Funny after reading this lovely Haiku, I glanced over at the mantel above my fireplace and smiled at the one deep dark luscious petals of a single red rose from my own garden freshly cut this morning and placed in a lovely Crystal Vase, I was drawn once again to your single red rose in a crystal vase and your poem brought everything into perfect view...lovely description and well done for the image…one suggestion if I might add, a single cut rose in a crystal vase image would be lovely under this piece.
Thank you for sharing.
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Marlena Duci
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This is the first of your pieces I have read, but for sure it will not be the last.
This piece held a lot of meaning for the young lad and it holds a lot for me...this was deeply written
and deeply felt as I remember such a time with my own
dad, perhaps it might have been the last time we took a walk alone together on the beach near our home...
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem and let me say welcome to Writing.Com. I will be returning very
soon.
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Marlena Duci
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Very nice piece, sweet little beat and enough rhyme to make the time...I truly enjoyed it the story told
the whole of it and I hope you got to see what lay behind the smile...keep writing and I'll drop by again to partake of what you have to read...hope you are finding your way around the community and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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Very nicely written great wording and the meter was just fine...I like the way you moved us from the dark ages into the new and right up to the now...I enjoyed your piece very much and thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com. keep writing.
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Mduci
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Very well written piece...with perfect meter and rhyme....The inside of one's soul can sometimes be
hard to take but you did it with simple explanations and the dialog was great...thank you for sharing this insight and welcome to Writing.Com...keep writing.
Could see you life ended
You final resting place I think you meant (your)
Sincerely
Mduci
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You truly said the magic words, why would one want to
change a person who was already made up from the first time one met them? Than that person is no longer a real person or them self, only what someone else wanted them to be....it's good when we can see this and know what it is to be real....enjoyed your writing very much...keep up the good job.
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Mduci
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Yes, I can imagine his tears, his fears, the sadness of his face....The wrong that was done to extinct his race I saw in the eyes of an old man today I'm so sorry to say....Thank you for sharing this timely piece and welcome to Writing.Com...I look forward to visiting your port again.
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Mduci
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I adore this piece and it flows just like the song...you make it speak from the inside out and that is good when one can hear the tune...great work, great piece and every line was a master piece of art. Thank you for sharing and looking forward to reading more from you very soon.
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Mduci
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I also sing on plans while my headphones are on....trans-Atlantic, and I never stop until the plan lands! Some have called me a lot of names you don't want to know, and a few flight attendants call me a 'song bird' I'm not sure if that is bad or good but really I guess I don't care....I need to keep the pilot awake....
Big Hugs
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Beautiful tribute to a wonderful Angel, and a dear friend and sister...thank you for entering this lovely
poem in her honor and on her wonderful Birthday.
great job, lovely presentation and ever so fitting.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
Mduci
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I like your poem very and found a nice run on words
that made the piece special:
"Hero of the Battle of New Orleans
with sailors, pirogues and Brigantines.
British attacked through the everglades.
Jean was waiting in cover to make his raids.
Red Coats were stronger by three to one,
Jean and Old Hickory put them on the run"
Great read, thanks for sharing and good luck in the
contest.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a lovely short story you've written based on the children of the civil war. Written not only for children but for adults alike, in it very sweet little tale. Well, written without any error’s and your visual pictures brought your characters into focus quite clearly. Thank you for sharing this timely story, and welcome to Writing.Com. I look forward to your continued good writing.
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Mduci
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This is the first of many of your works I'm bound to read and from the first note from you I could see that you are truly a wonderful person, husband and father....It was such a pleasure to read your beautiful words of love and compassion for your beautiful wife. I know that she must be a beautiful person because she found that in you....God bless and keep up the great gift you've been given.
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Marlena
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Thank you for paying a visit to my port today, and I'm now here in yours paying a little visit to you...
I fell in love with this piece and must tell you that the visual was so lovely and you brought the young woman, the dance and even the music right up close and personnel...What I really loved was the last line, in which it seems you had been watching someone entirely different, whether or not you were, leaves the mystery for the reader to conclude. Great read...thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com....
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Mduci
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A very lovely tribute to all who have something wonderful in their life to celebrate, and also to those who are having a vigil of sadness surrounding things beyond their control. Thank you for sharing this lit candle for the world as a whole! You are a blessing.
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Mduci
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Thank you for sharing this short piece with us and bring to our attention how many were killed for these few little words the longing to be free...I hope that someday this young man will be given a prosthetic hand to prove his self free to write whatever he so chooses...
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Mduci
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What a lovely tribute to one of America's leading Ladies, she has definitely done a lot for the young children of the world and for the people as a whole.
Her good works will not go unnoticed for as long as this world exists. Thank you for sharing this piece with us and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a little darling child you are in the photo...
Such a lovely smile and dressed for the Easter Show.
From the looks of it you should have been a little ad
model for a catalog.
Take care and thanks for sharing.
Sincerely
MDuci
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Welcome to Writing.Com and thank you for sharing this lovely piece of art with us your Writing.Com community. I like your poem very much and found many words that stand out in your piece, also I like the flow and rhythm and it works fine for me. I would make but one suggestion and perhaps to center this piece and give it a plum or rose color. Just my thought...it also does well just as it is.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a strong mind and body one would have if we all lived and thought this way. I enjoyed your poem very much and these lines are stand alone without a doubt:
'But when the stronghold's broken
and the spies have been and gone,
I can put my trust in one thing -
that together we are strong'
Wonderful words to live by...God bless and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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You are mending, and your story brought tears to my eyes...for the mere fact that you became focused and reached out to your child and tended to her was your mending and God whispering you can do it. I know of other woman who have the same problem of focusing at any given time, and should their child cry out and need attention, they would be unable to give. God, bless and keep that fighting attitude and you'll always come out winning.
Sincerely
Mduci
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I love this advice and I for one will do exactly what you say! I love these lines think I'll keep them on my desk and refer to them one line at a time:
'So don't trip over those boulders
Of stress resting on your shoulders
Don't stumble over the vines
Of passing time
Step over, walk around these setbacks
And when they attack
Fight back'
Thanks for the advice and welcome to Writing.Com.
One little piece of advice, if you care to accept it
think of breaking it into stanza’s it's great.
Sincerely
Mduci
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