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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Tashabrown (DEIB),I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Weaponization of DEIB "  by Tashabrown (DEIB)

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Sci-fi rough draft style.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure appears to be in rough draft style that is not that easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem appropriate to the speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A lot of good stuff here. Seems to be a rough draft version of a future masterpiece.

Tashabrown (DEIB), thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good proof read and edit never hurts.

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Review of Chapter 10  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Darkscape Entertainment, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Chapter 10"  by Darkscape Entertainment

Clarity:The title could describe the contents of this chapter better.

Writing style: Teen mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog is specific to it's reader.

My favorite line:--- Not surprisingly, Imperial embodied an enticing and compelling world, so as the boys accessed the front desk, excitement flourished.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An entertaining tale with strong characters using realistic dialog.

Written and then interesting style with a good easy format for the reader. A good opening that grabs the readers attention and holds it well throughout the chapter.

Darkscape Entertainment, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Wandering Thoughts, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Heal The World Through Love "  by Wandering Thoughts

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful peaceful world is painted through these words. If only the world would do it, so simple yet so complicated.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a world where all live as equals in peace trying to help their neighbors.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the grammar spelling grrammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Wandering Thoughts, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of your eyes  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi sapphire kuyeus I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "your eyes"  by sapphire kuyeus

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A interesting style for this mysterious romance poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of lost lovers traveling in the river of time only able to get glimpses of each other occasionally.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

sapphire kuyeus, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Angels Weep  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi fyn, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Angels Weep "  by fyn

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An interesting short poem touching on many interested ideas. I really like the opening line.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of angels weeping crystal tears that fall into the river of time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

fyn, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Open Bottle  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Weirdone-Back in the games, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Open Bottle"  by Weirdone-Back in the games

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A entertaining poem with repeating lines.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a mythological world with a girl surrounded by bottles all sealed with lids.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Weirdone-Back in the games, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Color of Urine  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Tito, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Color of Urine"  by Tito

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this article well.

Writing style:Informative health article.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A very informative and well laid out article full of interesting information about the subject.

Tito, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a blank line between paragraphs, this will make it a bit easier on the reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Lucky Error  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again QueenNormaJean Cheerleader Soon, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Lucky Error"  by QueenNormaJean Cheerleader Soon,

Clarity: A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Relationship drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure and format is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line: ---
“Are you John?” I smiled back at him. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great tale, short simple and to the point just the way today's busy reader likes things.

Well Done!

QueenNormaJean Cheerleader Soon, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

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Joseph
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Review of Seasons  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Odessa Molinari, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Seasons"  by Odessa Molinari

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong and emotional work that catches the readers attention well from the start and holds it well through-out.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see young love in the low point of time yet then moving through time to the high point where all is better and we learned from our mistakes thus making us stronger .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this the delightful work.

Odessa Molinari, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi again Winchester Jones, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "While the World Held Its Breath"  by Winchester Jones

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful and entertaining perception of the first moon landing.

A great idea for this entertaining work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of Neil Armstrong landing on the moon and pranking everyone watching.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can see in the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining short story.

Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Jeff masquerading as Deadpool, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Stand-Up And Deliver"  by Jeff masquerading as Deadpool

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style:Entertainment contest entry prompt drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is indeed easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue is indeed appropriate for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- As he peeked out from behind the curtain, he tried to count the audience but stopped once he realized the number was way more than six, and that it was only making him more nervous.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well worded and written tale that holds the reader's attention well from the beginning to the end.

A good use of the prompt for this contest entry.

Jeff masquerading as Deadpool, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi JACE, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Setting Your Review Filters"  by JACE

Clarity: A good title that describes the content of this work well.

Writing style: Modern how to advise.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A great structure and format that is extremely easy for the reader.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written and formatted article full of valuable information to help anyone on this WDC site.

A lot has changed since 2009 however this article seems to be well updated.



JACE,thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

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Review of The Doctor Visit  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi Chuckster, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Doctor Visit"  by Chuckster

Clarity:A great title for this tale.

Writing style: Modern experience drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only two listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is congested and not that easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- The last time I let you come into the examination room, you started asking more questions about your own health than mine. I'm surprised the doctor didn't bill us for two appointments."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A realistic account of a medical procedure that is everyday and normal for a Dr yet complicated once in a lifetime for the patent.

Well worded and told in a rough first draft style. A lot of potential in this work after a good proof read and edit to make it more desirable for the reader as well as browsers or potential readers.

Chuckster, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good edit shortening the long sentences as well as paragraphs. This will make it more inviting to browsers or would be readers.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Rude Alf  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi again THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Rude Alf"  by THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24,

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great reworded description of a holiday favorite using a classic tone. Well done! A great idea for this delightful work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a prankster confusing his friends annually with his unique style of tricks.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this the delightful formatted work of art .

THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of A Frightful Night  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi GERVIC` Hiccup H Haddock III, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A Frightful Night"  by GERVIC` Hiccup H Haddock III

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful poem with a nice rhyming scheme that adds to the original flow.
Mother Nature is indeed unpredictable especially in those hard rains that sometimes come unexpectedly.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a family enjoying family time in a house when the rain begins to pour more and more into an unpredictable storm causing extraordinary measures.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this enjoyable poem.

GERVIC` Hiccup H Haddock III, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Phone  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Beholden, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Phone"  by Beholden

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:I love this humorous poem. It brings back memories of tales my kids often tell about a phone thrown out the window by their Dad. Kids and their imaginations.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a family enjoying a TV show when the phone continues ringing with annoying telemarketers then suddenly gets tossed out the window onto the cement walk disintegrating the telephone.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Beholden, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Fire  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi indecisive. Congratulations on your win for the August horror contest.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Fire"  by indecisive

Clarity:A great title which is in-line with the prompt for the contest.

Writing style:Paranormal human nature drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format are somewhat easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---When I graduated and was able to escape the confines of my parent's home I felt liberated. Like the flame I needed more room to grow.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A great descriptive tale from the pyromaniacs point of view. This unique approach grabs the readers attention and holds it for the climax.

Well written in an orderly fashion that holds the readers attention as they wait for the conclusion.

This story emphasizes the crazy thinking from a paramaniacs mind.

indecisive, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a larger font with a bit more line spacing for those of us with weak eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review of Flight  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi hihohyena, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Flight"  by hihohyena

Clarity:A good title for this entertaining tale.

Writing style: Mythological adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem appropriate to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- His eyes trailed upwards, seeing fur slowly turn to feathers as two giant hawk's wings had erupted from the creature's shoulders, and the head of the beast was what looked like a dire wolf.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written tale full of adventure and mystery. This grabs the readers attention and holds it well.

Great descriptions that help the reader to picture the scene. This helps hold the reader's attention.

Great character descriptions that help the reader to picture the character and better relate to the story.

hihohyena, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Well structured and formatted however you might consider a larger font with a bit more line spacing to make it easier for those of us with weaker eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Tim Chiu, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Sweetest Worship: The Greatest Gift"  by Tim Chiu

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong poem with a consistent rhyming pattern that contributes to the over-all flow of this positive inspirational poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see a soul setting on the river of time reflecting on historic events.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems with the spelling, grammar or mechanics that I can find.

Tim Chiu, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Reflections.  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi dyxeOri, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Reflections."  by dyxeOri

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded free verse style love poem.
Emotions can be felt screaming to get out to grab the reader.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see a beautiful waterfront being transformed through time into a polluted puddle of waste. A soul fond of the place bouncing back and forth in time while remembering the fond times in the previous waterfront.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful and entertaining poem

dyxeOri, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of untitled  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Sphere Writer, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "untitled"  by Sphere Writer

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An entertaining free verse style poem. Nice orderly format that helps with the realistic flow. Consider less use of the word -and-.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a young poet practesing for a long career.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with the spelling, grammer or mechanics of this entertaing poem.

Sphere Writer, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Assignment 3  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Assignment 3"  by Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th

Clarity: Interesting title for this tale.

Writing style: Modern romance drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- Butterflies took flight in her stomach, the fluttering making her breath ragged.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written delightful tale with a realistic tone. This helps the reader get into the story.

Great descriptions of both setting as well as characters. This story grabs the readers attention and holds it throughout the story.

Purple Wishing WDC Happy 24th, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a stronger title that describes this entertaining tale better.

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Review of For a Toss  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi again THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"For a Toss"  by THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24

Clarity:A great title for this awesome and entertaining tale.

Writing style:Family mythological drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---"There's no fun in destroying you, then."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great story that reads like a true story of a happy family playing a game. This helps the reader relate to the story.

Great characters that are described well making them real to the reader.

A very entertaining story with the bonus of a history lesson, awesome.

THANKFUL SONALI HAPPY WDC 24, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review of Comfort Zone  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Sindbad, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Comfort Zone"  by Sindbad

Clarity: A nice title for this inspirational tale.

Writing style:Folklore contest entry drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes, the dialog is specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line: --- Each time, he would return home with a dejected spirit. His wife would always comfort him and never for once, she was disappointed or resentful.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:This inspiring tale describes human nature as well as human determination. Well worded and told with a great ending that will inspire the reader.

Sindbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after letting an item set idle for a while.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Dr M C Gupta, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "THE WORM IN MY HEART"  by Dr M C Gupta

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded strong poem. Powerful emotions can be felt from this deep poem.
Short and to the point just like today's modern reader likes.

A realistic tone adds to the poetic flow of this strong work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a lost soul at a bad time considering dark thoughts from deep in their heart. Yet overcoming the thoughts and finding their way once again .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can detect and this beautiful poem.

Dr M C Gupta, thank you for sharing your poem.
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