I picked this romantic verse to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of another year of association with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
This poem is romantic to the core. The person frankly admits his unconditional love for his beloved. His, love, his time and his whole being is dedicated to the happiness and love of his ladylove.
"My Love, my Time, my Life
This I give to you"
Refrain-
Each stanza ends with the refrain, "This I give to you". It sort of lends a tone of commitment and dedication to the person addressed. It makes the reader believe the promises made in the poem.
A simple poem with lines and word endings have a rhythm of their own. Imagery appeals and the flow is spontaneous.
I came upon this nice poem on nature to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of another year with the WDC. Have a great day!
This is a nature poem that explores the beauty of the night and the glory of the day. The sun and moon are the ruling elements which you have done your best to show in bright colors.
In the first stanza you showed the grassy fields, made me listen to the rhythms of air. You evidently love your "moors."
Land's beauty attains a new glow in the moonlit night.
"The moon did its job of lighting the fields."
I find a steady rhyme scheme in the second stanza.
I am reviewing this poem for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year of association with the WDC. Have a delightful day!
This a nice lyrical poem with which I can relate. You talked about a man waiting to whisk your heart away. Exactly what I too anticipate. He is waiting somewhere to find me and bring me to his side. Needless to mention I too wait with equal fervor.
"Oh, I am here and waiting
Through sun and wind swept day"
Your imagination finds equal images. Imagery appeals to me. It is sharply visual.
Lines and words are simple and set to win the praise of the reader.
I understand how it feels when others don’t share your love for nature. In these times of social media, the cell phone can provide sights and sounds of nature, world and the universe.
You have a fine way of convincing the family of your good intentions. Well, looks like they prefer phone messages to breath-taking vistas of nature.
Wife’s guess is proved right.
May be subsequent excursions might be found more interesting.
This happens to be an expressive poem on hope. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year of association with the WDC. Have a lovely day!
To go into the arms of hope consciously is not an easy task, especially if surrounded by darkness.
"And as I lay in
quiet darkness, "
A narrow "crack" under the door is enough to let the light seen by the one in darkness. Darkness and light are shown simultaneously, which is what life comprises.
It is through appealing imagery that I could see the grief and its antidote prompted by God.
The recovery program is well expressed in this poem. The bleed in the brain, the result of inaction and numbness are well pictured in this Synchronicity. As explained in the end, all the incidents are meaningfully related.
The twist that occurs at the end bodes well for the sufferer.
Imagery shows the first alarming state. Progress too is expressed in detail with brevity.
" to read,
Walk straight, drive, open doors and be
Normal."
It seems as though death is striding through the world plunging on unfortunate victims.
"I stalk your night in dress of blood,
a trail of bodies clings to me,"
The list of sufferings and the means to die are true to life pictures.
The whole poem is painted in dark and the face of the killer is hidden behind the mask of bloodshed and pain which are a way to appease his thirst.
I enjoyed this non-fiction story and feel glad to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being an active member of the WDC for one more year. Have a wonderful day!
This story is well detailed and the events that took place are shown with clarity. I am impressed that Martha and Emil have such friends, who wouldn't hesitate to come out in a blizzard to help them.
You have described the weather and Emil's fears regarding taking his wife to the hospital safely in appropriate terms.
By God's grace everything went well and the first-time-parents had their "Gift of Love" safely delivered to them.
The prose style is unimpeded and makes it easy for me to read and enjoy the story.
this acrostic that is like a prose poem is well-composed. I am reviewing this for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year of creative association with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
Your love for and belief in technology is beautifully expressed in this poem. Indeed, technology is a gift for the human world without which it would be difficult to live comfortably.
As I could see, the poem begins with an introduction in which you described the atmosphere. Then the middle part consists of the gift for humanity. The ending shows the result that the gift would bring to all of us.
Very compact indeed.
This poem reinforces our belief in technology and highlights the advancement and progress we have been making in reaching the spatial and starry worlds.
Imagination and facts have combined to produce this appealing verse.
this is a well-told story of trees. You have humanized them so well that I started listening and replying to the trees in my yard.
Your love of trees is extra-ordinary.
"Most every summer afternoon, the wind would race from the nearby fields into my front yard and set Spock to singing."
It is a story with trees as heroes, who served you more than a human being would ever do.
During my stay at Raleigh,NC, I remember the tall and huge oak tree standing right in front of t of my son's apartment. Its branches reached the first story of the building and were within the reach of my hand. Watching it every day would fill my mind with pleasant thoughts of nature. One fine day, the authorities decided to bring it down because its roots are now too much into the foundations of the building. It was a sad sight to see the oak being felled.
I could thus relate to your story of the big cedar, Stock to be precise.
An amazing event is celebrated in this poem. It is a cross between free verse and rhyming verse.
Content of the poem shows the fact that the poet's hundred-year old mother had seen the changes made to our world during the time span she lived through. A century is dotted with changes in life style and social milieu.
"From the fountain pen
To the computer - and more"
Imagery is focused on things that changed her world. Transport like buggies, malls, and computers and experiments to travel to the moon etc, must have contributed to a rich life of experience and enjoyment.
This birthday poem sounds like a song with a rhythm and rhyme.
The "essence" of love is shown in a number stanzas.
It has the rhyme scheme of AA BB and there is a precise beat to the lyrics. This rhyming verse mirrors the beloved's ennobling qualities and its effect on her partner.
Imagery shows a kind, loving, courageous and helpful person. Its appeal reaches out to the reader.
This free verse shows that there are some people whose aim in life is to trade in lies and deceit. Con men are easy to recognize because as the last line says, they are
"excellent at your trade."
short lines that hit the nail on the head is how this poem appears to me. As the poet observed so the lines are penned. They have a ring of truth and experience.
A well done poem on a man who is "nothing but scam".
Indeed there are a number of examples where people fall for hypocritical men. A false shower praise is enough to entice innocent women to fall into deadly traps and then makes them repent forever.
This poem is a kind of warning to those who socialize too much and cannot differentiate between falsity and truth.
A rhyme scheme of AB AB is maintained through the whole poem of several stanzas. It is a story poem with a message for the reader.
I am reviewing this poem for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being associated with the WDC for another year. Have a great day!
This poem of couplets tells me the difference between desires and memories. Desires, however sweet they may be fade fast. But memories as I understand "stick to a motivated heart."
Desires are as temporary as memories are permanent.
Imagery is impressive and so is the tempo you maintained.
The gory tale sent shivers of fright and pity up my spine. If this is the desired effect, you got it. The play on the reader's sentiments for the boy is done with precision.
Human as I am I was looking for an escape route for the nine year old kid. This being a church, I was expecting an angel of pity to be around and save the boy and let Sanger go into the crunching teeth of the time machine.
The visual effect of the mouse and cat play up the clock is keen and done with the skill of a true craftsman, that is you.
Time, space and action are well matched.
You let the evil won and let innocence be sacrificed by a psycho.
Pretty hilarious. The lesson is to wait and see and instead of, as the title says, being a fool to rush in.
Each stanza indicates a different personality trait of this impatient lady. No wonder, they say, patience pays.
The story is interestingly narrated, showing all the physical and mental signs of a lady in hurry to get the telly somehow. It stands for her addiction to the idiot box.
The son appears to be devoted to his mother and her every whim, he fulfills.
"His solution caused her a great deal of dismay."
The grandson is the gainer. She shouldn't worry if he takes it away, because she was ready to pay the person who would offer to take away.
Yet, she is full of regret when the grandson found it working and gladly carried it off.
Now she carries the luggage of regret and depression thereof.
Mind is truly a strange mechanism.
Enjoyed this well-flowing rhyming verse. Imagery is both visual and aural. It is quite appealing.
This is so very interesting. I did an online course with Iversity on the Future of storytelling. There were a number of chapters on various aspects such as
– Storytelling in Digital Games – Intro
Gameplaying & Storytelling
– Scenes & Actions
– Adventure Game Architecture
– The Future of Computer Game Storytelling
There are a number of chapters on various ways of storytelling such the TV, the web and podcast among others. We were given tasks like the one you are doing on the project of augmented reality game.
Perhaps this site could be of use to you. It is a free course and the teachers and the discussions used be pretty professional.
So the poem seems to tell me that it is "focus" which is important, and not where you are or how.
The upside down position hardly matters.
"Let the music
Wash over my body."
despite the positioning of the body. Spirit is important as you have stated so vocally.
"Stay calm.
Read the words
And understand
Their meaning."
Imagery gets to the eye.
It takes the mind as well.
Good poem, great flow.
This nice poem is inspired by the sight of seagulls "soaring through the air."
The poet talks about the sight and effect that the seagulls had on him. The descriptive details are the very soul of this poem.
"They glide through mountains, perfectly align"
Imagery draws reader's attention to the perfect sight of the birds.
Form poetry repeats the line "Showing the weak, a great motivation," which according to the poet is also an important aspect of the flying seagulls.
This poem appeals to the eye and heart in equal measure.
This is a telling poem on your son I believe. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a lovely day!
This poem portrays a six-year-old child. He comes to the park and lets his energy out in physical activity. Making his own rules, the little guy is seen "Charging up the slide". Looked wild and unruly. Yet, the hidden side of his mentality surfaces when a little girl hurts herself.
"He ran to help
His face filled with understanding."
This verse shows that each person has two aspects. One that can be seen, and another, unseen.
Imagery clearly lets us see him playing to his heart's content while the father watches.
I am taken by the title that shows both the ocean and the moon at one go. I am reviewing this verse for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being associated with the WDC for another year. Have a creative day!
This poem mirrors the images of ocean and moon. You described the aspects both the elements of nature as you have seen and felt. The eternal sea is ever new in its force and flow. The moon remains charming most of the time. The cool moon over sea makes it white and enthralling.
"The full moon rises,
an ocean powerful, crashes."
Imagery makes an imprint on the mind. Poets and lovers wax crazy with the combination of the full moon and a forceful sea with crashing breakers.
A very sad tale of love and misery. Irene has passed through trials of life at a young age. Haunted and driven by a fate worse than death, she had the courage to lead life as she could. No wonder she died young.
Setting is in small towns. Certain things like sleeping before marriage with a man is shunned at the time she lived. Details are well shown. I remember the heroine of the famous novel "Scarlet Letter", by Nathaniel Hawthorne.
Irene's life is shown in such a way that it stirs the reader's heart and wins sympathy.
Son's love and devotion to his mother appeal to me.
within the short frame of this poem, you have told the aspects of your personal life. Kudos to that ability.
Home is what cheers your heart. The idea of going home or staying home is comforting and where one feels secure, where one unwinds and relaxes both in body and spirit.
" It was my sanctuary.
It was where I felt safe and accepted."
However, changes are the very basics of life. I notice a search for a new home along with a love of your own is also a good move.
So I conclude that this free verse shows a positive attitude despite some regrets.
"With these hands I will build a new home life.
With her I dare to hope again."
This is a transparent piece of writing. I am here to review this short but certainly an effective item for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a lovely day!
This is one sprawling sentence wherein you have frankly admitted to your thoughts and emotions. It seems there is a very narrow margin between love and friendship. You "wanted" him but not "desired" him. For likes like me it is difficult understand a feeling like that. However, each to his or her thoughts on subjects like "like" and "desire".
Despite treating you very poorly, you still would like his company for your own reasons. Well, these happen I guess.
I am wondering as to how you could fit in such depths of emotions in one sentence.
Pretty good writing exercise.
Write on!
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