Great story, great writing, I have only one regret and that is; that I wish I could give you a 10* rating. This in my opinion is the way a story should be written. I found myself captivated by the pure essence of Abby finding herself through the finding of her birth mother and knowing the true meaning of a love that she had never been able to find. It was that missing piece of the puzzle that was so much of her. One need not have many pieces missing, only that one, for without that one piece the whole cannot be complete. Thank you for sharing your writing with us and Welcome to Writing.Com.
I have had the pleasure of reading many wonderful
stories and beautiful poetry while a member of WDC,
and it is known the world over that my affinity with
the butterfly is something that will go with me till
as you say 'My torch goes out.' Never have I read a lovelier poem, written about a butterfly then the one I've read today. Thank you my friend for sharing this beauty and all the reasons why it will remain in your family forever. I know your Mum and Nana are so proud of you today.
By the way congratulations on being the #1 ranked 'Most Active Reviewer' today. Thank you for
sharing and keep up the great work.
Your friend & Sponsor always
This poem was amazing, I found myself overwhelmed
with tears, and out right sobbing for the answer to
this piece. I love every line and while reading aloud
I could see the visual picture of all you speak of
so clearly. I pray along with you that the time will come when those shores will be ringing with freedom for all. Thank you so much for sharing and again thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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Needless to say you and your wonderful group have
done so much to help and upgrade our wonderful peers in the writing community. Your work within the walls of WDC has not gone unnoticed. You are very much a pillar of our growing little city. Thank you for sharing your work and idea's and again thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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Very interesting story about money coming into
sinking boats, popping out of a pc, and a dead man floating in a tub of blood. I found your story well written and abounding mystery. Again thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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What a fascinating story and I since a bit reincarnation connection since this was such a surreal type of dream. This is a subject that is of
great interest to me and I very much relate too it also. Great job of relating the account of your dream
and wonderful read. The title is very fitting for the piece.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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I like the gentleness of this piece and somehow I
feel the quite surroundings of the lake in the background. The picture adds a lot to the poem and
the description fits the picture you've painted so beautifully.
I enjoyed the reading of this piece and I'm very happy about the out come. My favorite verse is:
'I want to coax her
From the forest,
Show her
There is nothing to fear,
Yet; I know there is.'
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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A lovely piece written for someone special and
the colored images you displayed were surreal.
The piece is short and comes right to the point
but I think it had a lot to say. Thank you for
sharing and thank you for entering and good luck.
Sincerely
mduci
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There is still time for you to name this piece before the contest ends! But of course that is purely up to you. Over all your piece was well written, but without
a contest title for the piece it is in my opinion an unfinished piece.
Sincerely
mduci
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Well written and great reading of something that
saddens the whole world, that of losing young men
in war. It saddens my heart to see this very thing
happening on a daily basis with no end to this
madness. Thank you for sharing the account with us,
I could find nothing to improve this piece.
Again thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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Thank you for this enjoyable read this afternoon, I can really relate to this piece for there are, only God' knows how they got into our chimney, a family of black birds nesting. This house is less then a year old and we can't see how they made entrance but they have and right now I can't lite my fireplace until the last baby leaves. They chirp all day for food from their mama, and sometimes I think I'm going to go crazy . But I refuse to hurt them, or remove them! I just wish they'ed grow up and leave the nest .
You gave me wonderful visuals and images that made me hold my side from laughing. Great story and a great read.
Again thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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This little poem was touching and hit deep into the
child heart in this girl. I wish we could make the
young ones who want to grow up faster than their young
bodies or minds can fathom see the deeper picture, and
stay young and healthy for as long as they can. There
is no cure for growing old no matter how much facial or body lifting one does, their is no stopping mother
nature.
Thank you again for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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I like this little poem very much, you gave a good
visual picture and it will give rise to many of us
this question asked over the growing years, of who
we might be. I like the last line the best! I found
it very suitable.
Again thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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I love this little piece, wish it were a little
longer, but it is sweet and serene just like a
little butterfly would be. I like the layout and
the color, the font could be just a wee bit larger,
but over all it is a little sweetie.
Thank you again for entering and good luck in the
contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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You certainly have a lovely way with
words. I like the way you move the
words to reach out and touch that special
someone, filling them with the lovely
colors of your song. Thank you for sharing
and welcome to Writing.Com. Hope you are
finding your way around our vast community,
and enjoying yourself. I'll be dropping by
again real soon.
Sincerely
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Congratulations on your winning 1st place in the
"Picky Poetry Contest."
I like your poem and found it very visual and out spoken in your verse. I hope that the person it was
meant to reach will reach out and grab it because you
have such a wonderful way of telling them off . This is my favorite verse although I like every line in the poem:
"What little hope you hold keeps you alive
for without love or dreams we cease to be
and my tears fall for you today
that jaded walls are all you’ll ever see
encased around your soul, devoid of joy.
Inside you’re still a wounded little boy."
Thank you again for entering, great piece.
Sincerely
mduci
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Thank you for entering The Rising Stars Shining Brighter contest.
What a lovely tribute to a wonderful husband of forty-two years, and also to other women who may have been less fortunate then yourself. Great piece and great read. Good luck Meg, in the contest. This is one of my favorite verses:
"I just didn't know, or did not want to know,
'Cause you hid from my eyes all your pain.
May God look upon you, and bless you each one,
May you one day be happy again."
Again thank you for entering.
Sincerely
mduci
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I liked everything about this piece! The images of
early morning, the dew drifting gently over the pond,
to the lizard climbing the bark of the tree. It is
lovely and left me feeling so peaceful with the beauty of a refreshing morning.
Thank you again for entering and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
mduci
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Very nicely done, hope you did well in the contest.
I really loved the last four lines of your poem, and
I could really see the images you so vividly displayed.
I also liked they rhythm and the beat of this piece.
Keep up the great writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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I love this little Haiku! I can remember seeing this
lovely little creature on our lake so many summers ago.
I haven't seen one in quite some time but maybe I've not been in the right place at the right time . I'll keep it mind to look for one in the blackness of night very soon.
Thank you so much for sharing, it was such a pleasure.
Sincerely
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What a precious gift you've given
us your peers with this lovely
piece of writing. I hope the person
you've written this piece about will
love it as much as I do. Thank you
for sharing the vision and welcome to
Writing.Com. I see you have several
pieces to be reviewed and I'll be back
to be further inspired.
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You're so right about the message we are sending to
our youth. But not only is society (not all)sending the message that big boys and girls should not cry which is the cause of so many emotional problems in their search for identity, as in...'who am I, and why am I here?'
But don't leave out the cartoon's that they watch that infuse little minds with violence which is passed off as funny, or the games that they play on video, that leaves them insensitive to other's feelings.
Children need to know that it is okay to cry and it is
okay to cry! I cried when I read your poem. Thank you
so very much for sharing the feelings of many of your
peers. I'll be coming back to read more from your port very soon.
Sincerely
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I hear a ring of 'Slam' in this little piece.
It gave me two schools of thought to deal with of
which I can say I quite enjoyed. One...is that the
person is trying to hitch a ride...or two is trying
to commit suicide. I'm not sure which or if it was
either of the two. But I do like it and reading it
aloud with a slam beat was good enough for me.
Good read and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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I do like this piece you've written very much. I saw
so many places in your images, right down to the culture and meaning of life as you see it. Your picture is so vivid and full of splendid color. I especially like your last two lines that let me finish the poem and make it my own. Thank you for sharing and
welcome to Writing.Com.
There is nothing more precious and lovable than
a baby, they are the most ardent of little people
and their silly laughter and jesters make them more
endearing then we can ever say.
My grandma used to have a little saying that goes back along way: 'As a baby they are on your heart, as an adult they are always on your mind.' I've found that to be so
true and with good reason. Thank you for sharing and
welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
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