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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI bumblegrum. I recall you have a December Aniversary too. *Wink* So, I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

The title appealed to me as a metaphoric idea. I enjoyed the philosophical tone that was dreamlike. It was pleasant to read and flowed as a consciousness river
*Delight*
I just wonder if a bit more punctuation would assist where to pause as you have some potent ideas that bear pondering. I really notice the need with the lines with "possibilities" as I wonder if they also emerge or just the "fruits of labour" come from your mind. *Confused*

The images at the start are vivid and I liked the idea of "swamp" of mind! *Smile*
The query in the middle is effective break for the change in reflection.

Thanks for sharing your thought provoking vision. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star* Have a Happy Holiday too! *Candycaner*

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Moarzjasac! I see you have a December anniversary too! *Wink* I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

I was intrigued by the title of this folder and now see it is a wonderful collection of poems honouring the amazing "street people." I so enjoyed reading the introductory poem. It is so honest and moving and reveals your expanding awareness of the plight of others--as you say those we do not want to see.*Smile*

The image is so vivid as you show the plight from their point of view in the second half of the poem. Wow! You really capture the essence of the atmsophere and life on the street. *Thumbsup*

The poems in the folder are on the topic and it is interesting hook to have a couple of them quoted in the intro to the folder. It gives us pause for thought and is quite inspirational. *Delight*

Thank you for sharing your heartfelt vision and craft. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of The Grind  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Fairy* Hiya Michael! Here I am with a review to celebrate the Powerful You as as I didn't get a chance to review you at the raid!*Delight*


The title of this is appealing as I think of the daily grind of tasks we Must do and not fun at all! It suits the theme of the story taking place on a Monday morning. *Smile* The first line set the tone and drew me into the experience. Active strong verbs like "pounded" and "stabbed" are vivid and add drama. The first lines were quick and kept my attention.

I had to laugh out loud at the evocative ending. So funny and unexpected! Excellent!*Star*

The paragraphed flowed well though perhaps felt a bit run on in the middle {I am not a pro} and italics served to show his inner thoughts. It is amazing to me how one can write a whole episode in 100 words!

I did enjoy reading the story and could imagine the character from the details. The frustration at the start was shown in the shorter lines and his laggy movements may be reflected in the longer task oriented lines in the middle. I liked the "potholes" as the ride and bumps would seem exaggerated in this situation. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.! Good luck in the contest.*Starstruck*



*Star* Light on the path and write on! Eyestar

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Review of "UNGH!"  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Fairy* Hiya angus! Here I am with a review to celebrate the Powerful You as part of our Power crew Party! *Candycaner*


Wow! This is too creepy! What a horrific revenge and your character did the deed with a logical manner and continued to eat and converse. *Shock*

You did a good job with setting the scene and past conflict and we set out to hope for the reconciliation as the wife does. I liked the two points of contention--why Ben dislikes his brother and then Mike having a totally other motivation. Excellent twist!

The scene of the transformation was vivid too as it dawns slowly on the characters and the reader what is occurring. It kept my attention and evoked a response."shudder" I wonder too how he will explain this and what Jill will do.

You can certainly weave a tale from what I expect is normal to the bizarre! *Starstruck* Happy Christmas! *Santahat*

*Star* Thank you for Being part of our crew to make it shine. *Starstruck* Light on the path and write on! Eyestar

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Review of Winter's Touch  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Fairy* Hiya Kerri! Here I am with a review to celebrate the Powerful You as part of our Power crew Party! *Candycaner*


*Fairy*I was drawn to the evocative title as personification of Winter. *Thumbsup*
We are having a green winter so far so here I come to dream of the lovely snow and you remind me of its bitter grip! Well done!!

*snowr*Your image of winter is clear and the second and last line are my favourites. The short lines remind me of shortness of breath in the cold air and the abruptness of it compared to the flow of summer. Nice job.

*Star* I wondered about the punctuation as the first three lines may go together as description of the wind and then the snow line is a complete sentence.

*Snow5* The last line sums it up brilliantly. I like how the reader can enter into the vision you cast with brief phrases. *Star* Thanks for sharing your craft and reminding me that maybe I don't miss the snow so much. LOL

*Star* Thank you for Being part of our crew to make it shine. *Starstruck* Light on the path and write on!
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Review of What I Saw  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Fairy* Hiya Sum1! Here I am with a review to celebrate the Powerful You as part of our Power crew Party! *Candycaner*


*Fairy* As promised, I have finally caught up with your unique scribing here. A journal is a perfect venue for your "voyeur" tale. Brilliant idea. *Smile*

*Star* Your creation of this character through the diary makes it seem real and the twist at the end is stunning and unexpected. *Shock* You are so inventive. I had to do a double take and then smile--not at the drama but the last line. Excellent. *Salute*

*Starv* The form of the diary is well written and while you do not say where he writes from, our own imagination takes over. The description of what is seen is very vivid and the commentary is detailed. The speaker is well shown through his thinking and his reflection on the nature of the two relationships. You draw us into his vision effectively as you compare the two families. I could well smile at his opinions of the Magnuson's! *Smile*

*Starg* The drama at the Campbells was vivid and I felt badly that the witness would not be able to help. The idea that heresay wins the day is a sad commentary too. I love how you lead us into what happened to the diary writer. Well done. Sad too. *Smile*

*Star* I noticed little glitches like missing commas and typo like "logn". *Wink* but nothing really detracted from my enjoyment and fascination with the read! So creative and lively. The voice was consistent and had strong personality.*Salute*

*Starstruck* You lead me well--- a different type of voyeur for sure. Thanks for sharing your vision! You muse was really rocking! *Candycaner*

*Star* Thank you for Being part of our crew to make it shine. *Starstruck* Light on the path and write on! Have a Happy holiday.
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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Candycaner* Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!*Delight*


Hiya Michaelk2! Your piece popped up on the random reads and the title was brilliant! You really gave the idea a horror twist! Well done.

I was drawn into the drama as you set the problem quickly. I liked how the unfolding mislead me to think who the culprit might be, so was surprised by the outcome!

The description of the bathroom was vivid { ick!!} and I thought the use of the word "departed" was different to use for leaving on a trip but it has more meaning by the end. Cool! *Cool*

The dialogue was purposeful and natural adding to the telling.

One glitch I noticed was "murderer that was spotted" should be "who was spotted". I wondered if this particular murderer was the same one in the story here and who would have spotted him---and would the cop not recognize...Maybe it is a different murderer.

Also I think saying " the officer's business card" instead of the unwieldy "card the officer had given her" would tighten up the line grammatically.

I don't usually read horror stuff but this was not too explicit and kept the mystery going to keep my interest. Lots of details are left for us to wonder the hows and whys!

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Dear Strangers  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Ornament1r*Welcome to WDC Burama! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!*Delight*

What a cool idea to use this poem as an introduction and could apply to any new undertaking.
I enjoyed the metaphor of the the journey, the crossing the river with a tie, the vast possibilities indicated by the stars.

The poem is a free flow with a structure that is not strictly patterned. It has a philosophical tone and I could follow the message. Some of the words are not so poetic images--like "tragically".

I wondered about "walk through rivers" as I thought of "across" rivers as more accurate. I think "overlong" to describe winds is confusing.

I felt sad at verse 5 as I saw someone with no hope of choosing more than what this reality holds. *Sad* The image of the child tears is potent.

There is a lot of ideas held in this expression and I really appreciated the overall tone and letter like form. Wonderful intent of the author is strong. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft for me to play in and enjoy. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI I am here with a review to celebrate you on your anniversary *Star*

I was intrigued by your evocative title. Great choice that made me ponder. *Salute*

I enjoyed the picture you vividly paint here. I could perceive the underlying atmosphere and it was great to read. The short phrasings and the repeated words really added drama and effect. Wonderful strategy. eg. The first lines struck me as soon as you said, "stare. Stare at.." *Wink*

The last line has potency in its concept and wrapping up your reflective moment.

It does not look like a poem on the page yet has the flow and feel of a poem. Arrangement can be free choice in poetry too especially as this is a freer style. It worked for me. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your vision and vibe. I liked entering into the revery!*Starstruck*


Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Moments of Gold  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI I am here with a review to celebrate you on your anniversary *Star* Happy 12th! Wow!

This title rocks and the work expresses a loving view of the magic or grandkids. Your experiences show such precious memories and support your title theme. *Salute*

I love how Kaleb taught the game. It is so wonderful how, when you observe, the thinking and knowing of wee ones unfold. They are so much wiser than we see on the fly. They can be so intuen with each other.

The story was well told and kept me reading especially as the topic is so fascinating. I like kids! *Smile* The pictures are priceless and the piece is a wonderful tribute to be included in memoires. They will be great to share when the kids are older. Oh the tales you will tell. *Wink*

This was fun and I felt the special regard you have for the wisdom of these kids and naturally the love. They are lucky in their choice of grandpa!*Star*

Thanks for sharing so openly your vision and family! It made me smile --an uplift in any day.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Fairy* Hiya Redtowrite! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!*Delight*

*Heart*Wow! This is a truly moving tribute to a child. It brought tears to my eyes as you so vividly describe her magic, the illness and the outcome. I was so moved by the letting go of the mother and the magical world she imagined for her angelic little one. *Salute*

*Heart*The voice speaking to and about the child is gentle and giving ease. The images are so vivid and appealing to both child and parent. The idea of angel mothering is so precious. *Angel*

*Heart*It was lovely to read aloud with is potent atmosphere, loving vibe, and free form that suits the emotional content.

*Heart*I noticed a mix up with the voice--sometimes speaking about the child and other times to the child. It may be intentional and does not steal from the potency and meaning. Just as a matter of consistency I wonder what is possible if one voice could be used. It would be not too hard to make the "SHE" to you, perhaps.

*Heart* Overall, this is a fabulous tribute to this child from a mom's point of view and thank you for sharing so vulnerably what must have been so heart breaking--I can't imagine. I am so glad you had angellic help for yourself too. *Angel*
This is inspirational and I am sure may bring hope to others.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Fairy* Hi Sunny. This contest popped up on the review page as I was crediting! How did I miss it? *Facepalm* I love poetry too!

I like the elegant page design and flow. The drop notes keep the page so neat and tidy, easy to scroll for the specific item you want. *Thumbsup*

The rules are clearly stated and the having the date in its own drop down is effective. I don't have to search through a lot of info to find it.

I see some folks have forgotten word count.*Sad* Gosh, you even give examples in the rules! I always wonder how to make this rule pop. I have not seen it given in the title of the work before though. Usually within the item or in the forum. That might be the issue as folks put the title in sometimes before even writing the poem. mmm.

I appreciate the list of various prompts as allows for flexibility and may capture more interest when choice is available. *Smile*

This contest is well conceived and organized with an inviting tone. I am glad your love of poetry sparked this imaginative contribution.*Starstruck*

Keep on shining as and sunny *Star* you are and write on!

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC QueenQuinn! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Your evocative title popped up on the Random Reads when I clicked. I really like the philosophical tone of the title and it is true too. Good choice for your expression.

This is a moving piece and the repeated phrase was so effective. The short two phrase sentences were quick to read and I could see the mind conversation as it had good intentions. The shortness of lines added to the drama. The "but" introduced the same excuse each time.*Thumbsup* The whole paragraph read like a cycle and felt like a mimic of alcholic merry go round. Very potent and sad. I felt the mind is addicted to the denial and resistance and then to the excuse. Well done.

The wise truth is well shown here. What we despise keeps us powerless to avoid the thing we despise. What we resist persists. We do need to examine the deeper trauma in these cases to release. This was well said and we don't even need the background of the character to get the meaning and regret he expresses.

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.*Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Me and My Worlds  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Dr. Matticakes Myra! I am here with a review to celebrate you on your anniversary and for our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  DARE to REVIEW RAID!! *Star*

What a great way to feature your work: folder for a series of folders. Very organized for one so prolific in creations.
I enjoyed the poem which tops the folder and the sketch is wonderful. The tagline is excellent and made me curious.

The poem is a delight to read and you did a good job with presenting the opposites---of things we might find within.
I liked the "smiles do dwell" and "distilled...woe" and smiled at your aim in life! *Laugh*

The flow was smooth and rhyme was consistent. I liked the welcoming tone and was intrigued with the examples of tales you mentioned. It really previewed the essence of the types of writing folders contained in this item. *Thumbsup*

The title of items within the folder are evocative too. Ring around the Roses for campfires is brilliant. Thetia intrigues me.
The items illustrate your many talents from writing, poetry, sketching, doodles? I love doodling! What a bright *Star* you are!

I see these are older works and wonder if you have new ones to add in this particular venue! *Smile*
I notice the word "size" is showing up at the end of your poem. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your worlds. I hope you have many more years shining and sharing here at WDC! *Starstruck* Happy 13th! WoW!

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Brooke! I am here with a review to celebrate you on your anniversary and for our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  DARE to REVIEW RAID!! *Star*

This poll has a relevant question and you reveal your true interest in what authors think. I like how you add a link to your commentary item on reviews. It helps us get to know you!

The introduction is inviting and fun to read, appealing with its colour and symbol effects. It defines the question and gives some examples.

It is interesting that you later added how many folks saw the poll but did not vote. Wow! How long does it take to consider and click especially when you have the option of email in case no suitable answer appears. Of course, maybe some like to just say don't know.

Your possible responses are suitable and provide a range and I can see where I would like a multiple answer. LOL
First impression would be inspiring but it doesn't cover it all, so email it is. *Smile*
I do like the energy of some responses like the "I'm terrible" and the "I can take it!" *Wink* I had to smile.

It is fun to consider and provides an opportunity for one to ponder on what they do like as a review vibe and style. Thanks for your interest! *Star*

Thanks for all of your flair and contributions over the years and may you enjoy many more years here at WDC. Happy 11th! Wow! *Salute*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Neva. I am here with a review to celebrate you for our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  DARE to REVIEW RAID!! *Star*

Oh, wow! I love the title and theme of this poll! Certainly something to think about. I suppose it would depend on if they were friendly or came with ray guns blazing. *Bigsmile*

I wondered what sparked the question other than curiosity. *Wink*

The intro is direct and simple asks the question.
The answers are so varied. Good choices. The passport and ghostwriter made me smile. *Alien* I did wonder if you should have left one spot for OTHER---as some may have another cool possibility.*Smile*

I don't drink coffee but it was the closest response--certainly would have a chat! Would they have a translator though. You certainly spark lots of questions as I try to choose a answer that might fit. Or else I just think way too much! *Facepalm*
Maybe in your question, you could qualify--like friendly aliens. *Laugh*

Thanks for sharing this bit of fun! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Hey Pure Sci-Fi! I found your cool photo to review in our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Dare To Review Raid! *Delight* Good job on learning how to add it to your port. It took me a long time to get it!

I had to smile at your cute tagline! It is up to us to believe. LOL It rather adds some comic appeal and gives a hint, that in spite of enjoying off earth sci fi, you may be one of us. *Wink*

I like the shadowy aspect of the photo--as if you are shrouded in mystery. Now you see me, now you don't! I also appreciate the simplicity and reality of the background and image. It show vulnerability and truth just as it is. *Salute*

Good to see you! Thanks for sharing and having fun with WDC techy elements. It takes time to get to know all the gadgetry.

Have fun and write on! *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya webwitch! Guess what showed up on the Random Reads when I clicked! How timely a piece! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

This episode is so funny and you make it seem like it really happened. LOL The narration in first person gives it a personal anecdotal tone. The story has a coherent flow and the descriptions of the scenes and procedures are detailed and vivid. I burst out laughing at the solution crock pot! *Laugh* How ingenious! You have quite the imagination. and that the prayer had an even greater meaning? Well, I guess! If they only knew the secret.

The sentences flowed well and I was not thrown out by any major flaws. The character is clear and the plot is interesting in its twists and turns. Cool ideas like the "auxilliary" fridge and decorative "fishnet" and words like "birdzilla" and "slim pickings" at the super market add interest. It was fun to read and I was hooked in as I was curious about the "nightmare" at the start.
You did use some adverbs rather close together--eg like "cautiously" and "carefully". I think you can drop the adverb in "thought carefully about next step".
In Lines like "I dried off...bath" you can use a comma instead of the first "and". It felt run on. A quick read will show where a few lines might be tightened up. *Wink*

Nothing really detracted me from the entertaining hilarity of the storyline. Thanks for sharing your gift for comic anecdotes---it kinda reflects real situations that can occur----although, hopefully one would not resort to drastic measures. *Starstruck*

Happy Thanksgiving. *Pumpkin*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Je Suis Paris  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC A.Sparrow! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Brilliant! I enjoy seeing the French language used and it is so effective for the theme of tribute to France at this time. Tres Bien! *Cool* The title bears a truth for we really are all connected on this planet, if we would only know and live it.

The free style suits the content and emotion.
While not consistent as each verse is different in format yet each has a different vibe as well.
I really enjoyed the cheering heartfelt prayer vibe of the first one and the call to unity in the second. It totally captures the spirit of the French people.

In the first verse I think dropping the words "that" would make the line 3 flow better in keeping with the others. *Wink*
eg "We pray the weak will find strength to dance.' Just an idea. See what feels right.

Such a lovely tribute with a positive tone that encourages unity as a way through the dark.*Star*

Thanks for sharing your vision and prayer!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Nature  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloong* Welcome to WDC HRK! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!*Smile*

*Tree* Oh I love trees and I too appreciate how receptive they are and how much peace I have when I am in nature. I like how you use them as the theme in which to compare our life. The title could refer to nature and human nature too. I wonder if a reference to tree in the title would be more direct connection. Just a thought that occurred to me.

*Earth* The free style suits the content of reflection on life. Your idea is a potent one and has me thinking how calm nature can be, how allowing of all that is. It would be nice to be like that and hey, I think we can. *Smile* Shutting down our judgement is the very thing that may help that.

*Tree3* I like the comparison of tree to life---the seasons we share. I really felt the "wishing" tone here too. *Thumbsup*

*Treepine* I like the flow of the second verse with the No refrain and wonder why you didn't say "No differing states of mind to endure" or choose etc. instead of a longer phrase. It might add to the flow and consistency if you feel an edit would work here. *Wink*

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing crafting and your potent vision.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Eclipse  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC cowgirl! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!*Delight*

*Bootl* This theme appealed to me as a unique idea for a poem! Cool!

*Bootr* The free style poem was fun to read and I could really hear the confusion and panic that may have happened around eclipse time, when folks didn't understand. I like the simple language that led me on the moment by moment thinking journey. The last line with its puzzling query rocked! Well done.

*Bootr* I like the dramatic energy you created and the line about "run" really adds to the picture of what is happening. You did a lovely job with the rhyme scheme and and it had an easy flow when I read it aloud.

*Bootl* A few things to think about to clarify and add to the potency of your work.
I noticed. : "whats" needs to be "What's".

I would put quotes around what they are saying to separate it from the third person "they" and "we" to clarify.

eg. "Oh no! whats happening," they would cry.
"The sun has gone you can't see the sky.
all the way to ..."that?"

Also , you may need a period after "stop" for effect and then begin "The sun..." *Wink*
The use of the exclamation marks is super for effect and showing emotion at key times. *Smile*

*Starstruck* I think this is a wonderfully creative bit of drama! Well done!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Fire* Hi Choconut! I am back with another review as part of your Power Shop Gift!*Delight*


*Hammer* LOL. I had to check this poem out as I too created one recently at the Poetry Place. It just appealed to me so now I can see what you came up with for this interesting concept. *Wink* It didn't seem as hard as some forms but it stretched me. LOL

*Hammer* I liked your tone expressing the frustration with creating the poem. Brilliant and the contrast is that you create one! *Thumbsup* I could really imagine the image of the poet not quite being in line with the muse. *Laugh* Using "haze" and "daze" concepts twice, which kind of have the same meaning, gives emphasis to the theme. I like the image of the crowd of words etc. I can see crazy woman with wild hair and all the muses speaking at once ! *Fairy*

*Hammer*The form is correct to my understanding, 8 syllables in each of nine lines with the rhyme of aacbbcddc! *Wink* It has an element of humour that had me smiling.

*Hammer* This was so much fun! I hope you keep not liking the NOVE OTTO and maybe write another goodie! *Bigsmile* *Starstruck*

Thanks for allowing me to play in your works of wonder. I so admire you sharing all of your contributions and expressions. Keep shining!

Keep the ink flowing and write on! *Starstruck*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Fire* Congrats! You're receiving a gift from The Power Shop as gifted by Princess Zelda which will include 5 poem reviews. Sorry I am a bit late with this as my computer had gremlins! Enjoy! *Fire*

*Fire*Hi Choconut! It is my pleasure to pop into your poetry realm! I found this goodie and was not familiar with the form so out of curiousity here I am! *Laugh* I did have to go and look it up.

*Fire* The expression is amazing in its simple image and it allowed for me to imagine where I might wander and the scene of a whole landscape of flowers. I love blue and I can see myself in the wood under a blue sky surrounded in the scent on the breeze. Wonderful evocation. *Smile* The blue font adds flair to the page too.

*Fire* The title is appealing in flow and image as well. I imagine fairies there. *Fairy* LOL.

*Fire* The form is fascinating and more complex than it looks. You did a great job with the stairstep of syllable sounds.(u) Wow! I can't imagine the effort to get this right! *Salute* The added repeated sound letters (w) added to the flow as well.

*Fire* It reminds me a bit of Haiku with its lure to the imagination of the reader. I really enjoyed entering your vision. Thanks for sharing your craft.

Keep the quill inked and write on! *Starstruck*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloony* Hiya Fyn! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you as part of your Spell Book Auction Pack! Thanks for your generosity. *Bookopen*

*Apple* Oh my gosh! This evocative title grabbed me right away. My imagination activated as I thought of pioneer apple dolls, crab apple trees, an old face in a tree from a movie I once saw. Awesome effect! The words have a lovely flow and alliterative quality that is appealing as well. *Salute*

*Apple* Your gift for word weaving and metaphor is once again revealed in this tightly woven expression. The personification is delightful and well crafted. The first line set the voice, tone and sparked my imagination so I fell into the dream. I could so imagine and hear the voice of the crone as she compares her self to the maple. The descriptions are so vivid and the proud tone apparent. I so enjoyed the detail of the tree pictured as an old woman with "arthritic knots" and "windbent creases"! Brilliant and clear.*Salute* The idea of her other half was evocative too and I can imagine it.

*Apple* It was delicious to read aloud for flow and sound. Alliterative language is so appealing and interesting word phrasings like "buck gnawed", (does it need a hyphen/} "leaf their leaving" and "sot a squirrel" are cool. I had not heard those before. *Wink* I smiled at the line "of the crabby sort" *Laugh* as she owns her well earned reputation.
The enjambments and punctuation added drama effectively too.

*Apple* The poem seems to have a free style as I noticed one verse is longer than the others. In no way does it detract from the genius of the work and the enjoyment of the dream.

*Starstruck* What else can I say about such word wizardry! Your vision is so real and images realistic as they leap off the page. Impressive to me! Thanks for sharing your gift. It so contributes to creating a good vibe!


Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloony* Hiya Fyn! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you as part of your Spell Book Auction Pack! Thanks for your generosity. *Bookopen*

*Bookopen* I was drawn to your title as it made me smile to think about a poem about reading a poem and it made total sense as how you read a poem can effect the experience. I was curious to see how you would describe this. *Smile*

Intense! I could hear the potency in the tone and your images were vivid and unique for the theme. The metaphor was unexpected and brilliant to relay the "depth" and emotion of poems and poets. Perfect choice. *Thumbsup*

"Flay it open" is wonderful and I had not heard that word before. The imperative voice directed the reader right to the point. Your verb choices were so active and descriptions added vitality.
Lines like "Twist muscled meanings and sinewed stanzas." and
"to dance across synapses;" are evocative and add to the effective soundscape as I read aloud.
It was a pleasure to read and experience on all sense levels.

I wondered at the use of the word "voice" twice in close proximity in "give it voice". I get what you mean about giving it strength as you say it aloud yet I wondered about variety--could the first one have a synonym. mm. Yet to emphasize "voice" aspect is also relevant. *Wink*

I thought the word "but" was strong and kind of felt like a stop---- wanted to try it out with just the directive "free them" though the but does give a bit of idea of "no matter what...do it!" *Laugh*

The expression illuminates the need to delve into a poem, into the underlying secrets that it may hold. The advice to give it full presence and attention with lots of energy to discover or experience something within oneself is truly well given. I love it! *Starstruck*

Thanks for sharing your gift and vision! I enjoyed entering into the dream with you.*Star*

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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