What a wonderful poem! In your first line though: Free to liver her life,
should liver be live? Really enjoyable and it glides really well! Thanks for sharing and keep writing
First I like the description you have. This is pretty good full of details as you have a great eye for details. I also like the way you laid out your story full of twist and turns as you have a way with words and I also like the way you broke the whole thing down. Interesting read. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!!!
This is wonderful! You had me from the start with ~ Life will always work out fine
If God is controlling our life’s design. And I love the ending as you say it best ~ Isn’t the lesson that God’s trying to teach
Don’t be too stubborn with a goal you can’t reach?
The benefit of the doubt is for crazy folks around –
Always keep both your feet on the ground…
You have a really good talent here with a wonderful way with words! Awesome job and keep writing!!!
This is pretty good as it grab me from the start. As you started with Personally I missed my truck. It had been a deep forest green, four-wheel drive, and I had to actually climb to get into the monster. Reason I didn’t have it anymore… My Ex husband took it when he kicked me out of the house. He hadn’t even bothered to tell me in person that he wanted the divorce. We had been married for eleven months, dating and living together for two years before that. The jerk even took my house in the deal. What did I get? My laptop, and a headache. Love the beginning. You are very creative and have a way with words and an eye for details!! Keep writing!!!
I love the way you set this up very well planned and written you have an awesome eye for detail and a talent to story tell! Great job!! And Keep writing!!
Well this is an interesting piece that you have here. Your ending says God will only be able to look down upon us and see his failed “perfect” creation. This is our world. I have to disagree though you are entitled to your opinion though I take it you have some hurt mix in with your piece here. Dig deeper if you will and keep writing!
This is really a wonderful poem your have a great eye for detail as well as a way with words I love how you describe topaz radiance captured in stone, cut to a gem. assign you some worth. But you are worthy of more.! How delightful! Thank you for sharing and keep writing!!!
What a wonderful and heartfelt poem Written with much emotion making me feel this poem so dear. You have a way with words and an great eye for detail Keep writing and thank you for sharing!!!
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You do have a way with words!! Thanks for sharing and keep writing!!
Written with much emotion making me feel this poem so dear. You have a way with words and an great eye for detail