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#3108738

Review of To My Heart

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "To My Heart"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I know this poem definitely came from the heart, but while I was reading it I couldn't help but spot several errors that detracted from the overall feel of the poem. My suggestion to you is to keep a keen eye out for punctuation and proper capitalization. That being said, this was a powerful piece without the errors. I think you did a good job with imagery, with words such as suffered, misguided, fake pleasures and natured turned to grief. Keep up writing!

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#3108732

Review of Away

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Away"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

The first thing that stuck out to me with this poem was the gentle repetition of some of the words. Such as, you can't just leave, broken, and walk away. I thought you did a good job transitioning this, and I particularly liked your use of dialog. Overall, I felt this was a good short read and thank you for sharing it with us. I can offer no room for improvement. Keep up the excellent work!

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#3108724

Review of Rapture

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Rapture"

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Wow, this was pretty dark, so of course I love it. I really liked your word choice and imagery in this. Some of the words that stuck out to me while reading were: melting snow, razor lips, blood so runny, and subtle beauty. Stanza four felt a bit morbidly humorous to me, but appropriate still. Overall, I highly enjoyed this rather dark, short poetry read. Thank you very much for sharing it with us, I look forward to reading more from you in the future!

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#3108719

Review of Angels Fly Home In June

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

The first thing I noticed about your poem was the imperfect rhyme. You may think this is a bad thing, but I found it to actually be quite good. Some of them were a stretch, but yet they still fit nicely and smoothed together this great poem. I think this could be because you weren't going for an actual couplet poem. Either way, I liked it a lot. June is one of the hottest months here, and being that we were just finished with it I feel I can relate to some of the imagery within your poem. (Shelter myself in solitude.) Overall, I'm very glad I read it and thank you very much for sharing it with us. Keep writing!

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#3108716

Review of How Things are

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "How Things are"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I think the title for this is appropriate, but to me I feel like are should also be capitalized. Overall, I feel this is a very powerful poem. I think you are dead right when it comes to young girls trying so hard to be outstanding figures, all the while killing themselves inside and forgetting how to truly live. In the third stanza down, I found it clever how you use parenthesis mixed in with the poem and I thought you did it well. I cannot find any room for improvement, but I do think it would be interesting if you tried expanding this more. Thank you for the realistic poem, keep writing!

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#3108713

Review of The Gateway

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

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Alison, all I can say is to keep going introspective. I felt your poem here was very insightful and got me, the reader, thinking many things. I liked your word choice, from stricken with regret, to stubbornly hopeful, down to calm urgency. I think the structure was great and there was no place where I felt it was at all awkward or difficult to read. Overall, I felt this poem had great imagery. Thank you for sharing this with us today. Keep up the excellent writing!

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#3108712

Review of The Corporate Rapper

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

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Christopher, wow! This was not what I was expecting when I realized this would be a song that I was reading. I think you did a great job with putting this together. What I liked best, I think, is the actual rhyming. A lot of songs do this, but a lot don't. I personally like that you have. The use of changing words around in slang is great, especially with 'fulfilla'. Overall, I found this to be an amusing and worthwhile read. Thank you for sharing it with us, write on!

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#3108709

Review of Comfort

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

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I'm not sure if this is about a long distance relationship, or merely the tension of waiting for someone to come home. Either way, I felt it depicted tension and anxiety very well. How your whole world is centered around the happiness of a lover, a soul mate, a good friend. I think the structure of this poem was great and I like the couplet-rhyming: phone/alone, tears/fears, wait/abate, eyes/rise, etc. Overall, I felt this was a good, short, worthwhile read. Thank you for sharing it with us today and keep up the writing!

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#3108695

Review of Mr.Bunny

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Mr.Bunny"

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I like this title, but I do think there needs to be a space between Mr. and Bunny. The thing that I liked best about it was that all ages can read this. It has a cute rhyme, which you did an impeccable job on, and flows extremely well. After reading it, I can find no other room for improvement other than my suggestion on the title. The end made me smile, as Mr. Bunny gave his thanks and went along his way. Overall, this is an excellent children's poem. Thank you very much for sharing it with us, keep up the great work!

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#3108691

Review of Home Is Where You Park It

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Home Is Where You Park It"

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I like the title of this poem and I think it's fitting to the piece. The imagery in this was great, I felt, from the ugly square box, to the windows like eggshells, cabinets, buckets, mops and brooms. I didn't feel like you overloaded this with a lot of fanciful empty words, great job there. My favorite stanza was the fourth up from the end, with the cabinets being wiped and crumbling to shredded wheat. I think we all go through something like this when we move into our first beat-down cheap apartment, or into a fixer-up home that needs a lot of work. Overall, I enjoyed this read and I think you did a good job. Keep up the writing!

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#3108688

Review of The Empty Bed

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Empty Bed"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I was a little surprised to see this, when I clicked on poetry. To me, this felt more like a prose. However, that being said, I still think you could split this up into a more poem like state. Just take your sentences, and split them into twos or threes. As far as the content goes, I found it really eerie and sad. I cannot imagine losing someone dear to you, a soul mate. Overall, I felt this was really good, despite not being what I had though it'd be. Keep up the excellent work, I hope to see more from you soon!

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#3108681

Review of The Changes of a Year

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Changes of a Year "

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The purple on pink with the text coloring here is ace. The only part in this entire thing that I wasn't sure I understood was "When people go away and their memories are sweft" - What's 'sweft'? Other then that, I could find nothing else wrong with it technicality wise. I like how each line had a meaning and how in the very center of the poem one line is split between the two colors. Overall, I enjoyed this read. Thank you very much for sharing it with us and keep up the great work!

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#3108677

Review of Lie To Me

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Lie To Me"

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I really liked this poem! I loved your word usage: colloquial poet, Einstein of common, Pied Piper, sweet lies and all the rest. The imagery was absolutely spectacular. My favorite line out of them all would have to be line 7, 'Falling from arched lips' - Overall, I can find absolutely no room for improvement. Keep up the excellent work, I expect we'll be seeing more great things from you.

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#3108671

Review of Today was the day.

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Today was the day."

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I like the title, but I feel it should be properly capitalized and the period should be removed. I found the plot of this poem to be great, a birthday. I like the enthusiasm that was felt through this piece. The imagery was really great as well. Overall, I highly enjoyed this poem and I can find no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing it with us and keep up the great job!

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#3107681

Review of The Height Of Sorrow

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Height Of Sorrow"

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Title/Plot: The title fits the plot well. I cannot think of any suggestions to better it. For the plot, I think you did a good job with build up and driving a point home at the end.

Style & Voice: I think your style and voice is clear here. I have a few suggestions, which can be found under technical.

Characters: Your characters were especially good in this piece. I liked how you used your dialogue, and liked the build up from the beginning.

Technical:

hiccoughs while correct in most terms is still commonly referred to as hiccups. - You actually use both forms in the story, I would change it to just one.

maneouver should be maneuver

defences should be defenses

revelled should be reveled

apologise should be apologize

recognisable should be recognizable

favourite should be favorite

Of course, with the last three, I guess it's debatable.

I'm not sure what an accouncher is.

You're missing a double quote at the end of 'but that her husband shall never have...'

Keep an eye on punctuation at the end of dialogue.
For example: "Natalie Burns – 1712 onwards" it proclaimed. needs a comma after onwards.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I felt this was a pretty good piece and enjoyed the read. I'm not sure if it's really my cup of tea, in all honesty, but I still think you did a great job with it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

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#3107672

Review of Just Two Lips and Half a Brain

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Just Two Lips and Half a Brain"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: I wasn't sure about the title at first, but after reading the piece in its entirety I think you made a good choice. The plot was well established and well thought out.

Style & Voice: Your style and voice is clear throughout this piece. I especially like how you incorporated the use of good dialogue between people and their unique way of speaking (slang) added to the reality.

Scene/Setting: This is a good setting. You didn't spend an overly large amount of time describing things, but it also wasn't needed. The brief mentions of Tulips destruction was quite enough to paint a mental picture of where they were.

Characters: The fact that you didn't solely focus on one person and one person alone was very pleasant. We got to see Uncle Jimmy, Aunt Jenny, you, Tulips and Pup. Excellent job!

Technical:

Second paragraph, first sentence, seems to be a bit of a run on.

everafter should be two words: ever after

Is diamante a brand? If so I think it needs to be capitalized.

You upto to Nuthin' good? - The upto/to part here is awkward and confusing. I realize it's dialogue and likely slang, but it seems (to me) like it's a bit overkill.

...her mother belonging to a friend of his... - belonging to seems off to me here. Maybe 'belonged to'?

half a brain, again, may be slang. But half of a brain seems more understandable.

Beware, chewing habits are injurious to health". - Did you mean for the period to be outside the double quotes?

...I wore 'girl clothes', I liked to dazzle. - I think the comma needs to come before the quote after girl clothes, as well as further down with accidents.

Needless to say is wordy and needs a comma after it. You could use something like Clearly, instead. The same is true for all of these which could be just all these. So by the end, re-written, it could be: Clearly, all these were not deemed...

accompanied by should be used with people, not objects. Suggested change: accompanied with.

but instead of chocolate on tan, he had dark black socks and markings of fawn; - I think that he had the dark black socks would sound better. 'he had dark black' in the context you've used it seems awkward to me.

Overall Opinion: Overall I felt this was a very touching story. Thank you for sharing it with us and keep up the excellent work.

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#3106864

Review of Crimson Teardrops

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Crimson Teardrops"

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Thank you for sharing this piece with the community. Child abuse is never an easy thing to write about, believe me I know this to be true. I like how this has a light rhyme to it, and structurally it is sound. I can find no errors and can offer no room for improvement. The imagery in here was great: jagged edges, crimson, bruise this life - it was all great. Of course, in it's greatness, I have to point out how incredibly sad and touching it is. It is definitely deserving of the beautiful ribbon that adorns it. Thank you once again for gracing us with your ability to write.

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#3106736

Review of Tentacle

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Tentacle"

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I found this to be a highly creative poem. I liked the title and I thought it was fitting of the piece and how you cleverly spaced out the words to make a shape. The imagery was great, as you can see with some of your word choices: coincidental illusion, rusty metal bars, slime, marrow of yer bones, etc. I especially liked the voice in this and the slang. Overall I feel you did an excellent job with this. I could find no room for improvement and spotted no errors. Keep up the excellent work, and welcome to WDC!

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#3106280

Review of My Long Journey to Freedom

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "My Long Journey to Freedom"

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I found this to be an extremely touching piece. I couldn't find any errors in spelling or grammar and I can find no room for improvement. My opinion of this is that you are a very strong person. When many would have given up, you prevailed. I know how it can feel to be stuck and helpless while the world around you goes living without you, completely unaware of your predicament. While I can't offer you any advice on rewording or rewriting (because I think it's perfect the way it is) I am able to say that I am touched by this read. Not only is some of the stuff you've written heart breaking, but it's also incredibly inspiring. You lead us with an example to never give up and this piece you've written is a gift to anyone willing to take a few minutes to read it. Thank you very much for sharing this with us.

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#3106040

Review of My Teacher's Dog Ate My Homework

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "My Teacher's Dog Ate My Homework"

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This is an extremely cute poem and very creative. I loved the punch line at the ending, it made me laugh out loud. I think many children would love this poem, it sort of reminds me of Shel Silverstein. I could find nothing wrong with the structure, and can offer no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us, keep up the excellent writing!

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#3105902

Review of Devils Dance in the Moonlight

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

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. This review is in response to your entry "Devils Dance in the Moonlight"

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The image at the top of this poem is excellent. There's so much I could say about it alone, hehe. I really like the couplet form you have here. The rhyming was spot on and I didn't feel the flow was disrupted at all. I thought it was particularly clever how you have the dialog in red and how it's repeated again at the end. Overall I felt this was a chilling and grizzly read - just the kind I like!

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Review of Knock, Knock

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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Wow, this poem put me in awe. I think you did an excellent job conveying emotions throughout this, playing on our fears. The bold text in this poem did it a lot of justice, they pop out of the screen. What's really clever is if you take the bold portions out the poem stands alone very well. You can even put all the bold stuff together and it stands alone too. It's like we got two poems for the price of one, I love it. Thanks as always for sharing your wonderful poetry, it's clear you're very gifted!

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Review of Time is Brief

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Rated: 18+

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I have never seen a poem with this structure before, not that I ever noticed anyways. You're right though, it does drive a point home and the words you've used in this are strong and powerful. I noticed one small thing, in line three of the first stanza, it felt like the comma was needed there just like in line 1. I'm not sure if this was done on purpose or not. As for the rest, I think you did an outstanding job. Stanza 4 and 5 were especially powerful and you drove the point home in stanza 5 with the repeating lines and powerful words. Keep up the excellent work, and Happy WDC Anniversary once again!

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Review of A Shallow Soul

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

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This is an excellent free-verse poem. I like how it has a fantasy feel to it, though anyone could easily feel the same way you've described. Many words struck me as my eyes fell down this poem, but I especially liked the descriptions in the first two stanzas. The galloping prince, the tiara resting upon your head. The words were almost whimsical and they were so strikingly sad. Thank you for sharing this with us, I look forward to reading more in your port. This poem is well deserving of the lovely ribbon that adorns it. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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Review of Darkness

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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. This review is in response to your entry "Darkness"

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Grim, sad, dark. Everything I'm sure you intended. What I liked most about this was the great descriptions because it made me feel enveloped in the darkness you must've been feeling when writing this. You used great examples of just how dark it is inside, from the theater's without lights, to the cave's inner chambers, and the desert with no moon. Excellent job, I hope to see more from you soon. Happy WDC Anniversary once again!

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