this rainy poem has a lovely rhythm as I listen to the falling rain via your poem.
Structure-
It looks apt that you composed your poem in couplets. Each section has an image and a slice of reality. Eleven of the couplets bring out the facts of life.
"The rain engulfs me
Readily, I know I am alone..."
The poet's eye-
Your observations of the falling rain and its associated thoughts come through transparently. Indeed, nature can be one of the kindest of companions.
"Amisted glorious chaos
Order is acutely regained."
Your choice of words is rare and fine. In the above lines for example, I find the usages like "glorious chaos" "acutely regained" are pleasant and perceptively used.
I have a lot to learn from the likes of you, dear poet.
I am reviewing this poem of yours for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a wonderful, creative day.
This is an enjoyable poem for two reasons. First, the ambiance you created around the night of dancing sounds so real. Second, the facts behind images come through loud and clear.
"and white gloves all around
The mirrored ball in the ceiling..."
This must be a plush dancing hall with ladies and gents properly dressed. It is nice to give wings to imagination and be present at the dance.
"Drinks" is the unavoidable part of a dance. Well, along with it comes the desired effect.
"Drinks spilling...
all over the white tablecloth"
This is a down-to-earth poem, completely true till the last letter.
For a person who is habituated to writing, it is a great stress to pass the day without penning few lines or words. It is difficult to imagine not writing everyday, something or the other, or about this or that.
This essay shows the color and quality of the days without writing. They are spent listlessly, thrown out of gear and unable to decide what to do next.
"Every day was empty, every day was dark, every day..."
Once you understand the impossibility of not writing, you will have no option other than going back to writing.
The concept is attractive and unique. Liking someone who doesn't reciprocate is pretty sportive I guess.
It is only at the end of the poem we learn that her love is one-sided and she doesn't mind it.
"I still like you although you talked for hours, about the woman you loved."
You have shown your love for the person in various and many images. The crush that you have comes through several word pictures you have drawn.
"I like the sound of your laughter."
This free style poem has a rhythm that shows your admiration and affection for the person.
I am reviewing this poem for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a lovely day.
This is a love poem that appeals to me mainly due to imagery.
You created so many images or word pictures that show the blissful love you have for the beloved.
The theme-
I might be able to call it sublime because the departed lover sends down her heartfelt love to her beloved on earth. That love is eternal and crosses the mundane borders of life and death is shown here. She sends her love on the wings of wind, the waves of ocean, blessings for his weal and welfare in every way possible till he joins her in their heavenly abode.
Form and structure-
With five quatrains, this rhyming poem has the scheme of ab cb. The five stanzas talk of different aspects of love being sent from heaven to earth.
Lines and line ending are found to be rhythmic and of smooth and spontaneous flow.
This is a different kind of encouragement you give to those suffering from shyness and negativity. I think sometimes shyness may not be of the negative kind but negativity, on the other hand may give rise to shyness.
That apart, you spoke of courageous encounters, which I thought would be with the outside world. Shyness is displayed mostly in the presence of the outsiders and the outside world. However, I do understand the kind of courage needed to face self and self motivated actions such as rising from the bed and conducting functions like getting out of home and driving to office and so on.
The message at the end is of great value.
"Courageous encounters are those wonderful things you do to make you feel better about yourself."
Being happy and comfortable with one's own self surely help us gain confidence and courage.
It is true to be ordinary is not easy. There are too many attractions to be in the limelight. Many people revel when surrounded by others, being praised and being noticed.
On the other hand, there those who do useful things, yet go unnoticed. They don't mind. In fact they like it that way, to be quiet and unobtrusive.
"Who don't intend to seek attention from the crowd,'
yet they know
"where to find his happiness!"
Imagery in this free verse shows a simple but successful person.
This free verse contains a tribute to the night. Night is not just darkness but it has therapeutic value for the poet.
"Melting fear, sadness and pain
Only peace and serenity remain."
Night is personified effectively. It is portrayed as someone with soothing presence.
"I race for it's comforting embrace'
Imagery-
Imagery reflects the on coming night with day light fading away.
The poet treats the night with a special affection, which is unique.
Theme-
it is about freedom of the soul. shedding fear and hesitation one should go ahead with the future assured of safety and joy.
Shedding fear and doubt will open doors on a world hitherto unknown to us. A world where the vistas are full of beauty and grace.
"Let us leave the past behind.
Let the future be our own."
form and structure-
Written in a three-line stanzas of six, this poem has the rhyme scheme of ABA except in the last stanza where it adds one more line AB AB.
Imagery-
Images of the new world are on the horizon. The poem entices the poet's partner with the tone of courage and assurance that everything is going to be fine.
Love has a way of blinding people into believing falsities and flatter. And then it is too late to recognize and realize the real truth behind the mask of lies and deceptive appearances.
Title-
Tells us what will follow. Yet, we read on to track the wolf.
Form and structure-
Free style verse with five quatrains. Each of them shows a different stage of fall for a wrong person.
"Although you uttered many tender words..."
Rhythm is reflective of how things changed from being bright to dark.
Content-
Content is well dealt with. It has a novelty despite being repeated, for each story of deception has its own uniqueness.
"You painted a pretty picture
Then lured me in with gentleness"
Imagery-
this is finest aspect of the poem. Nature imagery to mirror the inner condition is well done.
"The sun's rays of gold turned black"
You brought the person alive in the poem with appropriate word choices.
It is one of those stories, which makes us smile as we draw to the end. Liz's character is well-defined and shown in her roles as a mother, as a hard-working employee and an ambitious hopeful to realize her dream.
There are many more angles to her personality. Her patience and forbearance too are shown effectively.
A nurse is what a person like Liz should be.
Dialog and setting are quite appropriate.
Lou loves her. Yet kept his silence understanding her future plans and the deep bond she has with her husband who served in the army.
The story unfurls itself in a natural way. Smooth flow of sentences keep us to reading it and expecting it to continue.
Very engaging.
Congratulations on being placed First in the contest.
I perfectly understand your taste for real life beauty in fiction as well. A classic, they say is forever. Books that describe and talk about life as found in real world with an addition of its beauty are, in my opinion become classics. The two books you mentioned are famous for two different reasons. While Huckleberry Finn is based on a real life character, Frankenstein is the first Gothic novel referred to as the first true science fiction story. I appreciate your point that there is a child in the respective books.
The fascination you have for reading is remarkable.
" As I enter into those hallowed halls I have become fully engrossed in this book, ... I see the setting as a real place, the characters are ... This world is no longer an escape, it is reality."
The above observation is hundred percent true.
Great assessment of reading(with complete pleasure).
Gift shops such as the one you mentioned, namely, Harlan Kirwan, Anna Kirwan, and Harley Kirwan Deadwood are not easy to find. I went through the experience of buying suitable gifts to friends and relatives. I wasn't happy with my finds.
In this advertisement, I find that I can get gifts to be given to various people including the smallest in the family.
The author has done a great job, showing the circumstances under which he went to the above shop and had a nice pick of the gift, he intended.
I came across this nice story in the Weekly Newsletter, "Short Stories: Seasons Change".
In this romantic story you had shown how the seasons change in human lives. Both the central characters are well defined. Elliot's part is important because we trace the life of the couple through his recap in the park. I notice the key role played by Rusty.
Anger's effect and speed are shown visually.
" His heart was racing, as anger coursed through him."
This story mirrors one of those sweet experiences of couples in love,i.e, fight and patching up.
I felt that a short dialog in the park could be nice.
I like the way the sentences and paragraphs connect. Smooth transformations are a draw.
this is quite a poem about the Halloween night. Instead of horrifying your verse makes the night delightful and worth watching.
The nightly song of wolves and the rising of ghostly presences are well depicted.
I just wonder who the two people moving about the shadowy night whispering perhaps sweet nothings. could it be vampires or witches.
However,
"You smell so lovely,"
This line makes me think of none other than human beings. Of course I could be wrong. Poet has his own visions of beauty.
I am reviewing this rhyming verse for your up coming WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a wonderful day!
This poem is impressive because you imagined yourself as a possible ghost. The verse shows how fast things change and places do not remain the same after few years of absence. Like you said it is no longer recognizable with trees felled and houses gone.
Quick changes in urbanization and developing business are beyond our guess.
"They felled the cherry tree, and the houses went away."
Yes, it is rather sad that things do not remain the same after the passage of time.
Rhyming verse reflects the regret at the way things happened. Imagery shows the replacement of the old familiar scenery.
It is my pleasure to review this poem for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year at the WDC. Have a great day!
I chose this poem because it appeared special. It is about kids of all ages. You wrote it from the view point of children. Yes, we come across all kinds of them, some very polite, some not so. Yet the fact that they are all children and easily mouldable. You have shown the problem as well as the solution. That's great.
I like the descriptive passages and the song-like sequences. They move rhythmically.
"We are connected by a strand, on a web with every man-
respecting others means that I'm respecting me.
Imagery is visual and appeals to mind as well."
the information you gave is useful. My husband fell sick a while ago and is not able to get enough vitamin D. The vitamin D3 you use could be useful for him as well. I need to talk to his Doctor and get him the supplement.
The fact that it has other benefits as well is encouraging. Like it is in your case, my husband is advised not to consume milk or milk products.
I am reviewing this wonderful real story for your Wdc Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing a year of creativity at the WDC. Have a fine creative day!
Well, this story is repeated almost everywhere on the globe. You have brought in the novelty by introducing the deer, which actually lives in the forest. Deforestation has become one of the most dangerous features of modern world. The greedy businessmen fell the trees and find new sources to make money, more money. They loot the animals of their habitats and render them homeless. How long can they move into the bowels of the forest? How long can a forest stretch?
You told the story in a fascinating manner. You showed how it happened in days. How long it took the deer to understand its ultimate fate.
" He blinked, recalling the forest once more, as it was before they came, then he too, turned toward the deep forest and moved on."
The above sentence is truly moving. The death of trees means the annihilation of the animals to a great extent.
Thank you for sharing a wonderful story written in clear and fluent prose style.
It is a wonderful thing to know about your Mom. She appears to be extraordinary. Few people have the kind of courage to battle the cancers and diabetes. Yet she is inspiring enough for the younger generation as well as her contemporaries to face life as it comes and be happy and zestful ever.
I congratulate you and your siblings on having an adorable mom. I pray and hope that she lives for a long time to bring smiles to others around her.
Hi,
I am reviewing this poem for your up coming WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of one more year with the WDC.
This is a mesmerizing poem on Chess. The game itself is captivating and highly engaging. You have described the way to move the various pieces of chess towards the conquest of the opponent.
"The knights weren’t forgotten the night of the spell,
forsaken though, quite . . . they were all cursed to “ell”!"
The knights and the rook, bishops and the pawns have their weak points and were shown to have come under the strong spell of the one of the queens. In this game of fantasy, both queens seem to be equally ambitious.
And so to the end we draw.
In this fantasy game I see (I hope I am right) both the queens challenge each other and finally we are left with total destruction.
"And, because such force the queens had amassed,
Both kingdoms, their world, spun slowly to glass."
Rhyming and rhythm bespeak of war and its end of winning.
It flows well.
Write on!
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