Hello, Jakrebs Random Review Link brought me to this somewhat unique poem. I read it a few times, and it says a lot of without saying a lot. Some theory about quantum, and such. Creative and funny poem, it takes the reader for a trip. Great opener and I enjoyed it.
The description doesn't give this well written poem accurate imagery. This is about govt but expressed in a morn ancient feel like one of castles and kings, but the more it is read the more the mind sees. Creative indeed, and gives one a different way of looking at today govt turmoil, now the should I say in not in your face. Quality thinking, Thank you for sharing and enjoy what's ;eft of your day. Zombie time for me.
Out and about and Random Review brought little me here. Not what I was expecting but I enjoyed it very much and have a similar poem myself, about my country but could apply to any as your poem does. A neat twist on making it about money but not really about that. I see no errors and honestly enjoyed a lot. Thank you and have a good one.
This is creative, I'm pleasantly surprised that subject matter was a dog. Not where I thought I was going at all. I'm reviewing you as part of "I Write in 2024" and I wanna say Good Luck in the contest.
Flash Fiction is one of my favorites and this is spot on. I'm not sure why you spelled boy(boi). The title and the first few lines have such a dark feel, death talking and I thought almost suicide, but no that was not to be. This is creative and really catches the reader interest. A quick read, dark, kind of melodramatic and family friendly all in one scoop. Thanks! Have a good one.
Randome Review link brought me to older small love poem and I enjoyed. Easy to understand, and Ta Da done. Love like a ocean, perhaps a little more of that imagery to add some more feelings. Just my suggestion.
Enjoy what's left of your day and Thank you for sharing with little me.
Morning Chris Breva Random Review brought me to your poem, and my humorous dark muse is laughing. What a great small poem, I had to look a Lipogram up. interesting. There are not many poems out there that truly have a punch line, ones that leave so little to the reader, and yet the journey is made.
No bombs haha! This had Bruce Willis screaming Yippee Ki Yah Mother .....! in my head. Thanks for sharing and the laugh, it was unexpected but appreciated. Have a great day and keep them coming, I'll be back.
I normally don't review stories, as I don't write them and feel unqualified. I see no errors, didn't enjoy the font used but that a me problem and my eyesight. Well written, some bondable characters.
Stand out line:
She and the other marksmen sent arrows flying into the serpent's giant maw. It hissed and writhed in pain.
Highland type games set in a fantasy world, with Kings and castles, nice! Creative and enjoyable, Thank you for sharing and have a good one.
One of my favorite poetry forms, part because they are creative, but easy. Positivity helps everything, and being grateful for the small things can bring happiness, I think we as a society realized this during covid.
This is good, and the mild peek into religion isn't overpowering. Thank you for sharing, and again for your review. Enjoy you day and Write On.
I found my way to this creative poem through our What to Review page and am out of my zone and enjoying myself. I work retail have for most of my life besides when I was younger I delivered retail. This brings back lots of memories as literally being on the other side.
I'm not familiar to a lot of forms but this is quite entertaining subject, and says so much in so little.
The crowds push forth undignified,
and grab at wares unjustified.
Is my favorite line, and honestly flashes some Black Friday sales. Well written and edited, and truly a joy to read and re experience my own moments in retail. Thank you very for sharing with me. Write ON and Enjoy your day wherever you may be.
I found this trippy poem on the What to review page and find this well written even if the word usage is a little over the laymen. I enjoy quantum theory but don't suggest I know a lot. This is a trip feelings as if they were the void of space, like a wormhole, only the ship is time, and the yesterdays and and todays and tomorrow don't happen in time cause it's in your head.
I have no suggestions and enjoyed this poem, very creative. I might be overthinking it, but that's a good think when well written poetry takes one down a rabbit hole. Enjoy your day and Thank you for sharing.
Welcome to WDC and little me is here to offer a kind review I hope.
Creative and I did smile. I was not expecting the dog twist at the end or the thought of giving up on a cat but the humor added made the blow gentler. Clearly expressed, and somewhat delightful.
I read it a few times and think you change tense. You said you were driving and saw a sign. They continue with I want. I think it should be "wanted". You wrote:
The letters painstakingly
Filled in with black ink.
I think it should be backwards.
Filled in with black ink,
painstakingly those letters.
or something similar. It's neat how as the poem subject is pets, you could also imagine people in a sour relationship. Maybe added "Pet" to the title would be more accurate, as the genre doesn't always get looked at. A well written, quite unique subject for me at least as I usually stick to horror. Thank you very much for sharing and I hope I was helpful as that is my only intent. Any questions reach out and I'll try my best to clarify.
This is prose, well written and such a warmhearted thought. To have the blessing of innocence, childhood, and the comfort of a good night sleep for a child it as if a angel watched them sleep. I can remember my mother telling me so. No errors that I see, and again warms the toes.
I'd change the title.
and use a line for the description. Such as for example:
Nighttime Angels
Their wings carry me off to sleep
Acrostic is a great poetry form I agree for simple well expressed poems that one does want to bog down super complex words usage. I enjoyed your two outlooks into a music keyboard, very creative. Delightfully pleasant and well done. Thank you for sharing and have a great day.
Enjoyable poem, about I'm sure many of us more so as we age .I do really see any musical elements to it, but that could be bad. There's some reuse that add to the emphasized feelings of loving till dying. I enjoyed it, and hope you have a good one.
Hello, Anni Pon Classic pirate troupe, entertaining, and a great low reading so may more will enjoy this quaint, descriptive story in a poetry form about mutiny. I enjoyed and Thank you for sharing and stepping into the dark.
Good Morning Solum Anderson I found this on the Recent Reviews page, and despite the very very small font, I can't agree more. So stupid thoughts I believe no one has such. Being alone is a feeling, more than a word, and with more mental health awareness every year, I'm sure we'll grow and understand it more as it affects each and every one of us. It's not to mistake it for others similar feelings like sadness and passive behavior. Like I've said I enjoyed this, you too hard on yourself in the description. I only suggest larger for those with no eye sight like me.
It's a chilly day to give a review and its you, Haha! 👼intuey.
I admit the description made me curious as I usually avoid poems and stories about losing someone but this is powerful but not too emotional. Thank you, and Happy Holidays.
Chilly night, perfect to give Scotty1615 a review.
Butterfly are often said to carry souls, I heard that a lot when my son died. Soul Full Butterfly is almost mystical in the feeling you share about your mom as you see that yellow butterfly. The flow is great and its easy to understand. I thank you for sharing, sometimes it not easy.
Powerful, emotional poem, about a abusive relationship, I understood it well, and enjoyed the quality of it. You do not need a 18 plus rating though, and a lower rating means more people will read what your sharing and perhaps not become those unsaid words that live in every destructive relationship. Somewhat sad, but a message that can't be girdled, no taming. Thanks for sharing` Woot!
Thank you for sharing this somewhat dark brooding poem about betrayal and suffering to move forward.
I enjoyed the imagery, the creepy feel of this beautiful vampire killing and gaining from it, again Thanks! and enjoy your day.
Thank you for sharing with me. A very oversaturated fancy, often misunderstood word usage, I went very slow .Well written and good feelings in this, feeling of country and laws and being proud, even a speck of kings and how they'd rule in storybooks.
It's always nice to come across a well written "E" rated poem. The imagery is quaint and it flows nicely with no tense changes that I've noticed. My only suggestion is you have some spelling errors in both the poem and the description.
Mild erotica this length poem borders, which I'm sure your aware. I enjoyed it, a little vague in imagery but written well with some good word usage. The title doesn't fit with what your expressing in this poem, and I believe you wanted to share the "feel" of that other you love. Grapes will be looked at in anew light.
The rhyming is spot on but seemed forced, teeth like white sheep was a stretch for me, despite the change in the setting, and description and the body parts were great.
Like I said at the the first borders 18 plus.
This is quite the prose. I reread it a few and am still unsure how to proceed.
I understand why your expressing I think, the power of the that companionship when you have that one person, your soul mate. Powerful feelings and imagery, almost religious in a way.
I'm not sure, the cold day, cold play descriptions, and am unsure the mirror imagery. It's not my intend to not like your prose I do! It's just I unsure of the wordage used. Thank you very much for sharing and Enjoy your day.
I spent awhile on it, and didn't find one word. My only suggestion is to capitalize you words to find. All my time here and never done a crossword, Thanks for pulling me out my dark places.
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Classic pirate troupe, entertaining, and a great low reading so may more will enjoy this quaint, descriptive story in a poetry form about mutiny. I enjoyed and Thank you for sharing and stepping into the dark. 
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