Wow such emotion in this well thought out creative piece and yet very sad that it waters the eyes! A very unique and certainly one of a kind. Thank you for sharing this piece.
Keep the creativity in motion, flowing, soaring, and going
There were zero errors in your perfect little piece.
My Thoughts: Wow! Very good thing to know and thank you for sharing as most all of us want our writing to advance and improve to the best level Love all tips 1-15
My Favorite tips: are number: 3, 7,14, and 15
Errors: I did not see any errors,
Suggestions: Keep the creativity going and flowing,
My Thoughts: First let me say welcome to Writing Dot Com
A very enjoyable piece you have here, creative, clever, and you painted a very good picture to where now I would love to take a train ride as you grab my attention right from the startQ
My Favorite Part: Actually I liked the whole story from beginning to end but this part stood out a little bit to me: I remember when, as a child I used to make a game out of this, trying to count how many sheep are in a passing flock, or what shape do the clouds mimic, that one looks like a fork.
Errors: I did not see any errors.
Suggestions: Maybe you might like to ckeck out: :126963} and keep the creativity soaring and going!
First I like that you have an author's note up at the top and also since you are starting a mailing list can I be added to your list?
You are very creative as you weave your web entangling me from the beginning which is a real good thing a very interesting read as you are very creative, clever, and have a unique style which I enjoy very much.
My Thoughts: A very interesting read as you weave your web that gets my attention right from the start which is a really good thing.
My Favorite Parts or Lines: At any rate, it was all behind me now, and I still had a shot with Beth. I was ready for my first good night’s sleep in a number of days. I started to drift away, but I suddenly sat up. Hummmmm … What’s that sound?
I mean after all he went through and does all he does and moves out he still has that sound! How funny... I am curious as to know what it is!
Errors: I did not see any errors
Suggestions: Keep the creativity in motion, soaring, flowing, and going
My Thoughts: I really like the way you started this story grabbing my attention in the very beginning which is a really good, creative, clever and witty to do.
My Favorite Part: All though I really enjoyed the whole story this part here stood out to me: It was in early 2017, when Carolyn showed me a news story on her AZ. The headline read Government Implants Computer Chip into Human Brain. It went on to explain that the microchip actually connected the brain to the G-net through the AZ. It seemed impossible, but technology was moving so fast, anything was possible.
That just really drew a picture all on it's own.
Errors: I did not see any errors.
Suggestions: Keep the creativity flowing and soaring
Wow that is good you remember something like this when you were six years old I mean sad memory.. And who could blame you for not wanting to talk to any one every again but I sure am glad you grew out of it! Wow how bad to know his reason on 1990! He should of cried the whole time your Mom and him talked about you good to see she could see he was sorry not being there for you! Well very happy to hear you turn out better than he thought and of course you still love your dad, He is your dad. See to me forgiveness is not earn is it given!
Ohooo you end with cliff hanger I want more, I want more!! This is a very creative , clever, piece you ahve here as you weaver your words to draw you readers in , as you paint a picture that I can clearly see,
The part I did not see cdoming was this: I hate you, she murmured. "I should have put a bullet in your brain years ago.
My thought:Wow!What a cute, clever, creative, unique, and certainly one of a kind as I have never realy gave much thought at all to why a teacher might use red color to grade my paper!
Favorite Part(s): I wonder why teachers use red? Maybe it’s like STOP, you’re wrong. I also like why you like the color green.
Errors: I did not see any errors.
Suggestions: Keep the creativity in motion and soaring.
My Thoughts: You are creative an talented as you weave you web of words to entangle your readings right form the start.
Favorite Part(s): Why must I always be, My own worst enemy. As this set a picture that I can clearly see.
Errors: I did not see no errors.
Suggestions: You might want to break it down for and easier read:
Why must I always be, My own worst enemy
must I get up each day, and fight to get out
of my own way will this struggle ever end, or
do i just begin again.
I hope you the ideal of what I mean. It just makes it a better read or an easier read.
My Thought: You are very creative. I was taken in with you cleverly written words as you weave your web which is a good thing indeed. A very unique, creative, clever, and a one of a kind of poem you have here.
My Favorite Part(s): Is the very first paragraph. To me it set the whole scene and I really liked how it all unfolds a very perfect picture, I could see it all!
Errors: I did not see any errors
Suggestions: Keep writing and keep the creativity flowing and going
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I noticed two new rules and they are good ones too and sometimes it is good to update your in and outs contest and such.
You have a very interesting piece here and very thought provoking as you are filled with questions that you dare others to think on as well which to me makes you clever, creative, unique and the ability to get your readers attention as you spin your words as to get our attention!
A very creative piece you have here. You are clever as you spin your words to capture your readers attention and that is a really good thing. I like the way you start off the whole story:
Stumbling through the dense forest. That paints a picture that I can see and I like that. And I also liked the end and the fact that Thugg son as had a creative mind.
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An interesting piece that you have here. You first line is very eye catching... What does love create? Then you go into the animal spill as you point out that they are properly placed and are content.
I like the question about he city and the point that you make of it truthful about it being broking and you ask about the work place and point out of it's fullness of discontentment.
And then you go for as you say: What would happen if you let perfect love into the church? And you simply say that they would change.
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First I have to say that I love the signature pic that you have up at the top and then you post something that made me laugh right out loud you said: Pick a duck get a prize that's rightjust like the game at amusement parks or fairs 
