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Review of Blossoms Maligned  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

Jan 14, 2007

BLOSSOMS MALIGNED is a tale of first attraction, childhood friends, perhaps first love and awareness of same between two neighbors, between two high school students. When tragedy strikes this well detailed, chronologiucal read takes a very different direction leaving the ending to both survivors and the readers. Found on Auto Rewards from talented, W.C author, radioshea. ///AlabamaCourierTimes /// Book rev by T.Teffom

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


Jan 11 2007

Shtara is breaking ground once more on Auto Rewards. There, offering, MULTI LEVELED PLANET, Teff reads with pleasure the opening Prologue.

Setting the scene while four teens get ready to engage in some serious splunking, the story opens with all characters meeting at the house of embarkation.

Suggest, as you are using adjectives quite well throughout, dear author, perhaps another fill-in for "still pretty mom."

Sometimes when re-editing these pop up and hit us over the head. "Young, attractive" mom might do, but sure, you already saw it.

Like "boisterous" for the gang of four.

Happiest New 2007 to you and all of your family, Shtara.

Cordially,
TEFF
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Review of The Skirt  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

Jan 3, 2007

Imagine being as popular as "Nancy LaChance" whose quirky behavior results in the title of Kyla Thanks Judy! 's intersting short story, THE SKIRT.

Reading this the basic school uniform at St. Mary's reminds me of the old battle with white shirt cuffs, ink and chalk.

Certainly those were trying times of fashionable attire.

Thanks for this one, Kyla.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Champ de Mars  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

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AUTHOR: AGIAN is a storytelling poet.

SUBJECT: The piece is CHAMP DE MARS, posted WED for the first time on Plug Page.

Here, lies a daring tale from the French Revolution. A firm command of French and a wonderfully exciting delivery makes this revver wish to award a ten star to Agian. But alas, there's a few suggestions which came to me on second read.

This poem is so groovy, I'm already into a third read where Agian's vocab is excellent.

In chronolgical order:

First Stanza: At: " ... broken wood."
Maybe, if it fits and you agree, break the line @ wood,
Then proceed with: "These crunching stones."

Perhaps this line caused the poet a little trouble.

Now, visions from outside the realm of hectic Paris streets ... this re-write, if I may be so bold. Only use, if you as author are okay with a new arrangement.

Suggest instead: On ivy that still clings.

Ivy is a ground cover or climbing vine. So it has umpteen leaves and may be better than "ivies."

Using quotes for the voices of the crowds equals a very good ploy, separates the delivery, adds to the reality and setting of the poem.

Ten Star work, definetly a MUST READ!!!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Thorns  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

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THORNS from W.C poet/ author Nlightnd says in genre choices: Young Adult/ Experience.

The sonnet type pen adds it's own flair with the ending lines. With the conclusion, Nlightnd ties the piece together bravely.

"You're as the winter
Harsh and cold ..."

Keep your hand on that pen and dictionary as you enjoy the site and please continue to Poetry On!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Road to Freedom  Open in new Window.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Ginny B, I found your novel on Plug Page.

I read the intro and Chapter Five.

You've set a huge goal for yourself with the time period of 1870, the characters and the racial indifferences and sometimes cruel realities encountered in the time era.

Good luck with this one, a rather huge undertaking which you present well, inform your readrs and carry the story forward.

Best New Year to you and All WC members.

Must say one more tiny thing before closing my personal reviewers shop tonight. I buzzed all around here today. One thing that impresses me, beside community spirit is colors. I love the snow, the sigs, the changes.

We are both lucky to have Writing.C and to enjoy the simple wel done, sparkling, beauty of it. I always love this snowy scene when turning on in the morning early, reading and reviweing when I get a chance.

The things in Ginny B's novel can keep one up way far into the night.

Hey, gotta go spend time with a new novelest, discovered, yup right here.

Goodnight, Ginny B. And thanks.

Cordially,

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Review of The Marketplace  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Again with Purty Curls, who requests a Teff Rev, which is beyond sweet, so to comply, dear Purty Curls. Oh, I am so flattered, thanks PC.

THE MARKET PLACE is a brand new item, c-rite Jan/07. It tells of a vendor on a sidewalk working out, detailing who buys, who doesn't.

All of our items are in fact products. Not us, our works and sometimes if it be the non-fiction case, also our hearts.

So what will this writer offer us as we welcome this writer to WC?

Hey, simply read this one to find out.

AND note, dear Curls, the last line is why you have the five star above.

Perfect ending here, hon. These are often hard to find, impossible to envision, but sometimes like a whispering wind ... alwyas there to retrieve.

Good and effective essay.

Cordially: TEFF

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

Jan 2, 2007

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Insight, advise, summary of flirting is the topic behind the title.

An informative viewpoint containing

"Flirt with your wife __________
"Flirt with your teacher ______---

Flirt with your reviewer, ooops ... only kidding.

When we write we should flirt with our audience, don't you think? Off topic, sorry.

DemLou ---- Nice write, good job overall.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)


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Guess, we're all getting used to using the new digit, 7, above.

Anyways, Temperence, welcome to WC.

Your poem; EVERYTHING FOR YOU has some very eloquent lines pertient to the title's theme.

Sample: "It might be cold under the rain ..." also shows a picture.

When we read, as everyone knows already, we seek the visual. Done in poetry, briefer, of course than short story form, is a really good accomplishment.

Hey, HAPPY NEW YEAR TO you and yours, dear poet.

Cordially, Teff


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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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From the folds of funny, try this one on for size.

Must tell you, Cdoggown, I am still so afraid of Texas Pete, Hot Sauce your item has me in both the state of horror and rolling in the aisle, laughing.

With: I MET "THE MAN" an ususpecting customer is severved a Babeque sauce to-die-for. Thus giving new meaning to Hot off the presses for this Dec c-rite.

Thanks, thanks. Oh, hee hee hee

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Away  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
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Of the poem AWAY direct from the port of Cat, on Read-A-Newbie, page 20 ... there is ... there is ....

Wait a sec, need to read this vibrant one again.

It's fast paced, telling in a direct manner such as: "Stop it! Stop it!"

..... There's a new style emerging.

Suggest getting your stuff into the many poetry contest here, Cat.

Very good!

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of This Line  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

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Dear Sara Fox,

This humble revver is so glad that your poem, THIS LINE ended with that line.

There you tie a reader to exactly where your aim began, as if pulling an arrow into a bow.

Splendid pen.

Cordially,

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Review of Yours Fell  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Jan 2, 2006

Jogging the memory of a family telling stories, Purvida gets the laughter going from the entire cast of family characters.

Welcome to WC, nice story.

And Happy New Year.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Let My People Go  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

Jan 2, 2007

On Auto Rewards, you can take your ppick of what to read, what to review.

All as it should be.

With the fine dellivery of LET MY PEOPLE GO, Grandmapenny shows how to teach, using child characters at the feet of the grandmother in the story. Well done, my dear. Well, done.

Enjoyed this one where punctuation and grammar are over-all gifts or traits to gloat about.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Just the second day ...

HAPPY NEW YEAR 2007!

WC author, Ask Paddy is out here again with another flash fiction piece which leaves readers stunned for sheer imagination coupled with a rare twist.

There's this kiss at the sick bed of the loved one ...

Then ...

Can't give the story line away now, can one?

Good read. This author sports the kind of imagination one likes to enjoy.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Imagine if you will: Lordy, Lordy they said your writing is superb. Everyone wants to hear that for everything? (Notice in the previous statement, does is left out. It is because I am talking which writing is indeed the best part of talking on line. Like: Does everyone want to hear your writing is superb?

Oh, nevermind.

Yes, we love hearing it.

Of writers anywhere, here too, some get by, others grind, to some it comes natural to "turn a phrase with umpteen class."

When we write, dear Rising Stars on this list we're prolific, accurate, crazy, creative and well versed in something this humble reviewer hopes to see on the list of Rising Stars.

Class, entertainment, humor, enjoyment, and respect for the piece a fellow member delivers up cold, no ham on ryes, and is kinda realistic about it.

We try, we strive, we conquer.

With this type of award, please do in fact impart your high recommendations to the best of the best, dear hosts.

Talent recognized is talent seen, Best to turn away from the name, the person, the writer/ author/ artist/ poet. Concentrate on item.

Let it always be about the piece a writing star writes, actually c-rites here on WC. A work is a product, a pen,a write.

A person is not a work.

If not the diservice of lauding to be nice, for heaven's knows why's sake ... simply encouragement for young authors, under 15, yes.

For blah, blah, blah .. and then the occasional, hey this is one of the best reads here out of 1,200 revs sent. I think so anyways. Generally, used to be only editors used first person. Thus Teff thinks or I think. On my blog intro
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there is no Teff.

Grading and rewarding others stories over 8-9- 14? Do you use a teachers dividing evalutation method? Huh? To be honest I don't know what a rising star is. Venus?

Suppose you find one, then relax, love it/ hate it? Or does it go in the you know, wastecan?

Do revs strike at all hours, day and night for readers who rev?

This place is scary. Watch it. You'll be up all night editing.

Hey, over there she has 4 -- 3s, 995,000 FIVES. How 'bouts a distribution of A was better than B but I am High great, not really, barely cutting the mustard of the adjunct to call myself a talented writer when I know you are not theme ........... Is it really located perhaps in the peripheral vision of the proverbial, He said, she said, then flop of a boring story and what truly does happen?

Answers are raindrops running down a window. It's plot, not amounts of less mistakes in over 20 items, 3000 words, six ribbons? How to judge is how?

Will it always be --- I found three mistakes in 25 kb.


Back on track, sorry.
One dreams of $$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$.

Some may breech out ... think: Yeah, but I like the no mistakes, proper English, grammar mode. ZZZZZZZZ

Or: Kid finished the piece, give it 5. Good for you. Generosity.

I cannot speak for all. Honesty is usually the best way to go.

Our words in revs chose compliments to encourage ... but the non offend may go too far. My stuff gets a ton of 3- ish from contests. So what who cares, not me.

Who gives the gold? The Blues? Where's the vote? Folks spoke of letters to why doesn't s/he have a yellow?

I have no idea.

It is hard for me to understand this R S thing. Must return, re-read.

However, the perpetual Teff However.

Please do the ones justice who write with a style that is a pleasure to read.

Thanks, Good Luck readers, give me a buzz ...........

TEFF

PS ---- ITEMS must say this author has ---- an ability everyday of the weak to research, write like a whirlwind afire, laugh, make you laugh or cry ... 10-4
(and other stuff, absolutely.) Nice Forum.

Hmm, written w/ the proverbial Hats off to ALL WC MEMBERS.

To whom it may conern ... WC Community ..... To YOU and your FAMS !!! A VERY HAPPY AND PROSPEROUS, HEALTHY NEW YEAR 2007!!!

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This rev was not meant to digress or get off topic. Instead an overall impression with a reaction to same.

Above Sig: A gift from ROAK.


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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Dec 23, 2006

Hello ... hello ..

Okay, here's the deal. WC author, Nicola presents the most interesting read with:

A FEW OF HISTORY'S INTERESTING TRUTHS.

Read straight through without a single hitch with an appreciation for both information the author delivers and for a no-holds-barred way of explanation makes this piece soundly educational and marvelously entertaining.

Hats off to Nicola for a great job, very well done. TEN STAR WORK of achievement, especially for the history buffs out there.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dec 21, 2006
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Suppose we take ourselves away from the fancy tree, away from the complaints about shopping, away from the constant need for ridiculous factory decorations to be just so with every item now whizzing under the Christmas logo. I note Santa Claus shower curtain rings at the store, snowman rugs, angel towels of red.

Come here, little ones. Here is a fictious babe, in a heart wrenching situation in any home town from LA to Kansas City to the Bronx to Raleigh.

SO ... OF those empty pocketbooks we're so proud of ... maybe we should be glad we have wallets to buy food to feed those we love.

Star, imagining this one is a bit like between the haves and the have nots and very appropriate in the generous mood of the season.

Thanks, Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Dec 19, 2006

From the portfolio of Blkstarline comes an incredible read. A funny short story and an entertaining one. Let's hope the newsletter writers for Comedy & Short Stories stop over to read this author's work a.s.a.p.

Cunningly enough we encounter the step by step inside the house with old Earl and a dry tub while daughter and grandson play second fiddle to grandma's interruptive phone call.

Inside the philosphy of several major characters a backdrop appears before our eyes while each paragraph offers a peddlar's extravaganza of witty details.

A hard one to beat --- the best of the best, available now in EARLS PLAYING BY HIMSELF, MAN.

Make haste, gang. This is the one to read for sheer bite plus wild entertainment.

Congratualtions, B, this is extremely well worked, well written and very well done.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Doublespeak  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Dec 18, 2006

When we find poetry which makes us think while at the same time we admire the creation we should always without any qualm whatsoever declare the prize is won. The proverbial prize for good poems, always there never hidden with Ann Ticipation's fine works.

Posting on Auto Rewards, DOUBLESPEAK brings to the table further explanations of turnabout being unfair play at this humble guess from this revver.

Ann, Christmas is your thing.

Concentrate on the best of times while surely out here your friends, fellow members of WC shall do the same for you, dear.

Thanks for posting poetry over the years which completley touches many hearts.

Sincerely,

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Review of The Cat's Miaow  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

Dec 18, 2006


THE CAT'S MIAOW by Lana is a contest entry for flash fiction of 1,000 words.

The story bodes well in syntax, grammar and punctuation. Almost, waiting to expand perhaps at paragraph junctures.

Perhaps when the contest ends plot-line will see the sense of adding to the story.

Tha abrupt end is exactly what many might dream of in the ever-popular downsize situation. The main character's reaction to Jessica's desk spells the conculsion.

Is it not meow?

Anyways, welcome to WC and a Happy Holiday this month to you and yours, dear author.

Good Job! Word limitations are hard to develop sometimes and this story does an exceptional job offering much information within the mere 1K words.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Reality Fatigue  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dec 18, 2006

Hey there Malibu, your work: REALITY FATIGUE meets a revver who from those first years --- (2003?) of more and more reality television shows, now supposedly filmed in spots dubbed international where people are often starving or emersed in water. I fully agree with your take on the network situation of cheaper is better.

No! Au contraire, nix on Reality TV. Where are the documentaries these days, sparse in the content, of course? For maybe we as audience craved newer shows of the ilk of Frazier. But no, we weren't lucky out here in Mr & Mrs Audience-ville.

Malibu, you're absolutely correct. Instead we got reality TV shoved down our throats and I for one do not watch these.
Better to curl up with a good book.

Thanks for this one which needs to be stated.

Season's Greetings.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of The Mid-Hills #2  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)


Dec 17, 2006

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Pssst?
jeff? jeff? wake up, doll you forgot to tell Miss Teff the place ... jeff? Name the setting, but then it hits, one does recals Mid Hills. Wasn't it in Cally?

Yes, the story is good, the reversal to fantasy and Teff sitting on the edge of the chair with "Someone or something ...

Where oh where is wide low to the ground girth of the vile creature which T imagines as taller than Modesta Gamble. Yet Mike Myers fat as wide as your unidentified year of make of the so called Volvo. Granted glib, but helpful.
I mean you no disresepct; I read a lot, jeff.


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Folks are new, they just joined, other members into a Oct stint 2K4 or hanging, kids. Although post 8 rev badges since conception ... Teff Revs try to compliment any authors stamina to produce the finished readable product. Thass all. No offence ever meant. It say critique up there on PRP.lll llll lllllllll lllllll llllllllllllllllllll

Me (?) Okay, still own a junkyard Volvo, '80 coupe, coffee cream, needs driveshaft, tires & 6 gear tranny.

Maybe Penny tries too hard, me thinks, while liking plot in sight.

Grammar, spelling, punctuation & dialogue firm. Needs basic shortening. Here's a hint: concentrate on less ands. Always helps.

This one, MIDHILLS continues --- your old pal,

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merits A ---- "Members, ladies & gentleman, and all the ships at sea. Mr & Mrs America ... pick up that clicker, read this ONE! Teff pick of the week."

Glory glory, happy Holidays!

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Review of War Is Unfair  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Dec 17, 2K6
&&&&&&&&&&& As 2006 draws to a close shouldn't we wonder where is the progress Ann, and as you indicate any type of fairness at all?

WAR IS UNFAIR from the experienced pen of Ann Ticipation, a poet to trust, read & adore .... one cannot help but truly admire the last lines of this one.

Namely: In conclusion ...

"For peace let us prepare
Let no more children die."

Ann, let's hope 2007 sees turnabout, and reversal over there.

Cordially,

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Review of Global Terror  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

Dec 17, 2006
GLOBAL TERROR, a poem from the pen of peakn serves to remind us that there are not just two sides to every story, peace & war, or right and wrong.

Instead the poet offers a possible tried & true quest for answers via (unsure) negotiations at a bargaining table, prayer and perhaps another look at a intolerable injustices.

Good attempt to air those pesky old views, Peakn, dear.

Cordially,

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