Riot's (riot) Reviews

Riot

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1,559 Public Reviews Given

2,107 Total Reviews Given

Review Style

My reviews typically cover: initial responses, technicalities and mechanics, favorite parts, areas of improvement, and overall impression.

I'm good at...

Honesty, and finding what works versus what doesn't work. I will never give you a rating I don't think your work deserves. I am also particularly good at spotting grammatical errors and typos.

Favorite Genres

Philosophy, Steampunk, Horror, Dark, Emotional, Science Fiction, Technology, and Political Science. I'm sure there are more that I'm missing.

Least Favorite Genres

Romance, Western, Religious, and anything froufrou.

I will not review...

Chapters and Novels, unless arrangements are made prior.

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#3071525

Review of Reality

Review by Riot

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Very impressive, thank you for sharing!

Creativity: Indeed. The flow was immaculate. The wording was concise.

My favorite part was:
Breakdown on the brink
How much farther can I sink

How many of us have felt this way, I wonder?

Technical: Nothing wrong with it technically that I can see!

Overall: Don't change a thing!

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3071352

Review of Summer

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Very nice poem!

Creativity: Definitely creative.

Content: Flowed well, and smooth. I didn't have a hard time reading it at all.

Technical: No mistakes that I could find.

Overall: Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3071253

Review of Rainbow Moon

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Very good!

Creativity: Highly creative, well thought out.

Technical: I can see no errors, but with a lot of poetry I point out word flow. I am not saying yours is necessarily bad. A tip I try to do with poetry when I'm looking at syllable/word count is to put my hand to my jaw and read it out loud. I count how many times my jaw drops and that's how I count my syllables/word flow.

Overall: Really great. Thank you for sharing. :)

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3070922

Review of Guillain-Barre Syndrome 1984-1985

Review by Riot

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Oh wow, excellent. How very thorough and insightful. My mother suffered from this in the 80s after a vaccine shot gone wrong. They told her she would never walk again and to this day is walking about healthy! Thank you for posting this! AMAZING!

Good luck! Keep writing! I look forward to more.

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#3070890

Review of Take It

Review by Riot

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Another great read. Thank you for sharing.

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#3070889

Review of Caged by the Mind

Review by Riot

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Wow! Intriguing.

Creativity: Highly creative, pushing forward.

Content: I had no problem with this. It kept me going from the beginning to end.

Technical: The only thing I could point out were some minor word flow. Other then that, with some minor adjusting this will be perfect.

Overall: Nice going!

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3070886

Review of Reflection

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Very insightful.

Creativity: I found the second and third stanzas interesting. Seeing the lines reflecting from the mirror, learning, what makes us individuals in the end.

Content: Flowed well, told its story in a detailed fashion.

Technical: Nothing wrong that I could see and it flowed well.

Overall: 4.5. Keep up the excellent work, I look forward to reading more of your writings.

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3070884

Review of Emotion

Review by Riot

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Very emotional and conveyed a good sense of what she was feeling.

Creativity: Highly creative.

Content: An interesting and well done buildup to making what seems to be a critical decision.

Technical: I could find no errors within this piece of writing. Well done.

Overall: Please continue writing, you have a very good gift for words and sentence flow.

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3069036

Review of Lost Without You

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Very touching. I can safely say many readers would feel the same.

Creativity: Interesting take. "Lost without you"-- simple, yet very pointed.

Content: Good content for a short poem.

Technical: Watch spacing and punctuation. I would put a spaced space between all of the "Lost without you" parts and separate them. It's easier on the reader and helps with flow.

Overall: 4 - Nicely done!

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3069030

Review of The Rose

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Creative, descriptive, conveyed emotion.

Creativity: A little cliched, but that's not always a bad thing.

Content: Covered many aspects of love.

Technical: I would watch the line count and possibly try using contractions in some places.

I would put, instead of:
Hate
Is not the opposite of love

Hate
Not the opposite of love

-- I say that only because you've used "Is not" in the previous part of the poem to maybe just take out "Is" there... y'know?

With poems, people tend to capitalize things that normally would not be. I understand and see why you've done so here, but I just wanted to let you know sometimes it's not needed for the reader. Your words were strong enough without emphases in that manner. :)

Overall: 4/5. Keep up the good work. I look forward to more poems from you.

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3068231

Review of Girls poisoned to keep off schools !

Review by Riot

Rated: 18+

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as demurerose.

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

First Impression: Educational, to the point and good at proving the author's point and spreading awareness.

Creativity: I liked how this was presented and would love to hear more in a more detailed piece.

Content: Precise.

Technical: Good introduction, but I felt the end could have been stronger.

Overall:

Good luck! Keep writing!

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#3068199

Review of Why I Write

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Thank you for sharing.

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#3067219

Review of Being Valued at Home

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Thank you for sharing this poem. It had me captured within the first line and kept me going until the end. It painted a very true picture of the contrast between young and old alike, as well as definining their similar struggles and life similarities. Again, thank you! Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more of your poems.

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#3067211

Review of Nymph Rhapsody

Review by Riot

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

What a perfect picture to go with a lovely poem.

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#3067126

Review of Thoughts after Death

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Very nice.

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#3067001

Review of Stoner Chronicalls: Land of" Dude"

Review by Riot

Rated: 18+

| (3.0)

Interesting. The breaks and formatting threw me off a little bit though. Was it intentional or was that the way kit was pasted into the browser?

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#3066440

Review of Dream Catcher

Review by Riot

Rated: E

| (4.0)

It sounds like that's one lousy dream-catcher! I liked how you wrote this, and it flowed nice, but personally I was expecting it to be a little longer. Perhaps you could elaborate on it? Keep up the good work.