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Review of Home and Garden  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

"At issue in HOME AND GARDEN, a short story from the portfolio of http://www.writing.com author, D Field comes fears for an illness, attached to a professor. Accompanied by his wife, Tess waiting, then bording a "medical bus" the man reflects on his lifetime of reading "the papers" and a carefree enjoyment of same. Well, done and seriously spiced with fabulous vocab." "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. April Sunday Author IconMail Icon Oct 19, 2008
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

"Toward the ending chapters of AN AUTUMN EULOGY, WC author, Ann Ticipation, a poet of great rhyme and talent, places the gift of love between two people. Of the line: "Poignant memories my mind does recall" sets the pace, readies readers of this poem for between the lines take on romance so fine. While the beauty of autumn reigns down from colorful trees, here lies poetic scene setting for why we may all adore this time of the year." "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. April Sunday Author IconMail Icon Oct 10, 2008
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

Oct 6, 2008
Hi NickiD89,

Reading over your two prompts from the list for the two separate stories you seek in the contest WHO ARE THEY AND WHAT'S THEIR STORY kinda threw this reviewer/ author at first.

On second read, you actually instruct writers to detail charater foibiles, traits, add the conflict of a discovery, and a resolution to stop thinking about the basic problem [found out proabably in at least a paragraph or two on the sneak in a clandestine manner] --- all in under 2000 words. Strongly suggest giving generously to authors by allowing them more space wordwise to work with for the requierements stated. Even 4,000 words is only four single-line, typed pages, easily read in a few minutes, right, Nicki?

Surely, as host, contest judge you're setting aside ooodles of your own time.

Next the rule prompts then ask the writers of the short stories to do the same thing, but change Bobby to Bobbi. A guy then a gal -- do all of the above in merely 1000 words or less. Yikes! Often flash fiction comes with flat stories, then raters even say so. But be that as it may ... longer stories could better fill the bill. Since, setting is important, too.

Prizes are adequate for those who like this kind of thing. When counting words interferes with a story of worth, this author bows out.

However, good luck to all takers, may your submissions fair thee well. While Nicki enjoys reading and reviewing with a honorable stated emphasis on grammar and punctuation surrounding all submissions to be judged.

Lastly ... depending on the discovery per se, we are not divided at once by gender by any means. Like, I might react the same way to finding out through research by simply reading Wikepedia, just say for the sake of argument, that S. Palin is under investigation in Alaska. The same reaction I have to this newsy tidbit, might be the same as a male voter.

Well, Nicki, if your intention is to separate the reactions of adults or any mature authors by gender, might we not be headed back in time to George Sands who had to take a man's name in order to be published? Oh, well just a sideline point, a POV if you will.

Signed -- Surprised
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
October 1, 2008
Hi, Dan

Without a doubt ANOTHER BUTTERFLY EFFECT, a poem from BOTTLE IN THE RIVER, your poetry collection of 71 poems is another well thought out addition.

Of tress and stound, I for one must look these poetic words up. Freeing a creature is fun and oft times a rewarding event. Here you show that for the first person narrator. Yet also include the chagrin of the spider. Nice touch. Rather a basic event rendered heartwarmming in the telling.

However, can't see a connection to Spiritual Genre.

Cordially: TEFF

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Rated: E | (4.5)

"Apparently, Mr. Dan Sturn is taking a firm hold of Auto Rewards this week on http://www.writing.com by posting his three poetry folders there. Inside the well crafted, excellent rhyming poetry creation: PARALLAX we read of a gang traveling a railroad tracks, imbibing cognac, and the demise of a stranger. Well done!" April Sunday Author IconMail Icon "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)

"Dan Stern offers JOURNATION a poem about a writer meeting and greeting morning while recording in a journal. The coined title word, Journation is far from the only astonishing thing contained in this poem. The lines and word twists here are sufficiently poetic and rhyme time comes with a vivid cadence of sound and sight approaching insight." {uesr:teffom}
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Review of We Knew  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

"Passionate writing enfolds in WE KNEW by Dogwood 212. In the piece there are slashed backs, tattered glothing, an unknown suspect along a quiet trail of escape. The piece offers deep imaginative shadows which the author does not outright explain. Perhaps thoughts of this writer are too painful to embrace, whether from history or from fiction itself, yet these questions may linger in the minds of readers." Sept 19, 2008,
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Review of Mothers and Sons  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)



"MOTHERS AND SONS by Writing.com author, Kay Jordon offers a ride to the hospital for two little boys as two accidents happened. Wait a minute in the same month! The sons both grow up in this essay and go on to collge. From the family, biographical genre, look here for a family epic all it's own. Good wite, good read." Sept. 19, 2008, "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Sept 17, 2008



Hi Critic,

Must have missed the Jessibelle Challenge but that's okay. I found this poem below listed my blog:
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read it, liked it and now wanted to send out a public word.

I ACCEPTED JESSIBELLE'S DARE is all about the seated US President who hails from Yale, who supports the troops and whom for the last eight years has been taken to task in this poem.

Along the lines of a presidential term sum for the earlier years from this 2005 copyright we discover a verse by verse rhyme measuring into a tell-all. The poem is also a be-all and centers on an unhopeful who according to this author "wears expensive suits." There is so much here that this is awfully good and certainly worth the look see for all readers and all voters, of course.

Critic you daringly pulled this together and did a Great JOB!

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Sept. 6, 2008

Hello Anne,

Well here I am trolling about on Auto Rewards and your name pops out at me once more.

Of: MY HEAVEN AND EARTH can't help wipe a tear away due to being truly impressed once more by your works of poetry.

*Heart* "The past, the present and the still to come ..."

Wow, that is different but great nonetheless due to originality.

Ann also writes: "Thankful for the gift of writing thoughts in rhyme."

Aren't we all sometimes? Plus thankful to read this August copyright from your port, my friend.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

"Poetess, Ann Ticipation brings alive many feelings in her latest poem: MEMORY IS A FICKLE FRIEND." Within one may discover "a lava flow of words" and a prose poetry work which concludes in a poetic phrase. All of the above hard to outdue. While much is so eloquently woven together." "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. April Sunday Author IconMail Icon Sept. 6, 2008

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Sept 4, 2008

 Good morning, Mr. Powell,

Shock sets in with your tell-all from Experience Genre. Namely: SOLITARY, TIME AND A PINK THUMBNAIL.

Imagine if you will, a very genreours, super talented author, who places much empahasis over the years by posting stories on Auto-rewards Page, and now this current, personal information.

Actually, the scene of "solitary confinement" is hard to fathom.

As well, reading "two books" per day is also high on the to do-list for many authors, one supposes. Very impressive.

But what is the absolute best thing about this article from the perspective of this humble reviwer (moi)?

Simply this --- an article on how-to-write incentives from a thoroughly gifted author.

Thanks, Jerry. With the best of all close of summer and a bright start on autumn for you and yours.

Cordially, TEFF
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PS: As for your Christmas story mentioned in this article. Please consider submission in:

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Gotta run, critiques gone down re: advertising too much these days. But everyone does it anyway AND promo is everywhere onsite. Uh, oh my eggs are burning ... really gotta run.

So -- WRITE ON!

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Sept. 2, 2008

C E Thieroff, if you haven't outdone yourself yet, you have now. Your short story WE ONLY ACCEPT HEADS is ribald great comedy with the Seventies thrown in as a mere sidelight. This is a great story.

 What stands out about your story (besides the entire content) is the ability to capture the opposite in details throughout. Instead of just the mundane green is the grass theory of short story approach this author might say grass is blue and get away with it.

This is alas also comedy genre. My suggestion is you bill WE ONLY ACCEPT HEADS as such.

Next: the opposite spin here is very much new wave appeal and exactly what publishers seek these days.

LOVE: Thieroff's hook paragraph where the audience is shown "Dysfunction was as normal in her life as it was in mine."

Yet, the first person narrator: "the bum from Mc Kee Rocks --- a mill town outside Pittsburgh" elopes anyway with his gal ... Max.

In NC they bribe two strangers to bear witness to their wedding. Then another heartwarming scene follows.

Now, due to genre choice overhead, of Animal, there was a certain hypothesis for this author/ reviwer.

But to come away with Allegheny Co. specifics, after hospital visits, Volkswagons and the lot ...

One can not help but say this is clearly a http:www.writing.com FIVE STAR rating ...

VIA ... absolutley TWENTY STAR delivery.

Thank you, C. E. Thieroff.

Cordiallly, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Sept. 2, 2008

Being very impressed by TIME IS SHORT, a short story by Leighoire, simply can't resist another in the posted "Psychic Series by this author.

In: DO YOU WANT TO KNOW? Am going to step aside with an author-to-author suggestion to add Really to the title. Then, Leighoire might consider: DO YOU REALLY WANT TO KNOW?

This is what occurs when a family of ladies meets for their consultation. Rebecca & Ann are absolutley believable character names in this one.

 Love this phrase which sets the pace and keeps to the title at the same time.

Namely: "Skeptics you may be ..."

Good vocab choices here.

*Heart* 'iota'
While 'hocus pocus' fits to a tee.

Presenting this author Teff's Hat's Off for a great story, told without a hitch and once more --- rendering the twist-in-the tale.

Leighoire, you are going strong with this psychic who is better than a shrink.

While reading, am surprised with ... oh my goodness ---

Suicide? Finacial problems?

The above woven into the plot.
Gracious me! Fantastic, nonetheless.

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Cordially, TEFF

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Review of Time Is Short  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Sept. 2, 2008

WOW! Leighoire, this is the best story, which I've ever reviewed from your portfolio on http://www.writing.com.

 When a "psychic returns" as you mention in the intro for: TIME IS SHORT, a short story, one can only appreciate the following author tie-in.

Dialog for the card-reader takes on fortune teller lingo. And it's great!

The character name choice for "Christine" fits perfectly as she also shines within the dialog sequence ... a true babe-in-the-woods, awaiting her future to be mapped out upon the surface of the table.

BEST of all is the twist-in-the-tale at the end of this fine read.

Congratulations on a short story product which is certainly very well done.

Cordially,
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PS: Here's a fortune teller poem from last autumn, you might enjoy, my friend.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

August 9, 2008

Good day to you, WWharton,

At:
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there's a premise afoot to aide all authors. Of your opening paragraph for FINGERS OF BETRAYAL you manipulate the character from his slumbers.

At one point in what is known as the hook par for pieces, short stories or novels inclusive and probably essays or flash fiction, we read the following:

 "He pried open his left eye, and grey wooden walls peered back at him."

Given the fact the char has bruises ... but still in the dark as to what instrument measures in as honestly useful for prying open the eyes of a man. Now, running to the makeup section next time at the mall and holding an eyelash curler, which is not your intention at all.

Now ... OF: walls peering back ... huh?

Well a few more par until the gist gets off and plowing along into the story, of course. Perhaps, a bug-a-boo from this author re: waking up as the start of a story. We know rooms have walls, so also something to consider for less wall-eye-char waking repeats.

Oh, and good luck with the story, sounds like action afoot, simply move it up to the hook area. Lest it be lost. There, at the top, perhaps display your best visual, where it begins for the fiction and the best of it, you can lay upon the audience.

Neither, sleep nor waking in this section is suggested. All folks eat, sleep, bathe, in fiction .. murder, escape, find true love etc. Overall for wc/onsite fiction hope to see some pizzazz at the start. Thanks.

Touches for the sec par include: a close up of a rat with quivering whiskers and beady, darting eyes. From the viewpoint of the char discover .. so he does have accurate sight.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

July 31, 2008

Hey there Steven Michael Jester:

What a wonderful happy moment finding your excellent, no holds barred, generous prize pool short story contest, my friend.

Which makes one also thrilled that you're a member of ADC "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

Searching for contests this last week of July, and this morning posting all overall contest- reviews, my previous reviews as a member of "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

on my blog "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. can honestly say this contest under current review status is GR GRRR GREAT!!

The contest forum contained in the portfolio of Steven Michael Jester is a grand slice of reality. Not that reality is seldom found onsite.

Here, primarily discover some differences in the usual run-of-the mill contest formats.

Wonderful, daring and open to all genre.
Like the natural flow of the written intro, Steven provides.

My theme this month and the month before and the year before is to suggest short story contests take the provebial gamble and not stifle ficiton authors with frustrating low word counts.

We may ask .. what is this contest all about. For
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appears to be a place that cares not for superficial low word counts,
offers a monthly submission for both new and old stories,

includes stories which already won less than first place elsewhere within submission guidelines,

and sends reviews.

Another good feature includes time to craft good stories.

Donations are on the way, from my desk Jester. So check your e-mail. While hoping you get a lot more of these coming your way.

Best of all this forum really sounds like a ton of fun.

 Dear Audience: Don't delay, just a click away. September's round is now open.

September!

Goodness, Steven, please pop me in the elbow or something. I'm having trouble letting go of July. As you can probably notice from the July nl also in your mailbox this morning.

Enough said for now. Big thanks for this one.

Cordially, TEFF "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

The CLUB intro is scheduled for a new look, Steven. AD-CLUB clocks in with 377 views, while new members are most welcome everyday, 24-7.
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Rated: E | (4.0)

"Wondering if the title: MY ONE-SIDED CONVERSATION applies to when (I) plot a short story. Decide, the title fits this poem. Enjoy the vocab throughout. Like the sudden switches in tempo re: "Baptismal waters" and "brine." Well, without a doubt this poet has something to communicate and the potential talent to do so with ease." "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)

"C J Groshek, new to www.writing.com, posts THE SWAMPLANDS on Auto Rewards. The poem bespeaks of gossip as compared to a river. Like the vocab choice of versimilitude. Whew, quite an undertaking to prounconce within this specific line, however. Good start. Welcome to the site, C J." April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
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Review of Death of a hero  Open in new Window.
Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

"When a dying old fellow relives his youth abed in hospital, after the final meal of "green jello" readers might enjoy a list of dreamy teens who enter said environment. Found on Auto Rewards Page, here's a winning short story for www.writing.com's ever-ongoing, traditionally popular, Amazon prize sponsored contests. Be sure to check
out this April copyright from the portfolio of wc member, Hyperiongate."
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

"When author, J A Buxton offers BLUE SATYR, THEN AND NOW, be ready for a smooth ride for the story is about a car which incidentally gets "36 miles" per gal. Along the way you might want to check out Judity's book, HOME OF THE RED FOX, generally posted in the author-in-print section. And shazamm when you pull this item up, note also the blue sheen of the car, whose "engine swells" with pride. Fun read. Good starting point for beginning writers who are looking for ways to close off some inovative methods to zero in on details. How to render the latter while including the inimate descriptions of a satisfied motorists are all here for our reading pleasure." "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. // July 28, 2008// April Sunday Author IconMail Icon

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Oh, and Judity, please pass the word, we're collecting blogs and forums down at the Club.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

"When someone's cousin, a girl, realizes the night before went way beyond the ultra-embarrassing moment, a self examination of the events takes place in a strange place. But then, the cousin to the rescue part of the story leaves many questions for readers of CONTEMPT OF A GREAT MAN, by KK1739." April Sunday Author IconMail Icon "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.

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Rated: E | (5.0)


"When singer Bobby Darin did Atlantic City's Steel Pier and American Bandstand, Elvis fans paid attention back in the day. When radio host, Walter Winchell commented: "Goood evening, ladies and gentlemen and all the ships at sea" he tried to stop a war. When, www.writing.com member, Gisele joined this website in June of 2008, we got lucky. When reading THE FILE ON BOBBY DARIN readers may encounter the daring, imaginative talent of a novelist with a work in the process of being posted. When, the character, "Lips the trumpet player" teams in the same chapter with "American Firsters" from a bygone era ... whose to say where this novel made lead. This work is highly recommended for all serious writers. Well done, Gisele and very entertaining. The latter a huge part of those special creations as well the between the lines touches of history your novel provides. Thank you." April Sunday Author IconMail Icon "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. 7/15/2008

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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

"With AN ACQAUINTED STRANGER, author/ poet Mal admits the poem "is up to the reader to interpret." Fine line, attractive presentation. Reminds this reviewer slightly of O'Henry's painted ivy leaf."
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Review by April Sunday Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


July 14, 2008

Title: URSA MAJOR
Author: Jinks

Welcome to wc, Jinks.

Your well crafted flash fiction is a pleasure to read.

Sum: Two kind-hearted people meet & greet as they deliver Christmas presents to the less fortunate.

Sorry, just thinking ahead. If gaoline costs dad & mom $4.00 per gal now .. what will happen to this favorite holiday? Sorry, I digress.

Well, the common spark for this one is when Miles hugs Hazel. The ending itself is near perfection.

Below is an item open all year, Jinks. Usually everyone walks away with a little something.

Cordially, Teffy

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