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HI amay! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! 
I really enjoyed reading this story as it was very moving. Your voice is potent and I could enter into the vision and mind of the speaker. The short paragraphs and variety of line lengths flowed well in a coherent way and I was not thrown out by any major glitches. 
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I skimmed the last one and this one follows quite naturally.
You have a potent vision with a dream like quality.
Oh I really like fantasy and the iconic genie theme is a favourite so it was lovely to find this interactive in your port. 
The title reveals the genie theme and yet leaves us guessing...so we will enter.
The writing flowed in a coherent manner and I could follow the action in this chapter. I noticed you could have used a period after "bottle" and "base" in the first line as there are two definite sentences there. 
I enjoy your style and you kept me reading to find out more lessons!
The character of the Owl with babies is an effective choice as we think of them as wise and here we learn how they get wise. The cliche lessons are well illustrated by the story of the horse on the farm and make sense. First it seemed a bit farfetched about the car given the size of the chicks but then.. the whole story is fantastical, so it adds to the orginality and scope of the fable.
The personification was well achieved and the repeated bits make it seem like a child's story teaching a lesson....until the end. 
An unexpected turn that evoked a burst of laughter. 
I think the first paragraph could be tightened up a bit. The first bit seemed redundant as you say "finally" in regard to the sun coming up. Of course, I see you may be setting up the idea of the rain that created the mud hole. 
Your sense of humour knows no bounds! 
The character of Charlie is well shown in vivid images and the warm relationship between poet and dog is clear too. I laughed at his dog responses and your joking with him about O-C-D, the tea leaves and how you read him.
The poem is a quatrain with regular rhyme scheme and flows smoothly even though the syllable rhythm of each line is not equal. It was fun and I was not thrown out of the read. You have some cool rhymes like "gauge" and "heart" and "drool"! Vocabulary suited the nature of a dog and the getting ready to travel theme.
I was intrigued by the title as I have not heard of this form and I enjoy Irish lore! Thanks for sharing the helpful author notes on the unique form. 
Your topic is fun and reflects an interest we writers have! The construction of each line fits the format in a delightful way as you maintain the theme of book by adding genres! 
I can imagine how much effort it took to get the rhyme scheme correct and get the poem to make sense ending with the same word as beginning. Awesome!
The story is short and seems unfinished and I want to know more. Ending in your question sets us up for the next part. Good hook.
You got my attention with the active opening and you give an idea of the setting and the character is young and at school. I think you could add a few details of where she lived--- you do tell us she walks through a forest, which lead me to think that something creepy might happen.
It felt dream like when she gets to teh schoolyard so quick. Did you mean "skulked" to class or "sulked" in class.
Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "
Oh wow! I can so understand your quandry and Had to laugh at the end when you wanted to hide in the coffin. Vivid description of how you were feeling. 
I laughed at the idea that the snowman is unconcerned with the weather and can imagine his grin! I am not sure if fanciful is really haikuish though.
This is a beautiful love poem with a gentle inquiring vibe. It was pleasant to enter the vision you created.
Wow! I really liked the evocative image luring me into the moonlit night and could see the tree shadows. I love the idea of the trees scattering the light. "Icy Sigh" is fanciful too. Beautiful way to express this scene.
As a haiku it has 3 lines, nature theme and a seasonal reference. In the way it is written it can be read as a complete sentence though, which haiku does not have. Generally haiku may have one verb in a phrase of two lines, and then a fragment in the third. Also, while I like "sigh" it is not a clear image but rather a metaphor.
Here you are definitely observing what you see---almost telling the reader. Haiku leaves some part out for the reader to discover as an "aha"--which is so different than other poems long or short.
I am not sure it works as a haiku as the first two lines make a sentence and you have more than one verb. In haiku "less is more". Haiku uses two contrasting images which lead the reader to an "aha". I could imagine the fisher on the branch and then perhaps the image of the fish seen at the same moment as the last line contrast image. Then I as the reader could come to my own conclusion without you telling me. The reader becomes part of the story you see. 
so many choices! Haiku usually has two images juxtaposed to create a surprise moment or aha at the end where the reader discovers a connection that the poet has seen but does not conclude. It is the challenging part of Haiku for me to create.