It's a one of a kind as far as I can tell.
I'm sure it's possible that this form has been
done before, I have not seen it myself.
When reading the poem in parentheses I started from
the bottom up to the beginning. Than I read it down
from top to bottom. Up reads well, down reads well.
No errors could I find.
You have a great read, welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Wonderfully written and so much flow and ebb to the rhythm. I love'd it and hope to read a lot more of your
work in the very near future. I think your piece was beautiful from beginning to end but these are the lines that I found so unforgettable.
'How can light prevail
Through the sleeping valley
Emptiness seeps with desire
Liquid stars fill a fountain
Standing amidst flowers that wilt'
Great reading your work, keep it up.
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What a beautiful poem of lost love. I could feel the aloneness, sadness even the overwhelmed feelings expressed in your humble words. I would have to say these three lines I will treasure. Lovely, thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
'It's like a glass box
I see you, I hear you
I can't touch you'
Sincerely
M Duci
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The moment I read Amon-Re, I thought of the Egyptian God' Amon-Re meaning, "The Hidden One." According to Theban doctrine Amon-Re was creator of all things. He was over all the other Gods' and ruler of things concerning fertility, the wind, water, and all things held secrete. I enjoyed reading your poem and if one remembers their Mythology Class, they won't have a hard time understanding what your little poem is trying to convey. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
M Duci
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You have just captured my heart with this poem.
I love to read, write, and think the very same
way you do. I love in the same way, When I think
of my special friend who is far away, I can't
wait until I'm there with them. I have so
much time to think about them, smile about
them, and write about them.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Have you entered into any of the Newbie
Contests? If you'd like too; Let me know I'll
send you some links. Have a wonderful bright and
cheerful day. Thanks for stopping by today you've made my day even brighter.
Sincerely
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How you bring memories of my girl hood racing back to me. The days when I thought I was the only person who had dreams of growing up and spreading my wings. I may have used a few of the same words too, to no one in particular, just preparing to make my place among the grown. I love your story. Thank you for sharing.
Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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I can't tell you how much I have enjoyed your story about Bubba and those Blue Ridge Mountains. I'm sure I will get to read more about him soon. You have painted a beautiful picture of those Blue Ridge mountains, and if I close my eyes I can see 'ole granma cooking that ham and eggs. Even bopping you on the head, I can see the clear blue sky's and smell the fresh air. Thank you so much for sharing this story with us and welcome to Writing.Com. I know you're going to love it here.
Great story telling and I look forward to the next chapter.
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M Duci
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I like your poem very much; the story is one that I hear quite often, but never quite the same. Yours
is very sad and the character seems to have lost more than just his soul.
Why the many hyphens placed throughout the piece? If they have no real reason for being there it may be better to remove them! Replace with comma's and exclamations.
Just a suggestion, it's a very good piece. Good luck in the Newbie Challenge Contest.
Sincerely
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I love these lines, they make some sense of the problems the couple experienced while to gather.
Love bled dry, sad to say this does happen.
Once we experienced innocence, Untainted and childlike.
But your thirst soured. A clouded pool of blood,
Tears follow love, follow memory. Love bled dry.
In a haze of bitterness, I reject you.
Good luck in the Newbie Challenge Contest, and welcome to Writing.Com
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What a wonderful sweet song. It's so hard to write this note to you for the tears keep falling down, causing me to continue to wipe before writing more.
I have recently lost a love from brain stem cancer, and she was so dear to my heart. So I know what it
feels like to have lost but never forgotten. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com, and to the group "I Remember When." I will look for your cd.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Your stories always wonderful, thrilling, and always a hitch to the ending. Sometimes I can guess the source, but not today. This one held me captive right to the end. Even after reading the big sign TERMINAX, I still thought I was reading a great Sci/Fi. Great story, I always enjoy and recommemed your work to whom ever drops by.
Thanks for sharing.
M Duci
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What a wonderful view about that horror filled day of 911 and the way we stood up to the challenge. Your images appear so real and sent chill's along my spine. Just to remembering was a little much for my mind. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com
M Duci
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I found your acrostic Springtime, very warming.
I could see the tiny buds sprouting and the tiny
drops of rain so clearly from your painting. I
like the tiny insects look forward to the coming
spring. Thank you for sharing this little cutie
with us. And welcome to Writing.Com
Sincerely
M Duci
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I hope that this person will return to her life and fulfill her dreams of waiting. Very nice short story/poem.
Only errors are none of your I(s)are capitalized. It would greatly make the reading a lot easier to read if they were. Thank you and welcome to Writing.Com.
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M Duci
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What I loved about your poem was everything. It spoke to me of a time to come, that may be in the near future. I saw it as a hint to human kind to get it together before it's to late.
Thank you for sharing and welcome to the Newbie Challenge. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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I truly enjoyed this short story 'Of Earth and Stars'
I could feel the love between your two character's Blair, and Blaine, nice blending of their name's also.
Good luck in the Newbie Challenge and welcome to Writing.Com
Sincerely
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I love this Haiku, and in these three lines you
have quietly taken me to a Transcendent State of
Mind. Thank you for sharing and welcome to the
Newbie Challenge, good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
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There are just some early Saturday mornings for sleeping in or cleaning house or what ever! But
there are Saturday mornings like this one today
that is perfect for reading 'The Beauty Of.' And
loving this morning because you found something
so wonderful to read with your first cup of coffee.
Thank you so much for writing this enchanting piece.
That's the beauty of reading T.L.FINCH.
Sincerely
M Duci
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Cute short story of 'The Fox's Box' your rhyming
had a very smooth rhythm and the story was quick
and snappy.
I saw no errors in your piece at all.
Thank you for sharing, Welcome to Writing.Com and the
Newbie Challenge.
Sincerely
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A very catchy little poem about the girl down the
street, good rhyming and rhythm.
I don't know why but I can see a group of girl's
skipping rope to the rhythm of the beat. Good job
and keep writing. Welcome to writing.Com and the
Newbie Challenge.
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This beautifully written story has such a deeply profound meaning for me. I get the picture of a large man, a proud man, who has been battling, his demons for some time. He is now learning that he can't beat them so he'll go but not so quietly as some would think. Even in sleep he is fighting, but alas he closes his eyes and goes to join the tough sailor's that have gone long before him.
My favorite lines:
'His fluid eyes refocus one last
time. Then, like an intrepid old
boat slowly groaning out to sea,
he is gone.'
Your writing, as always leaves me wanting more and to know more. Thank you for sharing and welcome to the challenge.
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I’ve read many poem's in this genre, but yours has
found a very special place in my heart. Six years
ago while talking to my friend on the phone, her
fourteen year old adopted son, came in went to his
father's room came out and shot my best friend in
the head while we talked, he picked up the phone said
good-by to me and hung the phone up. He was a beautiful
boy and never gave his parents a moments trouble. But he told some friends she had made him break up a friendship with someone he liked, and he was going to kill her. He did. I will never get over it, and this piece put butterflies in my stomach. I truly hope they can get your sister's son some help. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Welcome Wanda Marcell Dillard, to Writing.Com.
Your writing has put a hush over me this morning,
as I sit writing this review. Your still painting
in black and white has left me breathless and filled
with wanted dreams. In a few years I could be that women, filled and ready for sleep. This work is truly
a master piece and I long to read more of Ms Dillard.
Thank you for sharing this lovely piece and for becoming a member of WDC.
Sincerely
M Duci
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'The gospels teach us
Love is Jesus
That's all there is to know.'
You have written the perfect poem
for me. This is what I needed to
read this morning before going to
bed. I'm so glad I ran across your
port, and I'll be back soon to see
what else you have lurking in the
wings. Thank you for sharing. I can
now have a very good sleep.
Sincerely
M Duci
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What a sad little poem about love.
Yet it is written with such sweet
tears, no matter how hard they fall.
I hope that somehow those tears will
turn to happeness and the rain can stop
it's fall. I like your poem very much
but these are my favorite lines.
'The rain is like
the tears of my heart.
It continues to fall,
harder and harder.'
Welcome to Writing.Com Kittie, good job keep writing.
Sincerely
M Duci
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