:
Again with this writing, I see that both conjunctions, AND and BUT ARE used to start sentences. Having already given my standard comment for this in the last review, I feel the mere mentioning of it here will allow you to see my point and view as before expressed.

What I liked about this piece:
I liked the humor and wit that seem to have punctuated this contest entry through actual serious proceedings. The creativity shines through in this answering contest piece with your Dear Me official entry.

I was pleased to see that this did place second.

Something else that was impressive to me is that the contest link was displayed and left intact along with the information on how the contest placed. It always serves the reader or reviewer if they know what limitations were put on a writing, when reading a contest submission. Therefore including the link to the contest is always a benefit to both reader and author.

Thank you for sharing your creative writing. I encourage you to do more.

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