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September 13, 2007
Morning: Come across a call for short stories & poetry onsite from FARSIDE ANTHOLOGY from an upcoming publisher.
No doubt intrigued as things fair poorly at
http://readingdesitny.highpowersites.com for Modesta Gamble. Anything Steering (U$) author$ to $ale$ for $hort $torie$ is good rift.
Silence envelopes "MOFFETT FILES TAKE FIVE" yet plunging into the foray of editor of flash pieces, yesterday, today and tomorrow ... I come across a FARSIDE ANTHOLOGY submission from Sam Screwtape.
THE BUSINESS OF SPACE, flash genre requires a few basic pointers which journalists use daily.
Drop all excessive words is a slight edit MO for any author. This is stressed with a list of what words not to use in THE ELEMENTS OF STYE.
If an essay is 300 words only. Or a fiction piece of same length, ask your self, Sam, what words do I get over insisting typing alongside each verb entering the story. ???
AHAH! --- Have, had, has, started, turns, that ... ETC!!! Oh babycakes it goes on and on, I fear. We are never at the mercy of what we must say so readers "get it." We read very well, we get it --- so we say in our noggins to authors --- GO!
Sure after first drafts authors backtrack, clean up. Whatever floats the boat past first draft, sure.
Readers hate waiting usually.
THERE IS NO MUST BE WRITTEN THUSLY. NEVER!!!
Also, yesteday (9/12/07} a conversation took place between this humble revver, Miss Teffy (ME) creative writer and Eng. 101 TEACHER (PRETEND) and a member named Chuckles.
After revving three of his flashes, falling over with talent from his pen .. and saying much the same classroom type verberage for his works, I swirled with a new discovery of 3 great stories in a comfortable reading style. This is available on Public Rev Page by using search and our names, written in plum.
Chuck sent me a Merit Badge which reads
"For helpful, instructive reviews."
This means a kindness shared. Community. Author to author.
When Farside goes to press, Sam .. sure hope by then we re-address, the following easy edits, our styles, vocab, plots and write on & on, together, my friend.
Sam -- the fast reactions as reader/ correction-suggestion as Teacher Ms Teffy shall be included. Securing my notes from an offshore breeze at the picnic table .... Here it comes. Please don't think incoming tide. Ponder ... hints which will save you time, possibly improve the brief 300 words, supply better words of interest --- and develop a style that is so popular it will take you sox off, put them in the washer and hang 'em high.
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Composition 101 isn't written in a day --- going back ... ? huh did I hear 1514 in the back of the room?
Many writers are cadged into using past perfect tenses from schools & publishers who allow same in annual ficiton novels.
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IN CHRONOL ORDER
At: But why --- drop but
Use: I'm a business man
Describing the venture in THE BUSINESS OF SPACE by Sam Screwtape, a FARSIDE submission one reads the following:
"as usable."
TEFF: Suppose a guy's at a carlot. Car salesman goes -- "Hey this 92 jag is usable." What do you do?
Usable to sell a gig in outerspace reminds of flea markets where frying pans are usable. Simple visit a thesaurus, an easy edit.
had never planned -- try never anticipated
weren't willing -- unwilling or synonym
AT: "I have sources" -- Again with the have ...
try a boost here -- Authority-wise (?) an authors call. Maybe try: I offer ... We boast
If you invest you chance .. when reading this came to me as outlook for the gamble proposed. Your topic is hugely speculative. What kind of factories? Name a few things.
If commas are cowbells Sam you might need less cowbell in some places.
However, if truly in edit/ toss mood. Completely acceptabe to go with a cowbell for any prolific "ands." Remember cowbells here equal commas.
vocab: try claims, reluctant, extraordinary --- gather fabulous adjectives for SPACE!!
Here is the first major objection to stroy credebility. Always make it real not matter what, right?
"We have the designs ready, and waiting."
No cowbell nec before and
SNAG: designs -- ?? Later when you add to this story Sam perhaps tell more.
Thanks, enjoyed your plot, like you courage. For the two-man sales pitch am rating high.
See you at FARSIDE, Sam, already quered and may take the plunge.
Cordially, TEFF
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