Work (13+) A busboy at a fancy restaurant meets the patron of his dreams #1264928 by jrdnjones
Fabulous, penning here, JR.
Like === " ... bonded together with a ______ crystal glass."
Great humor in this one and the author sums all up for us. Namely: feelings from the busboy ...
Observations on the duo at the two-top
And the exit line --- Superb!
Don't waste time listening to the likes of TEFF. So members, revvers, authors, poets, fiction readers and distinguished guests ... you'll be clicking on this one for a funny read, right? Hopefully WORK is in your humor genre reading favor to be sure.
How wonderful to see a new short story from your portfolio today. On top of my desk lingers in essence after reading straight thru with nary a hitch ....
SENSE THE RAINBOW which hails from the pen of ...
J A Buxton, published author and one of the most prolific writers on W.C.
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SENSE OF THE RAINBOW brings to life several nuances concerning a well-detailed bouquet placed inside an office cubicle where two ladies are employed.
J A Buxton indicates this is a contest entry. A great one, one might add. The best of the best is the hues and horticulture contained in the work for the blooms themselves. Why, even the Angelica is a character. Lovely flower BTW and so tall.
This one comes just in time when photos of former gardens sit side-by-side atop the desk of
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Best summer days ahead, Judity. Please check this out. Sorry, again with the personal but you already know me for the cad I truly am. Haha.
Came across another of your fantastic short-shorts this morning and couldn't resist the desire to read the second one reviewed today from this desk.
Outside we just had this glowing moonlight which woke me in the night, like your story BUS TO PURGATORY. It felt like an eye-opener to a place ... which goes beyond the reality of the environmental confides we walk and breathe daily.
Anyways, despite digression ---
Love, simply love:
"Helpless, his legs walked with no help from him."
There Sue sets the pace before the quick conclusion.
Glad you marked this one "fantasy" which is accurate since not all fantasy genre needs the dragon or the troll, of course.
Also, when you get a chance, Sue, dear, punch in "short story contests" on the worldwide web and enter a few. No doubt, summing the way you do inside a brief word count is certainly to your andvantage and to ours.
Big Thanks!
Cordially, TEFF
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SueVN offers OLD YEAR'S EVE on Auto Rewards, p. 6.
What a great read this is, Sue.
The subject of the old year ending and the new year arriving is done here in dialog format for a flash fiction contest of less than 500 words.
Believe it of not, Teff entered one of those off-site and completed the story as if history spelled the theme out for that particular entry. These are tough.
However, SueVN makes it looks kinda easy with this approach. Love IT!
Write ON!
Cordially, TEFF
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The above title has been with us for the last few years in essence as a topic of concern.
Here, WC author, Armadillo offers some tried and true chronological renditions of the current state of affairs.
In the last paragraphs there's speculative solution. In fact, signs to the latter are being posted all over the place when a challenge to do same went out in 2006.
So, let's not forget and pray our troops come safely home as soon as possible. How about it, Washington, DC?
Cordially, TEFF
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With INVISIBLE YOUTH, our fond crusader for causes which we walk beside in everyday life, author, DragonBlue has topped some of her best presentations for these article eye-opners.
Love them all, Blue.
A visit to this author's port should be on the list of how to get aware of problems which Blue writes of and often suggests solutions for.
May 21, 2007
My, my, rfgraham, you sure to pack a lot of information into these chapters.
Informative
Grammar fine
Detail worthy
Actions of everyday life --- interesting
When the first person narrator discovers she has a blood-kin brother on the way to visit her in her foster care family home, all things point to swell.
Best luck in all future writing endeavors, dear author.
Faced with a few irksome things on my mind today. Like: where is a minute to get things done? And these lines seem to be words to set the mind adrift from daily cares.
WHAT DOES IT MEAN TO BE ME, a poem by Serenity, listed on Auto-rewards also tells this revver to handle the in & outs of life.
Your poem THE SWEETEST THING is posted today in the READ-A-NEWBIE column.
Here, dear WC members, poets, novelists, and welcome guests, one can see a very romantic letter type poem from this author's pen which also tends to remind of a Valentine card.
Keep 'em coming, Cindy. You write & post these and someone shall review them for you, most probably.
Sorry, didn't mean to sound like an 8-Ball directive.
Welcome to WC, hope you enjoy your new found writer's nook, dear.
Cordially, TEFF
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How sweet this ditty from the portfolio of Georgiawill shown on Auto-Rewards.
Soon we'll see and smell the roses as spring turns to summer and like your title: ROSE IN CRYSTAL VASE portrays, a mini-second of sweet appreciation and scent shall be available to all.
Your poem THE GATHERING STORM contains a heap of info which relates to today's strife as regards the war/ occupation.
However, it also tries to sum the past of when many wars were fought to conquer or gain. Naturally, the former goes all the way back to English wars with Scotland, with France, other places too in the last fifty years. Kinda hard to fit it in a paragraph, isn't it?
Suppose these lines are a feeling of what is not the right way to look at the world. Yet, we must.
Back in the day, students had no choice we took history courses. Now Social Studies absorbs both georgraphy and economics. US History in the pulbic schools is not emphasized as it was for generations.
This poem seems to me to lack a course that is set. We can be self educated in history which comes through re: war. War and money as partners both must be addressed, spoken about, changed.
Anyway, today seldom does one encounter all the answers. Those too must be searched for, right? Plus, does one sense a reluctance to speak views sometimes? YES!
So this classic line is one to savor from the pen of Puppy Pooka in THE GATHERING STORM ===>
"The power of dollars turns night into day." Something to question, no doubt.
Again, got the digression going here and am afraid too much is read into your poem, sorry. But the piece makes one think and feel.
GATHERING STORM is a grand title.
Next: One suggestion. Break into more stanzas with this one. More partial breaks may afford a clear cut realization, perhaps.
Best, thanks for this one, dear author.
Cordially: TEFF
(Note this c-rite below, not much changes at a snail's pace these days, despite any hopes to the contrary.)
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