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This piece of writing is realistic and so very inspiring. People may part but the memories stay forever.
Maureen is such a sweet character. She is human enough to feel depressed for not having Mason by her side for this Christmas, but she is also courageous to go ahead and celebrate it as a sign of love and respect for her husband. The hand-made piece made her go back to that part of her life, which she recalls with a big smile and love in her heart.
"With spirits renewed, Maureen lifted Garfield, with his fat orange belly and obstinate black stripes, and set him carefully onto the green hand-lettered blocks that said…BAH HUMBUG."
The end is well rounded. Language and style are smooth and fluent.
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This is a delightful poem of changing seasons in Oklahoma.
Each season is dealt with in a very spontaneous manner. The poet's reaction to each season very human and natural.
Each season is given a brief introduction, description and the effect of it on the poet.
So you know exactly what that particular season looks like and feels like.
"Spring toes right into summer,
with hot winds and thunderstorms,"
I like the prepositional verb "toes--into." Interesting usage. The stormy weather is arresting and attractive.
"Then the sky darkens,
the thunders roars,
lightning flashes,
the wind blows,
the farmer stops his machines,'
Free style poem flows well with visual imagery and sensory descriptions.
It is a beautiful poem describing the picturesque season of autumn. Mother nature makes us so aware of these changes of season that take place in a very silent and smooth fashion.
You have described the effect and result of the soothing autumn that precedes winter. All the more reason for people to make the best of it. Autumn dawns are cool and magical, the twilight time is so glorious and colorful. The whole day is inspiring enough and keeps us pleasant and healthy.
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The poem is telling. It shows how exhausted you were with "his lies". You showed it all in a very brief yet expressive voice.
The outward expression was just a tired exhaling of breath. Not a word of anger or exasperation. Kudos to your self control. Not all can boast of it. Not me anyway.
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This poem mirrors truth about aging. However much one tries to stick to her or his former young looks, time is such a tyrant that all those romantic ideas are dealt with, with one look at the mirror.
I feel that it is so much more peaceful to accept the truth about self.
In the poem it is the grand daughter that makes the old lady realize that there is no alternative to understanding the passing of youth and middle years as well.
Just one sentence brought on that understanding. Great job!
""But that was before me.""
she is so frank and spontaneously truthful.
Is it that rare link between the grand parents and the grand children?
A nice inspiring poem. It tells me to shine like the stars, the little stars that fill the sky spreading luminescence.
This Free style poem inspires us to shed fear, which screens our true self. Fear has a long shadow on life. If I come out of the shadow, all I am left with is light, eye-filling light.
"light up the night sky with the beauty of your personality"
The metaphor of stars works well. If all the people shed their fear, inhibition, this earth would be a place full of earthy stars with bright inner happiness.
Thank you for the nice poem that flows well with telling imagery.
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This particular character study is strangely moving. Some parts made tears well up in my eyes. Why can't people leave him be.
When I read of the man pouring soda on him, I was deeply moved to tears. Is that the way to test his consciousness? yet, I do believe some have such boorish ways.
As you have done, he makes us think of who he is and why he comes there just to sit and stare. There must be something that made him come to the same spot everyday and at the same hour.
A glorious tribute to someone who is dear to the poet.
All the virtues of the departed soul are highlighted and makes the reader imagine how good a soul she was.
Using the figures of speech enhanced the effect what the poet wants to talk about.
"No matter how threatening was the breaking of the bough"
Her physical beauty and mental resilience have been praised agreeably.
"Your strong guidance still experienced
Your legacy will never be forgotten...."
The whole poem gives an impression that lady who is no more, was friendly, pleasant, helpful and courageous.
No wonder you miss her so much.
A moving free style poem with effective use of words and line endings.
September brings memories flooding into the mind as you go through the heat and the coolness of the sea in September.
"A sunny month, with each and every ray
of solar giving lapped up by us peeps,"
Human mind is such wonderful recording machine, that nothing escapes it and it never forgets. You have recalled events and the weather and the varied experiences served by life.
Comparisons and metaphors excel as in
"like time dressed in his Sunday
best,.."
Prompt well explored.
Ordinary events attain a new glamour as you dress them with your imagery and flow.
Small things of shared love and memories attain more value than that which meets the eye like,
"an address,
a street, a town,
a house number
or a car on the drive..."
You have shown what a home means to you in appealing imagery and more appealing thoughts.
The symbols of love that you use are novel and unique.
" two toothbrushes, side by side
in that mug
from Ireland, remember,.." one thought giving way to another, yet it is all inter-linked, like an extended simile or metaphor.
This is the kind of poetry that remains with me for future reference.
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This short verse highlights the aspects of courage. You have combined courage with other virtues like faith, hope, dauntlessness and humility. This is the appealing feature of this free-style poem.
It mirrors the image of a person, who possesses these qualities.
The poem has a rhythmic movement that make it flow well.
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I like the happy ending. I can't imagine a teenage life coming to a tragic end after the accident. This story highlights the consequences of drunken driving and late night parties. The author drives home to the parents the point that they too are responsible for not being strict with their off-spring with regard to maintaining a disciplined life style.
Setting is awesome. Jerry's state of being a coma patient is shown diagrammatically, the tubes and the atmosphere.
This three liner is appealing because it has lofty thoughts about love and bond. you talked about life's bond and the spiritual links between the souls. Obviously, the bond between the souls is of far reaching impact.
"as we embrace our souls for an eternity."
Imagery shows the two people in deep love with each other. Their love crosses the boundaries of the material plane into the spiritual aspect of love.
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A love poem with a difference. The poet speaks of the kind of sacrifices necessary to keep his lady love happy and safe. It is not your usual waxing poem that describes the beauty of the girl but rather goes deep into issues that threaten her security.
"Why must i pay for the faults of others?
T’was not i who hurt You my love…"
The assurance and promise to keep his love forever are done in a simple yet effective verse.
Imagery shows the reluctant woman and the pleading lover quite clearly.
Anxiety and grief took their toll, it looks like.
Worrying about the mother, the children can be pretty stressful.
I do that most of the time. But I notice that if I worry about non-existent health hazards, it would rob me of my present duties and put a spoke to my smooth routine.
"A shudder went down my spine that made me shiver. What if… beyond imagination."
Emotions and the mental set-up of the narrator persona are clearly shown in descriptive passages.
Imagination can play havoc on our mental peace and health as well in the long run.
Contemplative story that shows what it could have been if the danger was not diverted.
This story shows how much of patience and endless ability to continue changing and correcting and editing one's own writing.
Like it is shown, we miss so much of our valuable work in our anxiety to get noticed or our ambition to become famous. Hard work is something that should continue, come what may.
The meeting with the editor is an important part of the story. That is where we were shown what was missing in the story. Too much editing works against our own creativity.
This story tells me that writing under pressure is not correct.
To give birth to twins is a mother's ability and credit. Imagine carrying them for nine months and not knowing about it till their birth.
The expectant mother's way to hospital to be taken care of by the nurses, and events that followed are done excellently with the help of a perfect rhyme scheme and rhythmic meter.
Imagery mirrors the visual things as well as the mother's labor.
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This poem has appealing imagery mainly because you have written on what you have seen. That makes a difference. Ask me why?
Like the painter that paints from his view, so is the poet who creates from his observations. Such writing has spontaneity and a naturalness. Hence it appeals.
You have done a great job in describing step by step the advancing storm with the gathering of dark clouds.
"As dark clouds race above me;
There’s a cold front moving in."
As minutes pass, the clouds move in with a wind speed beyond expectation. Soon the person under the tree is seen running for shelter.
"I hasten to the house for shelter
As dust and debris goes flying by."
Nothing like watching rain from the safe enclosure.
Rhyming poem flows well to the beat of falling rain.
Well-written poem of the sweet memories of the past, when love was shining like a "never ending light".
Beautiful imagery and use of figures throughout the poem.
The place and the feeling are high lighted.
Inversion is used to make the effect more anticipatory.
" Deep beneath what use to be lies a place that once held you and me."
The mystery surrounding the "Deep beneath" makes me look for what happened next.
The way the poet admits to being cheated is stated in a line with positive expectations.
" wish once more that light would shine, for I had it all when you were mine."
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This poem written in free style talks about the way to find God, Who dwells in our own self.
Lines that impressed me are,
" the way to our soul
and to God, is not through the mind,
but through our senses.."
They sound so true. We listen to His voice, see Him with our inner vision and feel Him though our hearts and souls.
Music has the power to lower the "veil" between the self and ultimate Self.
Through the images such as "old growth trees holding the roof
in an arrow to heaven, or maybe
it was the morning sunlight flickering
through stained glass windows," the poet is able to show the unmanifested presence of divinity amidst us. Lower the veil and we can see it.
Quite entertaining and at the same time teaching the fact that knowledge is anyone's property. You earn it yourself by being humble and ready to learn.
Both the characters are shown enacting their roles in an appealing manner. If Mary paused to think she might have learnt the fact that not all the questions posed by the old owl have answers.
"How many ocean waves crash on the beach?"
It is not for nothing that the owls are supposed to be wise.
Story-poem is well constructed with dialog and visual imagery.
A poem of reflections on writing, knitting and love. Every line shows the inherent simplicity of the poet's life.
There is poesy in everyday life if we notice. The rhythm is unmistakable. You write poetry because you love it. You knit and live with love in the heart and in every action. There are no complications in a an "ordinary life." And that, is an enviable feature.
"My daily ordinary life
Is not exciting, rather tame,
Simple creative poesy."
The above lines show how simplicity and poesy make life a thing of beauty.
Imagery shows all the aspects mentioned above.
It flows well.
Write on!
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