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Review Style

My reviews typically cover: initial responses, technicalities and mechanics, favorite parts, areas of improvement, and overall impression.

I'm good at...

Honesty, and finding what works versus what doesn't work. I will never give you a rating I don't think your work deserves. I am also particularly good at spotting grammatical errors and typos.

Favorite Genres

Philosophy, Steampunk, Horror, Dark, Emotional, Science Fiction, Technology, and Political Science. I'm sure there are more that I'm missing.

Least Favorite Genres

Romance, Western, Religious, and anything froufrou.

I will not review...

Chapters and Novels, unless arrangements are made prior.

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#3097914

Review of Dill Pickles and Buttermilk

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Dill Pickles and Buttermilk"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: This title was amusing, and had me chuckling before I even read the poem.

Style/Imagery: The combinations you present in this are quite disgusting! Banana and pickle, Sauerkraut and pickles... ewwwww! I don't much like pickles, though. ;)

Structure and Form: Your rhyming and rhythm here are just great. It was cute and to the point.

Overall: Don't change a thing! Despite me disliking pickles, I still really loved this poem.

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#3097909

Review of What's The Matter With Henry?

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "What's The Matter With Henry?"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: This title instantly got me sucked in. What is the matter with Henry?!

Style/Imagery: I love this. How he dances around, how you described the scene.

Word Choice: You couldn't have done better.

Structure and Form: This is just spot on. I cannot find any room for any improvements!

Overall: Another perfect poem, from my now favorite children's poet.

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#3097904

Review of Momma Left Me All Alone

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Momma Left Me All Alone"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: Well, I wasn't expecting that!

Style/Imagery: I love the imagery and style you have here. It kept me in suspense all the way to the end. Hilarious ending, by the way.

Structure and Form: I thought the flow and structure of this was great. I cannot offer and room for improvement. Even the syllabic count was superb.

Overall: Great poem, I loved every bit of it! You have a real knack for children's poetry.

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#3097898

Review of What To Do With A Basketball That's Flat

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "What To Do With A Basketball That's Flat"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: This title instantly drew me in, as I wondered what the poem could possibly be about. I never knew of much uses before this.

Style/Imagery: The imagery in this is absolutely wonderful; perfect for a children's poem.

Word Choice: Haha, I couldn't begin to pick one thing from this. It's all so awesome.

Structure and Form: I love the structure, how you repeated "that was terribly flat" in the second line of each, until the last stanza. Excellent.

Overall: Don't change a thing. I liked this so much, I had to read it out loud to my hubby. We both shared in laughing, this was so adorable.

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#3097848

Review of ~ Distortion

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "~ Distortion"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I like the name of the title, and after reading the poem, have nothing better to suggest.

Style/Imagery: I love the imagery in this, how you describe death as a shield from the light, how it betrayed you, and made you inhuman.

Word Choice: A lot of words stuck out to me: empathy shatters, demented kindness, and puking flesh.

Structure and Form: I like the flow, and everything else. But in the last line, when you said intangled, did you mean entangled?

Overall: Overall I really enjoyed this dark and twisted read. Thanks for sharing it with us!

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#3097844

Review of My Copper Lantern

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "My Copper Lantern"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: This title definitely got me curious to see what your poem would be about.

Style/Imagery: Love the style. I almost feel like I can see the copper lantern amongst the darkness.

Word Choice: I loved your wording. I have just one question though. In line 2 of the first stanza, you have scaring. Did you mean scarring?

Structure and Form: I really love how you've started each line with a new letter of COPPER LANTERN. That's just awesome.

Overall: Great poem, I really liked this. You did a really good job!

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#3097830

Review of Beside Quiet Waters

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Beside Quiet Waters"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I really like this title!

Style/Imagery: The imagery and style within this poem is wonderful. I feel like I'm laying in the pasture, watching the clouds move 'on high', letting my soul free.

Word Choice: Your word choices once again were just immaculate. I couldn't do a better job even if I tried. Some words are just meant to flow together, and you've captured it in this poem.

Structure and Form: I like how you've taken the time to explain this form to us. For someone who actually pays attention to this I heartily thank you.

Overall: For the second time, I give you a 5 star rating. How incredibly rare this is for me to find someone who not only dazzles me once, but twice. Great job!

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#3097829

Review of Three Billy Goats Yum!

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Three Billy Goats Yum!"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: This title makes me chuckle, even before reading the poem.

Style/Imagery: I really like how you've presented this story. I feel like you're reading it out loud to me!

Word Choice: I really like the word choices in here. What especially struck me: eyes ablaze, fearsome trolls, shadows lengthen, tasty treats and traipse.

Structure and Form: I think you do an absolutely spot on job with this form. Your flow is great.

Overall: I have nothing to offer in the way of criticism. Don't change a thing! Thanks for sharing.

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#3097231

Review of Season of Hauntings

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Season of Hauntings"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I love this title. Perfect.

Style/Imagery: I love the imagery in this. From the grave-images to zombies rising and vampires out to suck your blood.

Word Choice: Great word choice. I couldn't have picked 'em better myself.

Structure and Form: Great free-verse, I like how it flowed. My only question would be, what's with the exclamation point in the center of the 5th line up from the end? I'd say kill that, or don't put the comma in front of it.

Overall: I enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing it with us. I imagine that a lot of children would probably find this poem a bit creepy and fun to read.

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#3097205

Review of The pain inside

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The pain inside"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I like the title, but it needs proper capitalization. The Pain Inside

Style/Imagery: I can really feel for you. I feel the anxiety of dealing with someone who's depressed and scared, and really feel like you're genuinely concerned for the person you're writing about.

Structure and Form: I think your structure and flow were good, but near the end I think you got a little sloppy with proper capitalization.

Overall: With some improvement, I think this poem would flow much better. Other than that I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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#3097204

Review of Poe

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Poe"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I love this title and I immediately know where you're going with the poem.

Style/Imagery: I adore the imagery in this. From the bird and owner (companion maybe?) to sitting in the house with a bottle, to writing like a mad-man.

Word Choice: I can't just pick one place, but I think the last two stanzas really put the icing on the cake for me.

Structure and Form: Great free-verse. My only suggestion is to possibly consider adding punctuation at the end of some of the lines. It's not mandatory, however.

Overall: Excellent share. Thank you for posting this!

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#3097156

Review of A Girl

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "A Girl"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I'm unsure of this title. I think I see where you're coming with it, but some more creativity into this well thought out poem might be better suited.

Word Choice: I liked the words in here, but not the manner in which they were presented.

Structure and Form: Honestly, I know this is a free-verse and so meter and rhythm aren't really specialized here, but I feel like I had a hard time getting through this poem. I felt like most of the lines were crowded and ended abruptly. Maybe use of better punctuation could help out with it.

Iraqi should be capitalized in the last line.

When there are questions posed later, you use a question mark at the end, but don't do so in the first stanza.

Overall: With a bit of work I think this has more potential, but right now I'm left thinking "Where's this going?" - The difficulty I had in reading it hindered me from really understanding it to its full potential. However, that being said, I still think it's attention worthy and that you should keep working on it.

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#3097077

Review of Self Destruction

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Self Destruction"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I love the title of this poem.

Word Choice: Some words that struck me in particular were: burn the bridges, self destruct, the impact shakes and cracks the land, and dawning consequences. I also really liked how you ended each stanza the same.

Structure and Form: The only critique I have to offer on this free-verse is to keep an eye on how long some of your lines are, and maybe add in some punctuation at the end of your lines. Also, in the last stanza when you said crys I think you meant cries.

Overall: Overall I felt this was a pretty good read. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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#3097059

Review of The Looking Glass

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Looking Glass"

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: I wasn't sure what to make of the title. After reading it, I'm still unsure.

Style & Voice: I think you tell an interesting perspective story here. I definitely wasn't expecting that ending.

Characters: While you didn't reveal a lot about the characters, I still felt like I knew them in a sense. Great job.

Technical: There was nothing I could find wrong with the technicalities of this piece. Some words that struck me were: Djinn, lovesick puppy and expertly mixing.

Overall Opinion: Great twisted story! Keep up the excellent work. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

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#3097051

Review of The Child

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Child"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I like this title and caption. It makes me wonder what you have to say in your poem.

Style/Imagery: I feel your voice in this, strong and bold, raising valid questions. Cynical, sure, but definitely valid and true.

Word Choice: I don't think you could've done a better job wording this. You could've decided to be delicate, but your forth-right questions hit home as they should.

Structure and Form: Great free-verse.

Overall: I especially loved this poem, and genuinely liked the ending. I wanted to shout "GOOD FOR YOU!" - Keep up the excellent writing.

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#3097041

Review of The American Christ

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The American Christ"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: Well, it's to the point. I think you need to change the caption though. Your title already says it's about America. You don't need to hammer that in, you're poem does this itself.

Style/Imagery: Well, I felt a lot of hate and blood.

Word Choice: Hate, Blood, War. Halleluiah!

Structure and Form: For a free-verse, it was alright. I felt you had a flow going, if it not a bit repetitive.

Overall: I guess this wasn't really my cup of tea. I know where you were trying to go with it, but I can't help but feel you also missed a lot of other aspects of America. Maybe it was intentional, but it was a little too much for my own personal taste. I don't think I mind so much the critic nature of the poem against America, as I do so much that I felt it was just over the top. However, that being said, I still think you did a good job. Keep up the writing.

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#3097027

Review of Not So Happily Ever After

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Not So Happily Ever After"

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: This is an appropriate title for the plot.

Style & Voice: I very much like the way you presented this story. It never lost my interest once.

Scene/Setting: Often times in flash fiction the setting is overlooked. However, because of the way you presented it and briefly mentioned it throughout the story I didn't feel a need for more.

Characters: I loved the characters. I felt sorry for Gretel and despised the old hag.

Technical: I couldn't find anything technically wrong with this.

Overall Opinion: I really liked this story, it was a great read. I especially liked the witch's spell. What has been taken must be replaced, a new tale written for one erased. A price to be paid for this dire sin, succumb to the darkness that lives within.

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#3097024

Review of Three Little Pigs and The Big Bad Wolf

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Three Little Pigs and The Big Bad Wolf"

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: The title's great.

Style & Voice: I love how you narrate this. I wasn't expecting this, at all! At first I almost groaned out loud, but I don't think you could've done it any better.

Scene/Setting: You didn't need to describe the setting much, because the whole scene made up for it.

Characters: The Big Bad Wolf is hilarious. I just love how he tells us the real truth behind this story.

Technical: I couldn't find anything technically wrong with this piece.

Overall Opinion: I really loved this interesting twist. It made me laugh out loud really hard at the end. Especially the "King of Faraway Land" -- great job!

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#3097020

Review of The Wardrobe Determined Destiny

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Wardrobe Determined Destiny"

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: I love this title, especially given the content.

Style & Voice: I really liked how you presented this story. I felt like you really were telling me a bed-time story.

Scene/Setting: Because this is flash, the setting usually gets lost. While you didn't overly describe it, I still had a sense of where I was and in what time I was.

Characters: Ah, naive Cinderella. How I pity her in this rendition of the story.

Technical: I could find nothing wrong with this technically and think you did a great job with grammar, punctuation and spelling.

Overall Opinion: Great job on this! I knew it was about Cinderella, and I had guessed an ending, but I was completely wrong. I love it!

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#3096476

Review of Do Not Enter

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Do Not Enter"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: Do Not Enter is perfect in every way. Not only because of the content, because it makes you want to enter anyway! Like a big red button that says Don't push...

Style/Imagery: What an eerie poem, I absolutely love the story you told here. I feel like you have a unique gift of expressing these feelings.

Word Choice: My favorite stanza is 4, but some other word choices I enjoyed were: pleasant not, spread sunshine, tortured chamber, and silent demons.

Structure and Form: I love the light rhyming here, and the flow is 'dead on' if I may say.

Overall: Changing anything about this would not do your poem justice. Keep it like it is! Thank you for sharing your wonderful poetry with me today.

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#3096455

Review of Victim

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Victim"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I couldn't think of a better title for this short poem.

Style/Imagery: I love the imagery. In just a few words you've captured it well.

Word Choice: dark-red nails and shrouded in darkness and mist are the words that strike me the most.

Structure and Form: I see nothing wrong with this and thought the flow was great. The only thing I noticed was viley should be vilely.

Overall: You can't go wrong with vampires. I love this poem a lot. Thank you for sharing it with us!

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#3096447

Review of Over my Head

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Over my Head"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: Hmm.... I'm not sure about this title. I think I know where you're coming from with it, but...

Style/Imagery: I can almost feel the darkness creeping over my head too. Nice.

Word Choice: I think you did a good job at picking out your words for this short poem.

Structure and Form: I particularly like the couplet. The only thing I have to say is that it feels like there should be more. I wonder how this would turn out if you added just a few more lines.

Overall: Great job, and keep up the good work. I enjoyed reading this.

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Review of Redeemed

Review by Riot

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Redeemed"

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: Nice title.

Style/Imagery: I think you did a good job with the imagery here. You could've been over the top gruesome, but you weren't. It was just enough to be creepy.

Scene/Setting: I liked the scenery, from the house to the wood to the dock. While they weren't overly descriptive, we still got a taste of just enough. (I especially liked the roots.)

Characters: Again, without being overly descriptive you gave me just enough. To hate the alcoholic and feel sorry for his victim, daughter.

Technical: I couldn't find anything wrong with this short story.

Overall Opinion: Thanks for sharing this with us, it was pretty creepy! I didn't lose interest at any point.

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#3096283

Review of The Insect Queen

Review by Riot

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Insect Queen"

.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: I like the name of the story, and think the plot is pretty good. It almost seemed like a bed-time scary story for children. Not too creepy really.

Style & Voice: Some words in particular I liked were: balmy zephyr, atavistic fear,

Technical:
What are lollopy paws?
When the magpie looks at her, I'd like to see more description of that dreadful feeling she had.

Overall Opinion: I thought this was a pretty good read. With some fleshing out, this could make a wonderfully eerie story. Keep up the good work.

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#3096239

Review of Light in the Dark

Review by Riot

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Light in the Dark"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I like the title of this poem and think it is fitting to the piece.

Style and Voice: Your voice clearly shows through in this well thought out poem. A bit eerie, but appropriately so.

Word Choice: Some word combinations I especially like are:

silver painted blade

lifeless steel

manipulating the knife

Structure and Form: I felt the structure of this poem was well done. I couldn't find a meter or flow, but I had no problem reading it.

Imagery: It's dark, it's dark... No, I tease. Not only have you described darkness but you've described it in many ways. From the frozen fingers and lifeless steel to the emotional darkness and empty feelings, all the way to the numb unfeeling.

Overall: Pretty creep poem. I really loved it! Also, HAPPY WDC BIRTHDAY! *throws black confetti*

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