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Hi Anna Marie Carison. I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Cuckoo's Clock" Open in new Window. by Anna Marie Carison

Clarity:A great title for this tale.

Writing style:Fantasy folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes.

My favorite line:---Along the shorelines, masterminded wizards showcase their talents by throwing out sand dollars from the legendary tales of long ago.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining fantasy tale. A great opening that really catches this readers attention.

Written in sort of an essay style with a lot of good folktale quotes. This seems to help to make it more real for the reader, helping it draw him into the story line.

This reader has a personal fondness for cuckoo clocks so I really love the title.

Anna Marie Carison, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!

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Joseph
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Review of Turning Circles  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi intuey, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Turning Circles" Open in new Window. by intuey

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep creative well worded poem that carries a powerful flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul standing in a graveyard where time is streaming by with no past present or future.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A powerful poem that takes the reader into the work and caused his mind start to wonder.

intuey, thank you for sharing this delightful poem.
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Review of A Sweet Chase  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi MK Lowery, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"A Sweet Chase" Open in new Window. by MK Lowery

Clarity:A good title for this adventure tale.

Writing style:Animal adventure fantasy.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good format however a bit more line spacing would make it easier for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem to be specific for its speaker.

My favorite line:---Enid gave Alonzo that familiar toothy smile. “Aww…Lonnie. Is that you? Catch me if you can.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and creative folklore fantasy. Strong character with great visual descriptions that helps the reader to get into and picture the scene.

A great job with the dialogue which is believable and makes this tale even more entertaining.



MK Lowery, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a bit more line spacing with perhaps a blank line between paragraphs and maybe even a larger font to make it easier and more appealing for those of us readers who have weaker eyes.

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Review of Woven in the Dark  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi C.W.Rickman, I came across this story while random reviewing.

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My impressions of:"Woven in the Dark" Open in new Window. by C.W.Rickman

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this tale.

Writing style:Fantasy folklore drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The format and structure indeed makes it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialogue seems to be appropriate for its specific speaker.

My favorite line:--- I see it in the way Gosse smiles at us, as though we’re pieces on his chessboard.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written prologue in a nice orderly fashion that is easy for the reader. Great descriptions that helps the reader get into this folklore tale.

Written with a nice personal realistic touch that really helps draw the reader into the page.

C.W.Rickman, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Well written story, a good proofread and edit never hurts. Personally when proof reading I try to eliminate starting a sentence with and or but, probably just me but seems like an AI thing.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Raja Mehwish Ali I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"THE BIRDIES PART 2" Open in new Window. by Raja Mehwish Ali

Clarity:Good title for this entertaining fantasy drama.

Writing style: Geographical fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure that is somewhat easy for the reader

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- As a result of the bird invasion, my teacher, Annie Hayworth, was pecked to death and saved me by pushing me into the school building. She became the birds' victim herself.< Cathy shed a tear.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: An interesting tale with great descriptions and a strong character that does draw the reader right into the action. I like the references to 1963 kind of a special year for me.

This reads much like a true story I like your references to cousins, this seems to personalize and helps the reader relate to the tale.

I have not read Part 1 however I am considering it because I like the flow of this entertaining story.

Raja Mehwish Ali, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: For this reader I am not used to the arrows instead of quotation marks, which is how it reads on my computer.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi -perception- I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Minutes Before The Fall" Open in new Window. by -perception-

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this relationship tale.

Writing style: Teen fiction drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed? Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nicely formatted tale however the structure seems a little crowded, could use a little more line spacing to make it easier for those readers like me with the weak eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---I didn't even try to keep up with what was spilling out of his mouth.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Well written and well worded with great descriptions that help the reader relate to this tale.

I think this reads much like a true story which makes it easy for the reader to get drawn in to this entertaining story.

-perception-, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a bit more line spacing and perhaps a blank line between paragraphs to make this morning inviting for browsers or would be readers.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Lizzie Winter's Fairy I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"An Act of Kindness" Open in new Window. by Lizzie Winter's Fairy

Clarity: A good title for this entertaining tale.

Writing style:Relationship, contest entry, drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The format and structure does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem to be appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:---“I’m fine, Willard,” said Rose. “But I am in a bit of a hurry. It’s almost dinner time and I need to get to cooking.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A entertaining short story with strong characters and good visual descriptions. Especially considering a contest entry which are usually governed by a fast timeline.

Lizzie Winter's Fairy, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Write on!

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Joseph
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Review of For Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again VENACAVA I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "For Love" Open in new Window. by VENACAVA

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong interesting free verse style love poem. Well worded so that the emotions can definitely be felt.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a young couple in a prehistoric time trying to learn how to make their relationship beneficial for both.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I see with the grammar spelling on mechanics of this interesting work.

VENACAVA, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Dead Man's Regret  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi again VENACAVA I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Dead Man's Regret" Open in new Window. by VENACAVA

Clarity:Seems like a good title for this tale.

Writing style:Dark fiction drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure seems a little crowded especially for those of us readers with weak eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes.

My favorite line:---I will doom the life I have left to live; by not living it at all.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A strong emotional tale that does get the readers interest with a realistic approach that feels like you're talking directly to the reader.

Good strong descriptions that help the reader to visualize the dark scene.

VENACAVA, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a bit more line spacing with perhaps a blank line between paragraphs, maybe larger font to help those readers with weak eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Belonging  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Belonging" Open in new Window. by Jacky

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great opening line that I certainly can relate to. I love the historical descriptions followed with the -its a small world twist.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a happy soul enjoying and admiring everything around before getting hit up by times twisted sense of humor.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: This reader has certainly enjoyed this delightful tale

Jacky, thank you for sharing your art.

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Review of Our Perfect House  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jacky, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Our Perfect House" Open in new Window. by Jacky

Clarity: Seems to be a great title for this delightful tale.

Writing style:Contest entry, personal drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only contest entry is listed by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Nicely formatted with a good structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialogue does seem appropriate to its speaker.

My favorite line:--- Though we had plenty of time, even after our child was born, we wouldn’t actually need a swing set… but that’s what brought us to the feeling that it was about time to seriously think house.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and very entertaining tale. Especially considering a contest entry that was probably limited on time.

A nice twist for the end that caught this reader off guard.

Jacky, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Write on!.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again HuntersMoon, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Music of the Spheres" Open in new Window. by HuntersMoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful Villanelle formed poem. I think the villanelle is my favorite forms of poetry. No doubt a hard art to master, this delightful work has achieved that mark.

---This is a music found in heaven's light---
---a Symphony of stars and planets bright---
A heavenly flow can be felt through out. Another Awesome HuntersMoon masterpiece.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of Angles standing at heavens gate in awe of the wondrous beauties.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: An enchanting poem followed with a nice definition for the form of the Villanelle.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing your art.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Hi VENACAVA, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Just A Little More" Open in new Window. by VENACAVA

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded deep poem that describes time so well that you can hear the sound of that annoying alarm clock.

Indeed time can be and is a mysterious phenomenon, all through life we try to understand it yet it changes second by second.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a worker reaching to hit snooze on the alarm clock to get in those last few minutes of sleep. Then running late the rest of the day.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this deep and entertaining poem.

VENACAVA, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Hi Princess Megan Rose, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Autumn Pear/Apple Pudding Cake" Open in new Window. by Princess Megan Rose

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful picture of a loving Grandmother cooking for her visiting grandson. The Autumn Pear and Apple Pudding cake is described so well the reader can smell and almost taste the delicious treat.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The image of a loving family reunion where the Grandmother prepares a feast with fresh fruit and love, is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

Princess Megan Rose, thank you for sharing your beautiful poem.
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Review of "What I Hear"  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again DanGauldin, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: ""What I Hear"" Open in new Window. by DanGauldin

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful realistic modern English Sonnet. The rhyming scheme helps the realistic flow of this entertaining poem about everyday things.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of school buddies setting around passing time the best they can at a certain point in the flow of time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that this reader can see.

DanGauldin, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi DanGauldin, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: ""The Greatest Loss"" Open in new Window. by DanGauldin

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great rhyming scheme that adds to the realistic deep flow of this strong but sad poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a war torn town where a bride is killed by a bullet leaving the groom in an emotional, poetic state of mind.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this strong poem.

DanGauldin, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Anna Marie Carlson, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Nifty, Nonfeasance Sentiments" Open in new Window. by Anna Marie Carlson

Clarity:A good humorous title.

Writing style: Personal, opinion, essay.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes.

My favorite lines:---Doing tricks that only dolphins know how to do, a school of dolphins were jumping out of the water. Put yourself in an interesting place to redemise the fact that you're intelligent enough to know how to master your smart brain. These dolphins, then, would have a nifty nonfeasance.---

---A nifty, sentimental nonfeasance can jeopardize the wonderful talent that you've got, so be sure to submit your writing.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nifty, nonfeasance sentiment indeed. Well written and defined essay that gave this reader a chuckle.

It is funny how that writing about nothing comes easiest while sounding great lots of the time.

Anna Marie Carlson, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Write on!

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Prof Moriarty tries to return, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "A Story of Perseverance" Open in new Window. by Prof Moriarty tries to return

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A realistic story of perseverance. Short but straight to the point in a few words exactly like the modern reader likes things.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a realistic mother determined to stay positive against the doctors odds. Ending in a positive result.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Prof Moriarty tries to return, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Hi Jaiam, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Sing A Song Of Joy!" Open in new Window. by Jaiam

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well written and worded. A strong spiritual poem that flows with inspiration.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an old soul searching itself before it's time it's told

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this entertaining poem.

Jaiam, thank you for sharing your poem.

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Review of Random stuff  Open in new Window.
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Hi Sanveda, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Random stuff" Open in new Window. by Sanveda

Clarity: A good title for this tale however it could better describe the content.

Writing style: Fantasy mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure however a bit more line space and then possibly a larger font might make it a bit easier for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes the dialog does seem to be appropriate for the speaker.

My favorite line:---"No, he left the world. To die one should exist."
"He didn't exist, then how he wrote the..."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A unique and original tale written with mostly dialogue which is usually the most difficult.

The last paragraph attempts to reveal some of the mystery.

Sanveda, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts. Consider some line spacing and possibly a larger font to make it more inviting to a browser or potential reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Comedy With Me  Open in new Window.
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Hi Raja Mehwish Ali, I came across this work while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Comedy With Me" Open in new Window. by Raja Mehwish Ali

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A bullet point list of 161 very funny jokes. A good change of pace from the normal and thanks for making me laugh.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of the comedian up on stage in front of thousands of fans who are all laughing hard at one time or the other.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this funny list of jokes.

Raja Mehwish Ali, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Head Games  Open in new Window.
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Hi again Hunters Moon, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Head Games" Open in new Window. by Hunters Moon

Clarity:A good title for this mythical tale.

Writing style: Mythology, comedy, drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? indeed the structure is easy for the radar.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem appropriate for its speaker.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written mythological tail that does capture the reader's attention.

Well described strong characters that this reader can relate to.

Greek mythology is among my favorite genres.

Hunters Moon, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Write on!

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Review of Power  Open in new Window.
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Hi Ginger44, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Power" Open in new Window. by Ginger44

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written acrostic poem with a creative rhyming pattern that adds to the unique flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an ancient Kingdom where greed and power has corrupted society.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Redacted Run" Open in new Window. by Jeff

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written and delightful poem with a nice rhyming scheme that adds to the overall good flow. What a happy picture these words paint.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul getting caught up in the city life before taking time to reflect, then realizing the pleasure of taking time to smell the roses and count your blessings.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful entertaining poem.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Ode to my email friend" Open in new Window. by Kermit

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A positive and inspiring free verse poem. A well written happy Ode, almost too happy to the point of sounding a bit unreal.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a group of friends communicating via emails without ever actually meeting each other in person.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: The only grammar problem I see is the third sentence should start with a capital.

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