I like this horror story and am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being associated with the WDC for another year. Have a memorable day!
A supernatural spirit and a living man's encounter in the gray house has some curious twists. First, for a ghost the girl is good enough to make friends with a man from the world. Second, her suggestion to exchange powers is interesting too. I have never read anything like this before. You have shown through this story that friendship of this kind results in success. Black dog is defeated and the girl's ghost finds freedom from threat of any kind.
I find this matter of love interesting and decided to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
I notice that the word "excruciating" is applied to something other than physical pain. Possible that a person when struck by the lightning of love might have felt the pain cursing through his veins. This is something novel and it is an emotion generated by the new experience I guess.
You did say it is difficult to define it.
" To feel so strongly for someone that the emotions, the feelings are too much to comprehend?"
I came upon to this poem to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed one more year of association with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
This poem is pretty appealing on many counts. It is autobiographical in its content. You have written it in a humorous kind of way.
"It's said I'm a charmer, a laugh and a hoot,
I'm witty and handsome and modest to boot!"
Somehow, the tone makes us believe it. The craft of writing takes a new dimension here, because you said you write irrespective of time and mood.
"I write when I'm fresh and I write when I'm tired.
I write to relax, so I write when I'm wired!"
The rhyme and rhythm are worth praise. You maintained a regular syllabic count.
It is my pleasure to review this free verse for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being associated with the WDC for one more year. Have a wonderful Anniversary!
This short poem is inspirational mainly. Even when alone a person can achieve a lot with his drive and enthusiasm. Wild flower is a metaphor that shows that it can shine on its own with its bright color and beauty. So does a single person with his or her efforts and steadfastness can shine well. Such people make life interesting. For them life is never "dull".
Imagery is vivid and appeals to our minds and hearts.
this is a lovely poem, which I feel honored to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being associated with the WDC for one more year. Have a wonderful day.
This poem contains the metaphor, the "green turns to gold". It is aptly repeated and used as a refrain to get the reader's focus on how it feels to age and mature and still retain a heart that beats to love and marriage in a positive manner.
Imagery-
Imagery is all about love, mature love. In autumn, the season of plenty we see the green turning into gold. So it is with the life of the poet, who finds someone worth marrying in her later years. The image and metaphor are so well blended.
Rhythm and flow-
It is a rhyming verse with AA BB scheme that contributes to a perfect beat throughout the poem.
For the poet depression is death. He or she lets out anguished cries to contain the pain and panic. panic seems to spring from the thoughts of death. Death holds everyone in fear and nervousness. No wonder, it has more of a vice like grip on people suffering from the pain of depression and the thoughts therefrom.
" I'm slowly drowning.
Into the darkness that death has created."
Imagery shows a person in the throes of depression and the pangs of panic risen out of a mind riddled with anger, sadness and pain.
It is redemption when the poet realizes the inner strength with which he or she can fight the deadly depression and come out as a winner.
It is an inspiring poem that shows the strength of mind and will power.
I chose this letter to self to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on finishing another year of association with the WDC. Have a creative day!
This letter is different. You have crucibled motives into one single main motive, "writing". It is true that we tell stories and write articles while young and carefree. Life and experiences change that cool attitude and we forget about improving a talent you might have recognized
"Don't you remember just how much less effort it used to take for you to weave a good story? "
The way you admonish yourself for postponing writing appeals to me. You are right, even stream of thoughts as they cross the mind make good stuff for writing.
Hope you have found your voice by now or will start searching for it soon. Good luck!
I came across this very interesting article and am reviewing it for your WDC account anniversary. Congratulations for being with the WDC for one more year. Have a great day!
This is like a true life picture of your experiences of wanting and finally becoming a nurse. It is impressive that you followed your dream and finally made it materialize. Few have the kind of strong motive as you did.
Nursing is truly a noble profession. Nurses are angels who look after the well being of the patients. It is difficult to run a hospital without nurses. They are needed everywhere. your internship in various branches of medicine prove that fact.
I learn through this article that you have rich experience as a nurse and to some extent a counselor as well, for you talk to patients and make them feel better.
Congratulation on having a great career that gives a lot of confidence and courage to you and to the patients as well.
It is a well written essay which has fluent language and a style which is your own.
Thank you for sharing thoughts and experiences of a life time.
I am reviewing this rhymed verse for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year at the WDC. Have a wonderful anniversary!
This poem sends out ray of hope and enthusiasm for all. It is all about human welfare. Joy, love and justice seem to fill the song and it is going to one that hails peace and harmony. It sounds spiritual and mundane at the same time. Music has the power.
Rhyming-
it is a rhyming verse with the scheme of AB CB. Rhythm is felt throughout the poem. Lines and line endings are after my heart.
Imagery shows the way it could be for all. It shows a glorious place where all are happy and where peace dwells.
Winter and the poet seem to enjoy the solitariness and the season's onset. the warmth inside the room is just the contrary to the iciness of the outside. Winter's accompaniments are the snowflakes, trees wrapped in white snow and the icy cold winds. Watching the winter's dance could be a great way to pass time and get some insights into the nature of things.
Winter's whiteness caused by snow dominates the verse. Starts with "flakes" proceeds with "silver sparks", "icicle tendrils","fluffy white softness and finishes with "frost."
The peaceful silence is a soul's solace no doubt. somehow one can communicate with the universal spirit as well.
Each stanza has beautiful and telling images of winter's snow.
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This rhyming poem contains nostalgic strains of what passed by. Her present is lit by the memories of the past. The past comes like a veil mist bringing solace to the suffering soul.
"People that were lost
Things that slipped away"
The cold and grey weather causes a person to become brooding, thoughtful and inactive.
Imagery shows the poet walking on a solitary path at a lonely hour. Lighthouse shows the direction to the ships at sea. Perhaps thinking of the past sheds light on future and present too.
Rhyming is simple and meaningful. So is the content.
It is my pleasure to review this short but a candid article for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year of creativity at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
I agree that it is not always possible to keep to desk writing away at will. Life interferes and leaving us to seek those precious moments of dreaming, observing and creating cameos of life.
Fortunately, writing allows us to be ourselves and create something out of our own thoughts and feelings. You have chosen to think of something that allows the reader to "build on". A reader does require to understand the mind of the writer.
I appreciate the clarity and the desire to "create a little bit of art and reach deeper within the soul."
this is a really an entertaining poem. Storymaster's home is well created complete with the attractive paint and decor.
It is like a story poem, which has a surprise end with the mouse. Looks like animals too behave well with visitors at this unique house.
Rhyming is such that it makes it easy for me to read with the rhythm intact.
It is Christmas time! No wonder it inspires a mouse to be mannerly so as to welcome the visitors.
"He offered a cup of hot chocolate,
Showed me a tiny Christmas tree"
Imagery shows a pretty house, a tiny Christmas tree and lively little mouse too.
I admire the way you constructed this four liner with ease. Twenty four syllables, a mistletoe, and a wish for love make a joyous combination.
Imagery shows all the above. syllables are felt and the rest is visual and mind-related as well. I hope the mistletoe would bless you and help your prayers to materialize.
Rhyming and rhythm seem to make the poem flow well.
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Coming to the poem, I find it personal and it is about personal experience of being harassed by someone at home. It must be your better half. I can see that you have never guessed what it was going to be when you first met him.
It is difficult to get rid of nagging nature.
"my feelings get hurt when you push me"
Your informal style and language make it easy for me to understand the content of the poem. The title suits the contents of the poem.
This is a lovely Christmas poem. I appreciate the nice story you told in rhyming verse. The poem has a portrait of a person who in the words of Santa is a "beautiful soul."
"It's beautiful souls like you
Who make my night!"
And it must be you named Terry.
The picture of Terry comes through clearly as she manages her mouse to wander around her favorite site, WDC.
A researched article on the pros and cons of assigning homework to the children. I agree with the point that too much work and too little fun can turn a child into a stubborn and willful person. The school authorities should realize this truth behind forcing the children into doing too much homework.
" Homework, in excess, actually harms children both physically and mentally."
This sentence appears to be the key sentence in the essay.
In India, where I come from, homework is considered a must for all kids in school. They bury themselves in notebooks and textbooks after day's attendance in school. They have very little time for fun activities such as games, or going out with their parents and so on.
They become listless and dry-eyed.
Therefore, I fully support the argument that homework should be kept within reasonable limits and that should not be on a daily basis.
Thank you for sharing thoughts on an important issue pertaining to a child's mental and physical health.
Quite a useful essay trying to tell us what it takes to cultivate the art of making friends. I fully agree with the points made herein.
The author began her method of understanding right at home. The instance of parents' fights only helped her in this technique. Just great! Something positive emerging from a sad and bewildering experience.
Listening to others' itself is a therapy that would help the person talking giving vent to her or his troubles. Indeed listening also helps the listener in understanding the other person's trials and it is possible that a remedy might be the result. Even otherwise, sympathy is something that people thirst for.
Nice language and style. Pretty well researched article.
The World War 1 setting reaches out and makes me imagine the events that you have so well highlighted in these brief but certainly moving letters.
Sid, the soldier must have returned home after action in the war,henceforth.
His thoughts and musings about love and the aftermath of his possible death are clearly imaged.
War being a cruel and unpredictable, none could know or even imagine how things would turn out for soldiers like Sid.
It is a good write telling us about the war without even witnessing it.
I felt happy that you found fearlessness inside you and making progress with life in general. This is the kind of freedom that makes a person shine and even take others along with her or him. Brief but enough information is fed into the article to make it an inspirational write up. Big shout from me for having got rid of the fear complex.
You mentioned the need to be positive in every walk of life. You developed it with regard to job and pregnancy. I like the opinion that,
" "May be there is something good for me in the store and that's why I am getting rejected"."
Lastly, you expressed wonder and belief in miracles. For those who have faith in God, miracles continue to happen. I firmly understand that factor of life.
It is my pleasure to review this poem of yours for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing yet another year of creativity at the WDC. Have a lovely day!
I like this nice poem for its practical wisdom. Indeed life is not a bed of roses. We do have thorns that hurt us. We do get hurt and it is not easy to forget the pain. I like the truth of the line.
"To heal it takes two." How very true!
Imagery mirrors the misery caused by hurt.
"Tears will flow too free"
Lines I will surely remember are,
"When we fall we must get up
And learn to fill our own cup."
Pretty philosophical and a practical way of looking at life. If we develop vision of this kind where we appreciate the sweetness and bitterness, we can sail through life.
"I much rather see
All things as they really are"
Perhaps I can take the liberty of taking it a bit further and say that light and shade are part of creativity and so it is with life.
Imagery shows both sweet and bitter things of life and the ability to appreciate them.
"It's impossible not to like
How sweet and bitter honey lemon is..."
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This sonnet on beauty is a personal poem of love. Love is described from your view. I mean how it engulfs your sanity without notice is seen here. All your defenses fall short and things work in her favor.
"An enrapturing gaze fells my vulnerable army,"
Here she is emerging as a winner and the to lose in such cases is not loss but ironically another win. So I might conclude that both the people involved in this love episode are winners.
Whether she is a waking dream or a vision the factual reality is your being smitten by love of a woman, your "heavenly beam".
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The collection of snippets is nicely arranged. The chain of memories is narrated in first person. you have shown each character with clarity. The readers can understand the feelings of the youngest sibling for all his family members.
The times are when there was no fridge yet. That makes the whole perspective very interesting. Life appears more peaceful with the family enjoying their occasional meetings.
I can see there is closeness and bonding between the members of the family.
Language and style are such that feelings and thoughts are well understood. You used simple language and showed every incident as you have witnessed it. Very realistic.
I am reviewing this short verse for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a great day!
Content-
The cat and dog play is a great visual. We do have such sights but you caught it in the brevity of a short poem. The eternal struggle goes on. It is embedded in the creation itself.
"Dog barked and howled
Cat growled"
Although there is no message as such, your poem makes me read between the lines.
Imagery-
This poem brings in a variety of visuals. It is not only the two fencing animals but the atmosphere as well, the tree, the shade and the sun come through the word pictures.
Structure-
Short rhyming stanzas tell the whole story. Line endings rhyme well. words are simple and of everyday usage.
"her glare
a scare"
It flows well.
Write on!
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