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Review of " The Tattoo "  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


July 12, 2008

Hello there S A Gibbons,

Hope this communication finds you in proper form and good spirits. The latter comes my way due to reading your eloquent poem, THE TATTOO.

Found out a few years ago how easily it is to misspell tattoo. Well, an acquaintance has a parlor and printed his business cards wrong. Be that as it may, please allow the fact that your tatto-ed guy in this poem (is) --- comes off as thoughtfully represented.

HE, if that is the case, since nobody ever really knows with poetry .. DOES A BANGUP JOB communicating.

AT: "With that he turned and walked .." there's true praticality for the physical being of this person. As, seen by this reader. Not really nec to add that since you can see whose opining is in progress by the name on the review, of course.

However, sometimes there are odd reactions when a rev is sent from this desk which generally connect to authors with a reaction on content. Again as we know not all folks review exactly the same as is our individulistic natures, Gibbons.

*Heart* the line: "Like the beauty of fireflies on a June eve." Yes, quite pretty, easily agree.

When you come to think of it authors from Literature immortal will probably always use moonless or moon filled or moonlight .. Besides, what else is there?

Fantastic poem, which makes one think.

Cordially, TEFF owns "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. where public revs are re-printed.
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Review of My Prayer  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

"Inside the poetic lines of MY PRAYER by www.writing.com member, Chris one happens across the quip -- on writing --

Namely: "Help me to write, but not for show." Chris your talents indeed show. Your open address to a Creator, no doubt held dear by many, bespeaks reams of sprituality." July 10, 2008// April Sunday Author IconMail Icon "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

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Review of KIRA  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

July 9, 2008.

Hey, Leigh, your present revver goes by TEFF. In this case, Miss TEFF, novelist.

Okay ... taking a few guesses after reading to the end of Chapter One. Do see Bridget waiting in the wings in Chapter 2.

There's a few eye openers which since you wrote this in April and revised it in May, you as novelist should be aware.

 THE SUGGESTIONS
please read these over slowly as these are not run-of-the-mill from moi ...

 Hypothesis No. 1.

Thinking maybe folks told you they could not uderstand this ... so between April 11 and May you revised it and it got choppy.

RULE NO. 1 --- FROM THE SUGGESTION LIST === From a www.Fiction4sale.highpowersite.com edit.

FOR ALL NOVELIST, OURSELVES, LEIGH ... DON'T COMPROMISE YOUR STYLE FOR A FEW.

RENDER THE BEST, KEEP THE STYLE.

Did you by any chance start out at a vantage point? A setting such a West Africa would merit a strong visual.

Did you wish to not be bogged down in the telling but always keep great sounding, excellent details flowing?

To be truthful, kid, methinks you have struck me dumbfounded when arriving at the sentence starting "J ... C ... re: the kid in the box."

Did you by any chance wish fall privy to choppy fuss in verbs, sentences?

Can you allow sentence such as Robert felt troubled, are too out of place?

The above .. my notes say: sounds like Moll is glum.

So .. there's a chance this is a great story ro read, even emulate at the best parts, of which there are many in Leighoire's 44.kb work.

Add the background of West Africa, two guys in a landrover, mention of history of Rhodesia, Nigeria and its a real live wire, definely a go. Finish is the final suggestion novelist to novelist.

The biggest mistake novelist make their first time out?

Don't return and revise what you liked in the chapter re-edits, your voice is your style.

Leave it and in all instance of insistance from this recipiant of Eleven Review Merit Badges for revs, hon ...

Stay the course, call me, visit the CLUB!

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Thanks for this one:

Definite Must READ! Only one page of handwriten notes at this desk.

Superficial really and easily fixed.

Oh, yeah -- Paragraph breaks === Stat! in the correction column.

Shorter bitems. Cut in half.

Tables are inactive. Lamborghinis purr but tables can't make efforts unless maybe floating up on the Titanic.

Psst: Can't wait to read Chapter TWO.

To all and sundry --- IRONIC CHANGES, IS MY GUESS, so we steer away from the those, toss those efforts ... move on.

Author may post -- Work in Progress.

The comparison to sky color an artist can't duplicate is .. fantastic.

Well,
Later ...

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When taking a few hours to mull over this reading, I guess I lost the notes .

Why?

BECAUSE, KIRA wanted me to enjoy good literature. And overall this is a reaction rev with a few points of advice for all novelists.

Sometimes a mistake is made when a finished chapters gets the special effect tie-ins after written, say in a third/fourth edit.

Avoid that trap, sure change what you like, but always perfect the style.

On style ...? individual, no doubt.
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Review of Fire in Podunk  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


July 9, 2008

Gosh, almost every single time, reading one of J A Buxton's short stories for THE WRITER'S CRAMP Contest something is bound to happen.

Apparently this contest gives good prompts.

In this case, FIRE IN PODUNK is anyone's gamble. Anyone who takes a dangerous situation for granted, that is. For this story surely sets the hair on end.

Known to her pals, when she affectionately signs Judiy, our gal on the scene does a bang up job with this one.

When Michael and Lucy (oh poor Lucy) are stranded with plans underway to snap a few on-the-scene photos ... Woah! Watch OUT!

Adding to the piece, find and view the added feature of raging fires. Oh, scary!

Author to author, Buxton -- You Tube should be so lucky.

Cordially, TEFF

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That crazy blog above, went a tad light this morning so for your cat story pleasure find Mr. McWhite, dear Judity.

PS -- Reading about Judity's cat's adventures also brings smiles to many a face here on www.writing.com.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)



July 8, 2008

Good morning, Maria. Reading PINATUBO, CHAPTER 2 makes me doubly glad you're a member of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

Writeartista is a gifted member of the CLUB, whose writing leaves one breathless with anticipation and curiosity to read more and more.

You couldn't have chosen a better, more colorful cover for your novel. Oh, this wonderful picture sets the pace for scenes pertaining to the Philipines.

 So, shall we? -- In chrono order ...

Of: "Most of the passengers seem asleep."

Don't forget using seem may show you can't make up your mind. And you must do so, Maria. Because you are the novelist, our undisputed leader for now.

Of: details re: passengers on the plane ...

*Heart* "Someone flips crisp pages from a magazine."

Please --- USGS (Huh?) define, please.

{c: blue} Next: Are you sure you want to place this overemphasis on the flight pill in play?

We can exit anytime from a semi-stream-of-conscience type pen which makes us simple patsies to any repeats.

Then note more excitement by way of volcano hopping.

Enjoy the present tense throughout as action unfolds during the conversation.

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*Heart* The answer to "You're a hero."
(When ... William replies) "It's my job."

Marie, your punctuation is to die for.

Dialogue tells Pinatulo's history. Excellent, good place in the novel ... to include same.

All on the way to Manila.

The character, Mary, rendered in first person narration, is coming of as intellectual, ladylike demure present.

GREAT CHAPTER.

Cordially, April Sunday Author IconMail Icon

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Review of Moms Wooden Spoon  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Sunday, July 6, 2008

Hello PR ---

Anyone recall when folks baked on a regular basis, as opposed to buying pre-packaged? The latter kinda expensive these days.

In: MOM'S WOODEN SPOON ...

New member, Babul726 renders the "upside" of beaten batter for yummy deserts.

OH! OH! Watch out for the swoosh and the "downside" of the age-old paddle connection.

Well done, fun read.

*Heart* this line, Babul

"Spatula comes from the Latin word for a flat piece of wood."

Oh, now feeling obligated to get out a scrubby and re-vamp the egg turner.

But, sure ... thanks a lot for this one on child rearing per se.

Cordially,
TEFF
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


JUNE 29, 2008

 OVERALL REACTION:

WOW!!! THANK YOU, Paratwa. The content of this one is one of the funniest things (I) read on WWW.WRITING.COM ALL YEAR. All year!!

When author, Paratwa mixes humor with reasons to feel akward pain for the fate of others the result is found in almost every funny paragraph of: SANITY -- CHAPTER 1 --- INTO THE CAR.

Great takes on normal daily fair.

Wonderful ribs for all of those things we hold in the normal column, if there be such a sanitized spot.

So, another Sunday MUST READ found today.

Hon, this is a true MUST READ. Looking forward to Chapter Two, already.

Now, truth be told this is indeed twenty-star work, surpassing the ten star usually given to works of excellence in reviews of this caliber, P.

A few typos. Easily fixed.

living live == living life

AT: Oscar ... point ... not --- now she is. Go with --- How she is ---

AT: jetliner --- use --- taking off

*Heart* "This meeting was just the meeting to plan the meeting that had to be planned for the planning committee."

Wonderful nuance of dissing the mundane wastes of time, time, time.

At: two thousand people ... no article of "a" before two thousand.

AT: adequate roads -- use too poor. Note typo of to.

Great work with the rarely used ///

HATS OFF FOR THIS STORY.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Hello there, S L Britton, nice to meet you.

Giving your prologue for BLOOD FEUD a five star is the easiset thing today since I like vampire genre.

Ever since Stoker graced the scene, we entered a phase of fiction like no other. Today, if you do an online search for Vampire Fiction you will no doubt see friendly, provocative vampires who often bring the genre to the modern world in Vegas, Hollywood etc.

Here, Britton sets the scene with an actual date of 1880.

A vampire slayer named Van Heising is about to tackle a task in mind.

Of the first line: "A small Transylvanian Village" you can toss small, as villages are geographically hamlets. Already known as tiny.

AT: "making his body make use of ...

Perhaps simply go with "making his body use ..." dropping any second make as a verb which comes off as a mouthful of making.

Make sense? But your story does make my day.
Causing me to think upon the Vampire Greensleeves from my Von Broom Vampire Trilogy.

*Heart* Valenko Keep --- which also adds to the flavor of over nearly 130 years past.

This one is well worth the look see, easily deciphered but needs a few adjustments on paragraph breaks.

Best, as you enjoy writing this one, Britton.

Cordially,
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

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June 1, 2008

Generally if replies do come for these revs, right off the bat the date written appears for my records.

Okay Edgework, in order to disagree in fluent Teffom style, might take a few more paragraphs.

In: WRITING HURTS -- Review Forum ...

one finds some rather excessive standards of excellence present and accounted for.

Although Joyce and King are referred to, nary a quote from either in sight.

Next: Writing doesn't hurt all.

Au Contraire!

For the good writer crafting a good story ... it is the world of fun at the fingertips of many a keyboard coast to coast. Yet from Albany to Philly, to Detroit to Denver we do our thing ... unawre that yours is out there ready to improve it for us. How generous.

Lest we not forget that a rev is penned after or about another's pre-created original.

Best to you this first day of June.

Cordially, TEFF owns "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

 BTW, dear forum host -- what do you like to write or read?

Perhaps a few, educational credentials might be helpful for those considering submisssions to your desk. Before their work goes under the broad microscope you outline in the intro.

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

June's arrived!

Hello: Ben. Your story, a flash fiction in first person narration, sums up a visit to an attic.

One tiny, wee suggestion. When we write our stories, it not always customary to begin in such a basic chronoligcal manner by starting almost 90 % of your plot sentences with I.

However, kinda neat the tie-in for back to youth when fun and games rang relevant.

Cordially, TEFF

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Review of The Photograph  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

May 31, 2008

 Hey there, Susie,

Just finished reading your short-short, THE PHOTOGRAPH and must say it is well done.

Like the mysterious old man in the lake district taking that prized snapshot. Then the details of the memory while the family is listed sharing their yearly outings of fishing together.

One tiny point: In the intro it is "An old man."

Best. Do write on!

Cordially,

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Review of The Quills  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

April 18, 2008

Sitting around reading seed packets, Andrew, er ... Mr. Bowman and came across your spectacular generosity (for time served especially) and with an open heart read all, every single word ... then sit back throw the packs into their straw basket, applaud and say ... thank goodness for this wc recognition, all onsite, all in front of the world wide web we so adore, my friend.

Right now, please accept this TEFFOM HAT'S OFF sig to commend this item, Mr. Bowman.

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takes contests to a whole new height.

The gift pool is spectacular, the deadline's out there, plenty of time to think things thru for fellow authors and poets.

Plus, Mr. Andrew Bowman's item is put together as well as a freshly plowed field, ready to be planted. Andrew, we're kind into the farmer thing again this time of the year. Alas, selling flowers takes a toll on the physical side, arthritis, aches for the likes of Miss TEFF, but nonetheless, the fingers still get a work out on the keyboard now & then.

 Thanks for using the bold, Andrew. Once heard onsite that this meant shouting. Huh? Actually, it is so much easier to read, looks swell to all who've adopted same.

Notice you don't overdue in your presentation in the least. None of the excessive larger is better font messaround. Thanks for that. Once tried to read an item and ended up scrolling all the way to China and I was standing on top of the Empire State Building trying to read it. Regular antiquated {size:2 font is fine by me.

But .. this .. oh this is great!! GGGRRRRRR --ATE!!

Now, when I get into my rev sent area, probably by Nov of this crazy year, there's one short story which I shall recommend for the winning short story of 2008.

The author had me on the edge due to suspense and input for such a marvelous write. Later she said everyone liked it from her rev's received. So this is what you seek, yes?

An important question pertaing to THE QUILL AWARDS, dear.

Do the nominees have to be copy-righted 2008?

Well, to all of us out here, who do like higher word counts for short stories of worth, and for any writers who are toning up. Keep your eyes open for the best of the best.

Wondeful -- Overall -- Twenty STAR material, right here.

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BIG THANKS GOING OUT TO ANDREW BOWMAN.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
April 17, 2008

Hi Cursed Freedom,

Found your poem on Auto Rewards and note the recent post. It's decent of you to post there as many revvers depend on gp for their membership fees.

My, this is a startling presentation of spirit life after the demise, probabably a murder, huh? Got that deduction at the fingernails.

Nothing of the perp who did the crime.

And like a prison a tiny spot in the window, my oh my ..

Stanzas explain the tale.

Reminds me of when one questions a murder mystery or a history piece when the author is dead and can't be talking ... always found that odd, but in LIT do-able nontheless.

TEFF

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)



"With WHO NEEDS THE SYDNEY OLYMPICS?, an author who gets around, J A Buxton offers not an editorial as the title may suggest. Instead, click here to see what wily antics cats outdoors can convort to in you own back yard. Wonderful take as Jenna and Chardonnay compete for a tree limb while the playful homorist Buxton watches on. Great stuff, Judity!" April 13, 2008 //
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Review of The Bean Song  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

April 12, 2008

Hey, there Caveman, how's it going.?

Your poem THE BEAN SONG is featured in a contest onsite at www.writing.com. As you probably are aware of this fact, it seems appropriate to review the song like poem.

Also, the wily perpetrator of this contest is telling folks you live in a cave. Well, probably one of those kidders, like moi.
Is this special poem sung to the beat of
MY GRANDMOTHER GOT RUN OVER BY A REINDEER? Obviously, here in the item per se, you fail to mention a tempo.

SO readers may sit at your table, where with a manly or hardy appetite you actually construct an entire poem centering on the importance of those special slow cooked, over an open fire. In broad daylight, readers may partake of the essentials surrounding the delightful gourmet experience of conquering a bowl of beans.

Hurrah for this poetry venue. The subject is presented well, not overly fried to smithereens.

Although twice fried rice and beans is another of my yummy favorites. to be sure. Just in case you're in the market for yet another beanery topic, my friend.
A special feature mentioned by Caveman is "a roll." While cornbread is another choice for eaters of this American Delicacy. In the North we encounter Boston Beans.

In the South there is not another state to beat for West by God Virginia has taken the art of bean pot cookery to an entire new level by mixing lentils, pintos, limas and great northern. Top the bowl with diced onion, for they've, the beans afloat in grease, at least at the casual picnics of my personal choice ... have been simmered just right along with the basics of pork bones, beef bones, and chicken bones. The latter disappearing after cooking for about a day or two. Depending on size of pot, of course.

All, as the author points out, lavishly flavored by bacon fat. Oh the very aroma of such a treat brings folks from miles around ... no doubt.

PS --- Pass me a fork and please move over. Mmmm mmm mmm.

Cordially,
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

April 9, 2008

Good morning Judity,

Read your story THE TRAIN WHISTLE BLUES last night, got up at the crak of dawn hoping this month goes slow as I love April. Yet, now everytime a train rushes through I am spoliled because of THE TRAIN WHISTLE BLUES.

Do like the take on Miss Lily and the strange olfactory senses she first brings to the crowded compartment.

Perhaps the fault of these flash fictions is generally a demise like no other when word count runs out, we run out of tracks to keep the locomotion intact.

Do like the birds being the only ones for miles around who are left with The ... Train .... Whistle Blues.

And of course you can always sell the title.
Which clearly fits r & b.

Cordially, TEFF
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

"b} "Leonardo S Woodrow writes of foes, forces which combat forming into eras timewise. When a loving couple, Kargers and Leann are found lifeless on a New York bench .. someone may know why. Much accomplished via written merit in this brief essay." {uer:teffom} April 1, 2008// "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

"Writing.com's own best of the best. Ms Ann Ticipation takes another leap into well put together poetic conjecture this month on March 21. The result is BRUISED, well worth the look see from all potential or active poets. Here in lies the tale of various takes on the meanings behind the word." Mar 30, 2008
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

March 29, 2008

Oh, hi there, Anne? How was Easter?
Falling upon your Mar 21 copyright once is not enough. Your tribute to blues and mountain refrain is indeed surperb. I simply love INSIDE MY HEAD ..happens to me after LITTLE FEAT, TOO!

INSIDE MY HEAD shows you 2008ish style changes, a bit. Maybe surpassing some of the former Ann Ticipation poet's port of call. Autstralia is also taking over PubRevPg today.

Anne, remember when you used to compliment my revs, say how wonderful these are? Well, yes, I recall this for I call you the Poet Laureate of WC, you blush, we move one.

Nice to see folks out and about on a sunny Saturday -- don't you think so Anne?

Well the cat is out of the bag now, Mrs. This jumps from blog to item, first time I let one out of the coop over at "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

Ta Ta!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Jordon's got that down pat.

Not only will wwww.writing.com member, Kay Jordon let her "readers" know she states Dick Cheney belongs on a certain list of good looking fellows; she takes umbrage when no one comments back atcha.

Next Jordon lauds the poor overweight, Tony Soprano as being rather cool while spelling the actor's name correctly. My take here is because he's doing Jersey, that's why. So Teff agrees.

PEARLS OF WISDOM AND FOOLISH MUTTERINGS, created Jan 7, updated today is a true gem.

*Heart* "go postal" === excellent ref for loosing it or being over fussy

*Heart* "recycling" as pertaining to houses as neighbors move on

Agree, the baby is too young for a learner's permit, these things take time.

Wow, you are a true sweetheart and a princess of wit, Kay.

Hope you visit my blog someday ---

Cordially, TEFF

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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

Ceolsidhe Author IconMail Icon pens, posts the poem: MIND BUZZING on www.writing.com only in the last hour. My goodness, and it was me who wanted something soft, a tad romantic -- with "questions, choices and decisions to make." Thanks, C, a nice shot in the awareness department, to be sure."Mar 13/ Rev from TEFF @ "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Mar 13, 2008

Good morning: robert_rumery Author IconMail Icon

Imagine if you will an extensive six day search on the Internet for the very same year as your poem.

Oh, what a coincidence!

Welcome to www.writing.com, hope you enjoy the fun of navigating this site.

Your poem: CLASS OF 2003 fills the *Heart* with longing for all ex- high school senors, no matter the age. Grads that we are, it may be easy as pie to identify with smoking in the bathroom, sharing laughs while cradling the year book displaying fond memories.

So for more on 2003, maybe when you get a chance, please visit:

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Be well, write on!

Cordially,

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Mar 11, 2008

The latest poem: WHAT IS THE MEANING OF THY LOVE comes our way, here on www.writing.com from the pen of new member, Luffy Chan. Very much enjoy the sentimentality and romance in this one. The author captures the poetic vocab style of a by-gone era.

Especially like: "It be the question on the lips of the world ...

A fine line, on among many, to be sure.

Welcome to this writer/ reader site, Luffy.

Good luck in all future writing endeavors from my desk to yours.

Cordially,

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Mar 2, 2008

Hi, Ann,

Today, found your FEB 16 c-rt --
TURN BLACK NIGHT TO DAY with the added explanation of a blog entry, simultaneous to the thoroughness of this eye-opening poem. Checking this out later, my friend.

Yes, we're always in a generation stuck with war. From WWI, WWII, Korea, and Vietnam the only thing that grows sometimes is a death toll. But, sure the arms makers stay in business.

We've also much to address on city streets. Sorry, I digress.

Of your line:

"Are protesting voices silenced by gags?"

Indeed, yes, since Mar 2003!!!
Of course, there's the worst answer we don't want to hear. And for this one can blame a media which deserted the citizens.

For protest rallies were not reported, stay ignored and not even local papers print the actions of what in the US is a constitutional right.

Eh well ... But this, your poem is filled with hope.

Good Spring ahead, Ann to you and yours.

Cordially, TEFF

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TURN BLACK TO NIGHT is a truthful look at war and its effects.

From TEFF. Sadly ... In conclusion speaking out was (was) considered unpopular and mostly silenced an entire venue of what could have been the opposite. Namely: an honorable amount of attention could have been spent on the topic. Sadly .. it was not. Thus our shame.
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Mar 2, 2008

Hey, congrats on this fine flash fiction, Paul and welcome to www.writing.com.

ACCOUNT OF A PERFECTLY FLAWED BEING already soars heavenward due to this catchy title.

Here, Paul Fetherly offers the best line, a true keeper:

" ... in every soul there is infinite potential."

AT: "no suggestion" This seems a bit posh for fog -- maybe go with no hint.

Hey enjoy the site, my friend.

Cordially,

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