"Songwriter, CloverChic lists THIS FADING MASK on Auto Rewards. Lyrics that tell the story of a lady's plight in the limelight. Rhyme and cadence delivered with a beat. As life goes on with the chorus of: Staring, Staring, Staring eyes. Another Four Star to hum along with on WC." Alabama Courier Times / D. Derrringer / Aug 8
"Cursing Charlie" offered on Auto Rewards by author, Nic has the setting of Arizona in the background, while two lover's minds mix in either telpathy or dialog.
In the last paragraph the Nic tells us not to think. Is a content rating now a no-no?
So, where to start, where to stop?
What to say?
While the entire piece builds toward the girl going flying over the side of the cliff.
Here's a moment of truth, allright. Teff's at her PC editing, so this review's from Derby Derringer.
Miss MimossaBubbles, let's assume we never met. Your piece, "Me! (The Outlook Series) just doesn't seem to have moxie enough for a series opening.
Yes, the house on the cliff, coupled with a dream. Ouch the depression.
Mon Dieu! Suppose at the drawing board of "life" as you outline, this reporter from Alabama Courier better step aside.
Seems you want to render or rant or dream some more, maybe. Make room for more to come from this item's conception to finale.
Will this please your muse's whims?
If so ponder on.
Bubbles, dear: Best corral the imagination and forever write on!
Derby Derringer
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The one paragraph, draft type story, Nightmare at Work is a fun, fast read.
Yikes, Teff says at the end, no ending?
And, this reviewer did not like that boss man either. Arrogant, pushy, is he?
Chauvinistic? Now, Teff's a thesaurus. Sorry, but nice to have these at our fingertips, innit?
Character achievement met.
Melodrama genre // not exactly.
Oh, well ... unless you're thinking Soap.
Good morning to all, bloggers, members, authors, guests for hold on to your hats now, Mr & Mrs America and all the ships at Sea* (*Walter Winchel) For as of July 20, 36 posts tally WC's first blog ring.
And you thought blogging was new, while a blog ring idea at this form is newer.
Now, not sure I uderstand all this but you may want to check it out, then post your blog by genre.
Well mine's helter skelter, but be back soon. Actually its rather posh, if I do say so. Rath-er tip top and hoitytoity all about the writing, listed below.
And darlings this idea is going places, what?
Well have a bloody good day and all that, mates.
Cordially,
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Author / poet Phlow's poem THE STOWAWAY is one of man poems on Sponsored items. The poet leaves some cookie crumbs writing about a poem, either not written or this one came insted during the night to the narrator.
Good attempt, overall kinda cute actually.
Included in the item is a synopsis item on the author's reviews received.
Akina Yei offers a four-line poem, SUMMER on Read-A-Newbie page. Sounds like summer a litle bit, feels like summer without the heat being mentioned.
Good try, brief work. We'll see more poems from this author is a sure bet.
"Writing. Com author, Jack offers MIND WRITER on Auto Rewards, page 8. A click away, ladies and gentleman, reviewers, guests is a treat with a Cally / script writer bent. The narrartor, first person is the one villian who does not ever once drop his verbosity for himself. Replete with I -- I -- I --- Yet, the last vistage at the cabin is the question this reviewer takes from the story. Some stories don't end until we see THE END. So unsure of this take on screen writing and contests in general at this time." Alabama Courier Times // T.Teffom // July 18, 2005
TEFF WON FIRST PLACE, WE WANT YOUR STORY CONTEST !!!!!
"Green Dragon offers an informative article packed with the ho-hum, no not really, day-to-day adventures of a fellow American transporting dogs via air cargo. Not a piece of advice one see everywhere, BUT it is really spiffy, laden with the nuances of shots, ticket counters and carriers. An article that tells it like it is --- in good writing format. Making one feel challenged to do the right things to accomplish one's goals --- internationally, of course." Alabama Courier Times // T.Teffom // July 18, 2005
TEFF WON FIRST PLACE, WE WANT YOUR STORY CONTEST!!!!!
Why oh why did you miss the second cap for your poem, Moonlight dancers?
Seldom, and this is not meant as a stab at other poets, please don't think so.
Seldom ... does a poem recieve above a 3.5 star from Teff.
This wondeful poem with its old world charm & style reminds me of classic poems studied in poetry classes since grade school --- into college. Why?
Because the flight of the owl --- is visual inside the singing rhythm of the poet's craft.
Your opening, Layia, and FYI members, guests, authors, poets, is the mettle that forms the entire poem.
The author sticks with her style to the end. When, it just seems over and one is dissapointed because its gone. But there it is to re-caprture with a second read. A read we want to make for it is that good of a poem.
First Stanza ... "Beneath the pale blue autumn moon
And the branches of dancng trees
On the quiet current of a midnight breeze ..... "
Excellent, excellent work, dear poet.
Contest and publishable material, right here. There's your sign. Maybe out of the simplest concepts comes with proper vocab, scene setting, nature the best of the best. Five star all the way.
Now, listen up, Laylia ... for you certainly MUST rhyme on!
Cordially, Teff WON FIRST PLACE, WE WANT YOUR STORY CONTEST !!!
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Since your poem, THE BALLERINA asks for comments on style and presentation in the intro, Teff clicks on.
Now, Mike the entire concept of a new style may be novel to the poet, yourself, although not always acceptable to all poetry fans.
However, I'm not all poetry fans and I must say, you had me at ....
" ... observation" And "I don't give a damn about the weather."
When this poem evolves from mind to keyboard, let's assume ... you are playing with fire ... by using the parenthesis. However, Teff is still undaunted for she likes new things.
Mostly the i-o-n sound in poetry turns me on, Mike. By using 'predication'
'separation"
'altercation' you have my complete attent-i-o-n.
Now, here's the deal, Mr Waye. After "spin ....(all the way to) ...in my mind"
one asks, "Why waste the typing time with the side-step stanza?"
Best here to go with the not really uncommon ... line by line single spaced presentation.
Looks better, reads easier.
Try your words in this format for that stanza only.
"Spins life verdue
Will incise
Spin a flush solace ...."
Sure you get the picture. Keep the 4.5 star. Good poem, actually.
Below: this is just me, ah --- lately.
Add a bit of color to the print which is another eye grabber to try. Myself, I'm a tad tired of standard black. So check out Writing.C's extras. Not rainbow world, just a little summer color, man.
Of course, the above paragraph is very superficial and matters not in the least.
This poet has what it takes. So Mike, Rhyme on!
Cordially,
Teff, FIRST PLACE WINNER !!!! -- WE WANT YOUR STORY CONTEST !!!
"ACID TONGUED, the forum comes our way since copyrite date of No, 2003. Here an author may request a review for work that is not the average, everyday run to the mall to shop and cheer up in aisles of the latest fashion imports. Here is not the place for cookie-cutter firm pieces to be discussed. This seems to be a forum with a message, a hidden agenda or hundreds of those, too. Is this a place for social outcasts who actually tell it like it be?
Maybe yes, most definetly. Excellent mission statement from Elisa Stick opens the path to sooth the soul of honest, realists." Alabama Courier Times / T.Teffom / 2K5
Ever see the sponsored item change right before your eyes? Sure you did.
Wish you'd hit that one from sponsored items? Forgot the title and your fast return evaporated like steam from an overboiled clam. Ans. Yes.
Finally cornering the place to be ---LIAM'S FALLOUT SHELTER (FORUM) readers, guests, poets, authors, reviewers find 279 posts and climbing for an item that crested the waves of Writing.C only since c-rite date, June 12, 2005.
Holy Hannah, Batman! Time to sit back and listen to writers tell it like it is, like it can be, like it will be and like it be.
"Nothing short of a high score should survive THE INTERVIEW, a thought provoking piece by talented author, Fyn.
Why?
The interview of a polish senior citizen who went to summer camp, then later came to America ... begins in 1944 when Bertha Golanski is a child.
That summer camp was in Austria with special showers, guards and offered free tatoos.
Do yourselef one special favor today, like this author maybe you will also make a few comparisons to today's strife when families are sepearted and wars rage on in various parts of the globe.
A No. 1 --- Excellent work!"
Alabama Courier Times / Literature Section / T Teffom / July 9, 2005
"New member, Lost but Surrounded posts a poem about lost childhood, titled VIEW FROM THE BROKEN GLASS. Innocent by gone days of youth are easily read ... uh and missed. Boo hoo. Only kidding. Rhyme on!"
UH-OH !!! EDIT ALERT!!!
Dear Lost,
Common usage of "i" is capital I.
Also, start sentences and stanzas with a capital letter. This is not an e-mail to friends it is a copy-rited item. A hint for better rates, easier reads etc.
"A short take on society surrounds "they" in the poem, WHO ARE THEY by Starfire." To answer this questionaire type expose, one needs assume there is positively a THEY in the first place. E.g. === Someone sets a trend, dearheart, which folks follow in Cally but not in Maine. However a very good attempt at defining a few ills that plague social graces? Maybe yes, maybe no." Alabama Courier Times / July 7, 2005 / T Teffom
PS === Who are they might be a list instead of poetry genre.
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Don Anderson brings to the table an exhilarating ride along "the road of responsibility" .... "run over by obligations." When you get to "a diner on the turnpike to tomorrow" a reader simply blushes, hoping for more poetry from this talented poet. Five star work here, Mr Anderson!" Alabama Courier Times / T Teffom / July 1, 2005
Teff with her forehead in Webster defining "phenomenology" from the intro for ONE STEP AHEAD TO NOWHERE ... something new listed on Auto Rewards. Hmmm.
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