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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Modern Poet! Modern Poet!!
You do the site of Writing.Com justice with IN SEARCH OF HER MUSE.

For a second there, Teffy thinks you are talking to her, with "the message that never comes" "an empty house ... tidy and clean."

How to write poetry 101 is the true gift of this rose colored presentation. Just in the nick of time while we hustle bustle about, preperations in tow for those special Christmassy ways.

Then arrives this reminder, to steady the line, draw in the sails, imagine, pin down the muse and ...

We know the drill, right? Readers, guests, authors, poets, boys, girls, ladies, gentlemen. IN SEARCH OF HER MUSE is the one to read this very day. For it will encourage us to .... WRITE ON!

Thanks Modern Poet, nice pen name.

Merry Merry!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)


CHERRY NUT CAKE by Kathy M evokes images from past decades while the daughters McMahon clean out their mother's house. Written in letter form, the piece bears the salutation: "Dear Cousins."

With an aunt who wears pearls, and small things to debate ... "Toss and ask questions later" philosophy the tribute to the family tree comes through loud and clear, for all crazy cousins.

Sidebar::: lllllllllllllllllllllllllllll If this isn't fiction, hope nobody goes --- Don't tell me you threw away the tire iron with the bent handle, we prop up the tent with. Kidding! lllllllllllllllll

Actually, Teff owns a cook book with recipe cards, but typing every thing else, today. Wink.

Merry Christmas, Kathy. Welcome to WC, where writers of your caliber are a pleasure to meet.

Good one, cuz!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Author, perhaps salesman, Jim Cheresly offers COFFEE PODS AND ESPRESSO.

OOOoola la, hon, you had me in the first sentence. Everyone who read Teff's early morning, beside the garden, summer reviews on PRP knows I am a coffee fiend.

Therefore, Jim blows Teff out of the ballpark with the opening lines ... "finely ground, dark roasted coffee."

Click here for a link, while learning pristine instructions for the perfect cup of morning brew. Java the way it should be.

Merry Christmas to you and yours, Mr. Cheresly.

BTW, Jim ... while we're talking, combining flavored coffees with regular coffee, then adding the sweet creamers in those spill around, drippy plastic containers, makes the day of those who enter Teffom world. We're working on a mimic recipe for the flavored creamers. The latest go round adds melted carmel.

Nothing says it better than a great cup of coffee!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Gavin, good idea with this one. Who doesn't think about the nursing home story when fiction takes over and things go awry.

Gavin's MUTINY AT MOUNTROCK is well titled. Mountrock's the place, belittling senior citizens is the game.

The pace picks up when a resident sees the lightbulb flash in his mind. The idea is to "make him (the aide) regret he ever messed with me."

Enter "Bazookas Benson" in a "sequin gown." Now expect some mayhem.

Bazookas Benson is a well chosen character name. Creating those perfect character names is part of the fine tuning for a good short story. Aw, shucks, everyone knows that, Miss Teff.

At a mere 7.11 kb, Gavin sure does the christening with style.

Merry Merry!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

Page ten of Read-A-Newbie Page has some great reads and other items. This page number will change as our prolific talented New Members continue to post and in the tradition of WC, they shall Write ON!

MY DYING LOVE tells briefly of attraction riddled with fatality.

A few corrections in chronological order for the author's edit time.

snoke == smoke
Spell check on femmenism.

Happy Holidays!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

TABLE 6, a work from Tanstrin is this week's MUST READ.

Short stories, off site and on may include the prospects of the perfect dialog to tell the story. This 3,000 word short story achieves and is based on this criteria.

Good short stories often employ a twist-in-the-tale philosophy. Not the old bait and hook at the start, but importantly the pure pleasure of the twist at the end. Table 6 contains the latter. Sometimes on PRP, Teff sadly sees critique of what a short story should be, what it should not be.

Above all else, a short story like this one is entertaining and enjoyable. So if content is there, please praise it for the short story produced is a product like no other.

Dear Author: There are a few things to address below, compliments on content included.

First par --- battles == bottles

Like: "twenty tons of stuff" (belonging to Suzanne the ex.)

LOVE Tantris's use of perplexed, an 85 star word over the trite 'confused.'

Like: "lethal fire burning in her eyes."

Hungarian Paprika Brandy? Hey, don't see that everyday. Say where is the place hosting Table Six? Hmmm?

drunken == usage drunk

The worst of all, the paragraph breaks need to be edited, dear author.

Thank you so much for this wonderful short story. Your style is most appreciated.

Cordially,
Teff
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)



Shying away from death genre, one never knows upon opening same. Visit "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. for more details on the topic.

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already has a four.five star rate.

HELP has a repeated stanza, used a total of four times. This rev is not meant to discourage the poet / member from further poetry. Perhaps a cheery subject or at the very least a little more to go by with this one, in way of explanation if sympathy is your goal.

Plus measured against five star poetry which crests the pages of Writing.Com every single day, we can all learn from reading in the many poetry forums.

Thanks for you time, simply not for Teff.

Cordially, T.Teffom
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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A quick piece of flash fiction introducing characters in a short story I'm writing.
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And the characters are Big Eddie smoking a cigarette to "look tough."

Eddie -- a large guy " who had the entire alley blocked."

Woody, the stand-up or stand-in guy, watching Eddie. Intro surrounded by the smoking.

While Teff never agrees that all characters must be loved, liked, adored as is mentioned in WC newsletters from time to time, author, Flogamocker attempts the intro of action within a justifiable venue of seeing the two men in the alley, one coughing, "hands on his knees."

Characterization according to Webster:

"The delineration of character or creation of a character in a play or story, etc."

Thus intro theme met.

Brief to the point as far as a start of a story goes. However, while Teff sides with things being longer than standard essay/ flash this is a four star intro, dear writer.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

The Day and Friends must be doing something right. For IT'S GREAT TO GAIN, a WC interactive has been running for three years, boasting over 3,000 entries from some very creative, polific writers. So WAY TO GO, guys & gals.

Thinking of staying slim, working out on the bike in today's warmer weather, 40 degrees and rising? Then look here where fat is what it's all about.

LOVE --- "Mall troll" that's calssic.

Merry Merry to all The Day's helper / writer elves.

Impressive!

Cordially, TEFF has 5 rev badges and new rev forum
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

"Three cups of hot chocolate
Sit on the table
Mom carries a plate of cookies ..."
all of the above from Celtic Lady, Christmas Lady from her poem MAGIC, published in 2001.

Thanks for posting your rev request on TEFF'S REVS. The poem feels like Christmas right down to the details of the cat wondering the house.

Teff suggests all readers, members, reviewers and guests stop by Lady's enchantanted forest, and cottage and take a peek in her port.

Hailing from Nova Scotia this writer offers a Christmas poem to greet the season year after year. And a portfolio to warm the heart.

Thanks! Poetry On!

Merry Christmas!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

SANTA'S LITTLE BLACKMAILER is a great title from Lee L Strauss. Featured on last week's Mystery Newsletter the tale is not morbid, not exactly scary but ..... oooooh ooohh!

Like the movie THE BAD SANTA, a man takes a post as a seasonal worker in the red velvet suit. Beware the customer child, "the boy with the water blue eyes."

Great graphics with the note from the nasty kid, Lee. And a very good read.

Seems like this one came to an abrupt end. Hope the reason wasn't ye olde word count status. If so, what a shame.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Peppermint Patty, Teff is a pushover for a story poem. MOVING DAY brings to the table the tale of a son leaving home and a mother's sadness at his flight. Great rhymes! One of the best of the best.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Dear Author, You had me all the way to -- "where everybody knows my name."

Appreciation for the regular way of talking comes out in this story. Once I was told not to use the ordinary in a story. Although there's a ton of great vocab stunts in this piece, the impressive part is the use of cliche chosen appropriately for STYLE!

Read A PLACE CALLED HOME --- do yourself a favor. Writers may learn from this, reviewers can spurn cliche bashing for a picky spate. Best of all, readers will enjoy this tale of boyhood, profession, friendship & hard work.

Setting introduced in first par. Where it belongs!

Cliche samples to lead readers onward ---

short fuse

On a more serious note ---

You might wonder

In all seriousness

To summarize ===

ALL of the above shows keen observance of educational standards evident in Joefc's fine work.

Plus character creation to die for!

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Good Evening Christmas Elves, all the reviewers and readers out there, take heed.

THE CHRISTMAS ANGEL by Fyn measures in as a MUST READ! A story poem with a toy store, a elderly wood carver and a little girl teased for "thick glasses"
"her name, her dress and her grades."

Oh, poor little thing. Sniff.

Enter Christmas Eve, the lighting of the toy shop's tree and ...... ohhhhhh.

Excellent, thanks Fyn. Merry Merry!

Don't be a passer-by as Sleigh Bells Ring are you listening -------> ----->

Teff's Revs
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

"Nonny voices an opinion in RELIGIOUS TRUTH: THE SEVEN DEADLY SINS.
Citing, the Brad Pitt movie, SEVEN the author admits researching online for concepts surrounding envy, etc. Naming the rest of them here might be a plus for informing readers." Alabama Courier Times // Dec. 7 // T.Teffom

The Suggestion: For further composition filler, try a few lines from either THE FOURTH DEADLY SIN, THE FIFTH DEADLY SIN, the mystery series. Perhaps other ideas will come while doing online research.

Adding the sources will never subtract from one's work, hon.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

Musetrap, one must say this is a farfetched idea to follow a flower "blowing over scorched, glassy ground."

Genre -- Fantasy, afterall.

Three tales of battle, one with Drul, who "listens to the clashes of voices around him" after victory.

Lt. Cromwell "driven mad by the pounding of shells."

Until time and philosophy genre blend over time and the warflower evolves from the pen of this author.

Not bad, a bit flowery for Teff, a little hard to grasp, Musetramp, while genre of Sprititual, hidden or not seen.

The Suggestion: A stronger lead in for changes of character, which also changes the era, or evolution going on in this brave new or old world, where always prolific warflowers flourish and grow.

Best to you and yours for a Happy Holiday.

Merry Merry!

Cordially, Teff

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

Susan of Pudlin! Sooooooo roared the N Wind ----------> SSSSSSSAAAAANNNNNN !!!!!!!! O'Pudlin!

Uh, oh, Teff's hamburger with relish, verb sand menu lecture again.

O'Pudlin. Adolescent Lit has less extra mayo with horseradish annoyance than your baggage here of hads, thats in the wrong place, that becauses. Novelist to novelist, Susie Q, you're not listening to teacher, Sr. Tessandra Teff.

Can see from your posts on Auto Rewards ... if its new on AR this revver finds it. Can see copyrite, Jan. Okay, story line good. Empahasize the research.

Note Mary Reily's pink spot outline in Whitechapel, London in

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Plus why rehash these verb sandwich convos over lunch once more. You may as well say meet me in Boston Harbor. Don't make me come out of Maine, someone will need to rescue me, they're talking 12 foot drifts. Yikes!

On That: In Philly speak and in America we use that ---- thus: That's great.

We watch our fence blow away, two or three kids flush into an incoming Jan wave in Jersey, and say, "That's great."

Q -- Whatyamean y lost the money at the track?

A -- Now that's just great.

Yes, colloguial. Your setting of 1847 sounds marvelous for ships. Give us some live research, quote the source. Impress!

Chronological order:

like that -- glad
Like First Parish Church (Church of Latter Day Yankees)

The father that ammassed great wealth sentence. NO THAT, toss it. Bye.

Note: The above's your hook. A novelist will place hooks at the end of a chapters to hook in the fish for next chapter line. With this common mistake of this hook 'amassed great wealth' it will add to Eliza's flair while properly mittened, sliding on ice. In her (Susan's) opening lines.

Plus this actually makes me want to knit, seriously. Susan knows, I mean her no harm, Mr & Mrs America and all the ships at sea.(Walter Winchel)

ELIZA JANE is Kiddie Lit genre also. Historic if you pick up the pace, America wants to know about the original blue states N of Jersey, Mass. Lunch better be Lobster, Susan.

Here's a rewrite present for you.

"Winter came early, barely Indian Summer prior to frost, snow falling thru Dec."

Hint -- Rent STORM OF THE CENTURY by Steven King. Background accent.

Please check TEFF'S REVS out, where Teffy brags on your prolific writing skills etc (Pssst --- Pudlin's stories are fabulous).

Hey, tiny rev related favor for moi. Por favor -- See if you can make out the rules for me below. Are they getting it? Post this Rev & Rev reply as a post on .... you decide, Miss Susan.

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THANKS!!!! MERRY CHRISTMAS!!!!!!
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

One hears the screams, feels the danger in THREE QUICK SHOTS.

No sense re-writing the author's piece. Advice of sight, sound, smell are irrelevant, if such advise is rendered by one writer or from a newsletter, best to ignore it. What should we smell, fear?
Plus it's not a book for the blind.

The twist at the end of the tale when the character is back on the ranch is a surprise to this reviewer, who is collecting replies to keep track of them on ===

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Most importantly with this story, true suggestion is for naming the character. Readers tire of she.

ID the one who comes in, gun to the ready on a jet, so reminiscent of what happened on Sept. 11, 2001, above a calm countryside in rural PA.

Writing the actual action here must have been difficult. For this recall, this writer says, thanks.

Good JOB! Write on!

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

"The poetry of Christmas has a powerful beat" writes the Poet Laureate of Writing.Com, Ms Ann Ticipation.

One may look here for seasonal cheer from this poet's pen. As always rhymes and stanzas reach out and speak to the reader.

Ann, on a personal note. Your announcement for Public Review page is posted on === the brand new forum. Your thoughts on the concept and idea for the rev format were most appreciated.

So when you get a chance:

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Also, the re=post rev, re: SILENT PLEA BY ANN TICIPATION is also there, addressed to all Ann's many fans.

Thanks, take care.

Merry Christmas, hon.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Good Morning, Miss Ann Ticipation.

Joining WC in Oct, 2004, I recall being thrilled with your pen name and your first rate poetry. What a joy it is to read.

Teff triple r's Ann often. Ann writes back with laughter each time I dub her the Bard of Writing. Com. And have on PRP called Ann the scholar, The Poet Laureate of this site.

Dec 1, 2k5 one of our most prolific, talented authors posts MY SILENT PLEA.

Reading this, this humble reviewer is aghast, sympathetic and willing and able to answer the request. Yes, prayers are now the order of the day this month.

The poem is straight forward, well written and once more comes from the heart of a lady who in her career gives so much to others. So much which cannot be truly measured in metric rythm. Although one sees subject & cadence of those endeavors in Ann's work.

So ... Sunday to Sunday, we're here, hon.

Also, lately, and please don't feel obligated to search, Teff refers to your work as Five Star poetry. When rating OP works, along with the poetry of T L Finch, whose efforts as a poet are long and lasting, like yours Ann. Setting standards, more-or-less.

God Bless us all, each and everyone.

Guess what, Ann? I might open a review forum. Not sure, but if anything the latter should bring a smile. And it shall be called Teff's Revs.

Merry, Merry Christmas to you and yours.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

THE HAVEN tells of what is, what may be, what might be. Only in the effect via a muse's lingo of which "humans" place in society if defined. As effectual poetic renditions tend to equate real and unreal.

So, if we get it, or if we don't like the poem reads re: our social nicks, perhaps we are all in someway:

"Entwined ... stationay objects, neither bending or moving."

A poem to make readers think, I think.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
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CHAPTER ONE --- a DECENT READ ABOUT a family of witches, the friendly kind from the pen of J. Krome.

Par One: village's ghost
locals --- understood live near

Next: Please don't fudge par breaks, designed for easier reading.

Learnt (?) not a word, learned.

Sum a young witch tries to make a bed, fails. Gulls wear black clothes. A new leader will be chosen for the coven.

The author's Q is: Do you like the characters? Yeah, they're okay, similar to Bewitched, the black & white TV comedy, circa, 1970s.

Can the story be plotted and followed?
Sure, it has a good start.

Suggestion: Dont't depend to much on adjectives, green, tiny. Pretend you're doing a crossword puzzle and pull out the perfect word.

Also almost every had, here, can be dropped. Isn't the story happening as you write it? Read it aloud. If you can drop the hads, toss them as far from the house as possible. Take a little caution to stay the fingers that type the hads that are not needed.

Lastly, you understand, Teff means you no harm. You're characters seem to rival for position. Add the reason to this chapter.

Best in all you do, dear author.

Let's all hope you finish this one and continue to Write ON!

Cordially, Teff, Dec 3, 2005
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


LONGING MEMORIES from the talented pen of new member, Taniuska, proves once again, not all new members are new to writing.

Sum: The life of Theodore, as told by narrator, a grandson. Times 1916 --- 1940. Interesting.

Genre: Bio --- met, signed sealed & delivered

Favorite lines:

"hemp shirt ... stiff as a tree ..."
Readers, can't you just imagine color and texture?

"narrow road" of "pines" like "a tunnel"
The actual sentence containing the above almost reaches out branches to touch one taking a casual walk. Great detail!

"hymn of the wind" Gorgeous!

The Suggestion:

Cut down on some tense additions, shorten where feasible.

Don't be afraid to use flowery prose.
May be your specialty, Taniuska.

favourite == favorite

Best Christmas to come, welcome to WC where ALL writing remains free & easy going on cold winter days.

Historic details in this one, research, adds to the grade.

Cordially, Teff
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)


Kalluke, your poem MY FIRST PAPER CUT is well presented with the tiny icons. For the effort and the tale inside the poem, the 3.5 star. Please do not shun this grade as irrelevant or low.

Sometimes entire stories get the same rates. However, reading poetry here on WC, one finds the fine, excellent standards of Ann Ticipation, T L Finch to name a few.

I very much enjoyed the craft side of life and fully agree that homemade gifts can be the most thoughtful presents.

Plus your item is quite timely.

So let's decorate & celebrate this merry month of DEC.

BACK TO --- the edit / write of MY FIRST PAPER CUT, perhaps adhere more carefully to lines and rhymes. Fit them into rhyme delivery via just a teeny bit more tweaking, dear.

Cordially, Teff w/ 4 rev badges. Sorry these don't show up; on PRP similiar to Christmas Past.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

On horseback " ... Scream down the road to Neverland ..." Shocking words from HURT --- PART ONE, from author, New York Gretta.

Sum: A military wife left at home, tends a horse farm, receives news her husband is _________.

Sorry, not up to Teff (humble reviewer, poet, forum hostess, short story contest winner) to give this one away.

So click here to ... READ ON!

New York Gretta, this is off to a very adequate, tantalizing start. You supply subtle hooks with almost every paragraph while suppling background without pushiness. The former keeps a story afloat. While the latter prevents bogging down readers into the past of the characters per se.

Thanks fo this one, hon.

Cordially,

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