I think the prompt words are well used and with economy. Brief and to the point, this poem shows how a joyous day is celebrated. July 4 happens in summer, all the more reason to celebrate a life of independence, outdoors.
It is like Thanksgiving, an outing, a get-together, barbecue, fire works and food to enjoy. Perfect holiday.
"Wash your hands. Let's eat!"
Title is quite vocal.
The air of bonhomie is well created and the note of inspiration is unmistakable.
Visual imagery and a tone of celebration together bring out the colors of Independence to the fore.
Reunion with the old flame in a beauty clinic is least expected though we are told that Jude was in town.
Looks like there comes a time when people feel compelled to return to old familiar places and people, for reasons of their own.
This tale of love is well written with a small town background, where every one knows what is happening in others' lives.
The milieu and the mindset of the people are mirrored well.
The end has the unexpected twist and it has the reader completely surprised, because Summer has not been mentioned anywhere else.
Good move.
Except for the fact that we don't know what happened to either of them during the five year gap, it is an enjoyable story.
Interesting observations on various versions of "Cinderella". The original version, I believe, was created by an English playwright, Daisy Fisher. Since then, there are innumerable versions of it from many countries.
Your findings show a lot of research and reading the archived books which treasured these valuable versions of the ever popular, "Cinderella."
When it comes to movies, once again I find a number of them. Recently, I saw "Cine-house Cinderella", which is beautifully molded to suit the modern society.
The analyses you made regarding various points of importance are interesting. It shows your patience in studying the texts with care and concentration.
The past and the present are linked through art work. Both Thomas in 1920s and Bella in the modern day seem to have inexplicable bond with each other. Thomas's bench must have been a really sturdy one to have appeared in the tv show in which Bella was interviewed for her own famous painting.
While Thomas had no way to get publicity for his piece, Bella could succeed in becoming famous due to social media.
This story also shows the importance and value of modern technology especially as in mass media.
I have picked this meaningful story from your port to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day.
This story has great relevance in today's world where attractions are fickle and love has no place in a relationship.
Harry must be a very sensitive person, who hadn't expected Lisa to walk away from him. His depression and disappointment are shown pretty well. Emotions are well mirrored.
The way James suggested to get over the past was ideal.
Harry did the right thing to follow his advice and it worked wonders. So, physical activity and going out among people is the best therapy to retain sense and be practical about life.
Title is absolutely suitable.
Language and style make the story quite readable and engaging.
Fine poem. It speaks of the season as well as the mental climate. Summer can be cruel in many parts of the world. We in India, also have humidity and humid winds accompanying the high temperatures of summer. Weather alone is enough to drive people crazy. God save those with personal problems too.
I like this poem because in its brevity it captured the theme in precise terms. While the first two stanzas speak of the physical impact of high summer and the rain that follows, the last one shows the advantage of summer rain.
"To take away what makes me mean,
Just simply means that I’ll be fine."
What a relief!(sigh!) All it took was to wash it away with a wave of good thoughts. Wonderful poem with fine word choices, metaphors, visual imagery and that which appeals to mind as well.
I found your brief biography interesting. I am reviewing this piece for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being creatively active for one more year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
The details you furnish us with are quite different from the usual biographies I have read. The difference is that besides talking about your life, you also tell us about the places you have lived and a little bit about the family as well.
I do admire the way you and your husband planned your life before and after retirement. I can see the important point of serving the community as well.
"We fill our time volunteering in the community"
Language and style are a draw.
Your ease with writing shows your command over it.
This rhyming verse brings the joys of "first snow" to my mind. The exhilaration and excitement of playing with the snow is incomparable. Each season has its own charm. The white snow is a class apart. The cold, the chill in the wind and the warmth generated by the woolens can only be experienced.
" Freshness of the air
Crispness of the snow"
Right choices of words describe the atmosphere quite appealingly.
It flows well.
Short and meaningful lines reflect the impact of first snow on you.
Congratulations, Addams, on completing another year at the Wdc. This review is in honor of your creative presence at the WDC.
You told us why you don't do poetry and realized you did it after all.
The thoughts and emotions you have expressed are enough to do a poem, which you did.
It shows how convenient a vehicle poetry is to mirror emotions, an important element of human beings.
What is life without emotions anyway?
And what better way to show it than poetry.
Wordsworth's opinion on poetry hits the nail on its head.
"Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings. .....emotion recollected in tranquility.'
It gives a lot to contemplate upon.
Thank you for your praise of poetry. Your style of stating an unexpected truth at the end is the twist in the tale(tail?)
It flows well.
What I was wondering about is whether she had enough reason to feel enraged at the outcome of her extra-marital affair. When she stepped into illicit relationship, she had no reason to feel righteous indignation when her boss turned out to be more practical backed out. In fact, he saved her marriage by not encouraging their liaison any further.
she has no case for revenge.
I read this wonderful story (nonfiction?) in your port and decided to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the WDC for one more year. Have a great Anniversary!
This road trip covers a whole journey of life with the partner, perhaps your better half. It began like any other journey, with the two strangers getting acquainted by and by. The bumpy road was not a challenge but a welcome path to start with. Attraction between the two is clear and present.
And then, the tune changed to a more sober lyrics.
"Suddenly, without any warning, the paved road became rocky, muddy, winding, unexpected changes in the grade."
Half way through, they start facing the hardships of the journey. But the love they found kept them going till the load increased with two kids included. Yet, the journey continued, life being something that wouldn't let you pause till it finds the peace it seeks.
Moving the family to new destination is also on the charts and so we see them going for a place that holds bright future for them all.
Great job showing the evolving and becoming of a happy family through the allegorical road trip.
Appropriately captioned as "Sunset", it is a fetching account of life.
For a kid to imagine climbing Mt. Everest without the least idea of its height (290029 ft)and the perils of high velocity winds atop the mountain and smooth sheets of snow covered slopes.
Of course, it was an exercise in imagination with an intention to introduce an "exciting adventure".
It is pretty humorous too.
" the planting of the family flag on the summit not far from where Hillary's flag.."
The story shows how the power of imagination was given a chance by attempting such writing exercises. It brings out the point regarding what interests the pupil.
Events are nicely shown.
There are no language obstacles, much to my reading comfort.
I picked this wonderful essay to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year of creativity at the WDC. Have lovely day!
Your essay on life and death and how to celebrate the time in between is totally inspiring. Life is a gift no doubt. If more people recognize it, the world would be a much better place to live in. They would realize how important it is to live well and in joy. There would be less depressed or angry people around.
To be remembered after death needs to work on. One should be patient and listen to others' and be sympathetic in the least.
" To have a “remember when” get together with each person adding their unique pieces of my life’s puzzle to the others. "
Great line on life's philosophy, the ultimate goal of life.
Wonderful essay. I have learnt a lot from it. Thank you.
This story shows that we do not know how and when inspiration strikes the writer. What is important is to look for it and when it presents itself, grab it. The pastor is wise in noting her last words down. They told him a story and his writer's block disappeared like magic.
The description of the block and its eventual disappearance are well shown. The restlessness almost edging on to frustration is convincing enough.
"I banged my fist on the desk, rattling a mug containing the cold dregs of an early coffee brew and knocking a pen onto the floor."
His fumbling with the prayer, by the dead lady's bedside might be because of the rushing excitement of hearing her last words.
"Watch the clouds."
Looks like to him, his writing ambition is more important than his pastoral duties. The young man was right, I thought.
Great story mirroring the mind and behavior of a writer.
It is so true. Unless the desire from inside is strong, one can do nothing about it.
You have very well described the situation. color imagery used in a sensible used. Light and dark bring out the life's condition as it existed for you. You might in future decide to reach out for his helping hand and find wings to fly into a world of freedom and joy.
That must have been a rewarding experience. You might have reaped the advantages of those summers, when you worked according to your father's directions, in later life. I don't think today's kids know what a hard day's work is and how good it is for physical and mental health.
In a few words, you told us what work ethic means. Early to rise and get ready to work. I am sure you must have been introduced to office jobs too, later on.
Knowing and observing people also seem to be the motive of these working summers and impressionable years.
There is no doubt that the lion is the king of the forest. We have often seen or heard it killing and overpowering an enemy. It never backs out. Its looks are ferocious and impressive. its walk becomes him. His qualities are natural and hasn't worked for them.
Other animals are afraid of the lion. Their obedience to a lion is born out of fear and the awareness of their own setbacks. Although they find him to be their enemy, they dare not fight him.
Might is right and the lion has plenty of it.
Among human beings, not all are born leaders. Some are naturals, because they have courage and not ambition. Their goals are not for selfish reasons, but for the community of human beings. Leaders like Gandhi, Martin Luther King and Nelson Mandela come to my mind. They had clear goals and worked for them. Their courage and fearless attitude (like a lion) and their sincerity of purpose won the hearts of millions all over the world. They won their battles and found freedom without war or violence.
I like the little story you narrated and showed what a leaded needs.
I can relate to your feelings and the way you found this wonderful site. It offers plenty solace, and a great opportunity to let you fly on creative wings to worlds beyond the one we are familiar with.
I can imagine the relief and delight you might have gone through after the WDC experience, on the heels of a personal loss.
I was going through some kind of roller-coaster phase of life, when I quite accidentally stumbled on WDC. To me, it was like stepping into a world of wonder and a lovely community. When I received a review on the very next day, on the poem I wrote on the spot, my joy knew no bounds. WDC is irresistible to say the least.
Thank you for a lovely briefing on WDC.
I find your words absolutely proper,
"Not just by the incredible opportunities and resources at writing.com…...... hand of friendship."
The fascinating spots on the leopard are interpreted rather appealingly in this sweet little poem.
Leopard gets the spots by birth and it is the way it is created. But the poet's eye looks at them in a unique way. The spots are either thoughts or emotions, with stories or reasons of their own.
"Every spot has a story a meaning."
This poem makes me think what if we wear our thoughts and emotions in a similar way. Well, we cannot sport them on our physical selves, but we can voice them in the special human way granted to us. Express them in various words songs or writings or through the media of other expressive arts. These are going to be our "spots", the spots that leopard cannot "hide."
"I am still learning every day
Different ways you keep me sound"
I heard people referring to marriage as a kind of prison. In fact, it is kind of release from the perils of being young and alone. It is also as you have so vociferously put, a kind of learning experience.
Of course, it takes a sympathetic and understanding husband to set an example and inspire her in this nice manner.
"Your persistence can not be surpassed
I am still learning every day"
The kind of dedication and devotion, on the part of husband, for his wife to do better in life is so very rare. I find it pretty touching.
The poem flows very well with appealing imagery, choice of appropriate words and the internalized rhythm.
The nurse's experience of being in the depths of darkness, yet able to understand and feel the living world are very graphically shown.
The first person point of view only adds to the pull of the story. This is quite a rare presentation of the state of coma.
Her gradual come back is quite realistically done. Her movements, looks and the most important gesture of pressure in the hand, are imaged very credibly.
Language and style reflect the emotions and reactions of the outsiders as they observe the patient.
I find the story interesting and therefore, decided to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC, which in my opinion is a fantastic site for creative writing. Have a wonderful day!
The story is fine in the sense of story and plot. Setting and dialog are OK.
That being said, I have a couple of doubts.
First, why isn't Melusine aware of the fact that she is a vampire?
Second,
" he lowered the gun at her head and pulled the trigger."
I read that vampires cannot be shot or hurt by bullets. At the most, they are inconvenienced.
And who is the man in the red coat? Does he belong to another clan? what is it?
Paranormal fiction is truly interesting with a lot of scope to fictionalize.
It looks like you are laughing at life as well as at self. I have chosen this thought-provoking free -style verse to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completion of another creative year with the WDC. Have a great day!
As I understand, you have decided to "go with the flow" much to your displeasure. Correct me if I am wrong. After having tried several alternatives, you appear to have come up with the same procedure of going with the flow.
"If you go with the flow you might bonk your head on that damn concrete dam."
Being aware of the risk of attempting the unknown, you'd rather go with the flow and risk the known danger.
You have mirrored the behavior patterns of ordinary, day-to-day folk.
Many of us, with the exception a few brave souls, do not dare going against the flow.
They'd rather "enter" the "nightmare" and live a monotony.
The choice is our own as I comprehend.
Imagery is fine and the symbols of life cannot be missed.
this is an interesting drama. I can see that it has not yet ended. Hope you will soon find the next turn in the story of Jamie and see her in the safe heaven, away from the threat of Pete.
I am reviewing this piece for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed yet another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
The incidents that happened in the life of your protagonist are reported in the flashback. The present starts with a fire that is raging around and in the house, she lived in with her villainous husband, Pete.
Due to pure hatred and prejudice, he turned against her. His resentment of her springs from his own guilt of being a bad person with bad activities.
Jamie, certainly evokes sympathy in the readers, for she is shown spending valuable years in the company of her no-good-husband, for no fault of her own.
Perhaps she is right in burning down the old house. This might be signifying her burying of the past and escape into a new future, waiting for her beyond the borders of the present.
Continuation of the story in such a nice style, might yield great result.
This poem got me to read it to the end and I am greatly impressed by doing so. I offer this review of it, for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of one more year at the WDC. Have a lovely day!
This free-style poem is quite vocal on many levels. First, you excelled in voicing your inner most thoughts quite powerfully for all to hear and pay attention. There is so much potential in your writing.
It starts on a note of life being monotonous and that it offers no hope.
"constantly stuck in a haze
and fighting just to get through each day."
Every one has one life to live and there is a set pattern to it, which we refer to, as "routine".
you said,
"I need the key
that will unlock the gates"
The Key is with you. you only have to feel it with your spirit. We fall or rise by our own selves. This needs self-help.
That narrow dividing line between knowing and not knowing is well shown here.
"Being told no
only makes me more determined to succeed"
You have the problem and the solution in the above lines. You hold the key to success.
what starts on a dull and dejected note ends on determination and a definite way to pursue what you want.
Imagery has tremendous appeal. It flows well.
Write on!
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